Superman: The Lost Son

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dream cast for your imagination...

Superman: Leonardo Dicaprio
Lois Lane: Reese Witherspoon
Lex Luthor: Daniel Day Lewis
Havoc: Joaquin Phoenix
Jor-el: Russel Crowe
Brainac: Jason Isaacs

Act I

Open through Metropolis, which looks extactly like this. Its full of life and full o fstyle, everyone in the world dreams of living there!

At night, but its totally desserted. Were in the middle a huge army search-humvees-dozens of them-burst on the screen, and surround the enormous METRPOLIS BANK-a recovery team quickly is sent, but moments later mass gunfire sounds; before the entire first floor of the building EXPLODES! Out walks LORD HAVOC-clad in skintight black outfit with white lines for his eyes and down his torso, and white belt...he strides out of the ruins, untouched. The man of steel lands iconically and powerfully down the street. The two eachother, before taking off in a collosal fist fight above metropolis.

Superman kicks Havoc down to Earth, who grabs a n oil rig truck and smashes it into Superman-it explodes and he thrown back, crashing through a skyscrapper and out the other end in slowmo

He heads back for more, but Havoc has fleed! We follow him to the NEW YORK MUSEUM OF NATURAL HISTORY where Superman cat and mouse chases Havoc, until he sees something off screen that makes him shriek-drop-he is DYING! He screams up at us as we cut to:

Clark kents apartment. Clark Kent-28-wakes up in a sweat. His cozy apartment is on the 50th floor of a Metropolis building, and its not even dawn. He had some sort of dream; he looks at his superman suit, still hanging in the closet, and goes back to bed.

We meet Jimmy Olsen, 23. Its 5 AM-still dark out and hes at crime scene, snapping pics! A robberys bene foiled by an unknown man, who was too fast for camera and somehow got the men up 60 feet and tied them to the bank lights

One of the criminal says he "flew"...Olsen rolls his eyes.

Montage of Metropolis in the morning; stores opening, people going out; clark getting dressed. This is his first day at the Daily Planet. Jimmy gives him a bad gift, and Clark sees Lois whose in a huge argument with the catankerous perry White. He instantly is attracted to Lois, who is smoking! She is upfront, confident, but nice at the same time. Very likeable.

We learn they're going to a convention for Lois's boyfriend. Whose that, clark asks, to which Jimmy replies, "LEX LUTHOR".

Pan over a HUGE sign of "LEXCORP" to find a skycrapper near completition: Lex's new building. Grand opening party in 2 weeks. We meet Lex with some of his guys before the convention; he's a punkass. Rich and sophisticated, young and brilliant, but a sneering snob. Bald but in great shape. The convention talks about new weapons he wants to sell to the us military which track items from outer space.

Clark and Jimmy cover it, as with his xray vision clark finds Lex mistreating Lois behind the scene when she tries to give him public speaking advice. Jimmy says Lois is a gold digger and nothing more, and we fade out....to outer space!!!

In outer space; we find shuttle "Empire" and its crew working on a satelite...when an object flies by; a sleek, small machine, hovering towards Earth. An astronaut sees it, but Nasa picks up nothing as the machine enters Earths atmosphere. We follow it as it crash lands into the middle of the Sahara Desert at night. Once landing; the human sized "detector" lights up; some sort of discovery has been made.

Shots of the daily planet at night. We find Lois and Clark working late over chinese, and it turns to small talk. Earlier, Jimmy told Lois about the stories he heard of a "flying man" and they discuss them, Lois dismisses them as pure fiction. They also talk about Lex, and peoples instincts, ect. Lois thinks Lex is a great guy who has some downsides like everyone...and clark says his instinct tells him hes up to no good (something Clark thinks due to he saw lex mocking lois to lex's pals). Lois comes off as very friendly, expecially to a reserved Clark, though driven and ambitious. Clark speaks of his past from smallville. Small tlak as they grow closer; and we figure out already she is the person closest to clark.

