GREEN LANTERN - How would YOU do it?

[protocida]

With the "Green Lantern" movie on full-speed and the script's first draft receveing rave reviews from fans and critics, i invite my fellow hypesters for a little fun. Let's forget how Guggehein, Green and Berlanti are approaching the emerald gladiator and write our own version of the movie, just for fun.

Let's see how our fellow hypesters react to our scripts and, in the same hand, see how are theyre's, just for fun?

Enjoy!

OBS: I'll be posting mine later. And i'm alredy apologizing by the eventual spelling mistakes. I'm not american, yah'know?

 

[Ronny Shade]

I want this movie to do three things
1) Focus on Hal as a character rather than "cool powers"
2) Give ambiguity to the concepts of "good" and "evil." Make the villains relatable.
3) Deal with power and it's affect of a person.

Some bits:
-I'd like Abin Sur's giving Hal the ring to be convenience. Hal's the only one there when Abin crashes. None of that "you are chosen because you are pure of heart" stuff.

-Epic battles. Lots of destruction. Like I said, we're dealing with power here. Show the effects.

-The guardians should not be all-knowing wise men. They should be a government with good and bad qualities.

 

[The Guard]

I actually wrote a rushed GREEN LANTERN script in two days back in 2005. It was about 130 pages, and wasn't real faithful, but it had some very faithful elements to it. There were elements of EMERALD DAWN and the idea of Parallax, and being seduced by power, but overall, it was mostly just classic Green Lantern storytelling. It's probably the most "mainstream" script I've ever written, but it still dealt with the concepts surrounding the Green Lantern Corps.

The script featured Hal Jordan (who was portrayed as being in his mid thirties) turning his life around when he found the Power Ring. The movie focused on Hal as a character, and his evolution as a person, not just in terms of his powers, but in his personal life. The script was about conquering fears, and about learning to live with fear and overcome it via willpower. It was also about the use of fear, and the seductive nature of power, and the desire for order in the face of chaos. Hal, at his base, was a man who wanted adventure, wanted to see the stars, and to become something greater than he was. He was trying to surpass his father, and in a way, to live his father's dream. He strove for this on a daily basis, with his attempts to become a space pilot, and the ring eventually afforded him that opportunity. Hal was thematically reckless, and his arc involved him taking more control over his life, in all aspects, be it his use of power, his interactions with women and other men, or his endangerment of himself. He found something to live for beyond basic adventure and ego. At first I utilized Martin Jordan's death, but decided against in my second draft. I didn't use his father's death in the first draft, because I wanted Hal Jordan's story to stand alone. I was going to add it back in in a second draft.

Carol Ferris was Hal's on again-off again love interest, and she was trying to get him to better himself (through actually firing him at one point). Her own personal arc was pretty nonexistent, which I somewhat regret. I did make her a bit more "hands-on" in terms of running Ferris Industries, and being more than just a damsel in distress (She helped figured out Sinestro's weakness and at one point, drove a yellow SUV into him). A subsequent draft was going to have her in a dogfight with Sinestro in a plane of her own.

Tom Kalmaku had a larger role than he does in Berlanti's script. He helped Hal with the GL persona, he sought to help Hal better himself and his actions (drinking, personal relations, his life's meaning), and he helpled Carol to see that Hal was at least trying to better himself.
It was a straight origin, with Hal both learning to use the ring for good himself, and then was trained by Sinestro, who eventually became the villain of the movie when Hal discovered Sinestro's actions on Korugar, and his attempts to cover it up through the use of Manhunters. Sinestro's arc was what kicked off the movie, and he served as a "cautionary" tale to the rest of the Corps. Sinestro was not nearly as black and white has he's been portrayed. He truly wanted to maintain order, and felt that people opposing his methods was a betrayal of cosmic order.

I fleshed out Kilogog, Tomar-Re and Abin Sur a bit by having them join to defeat Legion in the beginning of the script, a scene that was to foreshadow things to come, and that showed the scope of the Green Lanterns. They returned later on Oa.

