Sequels The Official "How YOU would do Spider-Man 4" thread

[HughJackFan420]

stay tuned for the conclusion of my version of Spiderman 4.

 

[pjspider1C]

With all due respect, HughJackFan, I will no longer be reading this thread. Why? This is not a final draft. That's all I'm interested in. I don't care about whatever writing technique you use to get there. I understand that this your "outline" or "guideline" or "rough first draft" of whatever vision you have. But because you've rushed to get it out there and written so amateur, I have lost interest in your script. I've tried to stick with it. I really have. But it's at the point where it's painful to read. Many of us have given you suggestions on how to improve, yet you do not apply them. I'm sorry if this offends you, but writing is a delicate craft and I do believe you need more experience.

 

[DestinyMakerX]

With all due respect, HughJackFan, I will no longer be reading this thread. Why? This is not a final draft. That's all I'm interested in. I don't care about whatever writing technique you use to get there. I understand that this your "outline" or "guideline" or "rough first draft" of whatever vision you have. But because you've rushed to get it out there and written so amateur, I have lost interest in your script. I've tried to stick with it. I really have. But it's at the point where it's painful to read. Many of us have given you suggestions on how to improve, yet you do not apply them. I'm sorry if this offends you, but writing is a delicate craft and I do believe you need more experience.

You have a point, but I think that this story is just SO awesome!!

 

[HughJackFan420]

With all due respect, HughJackFan, I will no longer be reading this thread. Why? This is not a final draft. That's all I'm interested in. I don't care about whatever writing technique you use to get there. I understand that this your "outline" or "guideline" or "rough first draft" of whatever vision you have. But because you've rushed to get it out there and written so amateur, I have lost interest in your script. I've tried to stick with it. I really have. But it's at the point where it's painful to read. Many of us have given you suggestions on how to improve, yet you do not apply them. I'm sorry if this offends you, but writing is a delicate craft and I do believe you need more experience.

thanks for your comment if your interested I will have a final draft in script format after going over my rough draft. i'm ending my script in the next couple of days if not today. i'm sorry it was hard to read for you but hopefully the final draft will it make it easier for you to read my version of Spiderman 4. thanks for reading though.

 

[HughJackFan420]

You have a point, but I think that this story is just SO awesome!!

yes he does have a point but thanks for your comment Destiny. and just to let other people know in my final draft alot of the filler crap i have in my first draft will be deleted. actions scenes might be altered for the better and anything else that needs to be tweaked. but i promise in the final draft it will be something to be looked at under Sam Raimi's eyes. i know it's gonna take a lot of work but hopefully i can get people to stand behind me on this story for a good pick for Spiderman 4. again thanks you guys. now back to work on the conclusion.

 

[Penismightier]

A final draft is not a second draft. On real movies tons and tons of re-writes are made. This isn't a case where some extraneous things need to be deleted and the action scenes need to be spruced up a bit. If you're in love with the story, the best way to go about re-writing this is doing a step sheet. Write down a list of all of the scenes (every time the movie moves from another room there's a different scene) and write down the point of the scene after the location. And when doing this, use the suggestions in this thread.

Also, you may not want to make it seem like you're throwing as many characters as possible into the mix. You may see all of these characters as familiar to you, but with all of them regular people are going to wonder why this movie has all of these characters, and after that people are going to wonder why they should care about these characters. I cannot stress the importance of that. It's not the quantity of characters or how awesome the action is. It's how much people invest emotionally into these characters. And that's much better for the viewer if there is only a few characters to keep track of.

 

[HughJackFan420]

(Meanwhile when everyone is heading back to where they need to go there is a shadowy character nearby looking through boniculars. First the figure sees Lizard, Eddie Brock, Spiderman then the symbiote floating in the water. Then the mysterious character laughs quietly and evil like. the whole crowded scene at the docks starts to fade and we are back at Peter Parker's apartment building. Lizard and Spiderman are back in the basement which now looks more like Dr. Connors lab. Beakers, chemistry equipment, and a variety of machines. Spiderman is still wearing the symbiote and Lizard is preparing a machine.)

Lizard: Alright Peter this should work. We won't have to worry about the incident like the one on the rooftop to happen again.

Spiderman: I hope so. I would hate to be the reason you get sliced and diced again.

