Joker
Avenger
- Joined
- Jun 28, 2002
- Messages
- 33,762
- Reaction score
- 6
- Points
- 31
Is it wrong to continue this?
I think that he was an avid penny collector. One day, while walking down the street, saw an incredible penny. The most awe inspiring penny of all time. Just to gaze upon it would stop you in your tracks. He quickly picked it up, and went about his business. 2 days later, he went to the store, and dropped his loose coins in the take a penny leave a penny jar. Upon arriving home, he noticed his penny was missing. He spent days and days looking for it, before he remembered where it was.
He returned to the store, but they had no idea what he was talking about. They said that they had never seen him, and he left crying. While walking out, he saw Johnson, his rival penny collector, laughing at something. Sneaking over to Johnson, he saw his penny, clutched between his fingers. Echo had no choice but to kill him. He stabbed him repeatedly with a broken bottle, until Johnson died. When he took a closer look at his hand, Echo noticed something. What he thought was a penny was actually a tums....
I give you an A for effort, but a B for the story...you needed to add in things about his parents, as he mentioned them in his first post. And also, you should have drawn out the death of Johnson. He should have kidnapped him, and forced him to watch his lover be tortured to death for days, before finally ending it...maybe something about him reaching sexual climax at the end of the killing. And only then does he look through Johnsons pockets to find the penny was actually a tums.