My live action Batman Beyond first 9 pages script.

[saint sinner x]

Ok guys here is my very own live action Batman Beyond script well the first 9 pages I want your honest opinion about it even if it is harsh or excellent I still want to hear what you guys think so I can take it into consideration, I am not a skillfull writer so please bare with me here and this is my first script that i've written and this is the first draft anyways tell me what you guys think? enjoys...

BATMAN BEYOND
Written by: Saint Sinner X

RED WB LOGO SLOWLY COMES INTO THE SCREEN IT MOVES IN ALL DIRECTIONS WITH A BLACK THEME IN THE BACKGROUND WITH THE FOCUS OF THE WB LOGO IT QUICKLY TRANSFORMS INTO BATS AND ZOOMS OUT IN A RAPID SPEED.
REDEMPTION.
A shot from above of Wayne Manor now a rusty dirty mansion full of gutter and filth.
Bruce Wayne in the master bedroom covers a deceased Alfred with a blanket, and tears slowly comes down from Bruce Wayne’s eyes.

BRUCE WAYNE:
Rest In Peace Alfred.
Bruce Wayne throws a fit and starts to throw objects in the room to the floor he loses control and yells loudly.

BRUCE WAYNE:
AAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!
He receives a call from a person with a voice changer he tells Bruce.

UNKNOWN #1:
Hello Mr. Wayne I have your wife if you choose to not give into our demands we will kill her and we will record her death and we will send it to you for your own viewing sufferance. We want exactly $289 billion dollars in cash at exactly midnight that means you only have 2 hours and 13 minutes to bring us the money or I promise you she’s not going to have an easy death. I’ll call back for further instructions stay by the phone.
Hangs Up the phone. (click)
Bruce Wayne goes to the book shelve and he takes out a book. The vintage clock tower opens and he goes inside
Now he’s in the Bat cave in front of a high tech computer with holographic images he starts typing on the computer and says
BRUCE WAYNE:
I need a breakage for a private untraceable address.
He then continues to type on the holographic keyboards.

BAT-COMPUTER:
The process will take 8 seconds to trace.
Moments Later.
BAT-COMPUTER:
Address Located
Holographic images surrounding Bruce Wayne it reflects on his face.

BAT-COMPUTER:
Gotham City’s central factory.
Bruce Wayne walks in front of a vault and he place his thumb in front of the lock the lock opens.
He goes inside and he takes out a black latex costume that has the new red batman symbol in front of it.
CUT TO:
Gotham City’s central factory. A big brown rusty factory that’s secluded from other sky scrapers.
Inside the factory:
A BEATEN UP SELENA KYLE IS TIED UP WITH A HUGE CHAIN AROUND HER BODY.
UNKNOWN #1:
Let’s kill this broad he’s not coming.
The unknown man takes out a gun and aims it at Selena Kyle.
Uncloaks the gun.
Out of nowhere a speeding bat a rang hits the man on his hands making his body turn 360 degree up in the air.
UNKNOWN #1: (CONT’D)
Damn, it’s the batman!
Batman jumps from the roof of the factory with his wings open all the way down as he lands he sweeps three of the unknown men all of them are quickly down to the floor.
UNKNOWN #5:
Hey ass hole!
The unknown #5 takes out his a handgun and starts shooting at Batman.

Batman then uses his rocket boosters flies quickly to the unknown man while batman is dodging the gunfire in midair and tackles the unknown man he takes him crashing through the wall and the man is knocked out by the force of the impact.