Lizard: I take a licking and keep on ticking though. The rejuvenation ability I have is remarkable. I never felt stronger or powerful.

Spiderman: I know it feels good to have these powers but I hope your not having second thoughts of not turning back to normal Doc. And as far as the symbiote I hope you really consider of getting rid of it for good. It's caused nothing but pain and danger.

Lizard: ::sighs:: I guess your right Peter. I tell you what. Let's get me back to normal first. Thanks to the NYPD I got everything I need to make that happen. Just don't wanna make any public appearances like this especially when I'm trying to get rid of the symbiote.

Spiderman: Point taken.

Lizard: You ready?? This should contain the symbiote with no problem.

(holding out another glass jar trap device.)

Spiderman: Fire it up Doc.

Lizard: Brace yourself.

(Lizard turns the machine on and the symbiote acts wildly but still in liquid form. it melts off Peter and Peter collapses. the symbiote slithers its way to the container where the soundwaves are coming. the symbiote is trapped in the container.)

Lizard: Peter are you alright??

Spiderman: Now I know how Paris Hilton feels after a night of partying.

Lizard: Glad to see you back to normal. You had us scared to death back at thet docks.

(Spiderman is removing the Spiderman suit since it was eaten at by the symbiote instead of binding with it. he removes the suit until he's just in his boxers.)

Spiderman: I scared myself. I'm gonna go check on MJ and Aunt May.

Lizard: My anti-serum should be ready by the end of today. I'm gonna work on that. ::sighs::

Spiderman: I know this was your dream. But a friend of yours once told me sometimes when we want something out of life we have to give up the thing we want most...even our dreams.

Lizard: Octavius...right...whatever happened to him?? He went missing and still nothing right?? Are the police still searching for him??

Spiderman: Last I heard they fished in the river and nothing.

Lizard: Hmmm...well let me not hold you up. Go check on you friends and family. Don't worry about the symbiote it's not going no where and hopefully by tonight I'll be Dr. Connors again.

Spiderman: Thanks Doc and believe me your doing the right thing and that's more powerful than any superpower.

Lizard: You're a good friend Peter. Take care. I'll talk to you later.

Spiderman: See ya Doc.

Lizard: Oh and Peter before I transform back to normal I'm gonna swim around the ocean where we we're at to find that symbiote that was on Eddie Brock.

Spiderman: Good idea and good luck.

Lizard: Thanks see you later Peter.

Spiderman: Later.

(Peter walks up to his apartment in his boxers but Ursula and Mr. Ditkovich are up top looking at him wierd like.)

Peter: Hi Mr. Ditkovich. Hi Ursula. Sorry I was...ummm...uh...I have nothing to wear. It's laundry day and I was trying to see if my uncle had any clothes I could borrow.

Mr. Ditkovich: You can borrow some of mine.

Ursula: Hi Pete.

Mr. Ditkovich: Ursula close your eyes or go inside.

Peter: Thanks Mr. Ditkovich but I...might have something...simple to put on. I gotta go...I'll talk to you later bye.

(Peter scurries to his apartment and quickly shuts the door behind him.)

Mr. Ditkovich: Wow that boy really works out.

Ursula: ::sighs:: mmmm yeah Mary Jane is very lucky.

Mr. Ditkovich: Hey get inside and erase what you just saw out of your head.

(Mr. Ditkovich and Ursula go inside but before Mr. Ditkovich goes in his apartment he flexes and feels on his muscles.)

Mr. Ditkovich: Hmmm Hmmm still got it.

(Later that evening Lizard is on a mission to capture the remaining symbiote. He notices a clean up crew cleaning up the burning remains.)

Lizard: (thinking to himself) I better lay low.

(Lizard swims around in the ocean by the docks searching left and right. Lizard swims around until a spotlight from the cleaning crew is shined into the water around where he is. Lizard swims away and is hiding in the dark part of the waters now. Then all of a sudden a net is wrapped around Lizard. Lizard is hauled rapidly out of the ocean and into a van with thick metal walls almost like a giant paddywagon. Two henchmen clothes the doors of the van and lock in Lizard. Lizard is looking out the barred windows of the van. Then a mysterious man appears in front of Lizard outside the van.)

Kraven: Hello Dr. Connors. I've been tracking for you quite sometime. I believe you were looking for this.

(Kraven holds up a container not similar to Lizard's/Connors contraption but in it holds the symbiote.)

