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...I thought I would have a go at writing a Venom movie. I only started today so it is just the beginning. I will post more as I write it.
Anyway here it is so any feedback would be welcome --------------------------------------------------- EXT. ALLEY - NIGHT A young woman walks cautiously down a darkened and decrepid alley clutching a small handbag tightyl to her chest. She glances to each side as she moves looking for any sign of potential danger. Suddenly she hears a loud noise as one of the trash can lids falls to the floor. She spins around and gives a sigh of relief when a tabby cat runs out of its hiding space and vanishes into the night WOMAN (Sighs) Stupid cat. The woman turns to carry on her journey and almost immediately bumps into two scruffy looking men that appear to have been living on the streets for some time. Their clothes are dirty and ripped, the face dirty and unshaven and their pale complexion and wide eyes tell us that alcohol might not be the only thing they rely on to keep going. One of the men smirks menacingly at the woman as he looks down at the bag. MAN ONE (to Woman) Got a smoke? WOMAN Excuse me? MAN ONE You deaf lady? I asked if you had a smoke? WOMAN No. I mean excuse me! The woman pushes the man put of the way and starts to walk past them. She gets a little further up the alley but they run after her and block her way again. MAN ONE Come on just give us a smoke. Here my friend will help you find one. Before she can stop him, he quickly snatches her bag away and throws it to the other man. WOMAN (Shocked) Hey! The other man begins to rummage through the bag, spilling its contents of makeup and appointment cards onto the floor. Finally he pulls out a small bundle of notes and places them into his own pocket. WOMAN (CONT’D) Hey that’s mine. She moves to take her bag back but the first man grabs her and throws her back against the wall. She hits her head and falls to the floor hard. With the woman unconscious the two men begin to walk away from the scene but they themselves are blocked by a large figure that seems to fill the alley in front of them. The position of the light means they can only see the figures silhouette. One of the man raises his forearm across his head and scurnches his eyes to get a better view of the person that is in their way. MAN ONE (to Figure) Can I help you with something? The figure remains silent MAN ONE (CONT’D) You going to move or do you want to end up like the nice ady over there? Still the figure remains silent. MAN ONE (CONT’D) F***k this! I’ll move you my... A black tentacle whips out from the figures arm and whips around the guys neck and hoists him into the air. MAN ONE (CONT’D) (choking) Urk! (to friend) Don’t just stand there. The second guy looks unsure of what to do. Suddenly desperation takes over and he dashes toward the figure in what appears to be an attempted tackle. Another thicker tentacle shoots out of the chest of the figure, forcing the man backward at alarming speed and slamming him hard into the wall. The tentacle wraps around the waist of the man and lift him also into the air. Both men find themselves hoisted in the air by long black, slimy tentacles. Suddenly they are dragged forward and for the first time they, and us, get a good view of the person, or should that be creature? that has them in its grip. With the unmistakable large white eyes and massive fang filled grin that threatens to split the head in half we see that it is none other than VENOM. MAN TWO Jesus Christ what the f**k is this thing? VENOM Oh so this one does talk! We were beginning to think it was a Jay and Silent Bob deal. MAN ONE Please! VENOM Please what? MAN ONE Don’t hurt us! Please. We’ll do anything. VENOM Anything? MAN ONE Anything. Venom’s smile gets larger He whips the men around to face the unconscious woman VENOM Apologise MAN ONE I’m sorry VENOM Excuse me? MAN ONE (louder) I’m sorry VENOM We forgive you More tentacles begin to whip out just as it fades to black. When the screen is totally black we hear a blood curdling scream that would haunt the nightmares of even the toughest man for the rest of his life. EXT. ALLEY - DAY The alley is alive with people as police officers try to keep the members of the press away from the homicide detectives and forensic teams who are trying to do their jobs. Two men stand out above all others. A tired looking man who looks like he has seen his fare share of horrors, Detective Fred Mackey and his new rookie partner, Detective Karen Holmes. DETECTIVE MACKEY S**t. He stares down at the two bodies, or what is left of them. The heads and arms are missing and what is left has been totally removed of skin DETECTIVE HOLMES It’s the same guy isn’t it? DETECTIVE MACKEY Sure looks that way. The missing head thing is new but the skinning is definitely him. DETECTIVE HOLMES What does that make? Twenty so far? DETECTIVE MACKEY That we know of. Looks like we have a God damn serial on our hands. DETECTIVE HOLMES Two serial killers at the same time in the same place. A bit unlikely don’t you think. DETECTIVE MACKEY Unlikely? Yes! But the evidence is right at our feet. DETECTIVE HOLMES And you’re sure it’s not the same guy doing both sets of murders. DETECTIVE MACKEY Almost certainly. All the witnesses we could find said that they saw a large man leaving the area. DETECTIVE HOLMES Large man? That is all we have to go on? DETECTIVE MACKEY Afraid so. And the other murders were, again according to what few witnesses we have, a skinny white man with bright red hair. Nope, this is certainly the work of two different people. DETECTIVE HOLMES (sarcastically) Well aren’t we just the lucky ones
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INT. BROCK’S APARTMENT - DAY We are in a drab undecorated apartment that is devoid of all furniture except an old bed, one chair and a large table. On the table can be seen a small portable television and a police scanner. The walls of the apartment have various press clippings of unsolved murders and disappearances stuck haphazardly all over it. Eddie Brock, mid 30s tall, very muscular with short (military style) blonde hair sits on the chair staring at the off television. BROCK (Voice Over) I was human once. In most ways I still am, I still have the same needs, same desires. But now... Now I am also something more. Flash to an image of a familiar person in red and blue web swinging through New York city BROCK (CONT’D) Once haunted by the desire for revenge against the man I thought responsible for the outcome of my life Spider-Man seems to morph into a black costumed version of himself. CUT TO: INT. CHURCH BELL TOWER - NIGHT Spider-Man is ripping the black costume off his body before jumping over the side A small wooden hatch in the floor slowly opens and Brock enters the tower. BROCK It found me! Almost instantly a Black tar like substance reaches out and begins to wrap itself around his leg. Brock screams as it slowly oozes up him, covering his body in a black shell. INT. BROCK’S APARTMENT - DAY Still with his back to us we see Brocks T-shirt seemingly melt and run down his body, revealing a few brief moments his bare muscular