My Star Wars Prequel Re-write Story Outline

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it is brilliant.......Its just a shame real trillogy wasnt like that
 
A little more cursing than I like in my family movies, but some really solid changes. I like the theme of basing each film on a classic film. I don't think recasting a brilliant actress like Natalie Portman is very insightful. We've seen her do every other part on the planet well, so it really does seem logical that the problem with Padme lay with the director and writer.

I like the idea of reducing Jedi's numbers. Down to the dozens with only 7 appearing in the film is relatively brilliant, and a great way to introduce the universe. I love it.

Obviously the MMA reference were over my head, but overall, it's a very slick, very nice treatment.
 
Liked most things, but i kind of liked Anakin having a mother and in the 2nd film finding her during her brief moments before her death
 
Wow, I figured SHH members would be the most harsh toward my ideas of these three prequel remakes, so I am very happy to see some positive responses! thanks a lot for you three for checking it out and giving an honest opinion!!! Thanks Red Hood, Dr.Cosmic and Lord for taking the time out of your day for it.
 
No problem, sorry to give some negative criticism XD but i think i prefer the idea of the Clone wars in the movies, you know, with them being good guys and not just another army of evil humans
 
I dont mind negative criticism, I'm interested in exposing my stories to collect a feel of what people do or dont like and how they honestly feel about the Lucas' current prequels. I can always re-write another draft of an outline.

Star Wars seems to be popular due to Blu Ray (and the controversial changes) and I figured its a good time to release my ideas / pitch of a remake of the Prequels.
 
From your plot with Palpatine being able to cure people i had this idea that instead of making already a politician they could take some aspects from Grigory Rasputin and make him appear out of nowhere with that ability.
Then he gains the trust of the royal family (Padme) and slowlly rises to power with the politics.
What do you think?
 
I like you're ideas but i've always viewed it differently. the original trilogy was like world war II in space, the empire was much like the nazis and the rebels were kind of like the allies. So wouldn't the first trilogy be like world war I in space? you know a grand war but one that doesn't have as clear of villains (lets be real when you think back to world war I we don't have hitler like we do for the second world war.)

I used to think of the clone wars kind like World War I a huge galactic event that, like WWI, that leaves the once great republic in ruins. So start episode I off near the end of the war and have it be resolved at the end.

Also in episode I you have to establish owen lars and anakin skywalker. in a New Hope it's evident that Anakin and Owen were very close. Owen believes Anakins sense of adventure and longing for excitement lead him to his fate as Darth Vader. You need to establish their friendship and the effects of him leaving to be a Jedi ("to follow old Obi-Wan on some damn fool idealistic crusade" as Kenobi recounted in ANH)

Rather than making Palpatine some great politician who's controlling everything in the galaxy, make him like Hitler. Hitler came to power by rallying the broken spirits of the Germans blaming all their problems on the Jews. Just make the emperor this evil figure who rallied the spirits of the broken republic behind his ideals of a new safer empire.

Anakin has to fall in the second film, I don't mean full out slaughter everyone like in revenge of the sith, but begin his loss of humanity. In Empire Luke didn't finish his training and went after Vader having taken the quick and easy path, for this he loses his hand and becomes part machine, and beginning his transformation into his father. Anakin should face Palpatine, who forces him to use his anger to fight and shows him the power the darkside has can give him (the same way he showed jedi luke he could beat vader if he used his anger and hate). Anakin still tries to strike him down but Palpatine severs his arm. Then offers him the chance to rule the galaxy with him. Anakin refuses but the seed have been planted and like a drug he uses his hate and more of his humanity. Like your typical junkie he goes back to his dealer (palpatine and gives in, a slave to the darkside).

Episode III has to be the last chapter in the fall of Skywalker, explaining all the aftermath. Kenobi is his close friend and sees what he's doing, the two speak a great deal of times, Obi-Wan tries to intervene show him the error in his ways. Anakin just slips more and more. Finally Anakin being by this point more machine than man, having all robotic limbs and losing his humanity, declares Anakin Skywalker dead and Darth Vader being born. Obi-Wan loses hope for his former student and friend and battles him ultimately completing the transformation by encaging him in his black armor.