Lizard: You don't know what that is. You must get rid of that immediately. You don't know what it can do.

Kraven: On the contrary we know very much what it can do. But you, you my friend will be a fine specimen for my employer's project muhahahahaha.

(Kraven walks away and gets in another car and all vehicles drive away with Lizard fighting to break free.)

Lizard: Get me outta here!!!! You don't know what your doing

 

[DestinyMakerX]

Just out of curiousity Destiny, would your Kingpin be the same Kingpin that was in the Daredevil movie? Or would your Kingpin be viewed as completely seperate from that and have no relation to the Daredevil movie whatsoever?

There will be no references to the Kingpin in the Daredevil movie.

 

[chaseter]

Kingpin won't be in any Spider-Man movie so long as Fox owns the rights. Where is your script? I would very much like to read it.

 

[DestinyMakerX]

Kingpin won't be in any Spider-Man movie so long as Fox owns the rights. Where is your script? I would very much like to read it.

My script isn't coming out until September. And it is only a fan script, the Kingpin is only what I would put in the Spider-Man 4 movie.

 

[spideyman101]

Unlike most scripts? This is professional, eh? I'll beleive it when I see it.

Really no offense whatsoever, just you sound a lot like most newbs who get on this site and brag, then write, then bashed for stupity...

if this is not the case, then sorry, and welcome to SHH.

 

[DestinyMakerX]

Unlike most scripts? This is professional, eh? I'll beleive it when I see it.

Really no offense whatsoever, just you sound a lot like most newbs who get on this site and brag, then write, then bashed for stupity...

if this is not the case, then sorry, and welcome to SHH.

I'm not bragging...I'm not saying that my script is that good, either

I'm just saying that it is not written like all those fan scripts. It is actually in the format of a real script. You'll see when you see the trailer script on August 10

 

[Brendan]

I think Kingpin is an odd choice to have amongst Kraven and the Lizard.

 

[DestinyMakerX]

I think Kingpin is an odd choice to have amongst Kraven and the Lizard.

In my original story, I didn't have Kingpin. However, I needed a new character that fit Kingpin's personality.

 

[HughJackFan420]

(Meanwhile Aunt May is with Peter at her place. Their drinking tea and conversating.)

Aunt May: Are you sure this time??

Peter: Yes Aunt May I want her in my life forever.

Aunt May: Well how does Spiderman feel about this??

Peter: Spiderman???

Aunt May: Come on Peter I've known for years.

Peter: Geez really??

Aunt May: You're honesty makes you a bad liar Peter.

Peter: I guess your right. Well when did you find out.

Aunt May: I could basically read it off you that time I was in the hospital. You and Mary Jane were talking about what (does quotations with hands) "Spiderman" thought of her.

Peter: Oh yeah I remember hahaha. Wow so much has happened since then.

Aunt May: Good and bad. But we got through the bad which is why I ask you how does Spiderman feel about this??

Peter: ::sighs:: I feel like I don't want to lose MJ. I've almost lost her so many times. I love her Aunt May. I don't just want to be just a friend or her personal bodyguard. I want to be her husband.

Aunt May: I understand Peter but are you ready??? You seen what almost happened to her yesterday.

Peter: She's worth dying for and I'm willing to put my life on the line for MJ . I love her with all my heart.

Aunt May: Well sounds to me like you're more than ready then. Well how are you going to propose to her this time??

(Peter smiles then we fast forward to Peter running down to the basement of his apartment building to look for Lizard/Connors. He approaches the door and knocks and no answer.)

Peter: Dr. Connors?? Hello???

(Ursula walks halfway down the stairs.)

Ursula: Oh hi Pete

Peter: Hey Ursula.

Ursula: Um your uncle left.

Peter: Yeah do you know if he ever came back?

Ursula: No sorry Pete.

Peter: (thinking to himself) He should've been back by now. Alright well if you see him just um...uh...nevermind.

(Peter starts walking upstairs towards his apartment.)

Peter: Well tonights the night Ursula.

Ursula: Your going to ask MJ to...??

Peter: Yes.

Ursula: Oh Peter that's great!!! Congratulations!!!

(Ursula and Peter hug and Mr. Ditkovich comes out his apartment.)

Mr. Ditkovich: Peter you already have a girlfriend leave my daughter alone.