Back in outer space, we come to a massive starship...LORD HAVOC is an alien bounty hunter who works for the intergalactic boss BRAINIAC...Brainiac has some huge desire to find krypton technology, and Havoc informs him that a probe that landed on Earth has picked up. Brainiac now reveals hes searching for Kal-el, as he believes he has it, and he sends Havoc and 2 of his friends-Ty and Nig-to Earth to bring it to him.

Its not the following day. Clark shows up to work to find Jimmy about to leave-he and Clark have been assigned to cover a charity event across town. Clark asks where Lois is, an he says shes taking the monorail to lexcorp to go with lex, whose making a huge donation.

We meet Lois lane, who is with 3 of luthors assistants, in a crowd train station...except this one is 45 stories in the air; smack in the middle of a skyscrapper the train tunnels through the middle of! Lois gets on, and quickly is in trouble when the trains breaks fail! The train rockets through busy stops where it is expected to stop, and cont slow down! Trains are forced off the tracks to make way! Lois overhears the conductor saying in 6 miles, theyre out of track to which lois begins panicing along with everyone else!

Meanwhile, Jimmy and Clark are stuck in traffic inthe backseat of a cab, burning in the hot sun. Thyre cabbie is aloud mouthed black man played by Chris Tucker, who tells jokes as they wait...when clark hears the screams of lois! Oh no! With xray vision, he sees through the building the dead the train lurching towards...without waiting, clark jumps out the open window, leaving jimmy confused, dashes across the rooftops of cars, and heads for a phoneboth...

Meanwhile, the runaway train crashes through a stop, and noone has any idea how to stop it...suddenly superman appars, rocketing through the canyons of downtown metroplis, trailing the monorail, and ducks inside a building stop. He flies past the windows and to the front, and tries to push it to a stop, but it wont work! He tries invein as it gets closer and closer, until supermans cape is caught in the wheels! Hes sucked down and the train derails, the front car smashing into an office building! It crashes out the end, and the first car-lois inside-dangles, lurching towards the ground 45 stories away, when suddenly it stops-supermans holding the end of it! Suddenly, the front cars holder th 2nd car SNAPS-it budges HARD0-DANGLING by a thread-the movement cause lois to los her face-she FALLS-SMASHES through the windshield and PLUMMETS towards the pavement as a crowd in the metropolis park watch below in terror!

Superman swoops in from above and saves her, andthan catches the falling car! A true hero! He sets em down in the park, where he and lois simply stare at eachother; it really is love at first site; and are about to speak when lex arrives, creating a huge scene as if it could get any bigger; ignoring superman and seeing if Lois is alright...Lois thanks Superman and Lex follows her lead; and he waves at the crowd, and fllies home, now a huge ron burgundy sized deal.

Superman lands at his apartment where he has a panic attack..."superman" was never supposed to be public! we follow him as he touches down in smallville, where jonathan and martha are, to lay low for a few days; contemplating wether hell ever do that again. hes called jimmy olsen, telling him hes terribly ill.

Meanwhile, its night time in Lex's office where he's chillin with a still shaken up Lois. Lex is watching the news, were "stranger mania" has taken ahold of news channels- who is this flying man in metropolis! a Jimmy Olsen interview comes where he begins saying "he told everyone so cause he heard it first!" and lex shuts off the tv . He finds her, staring out the window, up at the sky; looking to see if she sees the flying man again. Lex thinks her distance is because shes still shaken up. He apologizes if hes done anything to upset her and says hes very busy, to which lois says she understands. He gives her a gift, a set of car keys to what is surely the nicest ride ever made, but she still seems distant to him, even as she walks away, leaving him shaking his head in confusion/anger. Lex does seem to care about Lois, and there is no real reason to HATE HIM yet, he just does not seem like the most likeable dude.

Back in Smallville, Jonathan and Martha tell clark that superman a good thing and he needs to keep being him, even if he doesnt want to. "its time to answer your true calling" they say. Clark walks around the farm, and we see flashbacks of him learning his powers. We then see Clark standing alone, in the middle of the fortress (we dont see what it looks like on the outside yet) amd it is a huge, silvery clear crystal structure. Notlike singer; this is more like aclassic astle madeof ice and its monsterous...clark stares in it, an epifany...he knows what he must do as we close up on his face, music mounting and building...and we find superman! flying-zooming-through the andes mountains!