I didn't put the Jordan brothers into the script, as I feared it would be too crowded, and I couldn't really find an appropriate use for them as characters in the context of the story.
There were some absolutely massive battles in Coast City, and on Oa and Korugar. The thing probably would have cost north of $200 million to make.

Abin Sur's death was related to Sinestro, and I made he and Sur brothers, which may have been a bit forced in terms of drama, but I thought worked fairly well (except in terms of how the sectors are divvied up). This gave more weight to Sinestro's quest to maintain order, as he killed his own brother to do so. The ring didn't seek out Jordan, Sur did. Abin Sur gave the ring to Hal Jordan when Hal was the closest suitable candidate for the ring upon his crash landing. Hal was out drinking and feeling sorry for himelf and musing over his failed career when Sur gave him the ring.

The Guardians were set up as a flawed government, and Hal showed them reverence, but also questioned them. It was hinted that they would have to watch him, and that he would likely be "trouble". Ganthet was a character, who sought to unlock the potential of the Green Lantern Corps in terms of compassion, beyond just power. The script opened with the Book of Oa, and an explantion of the Green Lantern Corps.

The second script would have featured Qward and the Controllers, and more Corps. action as Hal Jordan took to the stars. Star Sapphire would have been a supporting villain, and I worked Arisia, John Stewart, Guy Gardner, and some other famous GLs into the script. The third script would have featured Kyle Rayner's introduction and Hal almost succumbing to his lust for power after an act of revenge by Sinestro.

 

[Ronny Shade]

I actually wrote a rushed GREEN LANTERN script in two days back in 2005. It was about 130 pages, and wasn't real faithful, but it had some very faithful elements to it. There were elements of EMERALD DAWN and the idea of Parallax, and being seduced by power, but overall, it was mostly just classic Green Lantern storytelling. It's probably the most "mainstream" script I've ever written, but it still dealt with the concepts surrounding the Green Lantern Corps.

The script featured Hal Jordan (who was portrayed as being in his mid thirties) turning his life around when he found the Power Ring. The movie focused on Hal as a character, and his evolution as a person, not just in terms of his powers, but in his personal life. The script was about conquering fears, and about learning to live with fear and overcome it via willpower. It was also about the use of fear, and the seductive nature of power, and the desire for order in the face of chaos. Hal, at his base, was a man who wanted adventure, wanted to see the stars, and to become something greater than he was. He was trying to surpass his father, and in a way, to live his father's dream. He strove for this on a daily basis, with his attempts to become a space pilot, and the ring eventually afforded him that opportunity. Hal was thematically reckless, and his arc involved him taking more control over his life, in all aspects, be it his use of power, his interactions with women and other men, or his endangerment of himself. He found something to live for beyond basic adventure and ego. At first I utilized Martin Jordan's death, but decided against in my second draft. I didn't use his father's death in the first draft, because I wanted Hal Jordan's story to stand alone. I was going to add it back in in a second draft.

Carol Ferris was Hal's on again-off again love interest, and she was trying to get him to better himself (through actually firing him at one point). Her own personal arc was pretty nonexistent, which I somewhat regret. I did make her a bit more "hands-on" in terms of running Ferris Industries, and being more than just a damsel in distress (She helped figured out Sinestro's weakness and at one point, drove a yellow SUV into him). A subsequent draft was going to have her in a dogfight with Sinestro in a plane of her own.

Tom Kalmaku had a larger role than he does in Berlanti's script. He helped Hal with the GL persona, he sought to help Hal better himself and his actions (drinking, personal relations, his life's meaning), and he helpled Carol to see that Hal was at least trying to better himself.
It was a straight origin, with Hal both learning to use the ring for good himself, and then was trained by Sinestro, who eventually became the villain of the movie when Hal discovered Sinestro's actions on Korugar, and his attempts to cover it up through the use of Manhunters. Sinestro's arc was what kicked off the movie, and he served as a "cautionary" tale to the rest of the Corps. Sinestro was not nearly as black and white has he's been portrayed. He truly wanted to maintain order, and felt that people opposing his methods was a betrayal of cosmic order.