Ursula: No dad he's going to ask Mary Jane to marry him.

Mr. Ditkovich: Great so rent won't be a problem between both of you.

Peter: Uh right.

Mr. Ditkovich: Just kidding Peter. She is good woman...

Peter: I'm good man...thanks Mr. Ditkovich and I don't mean to be rude but I have to get ready.

Ursula: Good luck Pete.

Mr. Ditkovich: She will say yes Peter. You are truly a good man.

Peter: Thanks you guys and if she does say yes...

Ursula: She will.

Peter: Well you guys are invited to our wedding.

Ursula: Oh wow thanks Peter.

Mr. Ditkovich: That's really nice of you.

Ursula: Maybe I can bake the cake.

Peter: That would be great. Thanks Ursula we'll talk later ok see you guys later.

Ursula & Mr. Ditkovich: Thanks Peter and good luck.

(Peter walks into his apartment and goes to his desk. Pulls a box out the drawer and opens the box to pull out the ring. He holds it up smiling at it.)

Peter: Thanks Aunt May. I promise to be a good husband like my Uncle Ben was.


(Meanwhile somewhere near Manhattan in a mansion ontop of a tower we see Wilson Fisk and Kraven talking in a den by a huge fireplace and a desk where Fisk/Kingpin is sitting.)

Kinpin: Very good work my friend. Soon are new reptilian recruit Dr. Connors will be under our control.

Kraven: This project of yours? Is it full proof?

Kingpin: Full proof?? My dear friend I have my number one as head of this project making sure everything goes as planned and he has never failed me.

Kraven: And what of this feline femme fatale??

Kingpin: Hardy's daughter?? Even if she was to team up with our arachnid friend they still won't stand a chance. You can rest assured they won't be a problem.

Kraven: Well what about our first captured?? Are these contraptions of yours gonna work on him??

(A bald mysterious figure walks into the den.)

Maxwell Dillon: Yes and he's developing a new device to help our cause. We can go meet him whenever you gentleman are ready.

Kingpin: Kraven I would like for you to meet my number one. He's the head of the project and my agent Maxwell Dillon.

(Kraven and Maxwell shake hands.)

Kraven: Pleasure to meet you sir.

Maxwell: Likewise, well should we make our way to the lab.

Kingpin: Of course right this way Kraven. You are about to see the power of a mastermind.

(The three gentleman walk towards an elevator. Fast forwarding to when the elevator opens up on a lower level.)

Maxwell: Please follow me gentleman.

(They have entered a huge lab with people in labcoats and clipboards checking machines, huge tanks filled with liquid, several metal slabs that look like operating tables and other lab equipment.)

Kraven: Quite a lab you have here Mr. Fisk.

Kingpin: Who says crime doesn't pay.

(they all chuckle evil-like and come up to a metal door with a keypad next to it. Maxwell is talking while entering in the code.)

Maxwell: Since you found our friend here a while back Kraven we've been trying to perfect my mind enhancer on him and succeeded. We had some trouble at first. It seemed he had developed a liking to our pest of an enemy so we had to dig deeper into his mind to find any hate or anger. We found that he was angry about the death of his wife.

(the metal door opens and they walk into a big room full of machines and there is someone or something in the middle working on several computers and machines.)

Kingpin: So with this mind enhancer you've developed Max how did you bring out the hatred for Spiderman from out our friend here?

(They stop to talk before closing in on the center of the room and start speaking a little more quietly.)

Maxwell: Well the way this mind enhancer works is we can manipulate anyones memory. We can use it as a love potion to make people fall in love with someone. We can make someone happy or sad by alternating their past using their memory.

Kraven. Interesting.

Kingpin: Yes quite fascinating.

Maxwell: In this gentleman's case he has both his wife's death and Spiderman in his memory. We just put two and two together and walaa Spiderman is his wife's killer.

Kingpin: Hahahaha very good Max you make me very proud.

Max: I do what I can Wilson.

(They walk closer to the man working in the middle of the room.)

Max: Gentleman I want you to meet our 4th general Dr. Otto Octavius.

(Doc Ock has different color eyes due to the mind enhancer which is located where the inhibutor chip once was.)

Doc Ock: Hello gentleman.

Kingpin: Hello Dr. Octavius. How are we feeling today?