 

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ACT II

Superman rockets iconically through the Andes; shots from his vision as mountain flying by at dizzyspeed...he stops, listening, and takes off! He barges in on some fools whove kidnapped a kings son, and returns the boy safely to his parents! He stops a bank robbery in Japan! Meanwhile, shots of him on the frontcover of newspapers and magazines...superman saves a town from an avalanche...more shots of news stories and footage, finally a shot of THE DAILY PLANET and the headline SUPERMAN! by lois Lane... and finally rescues a ship from a huge storm!

Then we;re at the planet, where lois gives white her article on superman for the week; this is her biggie talking about what it was like being rescued y him. white calls its a "turd" and has it printed for the next days frontpage and says lois has the day off.

Then we meet up with criminals in the middle of a building robbery at night. Superman shows up, and says "I think thats called STEALING"...and gets them arrested. He sees them put in a cop car, which drives away, when we recognize the driver as MERCY- luthors asisstant clark saw at the convention...

Follow the cop car, as it pulls into lexcorp headqaurters. superman following. Inside lexcorp, Luthor is notified his weapons hes trying to sell have picked up theyre first real UFO-and its heading for the sahara! Nasa has no idea, so luthor orders his men in egypt out there to get a head start; this will greatly jack up his asking price. We follow luthor to his elevator and a she waits to go to his penthouse office (140th floor) when it stops too soon...luthor is confused but it wont rise. The elevator suddenly moved around-we only feel and hear it cause were on the inside- and the doors open to reveal superman hovering in the middle of the opposite elevator shaft; having turned luthor elevator around to face him. Luthor is polite as superman just saved his girlfriend lives but Superman says he know he was behind the robbery. Lex gets irrated, and says everything is ok. Supes says hell be keeping an eyeon him and lex doesnt like this. He says "I run this city, ok?" and says if superman wants everything to be ok, hell stay outta the way.

Superman flies away, and is about to leave when he finds Lois on luthors penthouse balcony. Theyre alone and this is the first time theyve ever been able to speak. Lois thanks him; a bit more small talk. She asks obvious things like what he was doing there, ect. They def. have chemistry; but superman xray visions luthor coming out there, and says he has to go (and leaves) but in actuallity, we see lex was listening to them. Lex walks out and asks lois who she was just talking to and she says noone. Lex says "oh" though we know he knows shes lying.

Back in the sahara, 3 jeep fulls of lexcorp men surround a sleek, private spacecraft...when suddenly nig and ty arrive and kill all of them but one in a terrifying scene; just like a horror movie! HAVOC walks out of the ship, cool and godly, and demands that the 1 remaining lexcorp employee take him to "whoever is in charge".

The next day at the planet is a huge meeting/ clebration! Lois article set record sales and she is commended (she gets lunch with perry and lex will join them!) but white wants everyone on the ball, trying to get more outta this guy. After listening to jimmy talk abuot how great it is, Lois secretly tells clark she saw Superman last night, ect. She says she'd kill for that interview, and clark says "everyone in the world wants that oppritunity" to which lois half jokes " i just wanna see him again".

She leaves to go to lunch, leaving clark thinking...lois really wants to see superman again...he leaves. We follow Lois and white down amid a mob of media and paparazzi as they are greeted by lex. Lex looks irritated when they keep asking she will superman again, and they are about to get in a cab when Superman floats down from above (infront of everyone-lois, white, lex and all the photographers) and asks lois if shed like to interview him. She looks at lex who while he doesnt look mad, isnt happy, and looks at white, who would probably kill her if she refused, and accepts.

meanwhile, shots of the pentagon. General Stuart Sutton is made aware by Lex via intercom that his weapons and team intercepted an alien ufo that seems to be legit. Sutton says theyve got some weapons of theyre own, and thinks the ufos a hoax, but the joint chiefs set up a meeting for the next day. Meanwhile, Lex is in his security ward where hes hacing a man play back secuirty footage...he sees the person lois was talking to is indeed SUPERMAN...uh oh...

