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Old 08-10-2013, 11:49 PM   #94
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Default Re: Write-A-Scene for the Superman/Batman movie

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Here's a little bit of the finale I've cooked up:

Spoiler!!! Click to Read!:
SCENE- The Safer Skies main satellite: a huge vertical monolith that looks like a giant rail gun, complete with four "jaws" creating the barrel. Sitting at the edge of the Stratosphere, the satellite is locked in a world of perpetual twilight, hovering above the earth using Brainiac's anti-gravity machines, with just enough atmosphere left to remove the need for suits but not enough oxygen to breathe. We pan up to the top of the satellite, where Batman is standing with a modified helmet. The wind is constantly blowing his cape into epic shapes. He is clearly already hacking into the satellite's computer system.

BRUCE: On site and currently hacked into the computer system. We were right. There's enough memory space here to store an AI like Brainaic indefinitely. I recognize the design from LexCorp's new super-computers. Have they begun transmitting yet?

CUT-Metropolis, Mid-day. Superman is floating above the city, scanning around with his x-ray vision. He casts another look towards Lex Towers, and we see through his eyes a bustling command center, but he switches vision to show no current in the satellite yet.

SUPERMAN: Not yet. And you're right, they've got only a skeleton crew manning the tower. Eiling and his men are in the control tower, but they're just standing around. How's Luthor going to explain his absence from Metropolis if the gun safely fires?

BATMAN (through radio): He's out of the country, having a specialist treat his daughter's crushed wrist.

SUPERMAN: What happened?

BATMAN: They're saying I did it. She was fine when I saw her, and she hasn't ever been out of Luthor's custody.

Superman scowls angrily.

SUPERMAN: So how are we going to trap Brainiac between the broadcaster and the satellite?

CUT- The satellite.

BATMAN: If possible, you're going to destroy his land based drones as soon as he begins his transmission. When he makes contact with this satellite, I'll run a program designed to enslave the weapon and maneuvering systems to my computer. He'll be downloaded successfully, but paralyzed.

Batman casts a glance towards the computer screen, where we see warning message flash:


Batman glares down at the screen, clearly surprised.

BATMAN: I've triggered a security line. Any action on your end?

SUPERMAN (radio): None. They don't seem to have noticed.

Batman hears something. Narrowing his eyes, he walks over the engines to peer down. He sees a mechanic's hatch open. One just big enough to hold a rather large man. He is suddenly hit from behind and falls off the ledge, revealing DEATHSTROKE, carrying a weaponized staff and brandishing it threateningly. We follow Batman down as he grabs on to a solar panel and hangs on, his cape still blowing in the wind.

BATMAN: Deathstroke's here. I'll deal with him. As soon as they begin transmitting, take out whatever drones you see.

Deathstroke, holding on to his own cable, drops down opposite of Batman and swings towards him, energizing the end of his staff and trying to impale Batman with it. We see Batman launch a cable and pull himself around the satellite. We then focus on Deathstroke's mask, which we now see has one glowing green eye adjacent to the red one. We focus on the green one and switch to....

CUT: LexLabs. Luthor and Milton Fine/Brainiac are observing a green tinted display that shows Deathstroke's POV, obviously from the killer's new eye.

LEX: I told you one of them would make a run on the satellites. And Deathstroke was the perfect "security feature" to stow aboard. But I'm curious, if you saw the need to follow my advice after they sped up the launch, how'd you get him there?

BRAINIAC: After his failure to execute the human interloper, I had one of my drones merge with him and secrete himself in the main satellite. My drone kept him alive thanks to his enhancements and my nanites.

LEX: Impressive. I didn't know you could do that.

BRAINIAC: This body itself was created the same way. You should have realized this. Gods do not bleed. Organics do.

LEX: I'll keep that in mind.

CUT: Metropolis. Superman raises his hand to his ear.

SUPERMAN: Batman! Are you sure you can handle him?

BATMAN (radio): I'm fine! Take care of the drones.

SUPERMAN: The drones aren't moving! They're staying in their pods!

Suddenly, we hear a rumble. Dust and detritus rises from the ground. We see through Superman's eyes that the pods themselves are moving. One of them breaks the service. It looks like a giant green eye. It focuses on Superman.

