24 Hour Fan Fiction Competition! All posters read and vote please!

[TEDDY]

People voting for #2 make me sad...someone put a lot of effort into #3 and it is getting beat by lesser competition

Ditto on the effort for submission #1

 

[Spider-Fan]

Well, if early #s are correct, despite how awesome a Street Fighter fanfic I wrote, my team might may fail.


But since I actually care about how people perceived my writing and not just vote count, would somebody please do as Matt says? If you don't like it, feel free to trash it. But I work too hard on this to just hear some self-congragulatory bull-spit.



Now then, with that out of the way, on to the other teams' submissions:


Submission 2: The idea behind your team's fanfic was clever. This is a chatboard, so making a fanfic that actually uses IMchats is a rather interesting take on the fanfic. Likewise, doing it that way, I believe (and feel free to correct me on this) all the members of the team contributed to the project. Thus, win or lose, you did it as a team.

Now, whoever was in charge of the color coding of your submission should be shot! I don't mind certain text being changed color-wise to signal importance or a change or however one decides to use it, but if you do decide to take attempt that make sure to use a color tint that's LEGIBLE AND EASY ON THE EYES!!! You used yellow on your stories intro... yellow. Really? Do you want people to see this thing? I'm NOT being sarcastic when I say that: NOBODY can read that unless they highlight it. It honestly was a struggle to read.


Submission #3: Not too bad. Not too bad at all. Your fanfic is nicely done. Like yours trully, you seem to have basically taken the Street Fighter universe and recast the characters using the players of the game. (Guess great minds think alike) It might not have possed the details of some submissions, but that's okay: screenplays don't need to be full of detail. Not saying that as a bad thing, far from it. Despite the format I wrote my fanfic in, I actually prefer reading the screenplay format over the novel format. It's fast and easy to read (which I needed after writing all day yesterday). Plus, sometimes less detail is a good thing. If a cat crosses my path in the story, I would rather read "Kitty passes by" than read a whole paragraph describing it's appearance. I know what a cat looks like!

I plan on reading the other two submissions pretty soon TEDDY, and since I too care what people think of my writing and I understand how you feel, I definately will give you a detailed critique (as I will Sub #2) when I do.

I thank you for commenting on ours though. I don't have the patience for novel writing, and movies is where I want to be anyway, so I think visually when I write.

 

[ComicChick]

thanks for the critique Teddy. i plan on reading the other fics tomorrow while i'm supposed to be "working"

as for the yellow, i'm on the dick dynamite skin so i thought nothing of it at the time, but it is an homage to the intro of star wars

 

[TEDDY]

I plan on reading the other two submissions pretty soon TEDDY, and since I too care what people think of my writing and I understand how you feel, I definately will give you a detailed critique (as I will Sub #2) when I do.

I thank you for commenting on ours though. I don't have the patience for novel writing, and movies is where I want to be anyway, so I think visually when I write.

That's pretty much my sentiment on the matter too. I don't know how I wrote all that. I think it's the combination of a limited schedule and a love for Street Fighter. Especially Street Fighter 2 (Both the game and the animated movie. The animated series was pretty good too.)

 

[TEDDY]

thanks for the critique Teddy. i plan on reading the other fics tomorrow while i'm supposed to be "working"

as for the yellow, i'm on the dick dynamite skin so i thought nothing of it at the time, but it is an homage to the intro of star wars

I figured. Think that was my other beef with it. Star Wars and Street Fighter: together. Boggles the fanboy mind(would that mean Bison's Psycho Powers are actually the dark side of the force.) But it was a brave effort. Kudos to you.

 

[Spider-Fan]

I just finished Entry #1.

This was rather good. It kept my attention pretty much throughout, and despite the characters not saying or doing much, it hinted at past relations well and I got a feel for your characters. I think the odd problems facing each character of Shadaloo could have been explained a little further. I get they were quirky, but some of their issues made little sense. However, loved Bison, loved your pacing, and liked the story a lot.

Good job TEDDY

 

[Spider-Fan]

Just finished Sub #2.

I found this much harder to read than submission #1. The idea is very original, and I give you points for that. However, the Star Wars beginning felt off for a SF themed game, and the story dragged at some points. The posting convos thing was a cool idea, but some of the text colors gave me a headache. The battle idea was interesting, but really only 1 game had great detail. The others I feel were glossed over too much. Especially considering this is where the action of the piece is.

Overall, full of good ideas, but I think more time on it could have made the product and the ideas closer. No offense

 

[Spider-Fan]

I'd like to throw a shout out to those voting for Fan Fic #3. You guys are awesome, and we're humbled to have your vote

 

[Ahura Mazda]

Number 3 is fantastic, I am surprised it does not have more votes.

 

[Spider-Fan]

That's pretty much my sentiment on the matter too. I don't know how I wrote all that. I think it's the combination of a limited schedule and a love for Street Fighter. Especially Street Fighter 2 (Both the game and the animated movie. The animated series was pretty good too.)

I was never huge into Street Fighter, so I kind of took what little I know, threw in some characteristics of various hypsters, and just wrote something I liked. I wanted to have a story in progress, much like this game has been going on, and I wanted to leave everyone at the highest point of action, since the game is far from over.