Back at the planet, clark and lois talk. He asks f shes nervous and ****, and she thinks shes trying too hard. Shes just finished getting ready and heads up to the roof, where superman lands. They ask the standard questions; and this Lois is visibly different the Lois we see with Lex. She is much more energetic and seemingly, happy. The talk turns to wether superman is single, and he says he met her boyfriend. she turns off the mic and says "whatd you think of him" to which superman says he thinks he may be in some trouble...Lois says she likes Lex, they just have they're moments...anyways after some big flirting, they go flying; around Metropolis, over the river, and swirling up into the clouds, and pausing in the most romantic area above them, where all they can see are huge moon and all the stars and it is incredibly silent...they go back to the planet, Lois is literally blown away. She ask how bad lex is, and superman says she shouldnt be worried. He flies away, both leaving with they're minds spinning...they really hit it off.

the next day is luthor army meeting. Pan up from signs of the massive grand opening concert and parade thats days away to find lex in the miliarty meeting. They wont pay his prices, and hes mad. They think superman may have destroyed a need for his weapons. Lex is mad, and says they may need to start worrying bout superman soon enough. Back at the planet, clark is in a great mood, and Lois article is a massive, massive huge hit. Supermania is everywhere. Lois and clark have grown semi close, and Lois leaves as shes meeting lex at his place for a "candlelit dinner." at Lois's....

Back to lexcorp,Lord havoc and his 2 boi's comes before lex with the employee. They demand to know where kal-el is, but luthor wont be forced so havoc shows whose boss and luthor realizes they want superman as they have the same powers he does. luthor isnt so quick to turn over who it is; at this point he still doesnt seem to mean supes harm. he says to come back tomorrow and hell tell them what they want and if they dont leave theyll never know; he tells the employee to give a place to hide out. Furious, havoc and his 2 friends leave, and walk right past Lois whose entering...superman words float through her head "lex isnt entirely good"...and she follows them; leaving Clark and Jimmy in a cab wondering what shes doing...but Clark thinks he knows...

Havoc is brought to a rundown lexcorp warehouse; where she follows them inside and listens to them talk about a need to murder kal-el..."whose kal-el" lios whispers...suddenly NIG has found her with his xray vision; Lois had no idea they were aliens...theyre about to rip her apart, limb from limb, when suddenly SUPERMAN crashes through a skylight and kicks em away; he head lois screams appearently...lois flees as superman fends them off. Havoc tells ty and nig not to let her get away. Lois gets to her brand new corvette lex bought her, back up, smashing into another a car, and peels out, onto the freeway fleeing! Superman is double teamed and beaten by ty and nig who flee to get Lois. Superman and Havoc eye eachother but superman leaves.

What follows is a midair freeway chase as Ty and Nig attempt to get to/destroy lois. They blow up cars and toss em aside, but superman keeps saving her. Eventually, superman has her outta the car and ty and nig detroy it, only to realise shes gone. Havoc is PISSED shes gone...

Meanwhile, we follow superman as he flies-lois in his arms having rescued her again-and he flies into the majestic fortressof solitude...lois wants to know if this is where he lives...this is her 3rd time with him, and after some chat about who they are, how powerful they are, supes says HES Kal-el; therefore theyre looking for him...the 3rd time the 2 are together alone and they FINALLY hook up! Kissing for a few brief seconds...feeling guilty now, Lois says she has to go.

At LOIS'S penthouse apartment across town, we see lex inside, waiting. watching the news. His "candlelit dinner" he set up (at her house, heh) a flop...she stood him up at her own place. But he sees why. On the news..they show superman flying her away from danger, and shows them flying over the oceans, "undoubtedly heaed for supermans place". Lex is now, finally...pissed. Jealous. Lois walks in from the balcony. "where have you been?". It starts slow, but lex FREAKS OUT and demands Lois not see him again. "Hes DANGEROUS!"-"HE SAVED MY LIFE how is he dangerous?"-"then why does the army want him dead?"... this is classic lex,a jealous, selfish ***** who intimidates the crap out of lois.

Back at lexcorp now, lex is pissed. he calls up Havoc, and says he wants superman dead. Havoc is ther in a second (he can fly). They say they need kryptonite, and also they need some sort of bait. what could they use??? close up of lex, as he looks at picture of him and LOIS...