The final part needs to be the children and the mother. Vader obviously is awhere Leia is pregnant and knows he is expecting a son. Obi-Wan hides Luke away on Tatooine. Bail Orgona takes Leia and her mother in. Her mother doesn't have to be someone important, she can just be an average joe. She needs to go away saddened at what her lover has become and fear for the safety of herself and her daughter. Much like a woman with a husband who's an abusive addict fears for herself and her children. The love is still there, she just knows the man she feels it for is not.

this story flows a lot better than then current prequels. It has the same tone as the Originals and there isn't this whole mysterious puppet master like in the current prequels. It's called Star Wars for a reason, it's not about politics, the political aspects take place off camera and we spend our time getting to know our heroes and our villains.
 
A sorcerer/mad scientist who serves the Dark Side has somehow found out the secret of cloning, and makes clones of several murdered Jedi Knights to lead enslaved worlds in an insurrection against the Republic. Jedi Knights are as strong as superheroes in the Galaxy and strong enought to control their own army. They will be stormtroopers flying in Star Destroyers. In response, the real Jedi Knights and the Galactic Senate form a volunteer army to combat the invaders. The sorcerer is after one of the rare treasures of the Jedi Knights, the Kaiber crystal. Because of it's peaceful nature, care has been given to King Bail Organa of Alderaan to guard over it. The crystal, is an unlimited fuel source for a fleet of ships and can make a Force wielder almost invincible. This conflict will become known as the Clone Wars.

Upon hearing of the war's start, a seventeen year old refugee on the backwater world of Tatooine named Anakin Skywalker runs away from his brother Owen's farm to join the Galactic Star Fleet. Both of his parents were killed by the sorcerer Mandolorian in a massacre that nearly anihilated the agricultural world where he and Owen once lived. He wishes to avenge their deaths and is especially fond of the stories of a certain thirty-five year old general named Ben Kenobi who is the youngest in his ranks.

After several years of training, Anakin becomes quite a skilled pilot and one of his maneuvers saves Alderaan from invasion by the Jedi clones who killed his parents. For his bravery, he is recognized by King Bail Organa and General Ben "Obi-Wan" Kenobi in a ceremony. General Kenobi notices how strong Anakin is in the Force and takes him on as his apprentice to help him achieve his goal of winning the war. Yoda would've advised against it because Anakin was too bitter and angry, and being a general in war Obi-Wan could not devote all the time he needed to to train his apprentice. The two retrace the path of the clone fleet to a top secret cloning facility in the Outer Rim where and the secret behind the mystery Jedi is revealed.

By the second film, the war is going badly for the Republic, despite the destruction of the clone facility at the hands of General Kenobi and Anakin. More worlds are captured and a massive invasion overruns the Republic. Anakin has married the senator of Alderaan, who would have appeared in the first film, and at the time of their honeymoon, she kidnapped by the cloned Jedi general. The Kaiber crystal has since been hidden on a volcanic planet by Lady Skywalker, its guardian. Ben has neglected Anakin's training due to the war and misses the surprise attack on the palace which results in Lady Arcadia being kidnapped. Master and apprentice pick up the trail of the senator together searching for the source of the new clones too, fighting many units along the way.

Eventually, the two friends manage to track the Jedi clone to the right planet where he is trying to force Lady Skywalker into the protection chamber of the magic crystal. Both Jedi engage him, but Anakin acts on rage and tries to kill the clone in cold blood. Fearing his apprentice will fall to the Dark Side if he does, Ben directly intervenes with his lightsaber and accidentally knocks an irrate Anakin down. He tries to block Anakin from fighting on, and causes Anakin to think he has betrayed him. The clone escapes and Anakin is furious at the assumption his master has betrayed him to steal the glory kill for himself. Both Jedi duel dangerously close to a volcano erupting around them and Ben ACCIDENTALLY knocks his apprentice into a molten pit leaving him near dead and totally scarred. Due to the dangerous volcano, Republic forces retreat into hyperspace and the crystal is lost to Imperial forces, the war with it as well.