back. Then just as quick as the T-shirt vanished a black tar-like substance begins to rise and cover his body, rising a his neck and over his head. A large white symbol resembling somewhat of a Spider quickly forms on his back. Moving too fast for us to see Brock/Venom rushes off the screen. We turn and see an open window with the curtains bellowing wildly. Then a flash as something jet black with a streak of white swings past the window. INT. POLICE STATION, MACKEY’S DESK - DAY Detective Mackey is sat at his desk which, considering the amount of papers on it, resembles a recycling plant more than an office desk. He is looking over some old files, all labelled unsolved. Detective Holmes walks on carrying two cups of coffee. She places one on top of a huge pile of folders. Mackey sees it, grabs it and takes a quick drink before putting it down on the other side of him. DETECTIVE HOLMES So what does that make? DETECTIVE MACKEY Twenty for the big guy. One fifty for the red head. DETECTIVE HOLMES So red head is winning? DETECTIVE MACKEY It’s not like it’s a competition or anything. DETECTIVE HOLMES Yeah, sorry... DETECTIVE MACKEY ...One hundred and seventy people have been murdered in the last year. Young, old, black, white, singles, couples and families. Never the same way twice. Normally we find the killers because they become used to killing in one way only and they begin to make mistakes. DETECTIVE HOLMES But red head doesn’t? DETECTIVE MACKEY Damn right he doesn’t. He changes his M.O. Each time. Sure there is enough there each time for us to know it was him but it’s just not enough. DETECTIVE HOLMES What about the other guy? The big one. Mackey pulls a folder from the middle of a large file and opens it. DETECTIVE MACKEY This one is more like your common serial killer, he sticks to one style but slowly changes and refines it over time. Such as the taking of the heads on the last lot we found. But the lack of evidence is amazing. DETECTIVE HOLMES There’s got to be some. No one is that clean. DETECTIVE MACKEY Nope. According to the guys in the lab he leaves no fingerprints, no hairs, nothing we can get a DNA sample from. Until someone gets a clear picture of him, this guy might as well be a ghost. EXT. PARK - NIGHT A young teenage couple are sat on park bench kissing. Suddenly the girl pushes the boy off. BOY Hey! What’s wrong. GIRL Don’t you hear that? BOY What? GIRL Listen. The boy stops for a second and takes a quick look around. There is nothing to be seen. BOY Look there’s nothing there. So how about we get back to... The boy attempts to resume where he left off. Suddenly we hear what sounds like a twig snapping. They both stop and turn their heads. Nobody is there. GIRL I think we should leave. BOY Yeah okay. I’ll just grab my... Suddenly the lad is grabbed from behind and pulled off his feet, an arm wrapped around his throat and a small knife held menacingly next to his eye. The girl screams as the assailant slowly makes a slow cut down her boyfriends cheek. The attacker is medium height, skinny build, eye wide and wild like a man possessed and he sports a head of shocking red curly hair. He is CLETUS KASADY. KASADY So what do we have here eh? A couple of little love birds it seems. BOY (frightened) What do you want? KASADY Nothing much really. I was just passing by and saw you two having a good time. So I thought to myself it’s time I had another good time. I ain't had one for a few days now. GIRL Please! KASADY Please? Please what? Please gut your boyfriend so you can run off and live with me? Fine. BOY What? GIRL No... The lad jerks, blood bubbles and flows out of his mouth as Kasady twists and lifts the knife deep into the boys side. Released from Kassidy’s grip the boy slumps to the floor falling on to his stomach. Kasady giggles as he crouches down and plunges the knife between the lads shoulder blades and twists. He looks up at the girl, his face covered in blood, and smiles KASSIDY (to girl) No what can I do about you? He stands up and walks slowly toward her, brandishing the knife menacingly. She begins to back up but he moves to quickly and grabs her by the throat. EXT. PARK ENTRANCE - NIGHT Kasady forces the still very much alive girl into his beat up old pick-up truck. He climbs into the drivers seat, starts the engine and speeds off. Only then do we see another older couple who have been watching the entire event, their mouths and eyes open in absolute horror. MAN (to wife) Call the police. INT. POLICE STATION, MACKEY’S DESK Mackey is still sitting going over paper work when Holmes suddenly runs up to him. She looks very excited. DETECTIVE HOLMES (breathless) Come on we have to go. DETECTIVE MACKEY What? Where? DETECTIVE HOLMES Get this some couple just witnessed a murder and kidnapping over at the park. DETECTIVE MACKEY And? DETECTIVE HOLMES And they said it was a skinny white man with bright red hair. Mackey looks like he has seen a ghost. He jumps up and grabs his coat off the back of his chair. DETECTIVE HOLMES (CONT’D) It’s him isn’t it? DETECTIVE MACKEY God I hope so. Perhaps this is the night we finally get the son of a *****. EXT. STREET - NIGHT Kasady’s pick up thunders down the road, followed by three police cars, each with their sirens and lights blaring. INSIDE KASADY’S TRUCK Kasady turns his head and looks at the girl. A large smile spread across his face. KASSIDY Hold on honey. This may get a little bumpy. He slams on the brakes and turns the wheel hard. The car spins and comes to a sudden stop so it is facing in the opposite direction. The police cars also come to a complete stop. KASADY (CONT’D) Chicken eh? Okay, why not. He revs the engine for a couple of seconds before driving hard and fast toward the cop cars. The cop cars quickly start up and try to move out the way but Kasaidy’s truck clips the back end of one and knock it into a spin. Kasady laughs manically as the girl in the passenger seat begins to scream. Once again the chase is on. The police are in hot pursuit as Kassidy leads them on a merry chase around the city. Two of the police cars have gone missing but ,just as one of the police cars looks like it is beginning to catch up, Kasady slams on the breaks hard. The police car careens into the back of the truck. The officer driving is jerked forward with the force of the impact, his face smashing hard into the steering wheel. Kasady sees all this out of his rear view mirror and laughs KASADY (CONT’D) Should have got those airbags checked out ****er. The police officer slowly opens his eyes and shakes his head to rid himself of the dizzy feeling. He looks up just in time to see Kasady’s truck coming flying at him at full power. He doesn’t have time to react as Kasady’s truck slams hard into his. Blood and spit sprays out of his mouth as the steering wheel rushes forward to meet his chest. Kasaidy speeds off just as the other two police cars come on to the scene, stopping to help their fellow officer. EXT. WAREHOUSE - NIGHT Kasady’s truck pulls up just in front of an old warehouse that looks like it has been abandoned for decades. The red haired serial killer steps out of the car dragging the girl kicking and screaming with him. KASSIDY Ha. Home sweet