 

[CFE]

This sounds amazing, Excel. Brilliant work

CFE

 

[Excel]

thanks! ill finish it up tonight...

 

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SUPERMAN: THE LOST SON

Act II continued


Meanwhile, Clark is on fire! He feels like hes the man! He see's Lois at work and they chat briefly, Whites all over her to write a new article about the rescue. Lois is stressed and goes to the daily planet roof for a breather, and Clark sees it. As Superman, he flies up. The last time he saw Lois, the previous night, they hooked up and he dropped her off. Superman thinks things are going great. But Lois stress between her job, her boyfriend she feels loyal to, and Superman who is drawn to, has gotten to her. She tells Superman that her life was going great before he arrived, and ever since it's been headed in a direction she didnt expect and says she can no longer see him anymore, before heading back inside, her mind a mix of emotions.

Superman doesnt like it obviously, but he is superman. He respects her wishes. We then get a slow montage with music playing as Lois rides away in a limo with lex while superman flies away. Intercut shots of they're faces, as Superman eyes begin welling up as he flies away, faster and faster, while Lois watches Lex on his cell phone, shrewd businessman. She looks out the limo window and sees 2 teenagers dancing, seemingly having a great time. She doesnt know what she wants.

After the montage is over, its obvious to us niether are particulary happy about what just happened, though Lois's choice is understandable and Superman must act like that. Lex drops Lois off, and we see her going in...when suddenly Ty attacks her; knocking her out cold. Luthor and Havoc walk onto the scene, and Luthor makes Havoc promise she wont be hurt, and he nods.

Clark re-enters the Daily Planet, and it's now dusk. He tells white his article is done when he hears something strange...'Kal-ellllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllll". Clark knows who Kal-el is from the scriptures of krypton he has in the fortress, which he explained to lois (and us). Someone is calling for him in his native language!

Clark enters a stairwell, becomes superman and flies away! He traces the sound to the middle of the Sahara Desert where he sees Havoc cool, sleek space ship. Suddenly NIG attacks him, mauling him and tossing him over to Ty, who keeps the beat on going. He sent to the ground, and just as he tires to get up, LORD HAVOC has his foot on Supermans throat.

"Hello. Friend".

Superman tosses him off, and goes after him, but keeps getting detroyed. Ty and Nig hold him in mid air as Havoc beats the crap out of him, demamding to know where the kryptonion technology is. Superman has no idea wtf hes talking about, and Havoc doesnt like that! Havoc barks orders (in an alien language) to Ty and Nig and they fly off, and Superman goes to follow, but Havoc grabs him and throws him into the middle of downtown metropolis! Superman and Havoc fight, until Superman loses havoc amongst the skyscrappers-

we get to where we were at the very begining-superman hears the bank explode and lands, and we see a fast forward version of the first fight from different angles, and catch up with superman back at the museum of natuel history! What is making his scream, suffer, and die? LOIS is wrapped in a kryptonite neclace we saw on Havocs ship earlier, and is plunged in a large retaining pool! Superman, dying, smashes the tank. Lois is conscious and sees whats happening and the effect of the neclace on Superman, he but he seemingly dies right there. Lois is a mess, thinking he just died to save her, when suddenly luthor (and the police) arrive, they got there on "anonymous tip" and Havoc, Ty, and Nig are gone. Luthor acts like he has no idea what happened, and they turn to see Superman is gone...

 

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SUPERMAN: THE LOST SON

Act III

The fight is global news and we see a montage of clips from news channels. Lois is once again the center of attention. Luthor protectivly shields her away from media outside her apartment as he guides her in. Back at the planet, Jimmy and co. are working late. The general consesus is both Havoc and Superman are missing. General Stuart Sutton has the U.S. on def con 1 for the night. Lois emotionally distraught, Lex asks her what happened-we get the feeling he may not even know exactly what went down- but she keeps quiet...brief flashback as we see lois knows the people who she thinks killed superman aeth same people who seaw walking utof lexs office...she knows hes involved.

