Um......welll.....this is awkward......
This thread is intended for me to display my work and have people comment and/or discuss it.
That said, the rendering on your character is effective in adding volume, but the layered cuts make it look kind of awkward. If you could smooth out your cuts, it would look fantastic. The grammar of the text is pretty bad. If it's supposed to be a single sentence, you're going to want to add the word "to" before the word "join". If they're supposed to be two separate sentences, I would increase the font size of the "I Want You" line even more and maybe move the second line to the top of the image.