5 page HULK comic

[imagine12]

Hey guys and gals, just thought i'd post this 5 page story which i'm sending to Marvel as an application to see what you all thought. Any comments would be helpful, thx!

 

[imagine12]

page 2

 

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page 3

 

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page 4

 

[imagine12]

page 5, sorry for the poor resolution on this one.

 

[EdRyder]

Beautiful work
Page one panel 3 is outstanding,as well as panel 4

Panel 1 isnt doing much to showcase what you are clearly capable of.I would 86 it entirely


Edit,Res isnt so bad for a digi cam

 

[dchisholm]

my eye is having a hard time following page 5--it isn't totally clear to me what's happening.

should the panels in the middle be read left to right, or is he landing? what is happening in the last panel?
it seems unnecessarily awkward...

another thing is it seems like it would be difficult to ink...

that said, they look totally amazing...beautiful work.

 

[J. J. Jameson]

This is AWESOME! I could completely follow what was going on and the pencils are absolutely beautiful!

Great art, good storytelling. Please keep us posted on how the submission goes!

 

[MadMaximus]

That's funny, I'm being paid to do an 8 page Hulk story. Your storytelling is fantastic.

 

[Jack Rabbit]

You could try not being so awesome. You might intimidate them.

Fan****ingtastic work.

 

[spiderfan08]

words cant describe how awesome this is! the detail is fantastic! page 4- body pose from above..PERFECT!!! keep it up man!

 

[keith_v]

Seriously awesome work! Much smoother and far more coherent than a lot of the stuff Marvel has been putting out lately. The only thing I noticed that bothered me was the similarities of Hulk's facial features to that of the ******ed Matt Damon puppet in Team America. But maybe that's just me.

Overall, I'd give it a 9.5/10.

And good luck!

 

[Shuley]

Marvel doesn't like splash pages since they don't tell a story...Marvel wants 5 pages or so of sequential art,not pin ups,splash pages ect...Let me break this down a little bit for you...

Page 1.....Use boarders,Jim Lee gets away without using boarders since he's the richest guy in comics.

Page 2 1/2 splash,I'm not really getting a clear picture of where the Hulk is, Just because you know where he is, doesn't mean the reader knows,Panel close up on Hulk's face is nice but ears are off anatomy wise.

Page 3....Again a Splash Marvel doesn't wanna see.

Page 4....In the 1st panel he's looking at the villain face to face,then in the (again the 1/2 splash) he's looking up at him (fix hulk's right hand) Then he's jumping up at him.

Page 5 (grr..another 1/2 splash) Panels 2,3 and 4 read from left to right...Last time I checked,people have been reading comics from right to left,you have it going in the opposite direction. (again use boarders) Panels 5-8 aren't smooth flowing and the camera angles are horrible.

On the positive side, I like your style and think you have potential,Just work on your storytelling and your anatomy a bit.

 

[Mattchew]

sick as hell! im obsessed! get a SCANNER so we can truly appreciate the brilliance of whats going on here.

 

[Mee]

Great work.

 

[HULKFish]

Excellent art work! IMO HULK's upper-body proportions are a little small but besides that I'd say VERY good!

 

[Shuley]

sick as hell! im obsessed! get a SCANNER so we can truly appreciate the brilliance of whats going on here.

what brilliance?

 

[EdRyder]

Marvel doesn't like splash pages since they don't tell a story...Marvel wants 5 pages or so of sequential art,not pin ups,splash pages ect...Let me break this down a little bit for you...

Page 1.....Use boarders,Jim Lee gets away without using boarders since he's the richest guy in comics.

Page 2 1/2 splash,I'm not really getting a clear picture of where the Hulk is, Just because you know where he is, doesn't mean the reader knows,Panel close up on Hulk's face is nice but ears are off anatomy wise.

Page 3....Again a Splash Marvel doesn't wanna see.

Page 4....In the 1st panel he's looking at the villain face to face,then in the (again the 1/2 splash) he's looking up at him (fix hulk's right hand) Then he's jumping up at him.

Page 5 (grr..another 1/2 splash) Panels 2,3 and 4 read from left to right...Last time I checked,people have been reading comics from right to left,you have it going in the opposite direction. (again use boarders) Panels 5-8 aren't smooth flowing and the camera angles are horrible.

On the positive side, I like your style and think you have potential,Just work on your storytelling and your anatomy a bit.

Marvel doesnt want PIN UPS
Any half or whole splashes that are a part of your 5 page sequential submission are fine

 

[imagine12]

Lol Shuley so what ur saying is i'm disfigured in every part of my body but i've got pretty eyes, i think i'll go shoot myself . Well everyone is entitled to their opinion i suppose and i can only take any criticism with a grain of salt so thnx.

However splash pages are a necessay part of any story, especially when scale comes into play, such as the leaders quadraped, it's knowing when to use them that will be picked out of Marvels critical eye. A splash can and is used often times too much by amatuers, and while i'm no pro by any means, i can imagine Marvel has seen their fair share of poorly placed splash pages which would lead them to be extremely rigid on how much they should be used.