home INT. WAREHOUSE Kasady as the girl tied to a large metal pillar that is used to keep the roof up. He kneels next to her with the sharpened blade of his knife held softly against her leg. The girl mumbles and cries as she tries to plead for mercy through the gag Kasady as placed around her mouth. KASADY Do you know what my favorite color is? The girl whimpers as she tries desperately to struggle free. Kasady doesn’t seem to notice. KASADY (CONT’D) Red. I’ve always loved red. He makes a small incision in the girls leg and watches as the blood slowly begins to trickle out. KASADY (CONT’D) Such a pretty color don’t you think. The girl mumbles something. Kasady smiles and cups a hand to his ear. KASADY (CONT’D) What was that honey? I’m sorry but you will have to speak up. The girl mumbles something again. KASADY (CONT’D) Nope. Still didn’t quite make it out. VENOM (O.S.) She told you to let her go. And we agree with her. Kasady is still smiling as he gets to his feet. He looks around but sees nobody. KASADY And who might ‘we’ be? You a cop? VENOM We are hunters. Much like yourself KASADY Hunters of what exactly? Kasady turns around and finds himself mere inches away from the towering powerhouse that is VENOM. For the first time Kasady genuinely looks scared as the large black monster smiles at him. VENOM You. Kasady lunges forward with the knife in an attempt to stab Venom in the face but Venom is too fast. A tentacle grabs Kasady’s arm and twists. The bone in his snaps and breaks through the skin. Kasady only has a moment to howl in agony before he finds himself hoisted into the air and flying with great speed and force toward the far wall. The force of the impact shatters the window just above him and Kasady is caught in a shower of glass and debris. Kasady forces himself to his knees but then he finds himself suddenly forced back down again as another tentacle pushes down hard on his back. Through the dirty windows we can just make out red and blue lights flashing and the unmistakable sound of a police siren. Once again Kasady finds himself flying through the air, slamming hard and high against another pillar. This time before he has a chance to fall on to the floor, a particularly sharp tentacle spears itself through his chest and pins him in place. Venom moves slowly toward his prey as Kassidy tries desperately to free himself, blood trickling out the corner of his mouth. Suddenly there is the sound of a door opening. Venom stops and looks to one side just as Police officers wielding guns run in to find the girl untied and Kasady lying in a pool of blood on the floor. There is no sign of Venom. Closer on Kasady we can see something small and black on his chest next to the wound. It is covered in blood but it is still recognizable as a piece of Venom’ symbiotic living costume. Then as quick as a flash it disappears into the wound.
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I love it, don't be afraid to post more lol.
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I'm not afraid. That is all I have written so far. I am one of those people who knows pretty much what they want to say...but they have a hard time writing it down.
I can picture the whole movie in my head just about, but damn me if I can get it from my head and on to paper (okay a computer screen).
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"ph'nglui mglw'nafh Cthulhu R'lyeh wgah'nagl fhtagn" "In his house at R'lyeh dead Cthulhu waits dreaming" http://hypegods.blogspot.com/ Click HERE to be terrified out of your minds My VENOM fan script is finally finished |
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I like it, it is really good.
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Thanks. No prizes for guessing who the bad guy will be. But guess anyway
I've added a bit more to the story (which I edited onto the end of the second part)
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The warehouse is alive with police and paramedic activity. The girl is sat on the back of an ambulance with a blanket wrapped around her shoulders. Detective Holmes is keeping her company. Mackey watches as the detectives load an unconscious Kasady on to a stretcher and in to an ambulance. INT. AMBULANCE One of the paramedics works desperately on Kasady. We see on a heart rate monitor that his heart is going alarmingly fast. Suddenly it stops just as they arrive at the EXT. HOSPITAL - NIGHT The doctors are standing by as the ambulance carrying the notorious serial killer arrives on the scene. The ambulance doors fly open and the dying patient is quickly wheeled out. DOCTOR What do we have? PARAMEDIC Broken arm, possible internal injuries and a large puncture wound in the chest, plus his heart just gave out. DOCTOR Quick get him inside. INT. HOSPITAL - OUTSIDE THE OPERATING ROOM Mackey stares through the window as the doctors try desperately to save Kasady’s life. Holmes joins him. DETECTIVE HOLMES Personally I hope they don’t do it. This place is better off with that **** dead. DETECTIVE MACKEY Yeah well I would rather he face justice for what he did. DETECTIVE HOLMES And dying isn’t justice enough for you? DETECTIVE MACKEY Considering what he’s done in the last year? No. Dying is too easy. INT. THE OPERATING ROOM One of the doctors stands ready with a defibrillator. He looks at the heart rate which is still flat lining. DOCTOR Clear Everyone stands back. He presses the paddles firmly against Kasady’s bare chest and releases the energy. Kasady’s body shakes violently before settling back down. The heart rate monitor still shows a flat line. DOCTOR (CONT’D) Someone call it. Another doctor looks at a clock on the wall. DOCTOR TWO Time of death. Nine twenty sex PM DOCTOR Good try everybody. Outside the operating room Mackey grits his teeth and sighs. DETECTIVE MACKEY Guess the bastard got off easy. DETECTIVE HOLMES Well at least the city can rest peacefully tonight. DETECTIVE MACKEY I don’t think so. DETECTIVE HOLMES Why? He’s dead. DETECTIVE MACKEY He is. But that still leaves the big guy. DETECTIVE HOLMES ****. I almost forgot about him. DETECTIVE MACKEY And we still have no leads, and no clues as to what his next move might be. INT. MORGUE - NIGHT The room is filled with tables, each one has a body on it that is thankfully covered by a white sheet so that the only part sticking out is a foot with a to tag on it. We move through the bodies until we reach one marked simply JOHN DOE. X-RAY VIEW of John Doe’s / Cletus Kasady’s body: We can see the black ooze that was once part of Venoms living costume. Electricity sparkles and dances over it as it slowly begins to consume Kasady’s blood. As it spreads through his body it begins to morph into a reddish colour. As the now RED symbiotic costume nears Kasady’s heart the electrical charge it is still carrying gives the heart one final jolt and it begins to beat. NORMAL VIEW: The morgue attendant walks into the room pushing a trolley with a new ‘guest’ on it. He sees almost instantly that one of the bodies has vanished. ATTENDANT What the he... He is cut of mid sentence as a large red spike, similar to the once Venom pinned Kasady to the pillar with, erupts trough his chest.