Doc Ock: Wonderful. This device I'm working on will surely remove Spiderman's powers for good making it easy for him to pay for what he did to my wife.

(One of his tentacles slams hard on the ground out of anger. The rest of the three look at each other in smiles.)

Kingpin: Hm Hm Hm very good Dr. Octavius very good.

Doc Ock: Thank you Mr. Fisk.

Kingpin: Please call me Kingpin.

Doc Ock: It's a pleasure working with you Kingpin.

Kingpin: Believe me the pleasure is all mine.

(Doc Ock continues working on his device and the three gentlemen walk out talking.)

Max: So as you can see he's perfectly normal yet he has no recollection of what really happened to his wife.

Kingpin: Your a genius Max.

Kraven: What if the device is damaged?? Wouldn't that bring his memory back??

Max: Well in Dr. Octavius's case, his mechanical arms required an inhibutor chip so the arms wouldn't control him. We replaced that with our mind enhancer so he's in our power. Should the mind enhancer be damaged it would have complete amensia as to what happened. It would bring his memory back to just whatever happened to him before you found him.

Kraven: Quite some device you have there.

Max: Here have a look.

(As they walk by a table with a glass case holding a mind enhancer, Maxwell opens the case and hands reaches in for the mind enhancer and hands it to Kraven. Kraven looks at it and notices a 6 on it.)

Kraven: What's with the 6??

(They enter the elevator and start heading towards the huge den.)

Kingpin: Ah I'm glad that you brought that up my friend. You see we have one more recruit in mind and that is the reason why I had you collect that black goo. Eddie Brock Jr. who when transformed by the black liquid is also known as Venom. But to keep this dog on his leash we will need the mind enhancer for him as well. All we have to do is release the liquid near him and we will have a complete team of 6 generals, including you Kraven, to lead our soldiers. Before you helped free me I made a promise to those who didn't make it out of the prison I was at. After killing Spiderman I promised them to make them my own personal army. An army at my disposal. Little do they know they will be under my control thanks to Max's new technology. Hehehe

(They walk back into the den and Kingpin picks up a smaller version of a globe made of marbel.)

Kingpin: First New York. Then this country. Then the world. After Spiderman is dead the whole world will know the power of the Sinister 6 Hahahahahaha

(Kingpin crushes the globe and everyone laughs and it echoes out of the building but near a window by the den Black Cat has listened in to everything.)

Black Cat: I swear on my father's grave you won't live long enough to unleash your wrath Fisk.

(Black Cat whips and swings away into the night.)

 

[Immortalfire]

This is now.. The Official "How YOU would do Spider-Man 4" thread .

I got tired of moving them, merging them, and whatnot.

 

[FaT_tONle]

Sticky this freakin thread...

 

[Spider-ManHero12]

Heres my Spider-Man4.

the opening titles appear on the scren and after that we here Peter's voice say

Peter: "Spider-Mans a gift, a curse, and sometimes being Spider-Man isn't easy, especially when you have a girlfreind. But with great power comes great responsibility, and my responsibility is protecting this city no matter what."

Then after that the camera shows the front of the Daily Bugle building and then JJJ talking to Peter.

JJJ: "I'll give you $200 for those photo's."

Peter: "Mr. Jameison, I'm running very low on money, my Aunt needs money to pay for her partment, my girlfreing...."

JJJ: "quit your yapping! Since I'm a sweet hearted person, I will pay you $250. You teeagers are all the....."

the beeper on the phone goes off and it's Betty Brant.

Betty: "Mr. Jameison, your wife wants you to know that she won't be home for quite a few hours."

JJJ: "Thats the best news I heard all day!"

Peter then walks out of JJJ's office and gives the check to Betty.

Betty: "Hey pete, Mr. Jameison been on your case latley?"

Peter: "yeah, he's not the only problems I have now."

Betty: "well Pete....."

JJJ yells from his office.

JJJ: "Miss Brant! get in here!"

Peter leaves and on his way home, he thinks about calling Gwen.



Meanwhile, at the Stacys home.
Captain Stacy: "Gwen, honey, have some breakfast."

Gwen: "okay dad, I will be right here."

Gwen walks into the kitchen, sits down, and then tell her dad

Gwen: "Dad...Peter acted really mean the last time we met. He took me to the Jazz club to make Mary Jane jelous."

