Batman & Superman Unite..

[Mr. Superhero]

I'm putting together one of my greatest masterpieces yet - Batman & Superman, both united and battling crime. I haven't yet concluded the plot, but I'm currently working on it.

- Bruce and Clark don't know each other yet.
- Alfred, Lucius, The Joker, Twoface and even Robin are all important somewhere in the story.
- The Joker has a scene with Superman that, here i'm just being arrogant as ****, would be classic on the big screen.
- To keep up with his playboy image, Bruce tries hooking up with the most famous girl of Metropolis: Lois Lane.
- At one point, Batman WILL have kryptonite
- Someone dangerous will uncover the secret identity of one of the heroes

I don't want to say too much since I haven't even really put it all on paper yet, it's all in my head.

Here's the teaser poster, just for the fun of it...

THEY UNITE
2006​

 

[The Shape]

Go for it.


But have you seen the World's Finest fan film, by the dude who made Batman: Dead End? It sounds similar.

 

[Mr. Superhero]

Nope, I haven't seen the fan film. Link?

 

[Mr. Superhero]

[OPENING CREDITS]

[CUT TO THUG POINTING GUN AT BANK ASSISTANT WHO IS LOADING BAG WITH MONEY]

THUG - C'mon, hurry up!

[BANK ASSISTANT HURRIES UP]

THUG #2 - We almost there, boss?

[LIGHT FLICKERS]

THUG - Goddamnit!

[THUG WHACKS BANK ASSISTANT ON HEAD WITH GUN, CAUSING BANK ASSISTANT TO GO UNCOUNSCIOUS]

[THUG BEGINS TO LOAD BAG]

THUG - I hate bank assistants...

[LIGHT BLOWS]

THUG #2 - What 'da hell was that?

[THUGS POINT GUNS UP TO DARKENED CEILING]

THUG #3 - I can't see a thing...

[SOMETHING SMASHES]

THUG #4 - Somebody's here...

[THUG CONTINUES TO EAGERLY LOAD BAG]

THUG #3 - Boss... erm, there's somebody~

[OBJECT FALLS TO FLOOR]

THUG #3 - What was that?

[THUG #3 PICKS UP OBJECT]

THUG #2 - What is it?

THUG #3 - I don't know... I can't see...

[THUG #3 RUBS AROUND SYMBOL]

THUG #3 - It feels like a Bat...

THUG #4 - [BREATHING HEAVILY] A Bat?

THUG #3 - Yeah...

THUG #2 - Oh no, that's not good...

[THUGS GROUP]

[SOMETHING THUDS]

THUG #4 - Er... boss? Have you almost loaded?

THUG - No! Do you know how much money I have to load?

[BATMAN DROPS IN MIDDLE OF THUGS. HE HANDS OUT MARTIAL ART MENEUVAR'S ON THE THUGS]

[THUGS CLATTER TO FLOOR]

THUG - Done!

[NO RESPONSE]

THUG - You guys?

[NO RESPONSE]

THUG - Hey, you guys!? I ain't playing games...

[NO RESPONSE]

[DARK FIGURE APPEARS]

THUG - What 'da hell...?

[THUG POINTS GUN]

THUG - What are you...?

[DARK FIGURE WALKS FORWARD]

THUG - Hey, don't come any closer!

[DARK FIGURE CONTINUES TO WALK FORWARD]

THUG - I'll shoot...

[DARK FIGURE WALKS FORWARD]

THUG - Your choice...

[THUG SHOOTS]

[DARK FIGURE FALLS TO GROUND]

[THUG LAUGHS. PICKS UP BAG AND PREPARES TO LEAVE BANK]

[BATMAN STANDS UP]

[BATMAN GRABS THUG'S THROAT AND HOLDS HIM IN THE AIR]

THUG - Argh!...Please, don't hurt me!

BATMAN - I'm your worst nightmare! - Time to pay the penalty.

[BATMAN SLAMS THUG INTO FLOOR]

[THUG IS UNCOUNSCIOUS]

[BATMAN PRESSES THE ALARM BUTTON]

[CUT TO COP CARS PULLING UP OUTSIDE BANK. GORDON EXITS A COP CAR]

GORDON - Take positions! We don't know who's in there...