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INT. BROCK’S APARTMENT - DAY
Brock is sat alone on the small chair staring at the television screen. On the screen we see that he is watching the news. An image of Kasady appears on screen along with the word; ESCAPED. A tendril snakes its way from Brock’s shoulder and switches off the set just as There is a KNOCK at the door. Brock sighs and stands up. He walks over to the door, checks that the chain is still securely fastened and opens it as little as it will open. A woman, mid to late thirties, short blonde hair, with tired eyes is on the other side of the door. She is SHEILA WRIGHT BROCK Yeah, what is it? SHEILA Nothing Eddie. We...I was just worried about you. BROCK Why? SHEILA Well you never seem to leave the apartment anymore. I live just across the hall and I swear I have never seen you go past in at least a month. Unless you are going out the window of course. BROCK What do you want? SHEILA I was just checking on you that’s all. Like I said I was worried. BROCK I’m fine. I’ve been busy. SHEILA Doing what? BROCK Working. SHEILA Working? Oh yeah, I remember someone mentioning that you used to be a, erm, reporter or something. BROCK That was another life. SHEILA So what you working on. It can’t be a story because you would have to leave the apartment to do that. BROCK No it’s not a story it’s...Why am I telling you this? SHEILA Sorry. I was just worried. I’ll go then if you’re okay. BROCK We’re fine. SHEILA We? BROCK Me. I’m fine. SHEILA Okay then. BROCK Okay. Bye He shuts the door. EXT. BROCK’S APARTMENT, HALLWAY Sheila is left staring at the door SHEILA Bye Eddie. She turns and walks back to her own apartment INSIDE BROCK’S APARTMENT Brock switches the television set back on and sits back down on the chair. A tendril forms on his side and snakes upward until it seems to be looking directly at Brock. Brock looks back at it and sighs BROCK (to tendril) I got rid of her like you asked. The tendril slowly retracts back to where it came from. BROCK (CONT’D) I always do what you ask. EXT. NIGHTCLUB - NIGHT A busy nightclub on an otherwise deserted street. A group of young women are let in by a big burly looking doorman who smiles at them. DOORMAN Right this way ladies. INT. NIGHTCLUB The woman find themselves in a typical nightclub. A stage on the far wall with a dance floor in front. The actual bar off to one side and the rest of the room is filled with tables and stools. They quickly find an empty one and sit down. EXT. NIGHTCLUB The doorman is busy looking at a small clipboard that he is holding. There is a COUGH and he looks up Cletus Kasady stands in front of him dressed in what appears to be jeans and a white Tshirt. KASADY Room for one more? DOORMAN Sorry. Strict dress code. KASADY Well how about you tell me how I am supposed to dress. DOORMAN Black trousers and shoes. KASADY Oh. One of those joints is it? He begins to walk past the doorman. KASADY (CONT’D) Well how about I just let myself in. The doorman makes a grab for Kasady only to find himself pulling his arm quickly back, blood pumping out of the stump and his hand falling silently to the floor. The doorman looks at the bloody stump where his hand once was. DOORMAN Jesus Christ KASADY (O.S. Filtered) Not quite. But close The doorman looks up but it is not Kasady that he sees but a thinner red and black version of Venom minus the spider symbol. This is CARNAGE CARNAGE Am I dressed more appropriately now? The doorman doesn’t have a chance to scream as two red tentacles grab him by either side of his head and PULL. His head is ripped clean in half down the center.