Back at the fortress of solitude, we see a bloodied and dying superman arrive, crawling and pulling himself into the main chamber where the scriptures are. He opens them and begins going through the technology, when he activates-by accident- the jor-el hologram. Superman has never seen his father yet, and ghis father tells him of kryptons dismise. Flashback montage of krypton getting blown up, and back to superman, still hurt, who now knows why hes there.

In Metropolis, everyone wants to know what is going on! where is he? Lois returns to work, where she tells white she wont be writing an article on her previous superman episode...jimmy and her have a one on one for a minute, and jimmy asks if everything is ok. lois says she thinks that superman might never be coming back. Jimmy says thats bad ect, and Lois says she think she made a mistake; that everytime she was with superman things always felt like they would be ok. Her words seem final, as if she has some huge regret.

Back to Luthor, he ios talking with the army and preparing for his huge mega grand opening party that night. Sutton informs the army no longer has a need for his weapons and wont even pay his original price, which luthor is pissed about! The army states they feel with havoc and superman gone they have no reason to spend that much money on them. Lex is furious, and now Havoc corners him. Havoc is mad, he doesnt have his technology and superman is dead so how will he find it? The cunning and clever side of lex takes over, and he forms a deal Havoc cannot refuse. Havoc shows the us he is still around and a threat and therefore lex's weapons and tracking technology will be bought. Once bought, luthor will have power globally-and would "easily" be able to track down the man of steels whereabouts through the u.s. satilite records. But how can they show Havocs still a threat?

Close up on Luthor's face as he sees a ad for his huge concert and party the following night on metropolis square to open in his new building...

Back in the fortress, superman is in recovery suit and asks jor-el what technology havoc is after, and jor-el reveals it is rejuvinatgion powers, but it can only be used once. Superman can finish healing, which would be done in 2-3 weeks, or he can take it now...

back at metropolis, it now night and luthor rolls up to his party. Lois wouldnt go with him, electing to go with jimmy for work. There are 1000's of people on metropolis drive listening to a huge concert, ect, all for charity kicking off the opening of lexcorp global headquarters. Luthor walks up and begins speaking; and he warns misty "any minute now"...

Back in the fortress, supermans still in debate; he speaks to jor-el who advises him to wait and save the powers. The we pick up his superhearing: Back to Metropolis, lex's speech...out of the blue from above, lord havoc blows in, BLASSTAFF in hand; a sleek 2 sided weapon we saw in the very opening scene when he walks out of the bank. We are now about to witness what it does; Ty and Nig hover by him as the entire crowd watches; and after a minute ty and nig send flares-the blastaff shoots flares out of both ends, blowing cars sky high as every flees and runs for their lives; luthor included! An attack has begin! We find Jimmy Olsen and Lois down here covering it. Lois recognizes who it is and freaks out-. We find lex now ordering misty to command his weapons that hes selling-hes loaded them with kryptonite which he knows hurts the evil trio as they told him theyre suits protect form it; but in missiles that will shred theyre suits, their explosed, and he personally is going to have misty defeat the 3 and become a hero!

Back at the fortress, superman takes the rejuvination powers, suits up, and flies out! Back to Metropolis- Ty blows up a building, raining debris on the fleeing crowd! Shost of them running, fleeing-ty and nig taking police men as havoc watches over. Shots of superman sooming at 100000 miles per hour across the sea, towards a huge city in the distance...

Havoc tells Ty and Nig to continue it up; they all need to die. Ty blows up a building and the walls about to fall on a crowd, which includes Jimmy and Lois when suddenly its CAUGHT-Superman is there! He orders the crowd to flee-Lois is in amazement and Superman gives her a sad look, and leaves.

Luthor finds Lois and orders her to come with him; she doesnt know where to go but the fleein crowd-as well as jimmy and lex-pull her away. Menawhile, Superman goes and beats on ty and kicks nig much to the crowd applause and shock as superman has RETURNED, Havoc is pissed when the weapons go off-ty is incernated into thin air! Realizing they're ****'d, havoc shoots misty with his blasstaff while Lois and Jimmy see it. Meanwhile turns and MAULS superman-he is easily the best of the 4, and sends superman tumbling into a near by building, near death already. Lois sees this and sees thge fleeing people, and tries to go-Luthro wont let her and says its dangerous, but lois says "dont you understand? this is a massacre and he is our only hope! everyone here is going to die if we dont help him" but lex stares at her-finally she breaks free and runs-jimmy follows, and Lois tells him to check out lex's weapons!

