Could somone do me a favor please?

[circa81]

Hi guys, I could use your help here. I posted an aborted Batman screenplay long before Batman Begins. (Yes I know I have no way of proving this, so please just take my word for it.) I posted it at fanfiction.net about a month ago, but for some reason I'm not getting any reviews, good or bad. So I have decided to post a link here. So here's my opening scene to my never finished rated R Batman screenplay. Enjoy.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3421559/1/

 

[Kevin Roegele]

I have to say I like the general ideas BUT you are trying to hard to make it dark and adult. You've even called it Batman Rated R, like that is reason enough to like it. It doesn't make it cool at all. What is cool is a great story told properly, so concentrate on that.

 

[circa81]

bump

 

[Bat Attack]

Yeah, Dark dosn't always equal better.