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I'm liking this so far. Good job
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Everyone stops and turns as the main DOORS are RIPPED off their hinges and carried in on the end of two long red tentacles. They are soon followed by the being known as CARNAGE. CARNAGE Well well. Quite the little party we have going on here. Mind if I crash? Tentacles start forming on Carnages body as he walks slowly forward to the center of the dance floor. They whip and snake out in all directions, grabbing patrons, snapping bones and throwing them around like rag dolls. One of the bartenders summons an ounce of courage and reaches under the bar. He pulls out a large shot gun, takes quick aim, and FIRES. The blast hits Carnage in the side of the head but he is totally unaffected. He turns his head and stares directly at the Bartender. The Bartender takes a step back in horror and disbelief but he has nowhere to go. Suddenly a long tendril appears just in front of the bartenders face. CARNAGE (CONT’D) My but you look thirsty. The tendril reaches behind the bartender and wraps itself around a bottle. CARNAGE (CONT’D) Here have a drink on me. In one quick motion the tendril smashes the bottle on the counter, much like in a typical Hollywood bar fight, before driving it with tremendous force into the bartenders face. The bartender falls to the floor DEAD CARNAGE (CONT’D) Now there’s a man who can’t hold his drink. Carnage begins to laugh insanely As he laughs he slowly looks around at the mayhem as people push past each other and climb over anything and everything in an effort to get away. He sees a girl who barely looks old enough to drive, let alone be drinking in a club. The girl quickly finds herself hoisted in the air with a tentacle wrapped around her waist. CARNAGE (CONT’D) Now where was I? The girl whimpers as FADE TO BLACK Blackness...the screaming starts INT. POLICE STATION, MACKEY’S DESK - DAY Mackey and Holmes are sat around the desk. They both look visibly shaken. DETECTIVE MACKEY Jesus. How many? DETECTIVE HOLMES At least thirty. That we know of that is. We still haven’t found and matched all the body parts. DETECTIVE MACKEY And you’re sure it’s him? DETECTIVE HOLMES No real evidence, no. But...I don’t know. It just feels like him. You know... DETECTIVE MACKEY ...Evil. DETECTIVE HOLMES Exactly. DETECTIVE MACKEY But he died. I was there. We saw him die on the operating table. DETECTIVE HOLMES I guess death is not as permanent as it used to be. DETECTIVE MACKEY Nothing is how it used to be. DETECTIVE HOLMES Just be glad you don’t live in New York. DETECTIVE MACKEY Why? DETECTIVE HOLMES Well there is a guy in red and blue tights who can stick to walls for one thing. Then there is the guy with four metal arms DETECTIVE MACKEY So they get weirdos and I get serial killing psychopaths. DETECTIVE HOLMES Pretty much DETECTIVE MACKEY Do you think they’ll want to make a trade? INT. NIGHTCLUB - DAY Mackey and Holmes are stood in the deserted room. The coroner has done his job and all the bodies and body parts that have been found have been taken away. The place is total bedlam. Up turned tables, chairs piled up. Blood splatter and smear all over the floor and up the walls. It is pure Carnage. INT. BROCK’S APARTMENT - DAY Brock is flipping through the television channels. He stops at a news cast that shows an image of the NIGHTCLUB. The word MASSACRE appears at the bottom of the screen. The expression on Brocks face remains blank but he watches with interest. NEWSREADER Police have yet to release an actual number but we have reports that the death toll could be over thirty people, with at least the same amount seriously injured. Brock switches off the television and stands up, just as the symbiote begins to form the VENOM suit over him. There is a knock at the door. The suit quickly reverts back to his street clothes. Brock sighs and opens the door part way. Sheila is stood outside again. BROCK (uninterested) Yes? SHEILA I just thought I would say hello. BROCK Hello. He goes to shut the door but Sheila’s foot stops him. Brock gives her ‘would you mind moving you foot’ look but she refuses to comply. SHEILA I also wanted to apologize. BROCK Apologize? SHEILA For putting my nose where it doesn’t belong. BROCK We forgive you. Sheila smiles at this. SHEILA Oh we do, do we? BROCK Very funny. Now if you don’t mind, I have work to do. SHEILA Okay. Sorry to keep you Eddie Eddie shuts the door just as the Venom suit forms itself over his body. Venom walks over to the window. Steps up and jumps out. There is another knock on the door. SHEILA (CONT’D) (through the door) So do you want to get a drink sometime? Eddie? Come on I know you’re there. Okay you know where I live. Right across the hall. Apartment Ninety Six
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Not a very long post I know but still at least it is something
------------------------------------------------------------------------ INT. NIGHTCLUB - DAY Mackey and Holmes take one last look before EXITING. EXT. NIGHTCLUB Mackey and Holmes walk over and climb into the car. Unnoticed above them, clinging upside down on the wall of the nightclub is VENOM As the car drives away Venom crawls down the wall and drops in front of the doorway. He ENTERS INT. NIGHTCLUB Venom looks around but shows no emotion through the living mask. He walks into the center of the room and begins to survey the damage. VENOM This is familiar to us. No I don’t understand it either, We just know it. We see a flash of disjointed images of people in the club running and screaming for their lives. In the center is a shapeless grey blob that seems to be sprouting many tentacles similar to Venoms own. The blob begins to laugh. The laugh is inhuman. Venom moves swiftly over to one side, throwing a table over to one side. He stops at a small pool of blood. He dips a finger in and raises it to his nose. Or at least where his nose will be under the mask. He sniffs it. Another flash. This time it is of a woman cowering behind a table on the floor. A grey tentacle slowly snakes its way over to her. As the tentacle gets closer it begins to change color. The now RED tentacle forms a blade on its tip and slices across the woman’s throat. Their is a quick spurt of blood as the woman grabs desperately at her throat Venom stands up and looks around. VENOM (CONT’D) We did this. He sighs visibly VENOM (CONT’D) No not us. Like us. Another.
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Nice work. The story's pretty original (more than others I've read, at any rate) and you have a talent for writing. Keep it up
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Ta. The way I see it is Brock is a guy with quite literally a monster living within him that he has to try and supress / put to good use, else turn into that what he fights against. so I wanted to explore that side of him. The fact that he has a tendency to slaughter those he believes responsible for hurting innoncents shows in some small way the evil side of him is slowly winning.
Carnage is of course Venom if he just let himself go and let the evil take completely over, so by fighting and defeating (what is basically his dark side) Venom / Brock becomes one step closer to redemption. plus I just like the idea of two monster battling each other.
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I'm a big fan of that whole inner demons thing (Plan on using it in my planned sequel), but very few people ca npull it off without it sounding derived or cheesy. You're one of those people
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What I can pull it off or I sound cheesy?
Oh and what about my new Carange origin? I wanted to give Venom the power to sense Carnage (and vice versa) so I decided to make the Carnage suit literally part of the Venom's suit which has been mutated due to an electrical charge it recieved just as it was beginning to infiltrate Kasady's blood, thus giving it a red color. This is instead of the normal idea of the Venom symbiote giving birth to a son.
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Sorry if I wasn't clear: You can pull it off.
Your new origin is actually one of my favorite aspects of the story. It's original (and, in my opinion, should have been Ultimate Carnage, later down the line). And the electrical charge thing sounds a lot like my guys powers being catalyzed. Great minds think alike
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It all comes down to a couple of things
1) I love Venom. That is just a fact. 2) I am sick of superhero movies that either show all action and no characterisation or the concentrate on the character and lose a lot of action. I think that you can have both good action and good characterisation, and in fact, when it comes to superhero movies, action is just as important to the character's development as what they are feeling is
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Oh I agree. Which is why I try to tie all action to the characters in any of my stories. Sure, there's always going to be a random crime or two to bust, but there's always a reason to why the protagonist does what he does. It could be his overall reason (such as "With Great Power, comes Great Responsibility) or it could be a more personal reason at the time; ie. s/he could be pissed off and need an external outlet for their rage.