I fleshed out Kilogog, Tomar-Re and Abin Sur a bit by having them join to defeat Legion in the beginning of the script, a scene that was to foreshadow things to come, and that showed the scope of the Green Lanterns. They returned later on Oa.

I didn't put the Jordan brothers into the script, as I feared it would be too crowded, and I couldn't really find an appropriate use for them as characters in the context of the story.
There were some absolutely massive battles in Coast City, and on Oa and Korugar. The thing probably would have cost north of $200 million to make.

Abin Sur's death was related to Sinestro, and I made he and Sur brothers, which may have been a bit forced in terms of drama, but I thought worked fairly well (except in terms of how the sectors are divvied up). This gave more weight to Sinestro's quest to maintain order, as he killed his own brother to do so. The ring didn't seek out Jordan, Sur did. Abin Sur gave the ring to Hal Jordan when Hal was the closest suitable candidate for the ring upon his crash landing. Hal was out drinking and feeling sorry for himelf and musing over his failed career when Sur gave him the ring.

The Guardians were set up as a flawed government, and Hal showed them reverence, but also questioned them. It was hinted that they would have to watch him, and that he would likely be "trouble". Ganthet was a character, who sought to unlock the potential of the Green Lantern Corps in terms of compassion, beyond just power. The script opened with the Book of Oa, and an explantion of the Green Lantern Corps.

The second script would have featured Qward and the Controllers, and more Corps. action as Hal Jordan took to the stars. Star Sapphire would have been a supporting villain, and I worked Arisia, John Stewart, Guy Gardner, and some other famous GLs into the script. The third script would have featured Kyle Rayner's introduction and Hal almost succumbing to his lust for power after an act of revenge by Sinestro.

I'd love to read it if you want to send it to me.

 

[protocida]

My version it's actually quite similar to the Berlanti/Guggehein/Green script in terms of characters and storytelling.

It would start with a voice-over explaining who are the Guardians, how does the Central Battery works and why they created the Green Lantern corps to protect the universe, dividing it in 3600 sector, each guarded by one emerald warior.

After the initial credits, whe'd see the FERRIS AIRCRAFT TEST AREA, 14 years ago. Youg Hal Jordan (12) is watching his father, test pilot and researcher Martin Jordan (40) flying with the new Sabre F-16. Hal is holding his father's bomber jacked, and approaches a youg girl, Carol Ferris (12), saying "My dad is riding that airplane", which she replies "My dad OWNS that plane". Like that, we're introduced to Carl Ferris (45), Martin's best friend and boss.

During the test, Martin's flaps don't activate and he notices a oil leaking. The airplane starts to crumble. Carl orders Martin to eject, but he says he's taking the Sabre to the desert before, so no one gets hurt. But it's too late. The airplane explodes before Hal's eyes, while he cries.

Today. Hal Jordan wakes up. He was having a nightmare, remembering of the most tragic momment of his live. He is in Jennifer Mosley's home. Jennifer is Hal's latest one-night-stand. While they try to guess their own names, Hal notices that he is lato to work. When he is about to leave, he confronts Jennifer's boyfriend, but manages to to run away.

Later on, he arrives on Ferris Aircraft. After Carl Ferris death, the place is administraded by Carol, now a beautiful and intelligent woman. There, Hal crosses with Carol, that angrily tells him that he was supposed to be piloting an enhanced F-22 raptor on the exact momment. Hal goes to the test area, where he meets Tom Kalmuka, his nerd friend and the computer programmer of Ferris. He explains that the 22 have some problems with the commanders, sho, he should't make risky moves. But he is Hal Jordan. "Risk" is his middle name.

