Dasher10
I'm like Deadpool IRL
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First off, do a shorter season with a larger budget per episode. The no costume thing, the lack of a Shou Lao fight and Zhou Cheng not getting his second head really rubbed me the wrong way. The lack of fights at the beginning of the season and around episodes 9-11 were unforgivable.
Secondly, fire Scott Buck. I couldn't care less about how Harold Meachum's resurrection subplot lost me. The way that the Meachum's interacted with each other was always unnatural. Everything having to do with Ward was awful, particularly how I don't even recall how he got put in an asylum and he somehow lost his drug habit when he reappeared in Episode 12 and it's never mentioned again. He also threw too many villains at us, many of whom were one-off and underdeveloped.
Here's what the story needs to do going forward.
First off, explain things a bit better in the first episode. Blow most of the budget on a flashback to the Shou Lao fight and spend the rest on exposition to set up characters and fix what didn't make sense. And the stuff that didn't make sense was why Gao was working with he Hand, why the Bride of Nine Soiders was working with Gao and why the monks served the Crane Mother when Gao was pretty clearly the Crane Mother. Explain that by stating that she was approached by the Hand as payback and accepted. Morover as the Crane Mother, she's responsible for all seven immortal weapons and has corrupted the first six. Kun Lun disappeared to preserve itself after being invaded and Davos found himself bowing to the Hand who made him into the Steel Serpent. Colleen's history with The Hand dates back to her wanting to be closer to her mother after her death but her archeologist father is still alive and becomes a supporting character who helps Danny understand his powers and history a bit better and actually owns a copy of the Book of the Iron Fist which he thought was a forgery for decades. It also indicates that there's a second Iron Fist alive who wee see in the last shot of the scene. The final scene shows Zhou Cheng in New York at a bar trying to order a drink after the last call. He explains that the Hand have existed in China since the failed Mongol invasion of Japan and since he won't be served a drink, he explains that he is a Black Sky which is a warrior who is able to serve as a vessel for one of the gods worshipped by the Hand and has killed all but two Iron Fists who have lived since he became Chi'Lin's host and offers to show the bartender just what a Black Sky can do before we see an outside shot of the bar and hear loud screams.
Episode 2 has Davos kill Ward Meachum and frame Damny for it. Zhou Cheng kills Bokuto and then uses Colleen's former students to fight her new students and if she doesn't bring Danny with her to fight him, then he'll out her involvement with the Hamd to the police. Danny needs help and the other Defenders aren't available but he hears that the other living Iron Fist is still alive in New York and he needs his help. Joy also develops a guilt complex and begins trying to atone for her mistakes after Ward's death. Those plots drive the season. No more boardroom drama and less of the budget spent renting office space. Danny lives in Harold's old penthouse but the actual offices are only seen in one episode early on and never seen again.
The season ends with Joy Meachum sacrificing herself to save Danny from Zhou Cheng, Hogarth now running Rand, Davos killing Orson, Danny and Colleen clearing their names, Zhou Cheng's death and Davos and Gao both challenging Danny to participate in a tournament in K'un-Lun to save it and to bring friends. The city will reappear when Danny agrees to he challenge.
There you go. Weaker characters like Ward and Bokuto are removed. We see more of the Season 1 villains who didn't get developed enough. A second season of Defenders hits which will be based on Seven Capital Cities of Heaven.
There you go. A better outline for a second season.
Secondly, fire Scott Buck. I couldn't care less about how Harold Meachum's resurrection subplot lost me. The way that the Meachum's interacted with each other was always unnatural. Everything having to do with Ward was awful, particularly how I don't even recall how he got put in an asylum and he somehow lost his drug habit when he reappeared in Episode 12 and it's never mentioned again. He also threw too many villains at us, many of whom were one-off and underdeveloped.
Here's what the story needs to do going forward.
First off, explain things a bit better in the first episode. Blow most of the budget on a flashback to the Shou Lao fight and spend the rest on exposition to set up characters and fix what didn't make sense. And the stuff that didn't make sense was why Gao was working with he Hand, why the Bride of Nine Soiders was working with Gao and why the monks served the Crane Mother when Gao was pretty clearly the Crane Mother. Explain that by stating that she was approached by the Hand as payback and accepted. Morover as the Crane Mother, she's responsible for all seven immortal weapons and has corrupted the first six. Kun Lun disappeared to preserve itself after being invaded and Davos found himself bowing to the Hand who made him into the Steel Serpent. Colleen's history with The Hand dates back to her wanting to be closer to her mother after her death but her archeologist father is still alive and becomes a supporting character who helps Danny understand his powers and history a bit better and actually owns a copy of the Book of the Iron Fist which he thought was a forgery for decades. It also indicates that there's a second Iron Fist alive who wee see in the last shot of the scene. The final scene shows Zhou Cheng in New York at a bar trying to order a drink after the last call. He explains that the Hand have existed in China since the failed Mongol invasion of Japan and since he won't be served a drink, he explains that he is a Black Sky which is a warrior who is able to serve as a vessel for one of the gods worshipped by the Hand and has killed all but two Iron Fists who have lived since he became Chi'Lin's host and offers to show the bartender just what a Black Sky can do before we see an outside shot of the bar and hear loud screams.
Episode 2 has Davos kill Ward Meachum and frame Damny for it. Zhou Cheng kills Bokuto and then uses Colleen's former students to fight her new students and if she doesn't bring Danny with her to fight him, then he'll out her involvement with the Hamd to the police. Danny needs help and the other Defenders aren't available but he hears that the other living Iron Fist is still alive in New York and he needs his help. Joy also develops a guilt complex and begins trying to atone for her mistakes after Ward's death. Those plots drive the season. No more boardroom drama and less of the budget spent renting office space. Danny lives in Harold's old penthouse but the actual offices are only seen in one episode early on and never seen again.
The season ends with Joy Meachum sacrificing herself to save Danny from Zhou Cheng, Hogarth now running Rand, Davos killing Orson, Danny and Colleen clearing their names, Zhou Cheng's death and Davos and Gao both challenging Danny to participate in a tournament in K'un-Lun to save it and to bring friends. The city will reappear when Danny agrees to he challenge.
There you go. Weaker characters like Ward and Bokuto are removed. We see more of the Season 1 villains who didn't get developed enough. A second season of Defenders hits which will be based on Seven Capital Cities of Heaven.
There you go. A better outline for a second season.