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EXT. BROCK’S APARTMENT COMPLEX - DAY
Eddie Brock walks up the steps to the front door. He is just about to insert the key in the lock when the door swings open. Sheila walks straight into Brock. SHEILA Oops, sorry. Brock? Brock goes to walk past her but she grabs his arm and stops him. He stops, sighs and turns to looks at her. SHEILA (CONT’D) So how did you get out of the building without me seeing? BROCK I walked. SHEILA Well, yeah right. Okay how about that coffee then? BROCK Coffee? SHEILA You know, the coffee I asked if you would like to have sometime. I only asked you an hour ago, just after I spoke with you in your apartment. Okay, your apartment door. You didn’t answer and so naturally I took that has a maybe. BROCK I can’t He walks away into the building. Sheila sighs and begins to walk down the steps away from Brock. Brock stops and turns to look at Sheila. Sheila is walking down the street when a hand appears on her shoulder. She turns around and is surprised to see Brock. BROCK (CONT’D) Let’s make it a quick cup. I have work to do. SHEILA That’s okay. I know a sweet little coffee shop just a few blocks from here. INT. COFFEE SHOP - DAY Brock and Sheila are sat on opposite sides of a table, both holding on to a cup of coffee. BROCK So. SHEILA So? BROCK So you lived here long? SHEILA About a year. BROCK That’s nice. SHEILA Yeah. So what are you working on? BROCK What? SHEILA You said you were busy. So what do you do? BROCK I follow the news. SHEILA Ha, so you are going back into journalism. BROCK Something like that. It’s not really interesting what I do, boring is more the word. SHEILA I don’t know, journalism can be interesting. You get to travel and meet people. BROCK I suppose so. So what do you do? I heard you were an, artist? SHEILA Photographer. BROCK I knew one once. SHEILA Was she any good. BROCK He. He used to take photos for the Daily Bugle, got quite famous for a while. I never thought he was any good. Tell the truth there is a lot of bad history between me and him. SHEILA Really. It’s not that Parker guy is it? The Spider-Man guy BROCK Yep, that’s the guy. SHEILA So what happened? BROCK Long story. Don’t want to dwell on it too much. So anyway, what sort do you do? SHEILA Pictures? Artsy stuff really. Nothing fancy, just people, places, animals. That kind of thing. BROCK Sounds nice. SHEILA It helps pay the bills. But only just. Brock stands up and begins to walk away. SHEILA (CONT’D) Was it something I said? BROCK No. I just need to use the rest-room. INT. COFFEE SHOP, REST-ROOM Brock stands in front of a small sink looking at himself in the mirror. He turns on the cold water tap and splashes some of the cool liquid on to his face. BROCK (to Mirror Brock) I can’t help it. I think she likes me. A pause BROCK (CONT’D) No I can’t just leave her. I have to have a life beyond you. A pause BROCK (CONT’D) I know. Without you I would be nothing. You helped me and I’m thankful but I must try to get on with my life. A pause BROCK (CONT’D) You’re just a guest. It’s my body and my life. Brock’s right hand suddenly begins to shake. He looks at it, a look of supreme concentration on his face. Slowly his hand stops shaking. BROCK (CONT’D) Fine. But let me do it my way. A long tendril snakes its way out of Brock’s back. Reaches into the paper towel dispenser, pulls one out and hands it over to Brock. BROCK (CONT’D) Thank you. INT. COFFEE SHOP Brock walks over to the table but he doesn’t sit down. BROCK (to Sheila) Sorry but I have to go. SHEILA Can’t you stay a bit longer? BROCK Sorry I’m... SHEILA ...Busy. I know, you said. Brock turns and walks away. SHEILA (CONT’D) You know one day you will look up from whatever it is you do and find the world hasn’t waited for you. (quietly) And I can’t wait forever either. Brock exits. EXT. CITY ROOFTOPS - NIGHT Venom is crouched on the edge of a building looking down at the few people who are going about their nightly business. The sounds of traffic can be heard in the distance. The relative quiet is suddenly pierced by a woman’s SCREAM. Venom tenses his powerful arm and leg muscles and launches himself into the air like a spring. EXT. DEAD-END ALLEY - NIGHT Three men have cornered a fourth man at the end of an alley. They all have handguns aimed at the cowering wreck. ARMED MAN ONE Like I said. You pay us to walk through our turf or you face the consequences. ARMED MAN TWO You pay the toll or you pay the price. Simple choice really. COWERING MAN I’m sorry. Here look take everything. He reaches into his pocket and pulls out a wallet. COWERING MAN (CONT’D) Two hundred. It’s all I’ve got. Just take it. He throws the wallet at the armed mens feet. Armed Man One bends over and picks it up. ARMED MAN ONE Thanks. But we would have taken it anyway. He raises his gun toward the cowering man. The cowering man raises his arms to his face, he doesn’t want to see it coming. SLOW MOTION: The trigger is pulled. A loud bang, a flash and... NORMAL SPEED: VENOM drops down in to the path of the bullet. The small projectile bounces harmlessly off his chest. ARMED MAN ONE (CONT’D) What the hell? ARMED MAN TWO Jack? What the heck is that thing? Venom’s already unnaturally wide smile seems to get wider. Armed Man One raises his gun for another shot at Venom. A tentacle he did not see rising behind him quickly separates his arm from his shoulder. The third guy who has so far remained silent opts for the more direct approach. He rushes Venom in a poorly executed tackle. Venom doesn’t even flinch has the man crashes in to him. The man is swiftly dispatched after being thrown head first into the wall, the sound of the bone sin his skull and neck breaking are very audible in the small confined space. The second armed man drops his gun before turning and running away. He only gets a few yards when four long tentacles grab him by his arms and legs. CLOSE UP on the second armed man’s face. ARMED MAN TWO (CONT’D) Please! Don’t hur... The word ends abruptly. There is a loud tearing sound. NORMAL P.O.V The body of the second man falls to the ground. The temporary tentacles formed by Venoms living symbiotic suit still holding on to an arm and leg respectively. Venom turns to face the man he has just rescued, but the man looks more afraid of him then he did of the men with guns. Venom’s smile turns into an angry frown. The four tentacles, still holding on to the body parts, drop them on to the cowering guys lap. The man looks at them in absolute horror, not even having the courage to push them off his lap. VENOM A little souvenir. Venom leaps on to the wall and begins to climb it very rapidly, disappearing over the top. INT. BROCK’S APARTMENT - NIGHT Brock is sat in front of the television but it is turned off. He is more interested in his own reflection. BROCK What the hell was that about? A little souvenir! A pause BROCK (CONT’D) The innocents of this city have enough **** to put up with, without us turning against them. Another pause BROCK (CONT’D) I know you didn’t hurt the innocent. But you wanted to, I could feel it.