Captain Stacy: "who is this Mary Jane?"

Gwen Stacy: "Peter's....exgirlfreind."

Once Peter arrives home, Mr Dikovitch here's him.

Mr. Dikovitch: "Rent!"

Peter: "Ummm....Mr. Dikovitch, I'm running really low on money latley. Do you think I can wait atleast a few days?"

Mr. Dikovitch: "...Okay, I will give you a few days."

Peter: "Really?"

Mr. Dikovitch: ".....no, haahahahahahahahaha."

Peter sighs and gives him some of his money.

Mr. Dikovitch: "you are a good boy though, Peter."

Peter then walks in his room and calls Gwen and say's

Peter: "well, Gwen...this is Peter. I'm sorry for what happened the last time we met. Well...by."

Gwen was really there, but she didn't pick up the phone. She was crying.

Peter hangs up the phone and is sighs.

Meanwhile, we see Kraven the Hunter sitting in a forest in africa. He is looking at the rhino like an animal does when it see's it's victim. Kraven then jumps out of a tree and lands on top of the rhino and chokes it to death.

Kraven: "thats only a little bit of what I can do. Nothing can stop Kraven the Hunter!"

The camera then shows a sort of small type of cabin. We then see Animal heads on the walls of the inside. They are on wooden stands, that are nailed into the wall. They say the animals name on it and under that it says, "slain by Kraven the Hunter." They are trophies of all the animals Kraven has defeated. The camera then shows Kraven eating inside his house. While he's eating, he hears a hisss from inside his cabin type house. It's a snake. He grabs it and punches it, killing it immediatley. Kraven sits there adn then we see him drinking this potion. He moans but then the moaning stops.


We then see Peter in his apartment and he hears a knock on his door.

Peter: "Hi MJ, aren't you suppose to be at work?"

MJ: "yeah, but I decided to take the day off."

Peter: "why?"

MJ: "to be with you."

Peter smiles and they both hug. Peter then says

Peter: "MJ...I...uh....I never said I was sorry for what happened that night. I wanted to say sorry to gwen, but she wouldn't pick up."

MJ: "Peter, Gwen thought you dumped me. Thats why she felt so bad that night."


Peter: "It wasn't the normal Peter Parker doing it, Mary Jane. I was taken over by a poison, by a....monster."

MJ: "I know you didn't mean to act like that. You weren't acting yourself. You weren't the Peter Parker I know and loved. But now your back, and thats all that matters."

They both kiss eachother.

After MJ leaves, Peter gets a phone call.

"Rinnnnnnngggg"

Peter: "hello..."

Gwen: "Hi Pete...it's Gwen. can we meet?"

Peter: "sure."

Gwen: "let's meet at the coffee bean."

Peter: "Okay, I will be right there."

The camera then shows Gwen sitting in the coffee bean, and Peter arrives and sits down. They stare at eachother.

Peter: "Gwen, forgive me for what happened. I couldn't stop it."

Gwen: "stop what? how you dated me just to make her jelous? You make it sound like you were posessed."

Peter: "Gwen, you have to believe me. I'm really sorry."

Gwen: "show it with action, not with words Pete."

Gwen gets up, leaves, and as she's walking out, she wipes tears away from her eyes.

Peter just sits there, sad, worried, and even confused.

Meanwhile, we see Gwen arrives home in tears. Captain Stacy is at work. Gwen's mother is home though. They hug eachother.

Gwen: "I didn't want it to be like that..."

Gwen's Mother: "It's alright, dear."

We then see Peter visit Aunt Mays home. Peter walks in.

Aunt May: "Oh Peter!"

They hug eachother and kiss eachother.

Peter: "Hi Aunt May."

Aunt May: "Sit down, Peter. I will go make some tea."

Peter sits down smiling, and he see's a picture of Aunt May, Peter, and Uncle Ben. Tears grow in Peter's eyes. Aunt May walks in and peter wipes the tears away.

Aunt May sits down and they are both drinking tea.

Aunt May asks Peter.

Aunt May: "so, how's it going with Mary Jane?"

Peter: "It's going great. I think I'm ready to propose to her."

Aunt May: "Thats so wonderful! Last time you said you weren't ready. Well...now that your ready, I want you to have this. Your Uncle Ben would have wanted you to have it as well."

Peter takes the ring and smiles at Aunt May.