Batman’s heart starts to beat very hard he puts his right hand where his heart is located and takes a deep breath.
UNKNOWN #6:
Hey batman!! all my life I here stories of a bad ass vigilante taking out criminals like me but now it is my turn to hurt you Waco.
Takes out a knife and stabs Selena kyle in the chest.
BATMAN: NO!!!!!!!!
The UNKNOWN MAN STARTS TO LAUGH.
Batman rocket boost where the man as he gets there he kicks the man sending the man flying across the floor crashing through a glass window.
Batman then rocket boost over to where the man is and Batman stomps on his stomach the man spits out blood
Batman then grabs the man by the neck lifts him up in the air and Batman says.
BATMAN: YOUR GOING TO PAY!
Batman throws him with the same arm that he is grabbing the man by the neck to the ocean outside the factory.
The man goes through a window and falls outside of the island.
As the man falls down straight to the ocean he yells
UNKNOWN MAN #6:
AHHHH!!!
Batman rocket boost to Selena Kyle’s dead corpse.
Batman has blood coming from his mouth he drops to his knees he is exhausted from the fight he takes out his mask and says

BATMAN:
I’m sorry Selena I let you die by my hands.
CAMERA SLOWLY ZOOMS OUT FROM A TOP VIEW OF BRUCE WAYNE’S HEAD.
FADE OUT.
CUT TO:
THE REBEL WITHIN.
(40 years later)
A SHOT FROM ABOVE OF A FUTURISTIC CITY WITH HOVERING CARS AND VAST SKY SCRAPERS WITH RED SKIES COVERING THE ATMOSPHERE.
CUT TO:
JUVENILE CENTER.
A teenage boy comes walking out of the juvenile center with a backpack on his pack he looks in front of him and he sees a middle aged man with glasses the middle aged man says to the teenage boy
MIDDLE AGED MAN:
Terry you’ve been locked up for the last 9 months things will work differently from now on what I say is what you’ll do and obey.
TERRY MCGINNIS:
Dad don’t start with me not today.
The middle aged man looks at him with a shocking look.
Terry walks in front of him and gets in the car.
As they hover away from the Juvenile Center.
A shot of the middle aged man inside the car.
Middle AGED MAN:
Listen terry the only reason your out is because of me your conduct was way out of line you send 4 inmates to the emergency room all with broken arms and ribs you think your going to get far in life with that bad attitude of yours?
TERRY MCGINNIS:
They started first! Your never going to understand me you don’t know me hell you don’t even know yourself and you think just because you work for Wayne enterprises that your a big shot?
The middle aged man stops the car and looks at terry furiously and says
MIDDLE AGED MAN:
Get out of the car terry your walking home!
TERRY MCGINNIS:
So much for the free ride.
Terry opens the door and walks out of the car.
TERRY MCGINNIS: (CONT’D)
Go to hell.
Looks at his father with a angry face.
Middle aged man drives away in the car.
Terry starts walking he looks over to his right and he sees Gotham city cemetery so he starts walking over there.
CUT TO:
A SHOT FROM BEHIND OF A TALL BRAWNY OLD MAN WEARING A LONG BLACK TRENCH COAT STANDING IN FRONT OF THREE TOMBSTONE.

Camera slowly moves in closely.
Bruce Wayne:
Father, Mother I brought you some roses. Selena my love, happy 40th anniversary.
He kneels down and places a rose on a tombstone that says
“Thomas Wayne” and he places another rose on the second tombstone that says “Martha Wayne”.