Hal eventually flights the jet, with Ferris crown observing. He ignores Tom's warning and makes a risky move. Thanks to the commanders problems, his flap opens too late, and he crashes on a nearby building. Carol tells him to eject, but he doesn't listen. Diferently from his father, he manages to land the F-22 in safety, but Carol is furious with him, and says she doesn't fire him only because her father insisted that she accepted Hal on the Ferris, as in a way to excuse himself for Martin's death. Hal flirts with her, and, for a momment, she almost falls for him. But their flirtation is interruped by psychiatrist Hector Hammond, that claims to be Carol's boyfriend. Hector is arrogant and manipulative, a disgusting human being, but acts like an angel arround Carol, that just hired him as the pilot's shrink and had a dinner with him. She's yet to explain when Tom warns her that the Kordtronics is on phone wanting to talk about a new plane engine piece. Hal and Hector briefly talk, and Hector makes coward statments about Hal, saying that he read his files and knows that he's just a pathetic trouble maker, like his father. Hal and Hector go at it, making an angrily Carol suspend Hal to mechanic work, suspending his direct to fly. Hal goes to the gym, where he angrily breaks a mirror. Looking to the sky by a window, he remembers of his last conversation with his dad, where he says that whe wanted to be just like his old man. He wanted to see the stars.

Fastening, where in the middle of one of Saturn's rings, where a Huge spaceship ride by Sector's 2814 Green Lantern Abin Sur is going back to Oa, the corps HQ after a sucessfull mission in Kroakan, a little planet on the ends of his sector, where he just retreived a important object kept save in a chest. He is talking, via ring, with his friend, the Korugarian Sinestro, that asks why he is using a spaceshift when his ring can do all the work, to wich Abin reply is: "Sometimes, whe can't just trust the ring". The conversation is interrupted by a strange noise comming from the shell. Slowly, Abin realises the noises are punchs being throw at the Ship's core. A Big golden hand tears down one of the walls. His shadow covers Abin, that has a strange look on his face. A look of fear.

What are you thinking so far? I'll post the rest later.

 

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GREEN LANTERN - How would YOU do it?

I admit I don't know much about the Green Lantern.. but, I'd like to see a movie that's loads of fun, Spider-Man 2 style..

 

[Ronny Shade]

whole movie should be from Hals P.O.V. I wouldn't want any voice overs or shots of Oa before Hal goes there.

 

[BojacRedleif]

My idea was essentially Emerald Dawn with a splash of ED2 (mainly Sinestro's arrest from 2). Then that ol' Secret Origin came about and bits and pieces of that were sneaking in there.

But seeing how my idea was essentially the direction they're going with and with no chance of me doing GL...time to move on to GL2!
Manhunters seems the next logical choice...

Anybody want to get me a copy of the GL script so I can get to work on GL2?

 

[The Guard]

I'd love to read it if you want to send it to me.

Hold that thought. I don't have internet at home, as I just moved, but when I do I can upload it somewhere. Bluetights.net might still have it on hand. I'll check.

 

[The Guard]

Good news. The threat at Bluetights still exists. The bad news is that it's a link to SHH. And that thread doesn't. I'll try to upload it at some point in the near future.

 

[Katsuro]

-I'd like Abin Sur's giving Hal the ring to be convenience. Hal's the only one there when Abin crashes. None of that "you are chosen because you are pure of heart" stuff.

So you want him to be Kyle Rayner?

 

[Ronny Shade]

Good news. The threat at Bluetights still exists. The bad news is that it's a link to SHH. And that thread doesn't. I'll try to upload it at some point in the near future

Can't wait.

So you want him to be Kyle Rayner?

I want it to be believable.

 

[Katsuro]

I want it to be believable.

Is it believable that you can be randomly selected as only one of 3600 super space cops?

I mean, if you have a magic ring that can make anything, is it that much of a stretch to give it the ability to scan potential candidates for the qualities required to be a member?

Dont get me wrong, I dont think Hal should be prophecized as the greatest of all Green Lanterns or anything like that, but the ring choosing a suitable candidate after it's wearer dies is a staple of the Green Lantern story.

 

[Ronny Shade]

What happens when Hal turns out to not be an ideal candidate?

 

[Katsuro]

What happens when Hal turns out to not be an ideal candidate?

You mean when an evil alien bug infects him and makes him go crazy? Eh, coulda happened to anyone.

Not saying the selection process is perfect, but there has to be some selection process. And again, given all the spacey sci-fi elements inherent in a Green Lantern movie, there's nothing especially unbelievable about the ring being able to chose who it goes to. Makes more sense than the right guy just happening to be in the right time at the right place. Abin Sur crashes in the desert, what if he was seen by some guy burying his wife's body out there?