Aunt May: "When do you plan on proposing to her?"

Peter: "very soon."

Peter looks like he is about to cry.

Aunt May: "Peter, whats wrong?"

Peter then starts tearing up.

Peter: "I feel responsible...for both of them."

Aunt May: "who?"

Peter: "Uncle Ben...and Harry."

Aunt May: "Peter, you weren't responsible for either of their deaths. You were so kind to Harry, you two were best freinds. Your Uncle Ben meant everything to you...and me *sighs*."

Peter: "I should have stopped that guy. I shouldn't have let him get away."

Aunt May: "But Peter, He wasn't the one who killed Uncle Ben. It was that...Flint Marko person."

Peter: "Aunt May, if I had stoped him, his partner wouldn't have killed Uncle Ben."

Aunt May: "How do you know that, Peter?"

Peter couldn't dare say it. Instead...

Peter: "I...uhh....I have to go Aunt May."

Aunt May looks concerned about Peter. Peter then hugs Aunt May and walks out the door.


Meanwhile, in a jungle in africa. We see a tiger jumping towards Kraven, Kraven struggles with it and then throws it over him. Kraven punches it and then throws it against a tree, killing it. Kraven then wipes his hand. We see Kraven dragging the tiger to his cabing. Kraven stops, turns his head slowly and see's some people walking through the jungles. They stare at Kraven, and Kraven stares at them with a mean look on his face. Kraven then continues to drag the Tiger to his cabin/house. Kraven then lays the Tiger down in his living room and hears a knock on his door.

*knock knock!*

Kraven: "who disturbs Kraven the Hunter!?"

Kraven walks to the door and opens it. Kraven say's seriously and the very sound of the way he said it would make you cringe.

Kraven: "who are you!?"

Secret Villian: "that doesn't matter. I have an offer for you. sit down, and I will tell you."
The Secert Villian is wearing a long trenchcoat and a hat that is covering his face because the Secret VIllian has his head down."

Kraven sits down. The sceret Villian looks around the room and grins. He asks....

secret Villian: "I don't suppose you have heard about a person called...Spider-Man?"

Kraven: "never heard of him!"

Secret Villian: "here...read this."

The Secret Villian gives Kraven a copy of the Daily Bugle newspaper which says "Spider-Man's a menace and must be stopped!"

There's a icture of Spider-Man on the front. Kraven is reading it.

Secret Villian: "I would like for you to hunt him down. It's your choice."

The Secret Villan leaves.

Kraven is sitting in a chair in his cabin. He just thinks. We then hear a hssss coming fro m the wall. It's a snake. Kraven then throws a spear at the snake from 20 feet away and hits it right on target. Then Kraven says

Kraven: "nothing can match the speed, agility, or strength of Kraven the Hunter! Every animal that has ever crossed my path, I have defeated. But there is someone that I have never faced. Someone who would be a great challenge for me. Spider-Man!!"

Kraven then stabs a knife right through Spider-Man's picture on the front of the Daily Bugle newspaper.

Meanwhile, in NYC...

Peter arrives at Dr. Connor's class, on time. Dr. Connors is teaching alot about science. After class, Dr. Connor's goes to his office and he is there for hours. He is mixing serums and looking at them under a microscope. He realizes which one is right, but he realizes that he must get home to his wife and kids. We see Dr. Connors walking home and once he arrives there his wife says

Martha: "I made dinner."

Dr. Connors: "thanks sweety".

Martha: "Curt....I need to know.....why have you bee ngone so many hours after everybody leaves? All your students left 4 hours ago."

Dr. Connors: "I was just...grading the students quizzes, thats all, honey."

Martha: "...okay...well, Billy missed you, alot."

Dr. Connors: "I know...listen Martha, I love you both. I would never do anything behind you or Billy's back, I promise."

Martha: "I believe you. I love you curt, and so does Billy."

Dr. Connors: "I love you and Billy more than anything."

Billy runs downstairs and gives Dr. Connos a hug, and says

Billy: "I have been waiting ofr you all day. I love it when your here."

Dr. Connor's stares, smiles, and hugs Billy.

Meanwhile, we see a group of hings running out of a jewlery store with a bunch of jewlery. The alarm is on. the thugs are driving a pickup truck at full speed. Then the camera looks up towards a building and we see Spidey swinging down fast and jumping ontop of the pick up truck. once of the guys in the pickup truck says

Thug in pickup truck: "keep your eyes on the road, I will take care of him!"