CUT TO:
A GROUP OF CLOWNS ARE BRUTALITY BEATING UP AN ELDERLY MAN WHO WORKS IN THE CEMETERY.
Jokerz #1:
(Laughs) Little punk having fun, daddy?!
Victim:
Somebody help me!!!!
Jokerz #2:
No one is coming for you old-timer, (Laughs)
Jokerz #3:
Let’s kill him and then let’s burry this prick...
JUMP CUT TO:
TERRY MCGINNIS RUNS OVER TO THE GROUP OF CLOWNS AND HE SAYS,
Terry Mcginnis:
Hey! Circus freaks why do you come and fight me, trust me I won’t disappoint.
The group of clowns looks over at Terry and they say,
Jokers #1: get him boys!
Jokers #2: (laughs) were going to violate your dumb ass.
JOKERS #3:
(laughs)
As the jokers walks slowly to terry Mcginnis jokers #1 takes out a knife and jokers #2 takes out a metal stick
Terry Mcginnis smiles and as they approach terry, terry sidekicks the jokers who’s carrying the knife and then terry roundhouse punches the jokers who’s carrying the metal stick knocking him out. The jokers #1 gets up with a bloody mouth and he says,
Jokers #1: how dare you!, you know who I am boooyyy?
Terry MCGINNIS: A clown who’s going to have a bad night.
Jokers #1 starts plunging his knife in order to stab terry. Terry moves back and he grabs his arm puts him in a arm lock and terry hits him with his elbow on the jokers neck knocking him down. Terry looks around and he notice that the jokers #3 is gone.
Terry Mcginnis: wait a minute they were three of them.
Terry hears motorcycles roaring from behind he looks behind him and there are eight jokers each of them driving a motorcycle the jokers on the first motorcycle drives right in front of terry with the intention of running him over, terry jumps over him and while terry is in the air he grabs the jokers from behind and body slams him making him crashing with two jokers on separate hovering motorcycles terry gets in his fighting stances and says,
Terry Mcginnis: You freaks are really getting on my last nerves.
Leader of the jokers: (laughs) you took some of my boys down now were going to kill you and overkill you and overkill you over and over again (LAUGHS)
The remaining six jokers starts to laugh and they start surrounding on terry, there all carrying knifes, blades and metal sticks. They all hear a voice;
BRUCE WAYNE:
(raspy voice) Leave him alone!
MATCH CUT TO:
AN ELDERLY BRAWNY MAN STANDS IN THE SHADOWS OF THE CEMETERY WEARING A TRENCH COAT AND CARRYING A CANE WHILE THE FOG COVERS HIS FACE.
They all look where the elderly man is.
TERRY MCGINNIS: listen I can handle this.
A huge jokers looks at terry furiously and punches him in the stomach, terry groans and falls down.
Leader of the jokers: You got a lot of balls trying to save some punk ass kid old timer.
Bruce Wayne takes out a modernized bat a rang from his sleeves and throws it at three of the jokers the bat a rang goes at a high velocity speed so the jokers could not see the bat a rang, knocking out three of the jokers, only leaving three remaining jokers, The bat a rang comes back to Bruce Wayne in the shadows. While terry is on the floor groaning he is amazed of how highly skilled the elderly man is, the three remaining jokers goes running to shadow of where the elderly man is, Bruce Wayne hits the huge jokers in the crouch and then he hits him on his head and sweeps him then while the huge jokers is on the floor he stomps him on the neck with his cane, the second jokers runs up to Bruce Wayne from behind and Bruce Wayne showing no emotions he hits him with his cane brutality knocking him out to the floor the third jokers inside crescent kicks Bruce Wayne, Bruce Wayne blocks the kick with his cane and Bruce Wayne turns around stabs him with his cane in the stomach but doesn’t impale him, From where the cane is at on the jokers stomach Bruce Wayne lifts up his cane upper cutting the third jokers up in the air while he’s in the air Bruce Wayne takes his cane
And hits him in mid air making the third jokers fall down roughly.
Bruce Wayne’s heart starts to act up now he’s breathing heavily and he falls down while shivering, Terry gets up from the floor and goes running to Bruce Wayne terry says;
TERRY MCGINNIS: Hey are you ok?

Bruce Wayne: my medicined is on my left side pocket, I need a shot now!
Bruce Wayne grabs Terry on his arm, Terry takes out the gun shaped vaccine and injects Bruce Wayne in the heart.
TERRY MCGINNIS:
That’s amazing I never seen anyone kicking so much ass in a matter of seconds where you learn how to fight like that?
Bruce Wayne: Around.
TO BE CONTINUED....

 

[Lando81]

Double Post!

 

[Kevin Roegele]

It's a good set up for a movie. Two things;

1. WHy the Warner Bros logo? You don't need that in a script.

2. Spelling and grammar, spelling and grammer, spelling and grammer. No-one will read it if it's not written properly. Can't say this enough.

 

[tylerdurden99]

Utter crap.

The dialogue is awful, looks like a 4 year old wrote it.

No wonder you didn't post the rest.