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The title would be a dead giveway. I will post it later. Until then enjoy the first part of .... some parts.
Feel free to leave a comment if you read it. Good or bad I just want to know what you folks think of my writing.
Thanks
Chapter One: Missing
Benjamin Grimm, better known to the world as The Thing, walked into the home and HQ of the Fantastic Four late on a Thursday evening. He was noticeable upset and muttering to himself as he walked right through Reed Richards lab. Stupid Circus of Crime, waste haffa my night on them.
Are you alright Ben? asked Reed.
Oh ya Stretcho, Im just fine.
Oh you seem a little upset. I though you and Johnny were going to the movies tonight.
We did, but afterwards we stumbled into the Ringmaster and his Circus of Crime breaking inta the bank. They split up right after I knocked out the Ringmaster. I went after Princess Python and that Clown idiot and Johnny went after the rest of em.
Why is this upsetting you so much Ben?
I lost another hat chasing these mooks. Its aint cheap getting a hat custom fitted for dis melon I got.
I see, Reed laughed, didnt Johnny come back with you?
Wasnt ya listenin big brain? Me and Johnny split up, he should be back soon. Im takin a shower and goin to bed.
Could you use the bathroom downstairs? I think I may have discovered a new sub-species of civilized bacteria in your bathtub.
Very funny.
Reed said to himself, I wasnt joking.
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Early on Friday morning Susan Storm Richards awoke to an empty bed. She put on her robe and headed down to the kitchen, there was no one there. There was nobody in the common room either. She headed for the one room where she knew there would be somebody, Reeds lab. Reed, have you seen Johnny or Ben?
Bens gone to bed honey, and Johnny Hasnt come back home yet.
What? Sue asked, somewhat concerned now for the well being of her little brother.
He and Ben had a little run in with the Circus of Crime and Johnny isnt home yet. He can take care of himself and Im sure he will be back before morning.
Reed, its ten thirty am. Come on we have to go and find him. She pressed on her communicator. Ben wake up we have to go and find Johnny.
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The three of them searched as much of New York City as three super humans could in one day. Reed took a fantasicar and searched from the skies. Sue looked around in all of Johnnys favorite hangouts across the city. And Ben checked in with the police. It turns out that the rest of the Circus of Crime had been brought in last night.
The police actually only had one member of the Circus in their cells. The other three that Johnny had fought were in the hospital in critical condition. That aint like Johnny, Id better go and talk to the creep ya got down in lock up
Ben was led by an officer down to the holding cells where he encountered the criminal, Live Wire, in a cell. He was sitting in the corner with his arms wrapped around his legs. He didnt look up when Ben and the officer entered his cell.
Hey, said the officer. This man has come to ask you a few questions
There was no reaction from Live Wire.
Ill handle from here officer, Said Ben as he stepped forward. Listen up Preston, last night you tangled with the Human Torch and today he is missing. I want some answers and you are the only guy left on yer crew that can still talk. Ben picked the prisoner up, and I can fix that for ya.
Th-The Human Torch? Asked Live Wire.
What do you know? Asked Ben.
Oh him? Hes gone. That guy beat us all to hell and then took the Torch with him.
Ben was now quite upset, What guy? Who took Johnny?
Oh I dont know, but he beat us all.
Ben threw Live Wire against the wall and walked out of the cell. He pressed on his communicator, Reed, Suzie I got some bad news. Meet me back at the Baxter Building
Ill be right there Ben. Came Reeds reply.
Is Johnny alright? asked Susan shortly after.
I dont know Sue. Ben let go of the communicator. I dont know
Feel free to leave a comment if you read it. Good or bad I just want to know what you folks think of my writing.
Thanks
Chapter One: Missing
Benjamin Grimm, better known to the world as The Thing, walked into the home and HQ of the Fantastic Four late on a Thursday evening. He was noticeable upset and muttering to himself as he walked right through Reed Richards lab. Stupid Circus of Crime, waste haffa my night on them.
Are you alright Ben? asked Reed.
Oh ya Stretcho, Im just fine.
Oh you seem a little upset. I though you and Johnny were going to the movies tonight.
We did, but afterwards we stumbled into the Ringmaster and his Circus of Crime breaking inta the bank. They split up right after I knocked out the Ringmaster. I went after Princess Python and that Clown idiot and Johnny went after the rest of em.
Why is this upsetting you so much Ben?
I lost another hat chasing these mooks. Its aint cheap getting a hat custom fitted for dis melon I got.
I see, Reed laughed, didnt Johnny come back with you?
Wasnt ya listenin big brain? Me and Johnny split up, he should be back soon. Im takin a shower and goin to bed.
Could you use the bathroom downstairs? I think I may have discovered a new sub-species of civilized bacteria in your bathtub.
Very funny.
Reed said to himself, I wasnt joking.
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Early on Friday morning Susan Storm Richards awoke to an empty bed. She put on her robe and headed down to the kitchen, there was no one there. There was nobody in the common room either. She headed for the one room where she knew there would be somebody, Reeds lab. Reed, have you seen Johnny or Ben?
Bens gone to bed honey, and Johnny Hasnt come back home yet.
What? Sue asked, somewhat concerned now for the well being of her little brother.
He and Ben had a little run in with the Circus of Crime and Johnny isnt home yet. He can take care of himself and Im sure he will be back before morning.
Reed, its ten thirty am. Come on we have to go and find him. She pressed on her communicator. Ben wake up we have to go and find Johnny.
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The three of them searched as much of New York City as three super humans could in one day. Reed took a fantasicar and searched from the skies. Sue looked around in all of Johnnys favorite hangouts across the city. And Ben checked in with the police. It turns out that the rest of the Circus of Crime had been brought in last night.
The police actually only had one member of the Circus in their cells. The other three that Johnny had fought were in the hospital in critical condition. That aint like Johnny, Id better go and talk to the creep ya got down in lock up
Ben was led by an officer down to the holding cells where he encountered the criminal, Live Wire, in a cell. He was sitting in the corner with his arms wrapped around his legs. He didnt look up when Ben and the officer entered his cell.
Hey, said the officer. This man has come to ask you a few questions
There was no reaction from Live Wire.
Ill handle from here officer, Said Ben as he stepped forward. Listen up Preston, last night you tangled with the Human Torch and today he is missing. I want some answers and you are the only guy left on yer crew that can still talk. Ben picked the prisoner up, and I can fix that for ya.
Th-The Human Torch? Asked Live Wire.
What do you know? Asked Ben.
Oh him? Hes gone. That guy beat us all to hell and then took the Torch with him.
Ben was now quite upset, What guy? Who took Johnny?
Oh I dont know, but he beat us all.
Ben threw Live Wire against the wall and walked out of the cell. He pressed on his communicator, Reed, Suzie I got some bad news. Meet me back at the Baxter Building
Ill be right there Ben. Came Reeds reply.
Is Johnny alright? asked Susan shortly after.
I dont know Sue. Ben let go of the communicator. I dont know