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Brock rises and walks to a window. He peers out into the darkness.
BROCK (CONT’D) Yes, I feel it. It’s close. He closes his eyes An IMAGE of a building, closer we see people exiting. They are dressed in police uniforms. We look up at a sign that simply says POLICE. We move forward, toward the building. We enter the door... INT. POLICE STATION, FRONT DESK - NIGHT The desk sergeant is busy doing his paper work. A small COUGH causes him to look up. CLETUS KASADY is standing in front of him. The desk sergeant is visibly shocked. He has seen the pictures taken at the hospital, he knows who this is. KASADY I believe you are looking for me. The desk sergeant hits a small button under his desk before grabbing his gun from the holster on his waist and pointing it directly at Kasady. DESK SERGEANT (shouting) FREEZE! KASADY Really, is that gun absolutely necessary? DESK SERGEANT (shouting) SHUT UP AND GET ON YOUR KNEES. More cops run in, all carrying guns. Kasady looks at them and smiles KASADY Oh and here was I hoping we could all be friends. DESK SERGEANT (shouting) ON YOUR KNEES. NOW!! INT. POLICE STATION, OUTSIDE INTERROGATION ROOM Kasady sits alone in the interrogation room. Mackey and Holmes are on the other side of a one-way mirror looking at him. DETECTIVE HOLMES Why do you think he did it? DETECTIVE MACKEY Did what? DETECTIVE HOLMES Turn himself in. DETECTIVE MACKEY I don’t know. Perhaps he wants something. Truth is I don’t really care. I’m just glad we finally got him. DETECTIVE HOLMES But that’s just it. DETECTIVE MACKEY Just what? DETECTIVE HOLMES We didn’t get him. He came to us. DETECTIVE MACKEY Best not to question it. He’s off the streets and that is all that matters. Mackey opens up the door to the interrogation room and enters INT. POLICE STATION, INTERROGATION ROOM Mackey simply stands and stares at Kasady for a few moments. Kasady looks at him and smiles. Mackey sits down on the opposite side of the table to Kasady, pulls a small tape recorder out of his pocket, places it on the table between him and the psycho and presses the RECORD button. DETECTIVE MACKEY The time is ten thirty five. Officer Fred Mackey residing. (to Kasady) Why? KASADY Why what? DETECTIVE MACKEY Why did you kill all those people. Kasady shrugs. DETECTIVE MACKEY (CONT’D) Something must have been behind it. You don’t kill that many people with reason. KASADY I woke up one morning and I was bored. DETECTIVE MACKEY (Shocked at the answer) Bored? KASADY Yes. So I thought, what the hell, go on a killing spree, have a few laughs. DETECTIVE MACKEY A few laughs? You’ve butchered over a hundred people KASADY (smiling) Last I checked it was over two hundred. DETECTIVE MACKEY How can you say it like that? KASADY Like what? DETECTIVE MACKEY You sound, (a pause) Happy. KASADY Happy memories I suppose. Mackey looks flustered. He switches off the tape recorder, stands up and walks toward the door. KASADY (CONT’D) Hey detective you never asked what I wanted. DETECTIVE MACKEY Excuse me? KASADY The reason I came here. Why I gave myself up. DETECTIVE MACKEY (humoring him) Okay. Why? Kasady smiles KASADY I was bored A look of shock spreads across Mackey’s face as a long red tentacle erupts from Kasady’s chest and rushes at him. Mackey ducks, the tentacle narrowly missing him. An officer just behind Mackey is not so lucky. Mackey turns just in time to see the tentacle rips the poor mans throat out. DETECTIVE MACKEY **** me... He turns and sees CARNAGE fully suited. There are small tendrils / tentacles growing out of him, whipping and snaking wildly. KASADY So I thought this might be a fun place to visit. Carnage begins to laugh. The laugh is evil and inhuman. IMAGES of police officers grabbing guns, slipping on bullet-proof vests, helmets. Carnage steps out of the interrogation room and into the hallway. He looks down both ways as if unsure which way to go. He decides to go left and heads down the hall. A police officer jumps behind Carnage, gun pointed at the back of the creatures head. POLICE OFFICER STOP. A long pointed tentacle zooms out of Carnage’s back and into the officer’s chest, pinning him to the wall and killing him instantly. Another officer bursts out of a side office, puts a gun to Carnage’s head and pulls the trigger. Carnage turns his uninjured head and looks directly at the officer. He smiles The headless body of the officer slumps against the wall, leaving a small trail of blood as it slid down the wall. Carnage looks at the officers head that he holds in his hands and laughs. He throws the head uninterested over his shoulder. It lands perfectly on its own body’s lap. HEAD’S P.O.V. Carnage carries on walking down the hallway dispatching countless officers with claws and tentacles.