SUPERMAN: Never mind. Yes they are. They're just a little bigger than I expected.

The green eye pulses once, and a green shockwave floods outward, shutting down Metropolis once more. As it hits Superman, his radio shorts out for a while, but fades in and out with static.

BATMAN: * kzzzz* -peat that-*kzzz*-bigger?

Superman hurls himself into one of the drones, only to be swarmed by dozens of smaller ones.

SUPERMAN: Yes, bigger!

And here's the second part of the finale, so you could read them together.

Spoiler!!! Click to Read!:

CUT: The satellite

Batman is secreted behind an energy pillar, holding his cape down for concealment. We hear the static filter through his comlink.

BATMAN: Brainiac must have triggered an electro magnetic pulse. The com's shielded, but we'll have to be clear so we know-

A lasso lowers around the pillar and Batman's throat, though he manages to raise his hand and catch it before he is killed. We see Deathstroke behind the pillar, pulling it tight.

DEATHSTROKE: (oddly monotone) Your resilience is fascinating, human. Were it not for your persistence in opposing fate, you would be preserved for individual study and analysis.

Batman snaps out a batarang in his roped hand, slices the lasso, snaps out another and throws both at Deathstroke. Deathstroke draws three knifes, knocks both the batarangs out of the air, and the third slices into a gap in Batman's armor. He grunts, then deploys multiple smoke bombs to compensate for the wind. He follows the billowing smoke to hide around another pillar.

BATMAN: Deathstroke's no fool. There's no return trip from up here, even with those enhancements Luthor gave him. You're not Deathstroke.

DEATHSTROKE/BRAINIAC: Indeed. Colonel Wilson's body was the most practicable choice for securing the satellite. However, his mind continues to fight my own control. You are addressing Brainiac.

Brainiac whips out the weaponized staff and leaps to the top of one of the pillars, only to be immediately kicked by Batman. They continue to fight for a short time before Batman sticks a light explosive on Brainiac's arm, in explodes, and DEATHSTROKE screams, the green light dims, and for a second Slade Wilson is back in control.

DAETHSTROKE: He can't damage the satellite, but you need to damage the-

BRAINIACresuming control) -persistence is wasted effort. I am unending and pure in my purpose. Your planet is only one among many upon which my tests have been run, and the time has come for the final simulation. Sme sacrifices must be made.

CUT: Metropolis.

SUPERMAN drags a drone away from civilians it was attempting to attack. He is then tackled by a chimera, who points towards the other people in the street while we see the pods coalescing behind them into a vague skull shape. Numerous other drone begin attacking the humans.

SUPERMAN: No! Never again!

He rips the chimera in half with heat vision, than drags it along behind him as he super speeds and destroys over fifty drones before they can kill humans. He combines the wreckage into one pile, flies up, and melts the entire thing with a monstrous blast of heat vision. Shaking his head in obvious pain from the blast, he hears something and turns as the pods have finally formed into a giant Brainac skull, which opens up and "eats" him. Inside Superman tears about until the skull exposes it core engine: a small pound of kryptonite.

One of the drones, a grotesque mishmash of 60s tech with Brainiac drones, approaches.

BRAINIAC: You are an anomaly. The Kryptonians should have been extinct for three decades. Your unique physiology will be studied as soon as your resistance ceases.

SUPERMANin pain) You must be running out of options if you have to wait for that rock to stop me!

He continues to fight on, even as he weakens and begins to bleed. We cut away on a vicious punch that tears his lip.

CUT: LexLabs

LUTHOR: So that's your mainframe. Impressive, if a little ostentatious.

BRAINIAC: Your irreverence is meaningless. The Mainframe is the most powerful computing machine in this space system. I have observed the genesis and growth of your species from within its sanctuary.

LUTHOR: And yet you still needed my satellites and tower.

BRAINIAC: Mind yourself, Luthor. Your domain over the last days of humanity depends upon my successful upload to the system. Your contributions are welcomed, but your opinion is not.

LUTHOR: (quietly) We'll see.

CUT: The satellite.

Batman dangles underneath the satellite.

SUPERMAN: (over the comlink) I'm in*kzzz* combined station.

BATMAN: (growling) Repeat!