We find SUPERMAN knocked cold on the first floor of a****ty abandoned building that is about to colloapse, lois enters and struggles through the collapsiong building to find him. Meanwhile, Lex runs up and barks to havoc to stop, that it is enough! But havoc doens tlisten, as lex just killed his friend-havioc punches luthor, who flies 35 feet across the street onto a car. Much of the crowd is now gone but there still many remain, now terrfied or in hiding.

Lois manages to drag out superman just as the building collapses, and he comes conscious. they look at eachother, and lois says she is sorry, and superman says he has to tell her something...and superman smiles and she shakes her head, and the two kiss briefly, before a huge explosion interupts theyre moment, and seperates them. Superman tells her to get outt athere and now motivated, goes to kick ass!

Back to Jimmy hes at the weapons, but now he has no idea how to use them! Superman meanwhile flies up from behind and underneath NIG AND GRABS HIS BLASTAFF-RIPS it in 2, firing both ends, fending off havoc and blowing nig to the ground, where jimmy activates the weapons and destroysd him! Havoc is the only one left! Pissed, Havoc BLOWS UP the weapons tower and jimmy hurtles out, badly hurt. We find lex, just becoming conscious, and sees whats going on-Supermans back! Uh-oh...

Superman catches havoc off guard-rips his blastaff apart- fight-they smash through buildings-supes going all out and pummeling eachother. Havoc grabs Superman by the cape and tosses him through a building, superman blows havoc across the street-superman wraps him in a phone wire and swing him through buildings flying in midair-collosal action!

Lois is helping Jimmy to his feet when suddenly LEX is there, gun in hand. He's ruined, his weapons failed, his party a disaster and his name ruined. He orders Lois and Jimmy with him, he has sort of sort of surprise, and they enter his building...

Superman sees it, and keeps fighting Havoc. Havoc throws a car at Superman, Superman throws havos thrown train tracks. Havoc then finds a piece of kryptonite from the missles, and goes to stab superman with it as they fly in midiar-a struggle- supermans about to be stabbed with it when he rips havocs uniform-his face explosed as it was in luthors office-the kryptonite incernates him horribly-havioc drops superman, screams and flies away! Shots of Havoc, as he flees out of Earth and into outer space, headed back to brainiac! Hes escaped, but he is gone for now...

Having won the fight, superman turns to find Lois. Everyone goes out and claps for theyre hero, and Superman asks perry white-on scene-where lois went and he says lex took em by gunpoint into his building.

The cops raid the first floor, but superman flies to the top-the 140th floor. Luthors penthouse. No power, its dark. Superman lands, looking for him...when suddenly he attacked by two of luthors men, superman takes em out. He finds Luthor, fully gone crazy, kryptonite in hand, Lois at gunpoint. Jimmy motionless on the floor, Lois looks terrified...theire on the huge balcony where lois and superman first really met...its tense and luthor mouths off, how he runs this city, ect. Superman looks down and sees jimmy eyes open-jimmy WINKS-he is OK-playing dead-superman moves instantly-luthor throws Lois off the edge-Olsen catches her barely as Lex-with kryptonite, tackles superman, punching and kicking ont the catwalks over the dome of his apartment. Luthor beats him ferouscily, hurting him with the krypronite as lois dangles for her life, jimmy barely holding her. Superman eye lasers a gas heating tank and it explodes-Luithor is blown away, landing hard on the pavement knocked out- the force sends Jimmy flying into the rail, hurt and sends lOis FALLING...