 

[Ronny Shade]

Hal would try to save him and get him out of the wreckage. I'd be a "you helped me. You are worthy" thing.

I just don't like the ring flying around looking for somebody. Never have.

 

[Katsuro]

Hal would try to save him and get him out of the wreckage. I'd be a "you helped me. You are worthy" thing.

Again, it's more believable that the right guy would be in the right place at the right time, than it is for this already magic ring to have the ability to find someone? You did say your problem with it was believability.

 

[BojacRedleif]

I'm thinking that in the movie it's gonna be the convenience. If I recall correctly Berlanti said in an interview that "anybody could wind up with the ring" (confirming that he is not a fan of the comics as he would know other wise).

Also I just picked the last part of Secret Origins and I gotta say there are some fantastic lines that would go great in the movie.

 

[Katsuro]

I'm thinking that in the movie it's gonna be the convenience. If I recall correctly Berlanti said in an interview that "anybody could wind up with the ring" (confirming that he is not a fan of the comics as he would know other wise).

Well, i've read the scripts. In it, the ring does seek Hal out, passing by both Guy Gardner and Clark Kent.

Also, there's no way you could call the writer of that script "not a fan".

 

[BojacRedleif]

Well there are like 3 writers on this, the other two guys might be, but Berlanti has done a piss-poor job of trying to get his fandom across.

Oh and please please please send me the script I'd really like to get a look at it.

 

[vicsage83]

If I was running the show for GL, I'd make it go epic. Very big balls to the wall action. My first thought was having the rogue GL Sinestro break out of his jail cell on Oa with the aid of Parallax. I'd use all 4 GLs the same way Sinestro Corps did.

 

[Ronny Shade]

Again, it's more believable that the right guy would be in the right place at the right time, than it is for this already magic ring to have the ability to find someone? You did say your problem with it was believability.

I also think the character suffers from knowing he was pre-ordained to be good at his job. I'd rather see him get the ring and worry about if he's doing the right thing with it the whole time. It should be less of a "can I win this fight with this evil villain?" movie and more of a "what should I be doing with my power?" movie.
Certainty takes me out of a character.

 

[Ronny Shade]

Well, i've read the scripts. In it, the ring does seek Hal out, passing by both Guy Gardner and Clark Kent.

Also, there's no way you could call the writer of that script "not a fan".

Why does the ring pass these guys? Gardner? He's a total dick in the comic. I never really understood why he was chosen to begin with. Clark doesn't need it.

Does the ring seek them out and then decide against it for these reasons? Or is the ring choosing possible secondaries in case Hal dies? Why not give the ring to Batman? He could certainly use it. It seems like a waste of energy just for a couple cameos.

 

[TheVileOne]

The Guardians aren't exactly IDEAL leaders.

 

[Katsuro]

I also think the character suffers from knowing he was pre-ordained to be good at his job. I'd rather see him get the ring and worry about if he's doing the right thing with it the whole time. It should be less of a "can I win this fight with this evil villain?" movie and more of a "what should I be doing with my power?" movie.
Certainty takes me out of a character.

With great power comes great responsibility, eh? Yeah, been there, done that. I always thought Green Lantern being chosen made him kinda unique. I mean, some heroes are born that way (Superman), others get their powers by accident (Flash), others go out and seek to be a superhero (Batman), and Green Lantern is chosen.

Like it or not, it's a significant aspect of the character. If you want a movie about a hero deciding how to use his powers, watch Spider-Man, or hope they make a Flash movie.

Why does the ring pass these guys? Gardner? He's a total dick in the comic. I never really understood why he was chosen to begin with. Clark doesn't need it.

Being a dick doesn't really mean much. The ring looks for exceptional willpower, and a lack of fear. Both qualities Gardner and Kent possess, but Hal possesses more.

Why not give the ring to Batman? He could certainly use it.

In the comics Batman actually was once chosen for a ring... but a yellow one. At the start of the whole Sinestro Corps story line, a yellow ring flew to Batman because he had the greatest ability to inspire fear in people.