Watch My Short Film "Age Old Question"

[K.B.]

Check out my short film "Age Old Question", it's about one man's horrid tale about his adventure in a comic book shop.

http://vids.myspace.com/index.cfm?fuseaction=vids.individual&videoid=2039475081

Let me know what you guys think.

 

[chaseter]

You need a boom mic to rid the echo, the opening pan was way too slow...should have shown more of the room, the acting was funny, funny plot, the camera pan from the guy to the shop owner was bad. Overall, the short was good...just need to work on your angles and camera work. Good writing too. And thank you for getting people that can half-way act. Good job!

 

[Norman Bates]

You need a boom mic to rid the echo, the opening pan was way too slow...should have shown more of the room, the acting was funny, funny plot, the camera pan from the guy to the shop owner was bad. Overall, the short was good...just need to work on your angles and camera work. Good writing too. And thank you for getting people that can half-way act. Good job!

Yeah, definitely boom it. But that's the main problem I see with film students (being one myself) ..sound. I say if you have a simple enough shot as you did with the two playing videogames, you should've maybe tried using some wireless lavaliers as another option.

The pan up could have been a little faster. I understand what you're trying to establish though, so props for that because as most film students don't realize, the opening shot is the most important.. so you're on the right track.

You crossed the 180 line a few times in the comic shop with, what seemed to me, no motivation. I believe that should only be done on a dramatic point.

The end was left unsatisfying to me. The middle, the chunk of it was funny and had potential but it seemed that you didn't know how to end it well.

But those are just my criticisms. Good job and keep working.