The leader's ship being thrown down i thought was a necessary image to be shown prominantly, not something i would limit to a tiny panel, because u want it in your face, as well as the hulks stare upwards, it has to hit u hard, however i could see using a smaller panel for that one, id go either way.

If you could tell me why the camera angles were "horrible" on page five at the bottom i'd always be open to 'constructive' criticism though i can not improve them if all i have to work off is negative feedback. And hey if someone want to call it brilliant lol, i'm really flattered u made my day, but shuley, that's their opinion, and your arguments are only legitimate if u allow for others as well.

Thanks everyone for your thoughts so far, i'm really flattered!

 

[dchisholm]

haha i can just see it:

imagine12- so, what did you think of my pages?

marvel- it's great stuff....but...

imagine12-???

marvel-...the ears on page two weren't anatomically correct...sorry, buddy.


dude, your stuff is really good. best of luck!

 

[MadMaximus]

I read Marvel's submission guidlines, as well as Dark Horse and Top Cow, and have been critiqued in person by Bob Shrek. Splash pages are fine if they enhance the story going on. The submission portfolios don't want to see pin up art, since you're looking to be hired to draw stories, they want to see that. Hell, the piece I'm drawing up now, is unfortunately written on the poor side, with exactly 7 panels a page, and each one he thinks is going to be a spash. I'm dong what I can to cram it in, because I know that in the business, I'm not going to have the luxury of picking the scripts to choose from. And if I make it interesting to look at, I feel successful. And keeping things inside borders all the time makes for a VERY dull visual story. I don't see the problem with cutting off the borders and expanding the scope.

Your storytelling is perfectly fine, Imagine12. I do have some problems with Hulk's face, "maaaatt daaaamon" does come to mind, lol

 

[Mrh7448]

Page 1:

I think that Panel 1 is a little weak. The proportions seem off to me, but that could just be because it's a digital pic and not scan.

Page 2.
Nice establishing shot, good for the setting. The thing that throws me on this page is the way panel 2 and 3 is blended that there is no actual break between the two and with the panel of Hulk's face just kind of floating there.
I'm not too sure what he's doing there, did he hear a noise behind him?

Page 3.

Nice page. The bird's eye view is a nice touch, definitely something they'll want to see you can do. It presents the leader in his robot ready to do some battle it out.

Page 4:

Panel 1 looks nice but doesn't really fit. THey aren't really facing directly at each other. You might want to consider throwing a panel break between the two. It'll give the impression you are looking for without making it seem they are really face to face.

I get what's going on the rest of this but I wouldn't mind seeing it a little more dynamic. I would prefer to see more focus dedicated to the action rather than to the Hulk looking and pointing.

Page 4

Not Bad. I feel like panel 2-4 should be reversed. Going from a distant shot to the close so it implies he's coming down onto Leader.
The last 2 Panels I'm not sure what's happened. Is that Hulk's leg on the last panel? You might want to consider making it a little more discernible that Hulk has walked away.

Overall you drawing abilities are very strong, the diversity in doing different angles and different shots show you have a good handle on things. I think overall it's just some tweaking in the storytelling that needs a bit of work.
It's hard to tell because it is a pic and not a scan but it looks like there is some subtle shading more blending that cross hatching which doesn't work to great for inkers. This is something too keep in mind that someone else is going to be inking your working so blending your shades together isn't a good way to go.

Very nice work though and definitely of excellent quality. Good luck!

 

[Shuley]

Hey look, ya know you take some of my constructive critisim or leave it,you ask for opinions and I gave you mine,I'm only here to help.If your going to get bent out of shape about it,then how are you going to handle rejection from Marvel? If you hand this to Marvel,your not going to get a job.I know you don't wanna hear that.No, I'm not saying your horribly disfigured but yes,people in real life actually have features that don't line up and that's the differance between someone who is good looking and someone who isn't,for example..said person's nose leans tad to the left,while the good looking person's is perfectly straight,or thier eyes are lop sided (stallone) while a good looking person's eyes are perfectly even.You don't need perfect anatomy to get a drawing job,but you do need excellent storytelling skills.

 

[EdRyder]

Page 4

Not Bad. I feel like panel 2-4 should be reversed. Going from a distant shot to the close so it implies he's coming down onto Leader.

Shuley pointed out the same thing,and I can see where your both coming from.Imagine12-I can also see what you intended,The POV is the Leaders and Hulk gets smaller the higher hes jumping.And it works for me,I dont think it needs to be "mirrored".But,You could have done a few things to convey that better.In the future something in the background would enhance that and give it the scale you were looking for.

Again I have to repeat and agree that panel 1 just doesnt work.I know that its tough for the artist to be that critical on himself.But from the readers stance,It isnt adding anything to the story-Another thing to keep in mind for the future

Now -are the chances good you will never hear a thing from Marvel this time?-Sure
That shouldnt be taken as reflecting on your work!-KEEP SUBMITTING SEQUENTIALS.Overall I think this submission showcases that you have solid storytelling ability.There arent ANY rules about the amount of submissions you are allowed.
As long as you follow the guidelines.I'm more than sure things are going to work out for you

 

[Super Dooper]

Pretty bad ass lol, well drawn.