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EXT. POLICE STATION - NIGHT
Several police officers, including Mackey and Holmes, burst out of the front doors and run / tumble down the stairs. Carnage follows after them just as POLICE CARS drive on to the scene to form a make-**** defensive barrier. The cops dive behind the cars and aim their guns at the creature. A single shot ignites a whole volley. Soon the noise of gun fire and the flash of muzzles fills the night sky. Carnage walks slowly down the stairs, totally unaffected. OFFICER What the **** is this thing? DETECTIVE MACKEY Just keep shooting. Wear the ****er down. It will have to get tired sometime. As if to prove Mackey wrong Carnage grabs the corner of one of the cars, using his claws to create large jagged finger holds to grip on with. He effortlessly, and one handedly, lifts the car off the ground and throws it to one side. The car sails twenty feet through the air easily, before crashing to the ground hard and skidding into a car parked further down the street. The police officer that was hiding behind the car only has a few brief moments to look up at Carnage before The officer CRASHES into the upturned Police Car with enough force to cause it to fold like a book. INT. BROCK’S APARTMENT - NIGHT Brock still has his eyes closed. Slowly he opens them and peers once more into the darkness. CLOSE UP of a single hand resting on the window ledge. The black tar that is the Venom Symbiote slowly oozes down the arm, over the wrist and covers the fingers. A small white patch appears on the back of the hand. Venom bends over the window and falls forward. EXT. BROCK’S APARTMENT, WALL Venom scurries a little way down the wall before using his alien enhanced arm muscles to push himself off and over to The building on the opposite side of the street. Brock lands on the wall and for a few brief seconds hangs their like a Spider. He looks around, taking his bearings before finally propelling himself several storeys into the air, up and over the building. EXT. POLICE STATION - NIGHT The area is deserted as Venom lands in front of the police station. That is unless you count the upturned, burning cars and the numerous bodies and body parts that litter the street. Venom snarls. VOICE (O.S.) I guess I have you to thank for this little gift. Venom spins round to see KASADY emerge from the shadows. KASADY I was always good at what I did. Now, because of you I’m a God. VENOM No you’re just a little pathetic man. A monster. We hunted you once and now we found you again. Kasady smiles KASADY Not that hard when you knew where I was. No, not knew. Felt. You felt me didn’t you? Felt where I was, what I was doing. I bet you even enjoyed it. I know I did. Venom moves over to Kasady with superhuman speed, covering the large gap between them in a fraction of a second. VENOM What we felt will be nothing compared to the pleasure we will feel when we rip your heart out. KASADY I thought you might say something like that. Venom reaches out, grabbing at Kasady’s throat. Kasady grabs Venom’s wrist, stopping it. Venom looks shocked Kasady smiles. KASADY (CONT’D) What the hell. I’m in the mood for some more fun. Kasady kicks Venom HARD in the stomach. Venom flies back several feet and slides a further several down the road. Carnage LANDS by Venom’s side, kicking him in the side / chest just as he begins to get up. Venom sails through the air and crashes through the wall of the Police Station. Venom throws a particularly large chunk of wall to one side. He looks up Carnage is gone. Venom rubs his chest and stomach, he is obviously in some discomfort. VENOM He won’t be easy.
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INT. BROCK’S APARTMENT - DAY
Brock is watching the television News. A suited man is on television addressing the viewer. Thee words CARNAGE AT LOCAL POLICE STATION flash across the bottom of the screen. SUITED MAN For too long this city has been held in a tight grip of fear, people terrified to leave their own homes, to go to work. Their is a disease eating at the heart of this great city, a VENOM that must be stopped. (shouting) A CARNAGE THAT CAN NOT BE ALLOWED TO CONTINUE Brock switches off the set. He sits back in his chair and sighs. A tentacle appears beside him holding an open can of beer. Brock takes it and puts it to his lips. The same tentacle then proceeds to move over to the radio and flick it on. Soft classical music starts to play through the speaker. The tentacle starts to adjust the dial, tuning the radio to something more modern. INT. POLICE CRIME LAB - TIMELESS Detective Mackey and Detective Holmes are sat next to a third guy in a white lab coat. They are reviewing a tape of the attack on the Police Station. On the tape we can see Carnage slaughtering countless officers and laughing. DETECTIVE MACKEY This everything? LAB COAT This is all that was on the tape, yes. DETECTIVE HOLMES What the hell is that thing? You ever seen anything like it before. LAB COAT Can’t say that I have. DETECTIVE HOLMES Well you don’t seem too shocked to see it now. LAB COAT Considering everything we’ve seen in the last few year, nothing shocks me anymore. DETECTIVE MACKEY Everything we’ve seen? LAB COAT Oh, well there is the guy who can climb up walls and spins webs. DETECTIVE MACKEY Oh that guy. LAB COAT Yeah, then there is a guy who seems to be made of rock, a woman who turns invisible, another guy who stretches like rubber, one who can set himself on fire, a bloke with four metal arms attached to his back. Nope. Nothing surprises me anymore. DETECTIVE HOLMES Trust me. If you were there you would have been very surprised. LAB COAT Probably. The lab coat ejects the tape and puts it to one side. He grabs another tape and slots it in the machine. A video of Carnage kicking Venom through the Police station wall appears on the screen. DETECTIVE HOLMES ****, there’s two of the freaks. DETECTIVE MACKEY Doesn’t look like they’re drinking buddies though. (to Lab Coat) This thing have sound? LAB COAT Sorry. Video only. DETECTIVE MACKEY Nevermind. DETECTIVE HOLMES Hey Mack, I just thought of something. DETECTIVE MACKEY And? DETECTIVE HOLMES Well you know the description of the second serial. DETECTIVE MACKEY Red haired? DETECTIVE HOLMES No, the other one. DETECTIVE MACKEY Big and black... Mackey stares at the screen a look of REALIZATION on his face. DETECTIVE HOLMES We thought the witness meant an African-American. But what if he meant big and black, as in that guy there. DETECTIVE MACKEY Great. So now not only do we have two serial killers in our city. But they both happen to be monsters as well. This day just keeps getting better and better. Now say, by some miracle, that we happen to catch these two, then what? DETECTIVE HOLMES Uh... DETECTIVE MACKEY ...I don’t see that Murdock guy being able to prosecute them. Hell I’m not even sure if they are human. Might have to take them to the pound to be put down. (thinks) Though I suppose if we class them as animals we can get aid from that hunter chap. (thinks) You know that, erm, guy. DETECTIVE HOLMES Kraven? DETECTIVE MACKEY Yeah him.
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Join Date: Feb 2006
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thoughts so far! Good? Bad?
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Join Date: Jul 2004
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I like it. Carnages origin was quite a smart idea, never thot of that. Keep it up.
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