About nine months later, the war has turned on the Republic even more and the Galaxy's infrastructure has been almost utterly destroyed. Strangely many of the Jedi leaders have been mysteriously killed in the short amount of time, like before, but no new clones have appeared. In the time between movies, as Ben grieves the apparent death of his apprentice at his hands, he leads a raid on a prison planet where Lady Skywalker has been held and rescues her, killing the evil clone who took her in reprisal. To his surprise he finds that she is pregnant with Anakin's child and she is taken to Galactic City (Coruscant) away from the fighting. Ben then gets visions through the Force of a new rising evil behind the scenes and speculates his apprentice may be alive.

The Jedi Elders meet secretly, but are all eliminated by a mysterious dark cloaked assasin. As Ben probably goes to Degobah to meet with Yoda about the death of his apprentice, he senses the sudden murder of thousands of Jedi at the hands of a single bladed assassin. In a surprise attack, Imperial forces storm Galactic City and surround it. Several senators are arrested and imprisoned in the Presidential palace, including Lady Skywalker. Jedi Knights respond to the Emperor's challenge to rescue the capital, and some return to their home world for an emergecny session.

Ben senses an even grander conspiracy to overthrow the Republic, he teams up with King Bail to rescue Lady Skywalker and then sneaks her to the Jedi homeworld where he thinks she will be safe. In secret he heads to the Jedi homeworld where the Jedi are just returning home from combat. Legions of stormtroopers under the leadership of a familiar dark robed cyborg march in and open fire, killing most after a long, drawn out battle.

Ben and a psuedo-Vader, who is only wearing a breathing mask and the cloak at this point, duel. During it, while Anakin is physically unrecognizable, Ben senses his identiy and finds out that his apprentice has been injured but also become a Manchurian candidate of sorts after secret military experiments by the Imperial forces made him into a cyborg after he fell into the molten pit where he was burned alive and kept alive in a secret labratory run by Republic black ops. A group of secrety conspiring military leaders and big business interests secretly started the war in the hopes of turning the Republic into a police state, with the the Senate President at the helm. Vader is a mix of being, brain injured, brainwashed, and ignorant from being kept isolated by his bosses. He has been convinced that Ben tried to kill him on the volcanic world to take the glory of recovering the Kaiber crystal for himself and in jealously of his apprentice's great abilities.

Lady Arcadia who was on site of the attack and was exposed to a near lethal dosage of radiation during the fighting, gives birth to Luke and Leia in secret on Alderaan, but does not die and is instead disguised as a maidservant to work in the palace of King Bail under his medical care. She will die about the time Luke and Leia turn three so that Leia has some memory of her.

Ben takes Luke to Anakin's brother Owen on Tatooine out of guilt for causing Anakin to first run away because of his delusions of grandier years before and for having further broken up the Skywalker family, but failing his training and permanently destroying him on the volcanic planet. He will also make sure Anakin's dream that his son gets training in the Force comes true.

With his victory complete, the Emperor gathers his clone Jedi generals for a celebration ending the war, where they are all slaughtered and disposed of by Lord Vader. Instead they are replaced by non-Force users as grand moffs. Through a twenty year period of reconstruction, civil war, and nationalization of commerce in the galaxy, the new Galactic Empire's growing central authority will slowly continue to control all ways of life until the Imperial Senate is abolished and regional governors take their place about the time a newly finished Death Star is ready to enforce their tyrannical rule. But we already know how that's going to work out for them...
 
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^What I still might change is the fact Palpatine may be a former high ranking Jedi master who fell to the Dark Side. Uncle Owen might change to being Obi-Wan's brother who runs a moisture farm and agrees to take the child in to protect him. He simply tells Luke Owen was his father's brother when he really isn't. The Sorcerer who starts the Clone Wars is not known among the Jedi only that someone strong in the Dark Side was able to evade their detection, steal their top guarded secrets, and use the technology taken to form a massive clone army to defeat them.
 

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