 

[Star]

To be honest (and I'm not just saying this) I think that the 3rd one is the weakest. I think that you have a good story and excellent use of the characters, but it would be a way stronger fanfiction if it had been written in story format as opposed to script. I will say the same thing about my teams because as much as I enjoy the story we came up with it is in a strange format.

My favourite, based on writing style, and how much I liked the story would probably be #1. Shocked it's only got 7 votes.

 

[Spider-Fan]

To be honest (and I'm not just saying this) I think that the 3rd one is the weakest. I think that you have a good story and excellent use of the characters, but it would be a way stronger fanfiction if it had been written in story format as opposed to script. I will say the same thing about my teams because as much as I enjoy the story we came up with it is in a strange format.

My favourite, based on writing style, and how much I liked the story would probably be #1. Shocked it's only got 7 votes.

How would it have been stronger out of script format?

Not singling you out or trying to discredit you. I want honest opinions.

 

[Star]

I just prefer to read a fanfiction that would say

Standing in front of Myu, Marx Bison gazed calculatedly at him. "You’re unique, Myu. Unlike the other disciples of Gouvana, you constantly at war with a force of darkness within yourself. You can feel it inside you every second. Waiting to be released. I’m going to release it for you."

Myu's face dropped with worry. "You don't mean.."

As opposed to :

Marx Bison stands in front of Myu.

MARX BISON
You’re unique, Myu. Unlike the other disciples of Gouvana, you constantly at war with a force of darkness within yourself. You can feel it inside you every second. Waiting to be released. I’m going to release it for you.

Myu gets a worried expression.



Honestly it's really just personal preference. I don't think I would have written my teams fanfiction in the format it is if I had been involved with it, but I do still enjoy all three fics and find them ALL to be quite well written... so my preference really comes down to format.

 

[Spider-Fan]

I just prefer to read a fanfiction that would say

Standing in front of Myu, Marx Bison gazed calculatedly at him. "You’re unique, Myu. Unlike the other disciples of Gouvana, you constantly at war with a force of darkness within yourself. You can feel it inside you every second. Waiting to be released. I’m going to release it for you."

Myu's face dropped with worry. "You don't mean.."

As opposed to :

Marx Bison stands in front of Myu.

MARX BISON
You’re unique, Myu. Unlike the other disciples of Gouvana, you constantly at war with a force of darkness within yourself. You can feel it inside you every second. Waiting to be released. I’m going to release it for you.

Myu gets a worried expression.



Honestly it's really just personal preference. I don't think I would have written my teams fanfiction in the format it is if I had been involved with it, but I do still enjoy all three fics and find them ALL to be quite well written... so my preference really comes down to format.

Most of why I chose script format is because I want to get better with the format, since I am going to film school starting in September. I have and will always be a movie guy, so I kind of picture things this way when I imagine them.

 

[Watson]

Re: the colours. I use the black background for the Hype, so none of the colours were a problem for me to read. That said, I should have considered that other folks use other skins and may have had a hard time with it. I've seen them do the same thing in the RPG forums, and I thought it would be cool

I'll post some thoughts on the other two a bit later in the day.

 

[Marx]

To be honest (and I'm not just saying this) I think that the 3rd one is the weakest. I think that you have a good story and excellent use of the characters, but it would be a way stronger fanfiction if it had been written in story format as opposed to script. I will say the same thing about my teams because as much as I enjoy the story we came up with it is in a strange format.

My favourite, based on writing style, and how much I liked the story would probably be #1. Shocked it's only got 7 votes.

You're not the only one surprised.

 

[Spider-Fan]

I want to give a brief shoutout to one group in particular that sadly is going unnoticed. To all you actually reading the fics, whether you voted for submission 1, 2, or 3, thank you for taking the time to read my work. I'm sure I echo the sentiments of all the other writers on these submissions in saying that.

I am however sad that you guys are not deciding this contest, and that blind voting is.

 

[TEDDY]

To be honest (and I'm not just saying this) I think that the 3rd one is the weakest. I think that you have a good story and excellent use of the characters, but it would be a way stronger fanfiction if it had been written in story format as opposed to script. I will say the same thing about my teams because as much as I enjoy the story we came up with it is in a strange format.

My favourite, based on writing style, and how much I liked the story would probably be #1. Shocked it's only got 7 votes.

Wait, does that count as a vote for us?

 

[Star]

Maybe I would've if it didn't count for 20

 

[Spider-Fan]

I almost want our team members to vote so it comes down to the judges and not blind voters. Meaning net votes in spots to make the scores even.

I'd be willing to make a gentleman's agreement to not solicite votes if you guys do too.

 

[Hunter Rider]

Well I have just finished reading all three and I have to say I appreciate the effort that went into them all having written a few in my time. I found each enjoyable so that it never felt a chore to read through.

Well done everyone.

 

[Spider-Fan]

Can we expect a more in detail review Hunter? I would love to hear your thoughts on all 3 entries

 

[ComicChick]

Seeing as how hunter is a judge, I'm sure we'll be getting feedback (I hope). Can't wait to see it.

 

[Spider-Fan]

Hunter and Lobo I guessed were 2...I wonder who #3 is.

 

[Marx]

I almost want our team members to vote so it comes down to the judges and not blind voters. Meaning net votes in spots to make the scores even.

I'd be willing to make a gentleman's agreement to not solicite votes if you guys do too.

So far as I know, Team Shadaloo has not been soliciting votes.