SUPERMAN: He. Consolidated. Around. Me.

BATMAN: Total mass?

SUPERMAN: Six? Seven? Tons.

Batman pauses. The satellite's engines clearly move it along the horizon towards Metropolis.

BATMAN: Pull him over the bay. I'll take care of the rest.

CUT: LexLabs

BRAINIAC: (scowling) Unacceptable. Your tower is 17.3 percent slower than my specifications.

LUTHOR: You said it yourself; we're only human.

Brainiac stares at Lex, than turns back to the screen.

CUT: Merropolis, inside Brainiac's station.

Superman, beaten like Rocky, fights on. We see through his eyes that he is using his x-ray vision for some reason.

BRAINIAC DRONE: You waste your waning strength on auxiliary powers. Logically, you should have learned something from your battle with your people.

We see Superman's vision fail to pierce one part of a drone. He smiles.


He grabs that drone, rips off the lead he couldn't see through, and through a it around the exposed Kryptonite. Gathering his strength, he tears through the ceiling and hurls the whole thing down and beats on it, before sliding it out of town and into the bay.

CUT: the satellite.

Batman, placing a bomb on the engine pillars, is suddenly jumped by Deathstroke/Brainiac, who lifts him up by his throat.

BRAINIAC: Your stratagem is obvious.

Brainiac stabs the bomb with his sword. Then his head tilts curiously.

BRAINIAC: Wilson has gone silent. He suspects something. You must have planted more bombs. (He lifts his hand) Where are they?

BATMAN: I'm not telling.

BRAINIAC: It won't matter.

A cybernetic tentacle, one we saw earlier connect with Superman to read his mind, crawls up Brainiac's arm and stabs towards Batman's eye. Batman screams.


LUTHOR: (grumpily) Well, there goes plan A. (Pulls out phone) Mercy, prep the car.

BRAINIACsurprised) You do not have my permission to leave.

LUTHOR: Oh, I'm not. I'm going to watch the rest of your failure.

BRAINIAC: It is not my failure. It is yours.

LUTHOR: No, it's your failure. You were supposed to kill the alien, and die in battle with him.

Brainiac blinks, then attacks Luthor.

CUT: The satellite.

We see Batman's memories through Brainiac's mind probe. We see multiple "bombs" being set up, but they are revealed to be another gadget entirely. Then we see what Batman actually did: he programmed the Batwing to ram the satellite.


Batman suddenly slams his own gadget into the green eye, and we see it spark. Brainaic is driven from Deathstroke's body as the latter collapses. We see the Batwing approach and ram the satellite full bore, throwing both men off the satellite as it begins to plummet to the ground.

CUT: Metropolis Bay.

Superman continues to pummel the Brainiac station into the water.

BATMAN: (over comlink) the satellite is inbound for your location.

Superman looks up, and sees the falling monolith.

SUPERMAN: (smiling) Perfect!

He positions the station and punches it right into the satellite. All but Brainiac's LexLabs drone are destroyed.

BATMAN: By the way, I'm falling toward a the earth at terminal velocity. And I can't fly. At all.

Superman grins and takes off.

CUT: LexLabs.

Brainiac lifts Luthor up by his throat.

BRAINIAC: You sabotaged your tower.

LUTHOR: No, I underpowered the tower. I sabotaged the satellite. A complex program to lock you inside and give me full firing control. You would have believed you remained in charge until after we'd eliminated the alien, either with your body or with Safer Skies. Than I would have taken it and started mining you for your secrets.

BRAINIAC: Your treachery has doomed the universe and yourself. You should be grateful I will slay you now, and spare you the Great Darkness bound for your sentient species!

LUTHOR: Hah! A superstitious robot! That's a first!

BRAINIAC: You doubt the truth of my purpose? My creators were destroyed by the Darkness in a nightmare no mortal may fathom. (Mind probe tentacle emerges) I shall show you.

He stabs Luthor with the probe, but instead of showing Lex, Lex shows him something: Lex gathering wreckage from the crashed Kryptonian scout ship, in particular Zod's command key, studying it, and reverse engineering a dagger shaped plug in device.

Lex stabs Brainiac with it and we see his glowing cybernetics shut down.

LUTHOR: Well, at least plan B worked.

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