Victarion
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I'm back with another writing question. I've got these nonhuman races for my setting and I'd like to know if the names seem too...clichéd...or If they feel natural (in so much as "elf" or "dwarf" can feel natural in a fantasy setting).
Evojur: They worship the concept of controlled change to maintain the flow of energy through the new world. The evojur arose from intelligent aquatic amphibians that swam through the primordial seas before the first landmasses appeared.
Vaik: The vaik arose from the seahorse-like marine life around the same time as the evojur. Whereas the evojur devoted themselves to learning about their new world, the vaik were quick to test the dominant life forms in the new world. The vaik found these life forms--dragons--to be worthy of their admiration.
Thus the vaik are seen by the evojur as a mad and backwards race. Dragons are born from aggregations of the world's natural energy. The vaik's admiration for these entropic enablers puts them at odds with the evojur. A famous vaik created the humanoids of the new world as a "take that" to the evojur. The humanoids were able to learn how to kill dragons, thus releasing massive bursts of natural energy that warped the landscape.
The vaik's bodies are composed of natural elements--earthen soil, molten rock, water, and moss/fungi--surrounding their viscera. The general body shape is something like a seahorse.
Tekujin (or Tekund?): The tengaki were created from the evojur, viashkai, and primordial humanoids that died during the viashkai's rebellion against the primordial dragons. The evojur managed to create a device that harnessed the energy released from the dragons' deaths as well as the casualties from the various races to create the tengaki. The tengaki harbor a hatred of the races and have sought isolation in the highest peaks. They grew into folk legends for the various races; they are used as boogeymen to keep the races' children from breaking their rules/customs.
Sikuth is a legendary tekujin (or tekund) that gained access to the vaik's research facilities and use their knowledge of magic to imbue a few kirhouvaik with vaik-like powers. Sikuth termed these kirhouvaik "Sikhivaik."
Kirvaikin: The first humanoids created by the vaik, imbued with the vaik's impulsiveness and a much shorter lifespan. The kirhouvaik eventually went through stages of evolution mirroring our own, eventually becoming homo sapiens. The superstitious humans view the Sikhivaik in the same way that religious folks view demons. The tekujin/tekund are seen as hellhounds, and Sikuth is seen as an analog to Shuck, or Cu Sith.
So...thoughts or criticisms on how I can improve these?
Evojur: They worship the concept of controlled change to maintain the flow of energy through the new world. The evojur arose from intelligent aquatic amphibians that swam through the primordial seas before the first landmasses appeared.
Vaik: The vaik arose from the seahorse-like marine life around the same time as the evojur. Whereas the evojur devoted themselves to learning about their new world, the vaik were quick to test the dominant life forms in the new world. The vaik found these life forms--dragons--to be worthy of their admiration.
Thus the vaik are seen by the evojur as a mad and backwards race. Dragons are born from aggregations of the world's natural energy. The vaik's admiration for these entropic enablers puts them at odds with the evojur. A famous vaik created the humanoids of the new world as a "take that" to the evojur. The humanoids were able to learn how to kill dragons, thus releasing massive bursts of natural energy that warped the landscape.
The vaik's bodies are composed of natural elements--earthen soil, molten rock, water, and moss/fungi--surrounding their viscera. The general body shape is something like a seahorse.
Tekujin (or Tekund?): The tengaki were created from the evojur, viashkai, and primordial humanoids that died during the viashkai's rebellion against the primordial dragons. The evojur managed to create a device that harnessed the energy released from the dragons' deaths as well as the casualties from the various races to create the tengaki. The tengaki harbor a hatred of the races and have sought isolation in the highest peaks. They grew into folk legends for the various races; they are used as boogeymen to keep the races' children from breaking their rules/customs.
Sikuth is a legendary tekujin (or tekund) that gained access to the vaik's research facilities and use their knowledge of magic to imbue a few kirhouvaik with vaik-like powers. Sikuth termed these kirhouvaik "Sikhivaik."
Kirvaikin: The first humanoids created by the vaik, imbued with the vaik's impulsiveness and a much shorter lifespan. The kirhouvaik eventually went through stages of evolution mirroring our own, eventually becoming homo sapiens. The superstitious humans view the Sikhivaik in the same way that religious folks view demons. The tekujin/tekund are seen as hellhounds, and Sikuth is seen as an analog to Shuck, or Cu Sith.
So...thoughts or criticisms on how I can improve these?
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