[CUT TO GORDON ENTERING BANK WITH FLASH LIGHT IN HAND. IN THE OTHER HAND IS A GUN]

GORDON - Hello?

[GORDON POINTS GUN AROUND ROOM]

GORDON - Anybody here?

[GORDON WANDERS FLASHLIGHT. HE NOTICES BODIES ON THE GROUND]

GORDON - What the...

[GORDON PICKS UP VOICE MIMIC]

GORDON - It's safe to come in, their taken care of...

[GORDON WALKS OVER TO UNCONSCIOUS THUG]

[COPS ENTER]

COP - Sir! What happened here?

GORDON - I don't know.

COP - Are they dead?

[GORDON CHECKS PULSE OF THUG]

GORDON - Nope, just out cold.

COP #2 - What could've done this?

[GORDON WANDERS FLASHLIGHT AROUND ROOM. HE NOTICES THE SMALL BAT SYMBOL]

[GORDON WALKS OVER AND PICKS UP SYMBOL]

GORDON - [LAUGHS GENTLY] I have absolutely no idea...

[CUT TO BATMAN STOOD ON TOP OF BUILDING. WIND BLOWS CAPE]

[END SCENE]

 

[Kevin Roegele]

I'm putting together one of my greatest masterpieces yet - Batman & Superman, both united and battling crime. I haven't yet concluded the plot, but I'm currently working on it.

- Bruce and Clark don't know each other yet.
- Alfred, Lucius, The Joker, Twoface and even Robin are all important somewhere in the story.
- The Joker has a scene with Superman that, here i'm just being arrogant as ****, would be classic on the big screen.
- To keep up with his playboy image, Bruce tries hooking up with the most famous girl of Metropolis: Lois Lane.
- At one point, Batman WILL have kryptonite
- Someone dangerous will uncover the secret identity of one of the heroes

I'm sure it will be great, but just from your notes, it sounds like every other Bats/Supes crossover.

 

[eXperiment]

very cool

 

[Mr. Superhero]

very cool

Thanks.

Expect more tomorrow.

 

[Mr. Superhero]

[cut to daily planet. lois searches through her desk]

lois : "clark, have you collected that file i ordered?"

[clark looks like he's forgotten something]

clark : "i... erm... no, i must have forgot."

lois : "clark!"

clark : "i'm- i'm sorry..."

lois : "god, it's okay.."

[lois storms in perry's office]

[meanewhile, jimmy walks over to clark]

jimmy : "so she's pretty upset, huh?"

clark : "yeah..."

[jimmy pats clark on the back]

jimmy : "must try harder..."

[clark's eyebrows raise]

clark : "what?"

jimmy : "you! you must try harder."

clark : "with what?"

jimmy : "with... her..."

clark : "who?"

jimmy : "you know..."

[jimmy points into perry's office. clark looks into the direction of jimmy's finger]

clark : "oh... her!"

jimmy : "yes.... her! when are you gonna' ask her out for a date?"

clark : "a date?... i've.. never really thought about it."

jimmy : "you've not...? god.. you must be the only guy in metropolis who hasn't."

clark : "have you?"

jimmy : "coarse, man! but i think she's got a soft spot for you..."

clark : "nah..."

[lois finally exits perry's office]

jimmy : "look, here she is... here's your chance..."

clark : [whispers] "chance...?"

lois : "hey, jimmy."

jimmy : "hi, lois."

[jimmy scratches his neck mysteriously]

[lois looks at jimmy to clark]

lois : "....what?"

clark - jimmy : [together] "nothing."

[clark and jimmy look at each other]

lois : "...right, well... i've got some work to catch up with, so... i'm gonna have to dash."

clark : "okay.."

[lois leaves]

jimmy : "there was your chance! did you see the way she looked at you?!"

clark : "i'd rather have a friendly relationship with lois... i don't think i'm the right guy for her..."

jimmy : "then you must be blind!"

