UNLIKELY (Going to be made into a film using The Movies, so please R&R)

Right, here's the script for my film I'm making. This is only the prologue, more will be posted later.

EXT. An old field, night. A WOMAN runs across the field toward her car. Suddenly, a MONSTER leaps down at her. It is made from living swamp, which can be recongnised by the fact it is shifting. Twigs and leaves stick from it, and it has bulging eyes and a mouthful of sharp teeth. The woman screams, and tries to run. The monster looks at her straight in the eyes, and she is drawn back toward it. The thing grabs her and bites into her neck. It is absorbing her life force. It drops her body, but then suddenly cluches it's head in pain.​

MONSTER
No!! What have I done?! I cannot control this thing!​

The monster runs. As it runs, the swamp shifts away and reveals a man. He keeps running, and sees a city up ahead.

CUE BEGINNING TITLES

I know it's short, but what do you think?​