Superman dives over the building-people on the street in shock at the explosion from above-and superman dives, catching lois in a incredible arc at the last moment, over the huge crowd...shots of the crowd as they fly away, lois safely in supermans arms as lois says "what did you have to tell me"... and they look into eachothers eyes as they fly out of frame.

shots of masspeople walking metropolis square: 1 week later.

its night a large crowd has gathered outside of city hall where general sutton and few others are at a podium, and announce lex luthor has been arrested and superman is a national hero. Jimmy snaps pics. White finds Lois in the crowd, who informs perry shell be taking her vacation time and she walks away.

shots of lois walking down a deserted street, where she looks in a store window to see mass superman merchandise for sale.

she gets to her car, to find clark-nop glasses, in public ka-el mode we see in the fortress of solitude with lois- standing against it. They talk small, in private. Lois asks "are things going to be diferent?" and clark yes. The 2 kiss breifly but are interupts by Jimmy, and we see clarks vanished...we can now interpret the thingsuperman had to tell lois was that he is clark kent...jimmy gets in lois's car with her, and says "geez miss lanes, its too bad mr, kent is never around to see superman...hes always...hey waita minute...mr kent got here when superman did, hes gone when supermans here...you dont think" but Lois rols her eyes and says "jimmy, not in a million years". Pan back as they drive away, panning up the sky scrappers of metropolis, to see superman flying around the city, around the world, and into the camera.

the end

Superman will return in SUPERMAN II: THE MAN OF STEEL

 

[Excel]

Dream Cast...

Superman: Ryan McPartlin
Lois Lane: Evangeline Lilly
Lex Luthor: Leonardo DiCaprio
Havoc: Joaquin Phoenix
Jor-el: Russel Crowe
Jimmy Olsen: Eric Christian Olsen
Perry White: Dennis Farina
Brainiac: Jason Isaacs

The sequel to this story; SUPERMAN ll: THE MAN OF STEEL, will be out possibly this weekend.

 

[turtlefocker]

You have a stunning vision, this would make a truly fabulous film. I look forward to reading you're sequel. Maybe one day you could be put in the situation to pitch this to WB.

 

[Excel]

Thanks dude!

Id love more feed back...Ill be posting a teaser of the 2nd film in about 1/2 minute...

 

[Excel]

Bump...any more thoughts?

 

[CFE]

Thought?

Lets see Superman II

CFE

 

[Excel]

Im working on it

 

[strikezone89]

awesome excel

 

[Excel]

...bump...

 

[Excel]

HOW MY SUPES WOULD LOOK....

 

[Excel]

bump bump bump it up

 

[Snickers]

nice story

awful costume

 

[Excel]

Nah I like it

 

[The Guard]

Some interesting ideas, not the Superman movie I'd want to see, but some good stuff in places. I like the way Superman doesn't quite discover who he is until later on, and that it's something of a mystery that Lois "uncovers" (a la BATMAN sort of). Some of it though, feels like you just forced in action scenes, but you'll have that. What happened to Braniac? Is he the sequel?

 

[Excel]

Yup, Brainiac is the boss but doesnt have much scnreen time till the 2nd and becomes the primary villain in the 3rd. Think the emporer in the original star wars trilogy with Havoc as Vader.

The script version of this im knee deep in writing plays off a bit differently, but its going good thus far.

 

[Midnight Black]

Nice story!!! I like the suit, although I would add a gold belt similart to a tech utility belt that Batman wears, minus the compartments and make the cod piece red as well.

Other than that I love the idea of Metropolis being a futuristic city cross between Tokyo and New York, with multiple above-ground subways.

That would definitely make the flying scenes really nice with superman flying around the city.

Any time I think of Superman flying around in a futuristic city I think of Fifth Element with the cab chase scene and the multiple levels of cars flying around.

 

[Excel]

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[Daredevil_2003]

I know this is an old thread but it really deserves the bump from the dead. This story idea is absolutely incredible. I'm not a fan of the complete reboot/origin route but this has kinda turned me around on that. I am extremely impressed.

Only issues I have are the identity reveal at the end (I think that should come later), the casting ideas, and the suit...your design/concept for Metropolis is sexy but that suit got beaten with the ugly stick, IMO. Looks more like a Batman costume with Superman colors.

Did you post part 2 yet? The only way I found this gem was through a random google image search lol

 

[Excel]

Thanks broseph. I totally forgot about part 2 Ill post some note from it later.

 

[Daredevil_2003]

Yay! Can't wait!