[end scene]

 

[The Shape]

Nope, I haven't seen the fan film. Link?

http://youtube.com/watch?v=67IU799GIL4

 

[Mr. Superhero]

http://youtube.com/watch?v=67IU799GIL4

That's some good ****, but mine's going to be a lot different.

Trust me. .. I'm a genius.

 

[rubinator]

that will be cool like the cartoon movie worlds finest,bats and sups unote to stop the united joker and lex

 

[jimthecomicguy]

Good luck man.

So whats the plan? Are you shooting this or just writing it.

(If you are shooting, I would love to know you are gonna do the flight stuff)

A lot of haters on these board...dont let them get you down!

 

[Mr. Superhero]

No, just writing it.

 

[Some_Dude]

you should get somebody to shoot

 

[Kevin Roegele]

[cut to daily planet. lois searches through her desk]

lois : "clark, have you collected that file i ordered?"

[clark looks like he's forgotten something]

clark : "i... erm... no, i must have forgot."

lois : "clark!"

clark : "i'm- i'm sorry..."

lois : "god, it's okay.."

[lois storms in perry's office]

[meanewhile, jimmy walks over to clark]

jimmy : "so she's pretty upset, huh?"

clark : "yeah..."

[jimmy pats clark on the back]

jimmy : "must try harder..."

[clark's eyebrows raise]

clark : "what?"

jimmy : "you! you must try harder."

clark : "with what?"

jimmy : "with... her..."

clark : "who?"

jimmy : "you know..."

[jimmy points into perry's office. clark looks into the direction of jimmy's finger]

clark : "oh... her!"

jimmy : "yes.... her! when are you gonna' ask her out for a date?"

clark : "a date?... i've.. never really thought about it."

jimmy : "you've not...? god.. you must be the only guy in metropolis who hasn't."

clark : "have you?"

jimmy : "coarse, man! but i think she's got a soft spot for you..."

clark : "nah..."

[lois finally exits perry's office]

jimmy : "look, here she is... here's your chance..."

clark : [whispers] "chance...?"

lois : "hey, jimmy."

jimmy : "hi, lois."

[jimmy scratches his neck mysteriously]

[lois looks at jimmy to clark]

lois : "....what?"

clark - jimmy : [together] "nothing."

[clark and jimmy look at each other]

lois : "...right, well... i've got some work to catch up with, so... i'm gonna have to dash."

clark : "okay.."

[lois leaves]

jimmy : "there was your chance! did you see the way she looked at you?!"

clark : "i'd rather have a friendly relationship with lois... i don't think i'm the right guy for her..."

jimmy : "then you must be blind!"

[end scene]

Mr Superhero, you don't need speech marks in a script. Also, every sentence should begin with a capital letter.........I can't believe I'm telling you this....

 

[Mr. Superhero]

Firstly, it's not a script - It's just the easiest way of setting a story out, in my opinion.

Secondly, I couldn't be arsed with the capital letters - But I'll make sure I include them in the future, just for you.

 

[Kevin Roegele]

Firstly, it's not a script - It's just the easiest way of setting a story out, in my opinion.

Secondly, I couldn't be arsed with the capital letters - But I'll make sure I include them in the future, just for you.

If you want people to read your work, write it properly. Nine out of ten people will give up immedietly if they see that you can't be bothered to type properly. If you can't put the effort in, why should they?

 

[Mr. Superhero]

If you want people to read your work, write it properly. Nine out of ten people will give up immedietly if they see that you can't be bothered to type properly. If you can't put the effort in, why should they?

It's a bunch of capital letters... you seem to be only one crying about it.

If you don't like it - Don't read it!

 

[TKing]

I like it, capital letters or none! Can't wait to read more.

 

[The Shape]

It's a bunch of capital letters... you seem to be only one crying about it.

If you don't like it - Don't read it!

Well, the man does have a point about your writing...

 

[Pyro Max]

It's a bunch of capital letters... you seem to be only one crying about it.

If you don't like it - Don't read it!

If you don't want anyones opinion why are you posting it here?

 

[TKing]

If you don't want anyones opinion why are you posting it here?

Pointing out that someone has forgotten capital letters is not an opinion. If he wanted a grammar lesson, he'd ask for one.