The Joker_1000
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This is the name of the manga/anime I'm currently working on. I'm going to do something no one else has ever done, I'm going to post up everything I've wrote but it's only because I'm rewriting mostly all of it since I don't like this draft. Any questions you have, direct them to me & I will answer them to the best of my ability. Keep in mind this series is loosely based off of Dragon Ball Z so let me know anything you don't like about this draft & feel free to post things you'd like to see in my manga.
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The story begins with a 16 year old named Sadiki who attends high school & due to him being so smart, he is double promoted into the 12th grade & is about to enter his last year of school. Sadiki is somewhat of a quiet kid & although he is often thought of as popular by his peers, he seldom hangs around the popular crowd. Deciding not to just be a book worm, after entering high school he began to play sports such as basketball & football. However, no matter what sport he tried he was always able to run faster & jump higher than the other kids. It also became apparent he was stronger as well. After entering school this year, Sadiki had two care free & happy go lucky boys in his class who decided to try & get Sadiki to lighten up a bit. Sadiki begins to hang around Kiyazaki & Zero, becoming good buddies with them. Sadiki also comes across a beautiful girl named Katara who, like him, had been double promoted. The four began to become really good friends, hanging around one another a lot. Two months later, on a sunny Saturday, while studying Sadiki hears a huge explosion. Sadiki rushes outside only to see a big crater in the ground. Sadiki goes down to inspect & sees a spaceship in the middle of the huge crater. Suddenly, the door begins to open. Sadiki jumps back, scared at what might come out of the ship. Instead of a terrifying beast, a man in battered armor falls out of the ship & faints before getting the chance to say anything. Sadiki takes the man into his house & tends to his wounds. While the mysterious man is asleep, Sadiki explains this strange chain of events to his parents. Hours later, the man awakens to see Sadiki sitting in a chair, studying & doing work on his computer. The man calls out "ZOURI!!" to which Sadiki becomes confused & tries to assure the man that his name is Sadiki. The man begins to talk, telling Sadiki his name is Kaoru. Kaoru then tells Sadiki he's not from Earth but is from a planet named Xerek. Sadiki tells Kaoru he's crazy but Kaoru insists that he's telling the truth. Kaoru then begins to tell the story of the Xerekians. It all began about 10 million years ago on a barren planet where life had just began to take form. Kaoru reveals that Xerekians first started out as mindless beasts but over thousands of years they evolved into humanoid forms. The first humanoid Xerekians were very wild & barbaric, often fighting with one another to prove one's dominane. The Xerekians would eventually begin to develop powers as time progressed. Over thousnads of years Xerekians became a stronger & more sophisticated race of people.
This is just page 1, page 2 will be posted soon after I receive some feedback. Keep in mind I will keep most of this but it will just be rewritten so I can add in more details.
Page 1:
The story begins with a 16 year old named Sadiki who attends high school & due to him being so smart, he is double promoted into the 12th grade & is about to enter his last year of school. Sadiki is somewhat of a quiet kid & although he is often thought of as popular by his peers, he seldom hangs around the popular crowd. Deciding not to just be a book worm, after entering high school he began to play sports such as basketball & football. However, no matter what sport he tried he was always able to run faster & jump higher than the other kids. It also became apparent he was stronger as well. After entering school this year, Sadiki had two care free & happy go lucky boys in his class who decided to try & get Sadiki to lighten up a bit. Sadiki begins to hang around Kiyazaki & Zero, becoming good buddies with them. Sadiki also comes across a beautiful girl named Katara who, like him, had been double promoted. The four began to become really good friends, hanging around one another a lot. Two months later, on a sunny Saturday, while studying Sadiki hears a huge explosion. Sadiki rushes outside only to see a big crater in the ground. Sadiki goes down to inspect & sees a spaceship in the middle of the huge crater. Suddenly, the door begins to open. Sadiki jumps back, scared at what might come out of the ship. Instead of a terrifying beast, a man in battered armor falls out of the ship & faints before getting the chance to say anything. Sadiki takes the man into his house & tends to his wounds. While the mysterious man is asleep, Sadiki explains this strange chain of events to his parents. Hours later, the man awakens to see Sadiki sitting in a chair, studying & doing work on his computer. The man calls out "ZOURI!!" to which Sadiki becomes confused & tries to assure the man that his name is Sadiki. The man begins to talk, telling Sadiki his name is Kaoru. Kaoru then tells Sadiki he's not from Earth but is from a planet named Xerek. Sadiki tells Kaoru he's crazy but Kaoru insists that he's telling the truth. Kaoru then begins to tell the story of the Xerekians. It all began about 10 million years ago on a barren planet where life had just began to take form. Kaoru reveals that Xerekians first started out as mindless beasts but over thousands of years they evolved into humanoid forms. The first humanoid Xerekians were very wild & barbaric, often fighting with one another to prove one's dominane. The Xerekians would eventually begin to develop powers as time progressed. Over thousnads of years Xerekians became a stronger & more sophisticated race of people.
This is just page 1, page 2 will be posted soon after I receive some feedback. Keep in mind I will keep most of this but it will just be rewritten so I can add in more details.