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Old 11-06-2013, 09:52 AM   #39
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Default Re: The Avengers 2! The Official News and Speculation Thread - Upgrade section 5

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Originally Posted by Crimson King View Post
Looks close to actual screenplays I've read. I don't see anything immediately marking it as fake. A lot of screenplays have even more scene setup and direction that what they have here. It's not uncommon.

Also, Whedon is writing the script. He's not telling anyone but himself what to do in the scene.

Giveaways:

"Tony reaches for the gauntlet sparkling a few inches away from his collapsed body."

"Tony manages to grip it between his fingers before pressing it deep into his palm."

"A low SUPERSONIC HUM replaces the echo. It builds as panic rides over Stark's face; he straightens his arm in Ultron's direction."

Wayyyyy too flowery prose there, stuff reserved for novelization, not screenplays. Screenplays are about economy of words, telling the director just enough about how to set up the scene and what's going on there. Those directions above, had they been in an actual script, would've read more like:

"TONY reaches for the GAUNTLET nearby."
"TONY grabs the GAUNTLET and puts it on."
"A low SUPERSONIC HUM replaces the echo. It builds. TONY is panicking. He raises his arm and aims at ULTRON."

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