Spidey: "Don't count on that chuckles!"

Spidey shoots a web at the thug and ties him to a light post. The camera then zooms into another thug in the pickup truck, he's looking for Spider-man but he's not there. then Spidey lands right in front of the thug, and punches him right out of the pick up truck. There is one thug left, and that is the driver. The camera is now focused on the driver who looks in his mirror and see's Spidey. He then shoot's Spidey but Spidey jumps out of the way, quickly. The thug is dodging cars and is going very fast.The driver thne says in panick and nervousness

Thug: "where did he go!?"

then the camera faces towards the front of the car and we see Spidey land, and say

Spidey: "right here buddy!"

The camera then faces towards the thug, the thug is driving but is still trying to shoot at Spidey. He shoots but Spidey is dodging left and right and then Spidey decides to rip the door off of the car, the camera then is sort of far away as if the car is going but the camera is on the ground. Then the camera shows a bunch of people watching and one of them says

person: "now that is cool!"

Spidey then shoots a web at a building and throws the thug right where the big web is so that the thug lands safely on the web.
Spidey then webs down the brakes and the camera is no facing about 30 feet away from the truck as the truck turns and flips over. A child and mother are in the middle of the road. Spidey says

Spidey: "oh no!"

Spidey then swings, grabs the mother and child and then thankfully the car stops. Everybody is cheering and then Spidey jumps and the camera is with Spidey as He swings as if we are swinging with him.

 

[HughJackFan420]

This is now.. The Official "How YOU would do Spider-Man 4" thread .

I got tired of moving them, merging them, and whatnot.

yeah you pretty much scattered my script notes all over the place. no offense immortal but the smart thing would've just been to leave it the way it was that way you don't mix scripts or ideas with other scripts or ideas and other feedbacks. i don't think we would run out of "PAGES" in this board if everyone had their own thread for their own script so that way they can get their own feedback. i mean if you read pages 1-whatever in this thread i don't know who's talking about what. again no offense but if you can change it back to the way it was that would be appreciated

thank you

 

[KangConquers]

I'd do SM in the accepted fashion. SM vs. Lizard vs. Kraven. Chameleon would appear as Kraven's abused brother (who Kraven would knock the **** out of when something doesn't go his way.) to prove what a bastard Kraven is, and that Kraven is actually the "monster" in the movie.

Towards the end of the movie, Chameleon would shoot Kraven (since Suicide would be a no no for PG-13) thus ending his torment, and Spider-Man would find a cure for Doctor Connors with the help of Miles Warren (Doctor Connors coleague at Empire State University. Peter and Mary Jane would then get married by Stan Lee on top of a hill (remember what Peter said in SM2?)

I did slightly more indepth presentation in the casting thread.

 

[chaseter]

Alright, here is my short script of Spider-Man 4:

ACT 1: The Birth of the Lizard

Peter and MJ are recovering from the harsh times that are now in the past. MJ is still at the jazz club and Peter is still grudging away at school and the Bugle. MJ and Peter often visit Harry's grave to give their loving regards and lay fresh flowers. Peter is still getting advice from Aunt May about getting married.
"Good heavens Peter. If relationships were suppose to be that easy, lord knows I would have got my way everytime! Surviving through the bad times brings you closer together than going through the good times. Even Uncle Ben and I had disagreements here and there, but look how happy we were together. Don't give up Peter, it would be the biggest regret you will ever have, MJ is such a nice girl anyways."

Meanwhile, Dr. Connors has been deeply involved in studying the regenrative effects on the symbiote sample Peter gave him and that of lizard's tails. Peter even notices his usual off topic tangents in class and his office light is always on at night when Peter passes by. Dr. Connors soon lets Peter in on his little experiment since Peter brought him the symbiote sample. Peter looks in disgust at the substance that caused him so much grief. Dr. Connors mentions on how he hopes that the regenerative and growth capabilities coupled with that of lizard DNA will make a formula that will give mammals the ability to re-grow certain body parts. So far, all of his lab rat tests have proven inconclusive with no real effects. On his late visits home for dinner, Connors' wife tells of how she loves him for who he is and another arm isn't going to make him more of a man. His son also thinks his dad is cool the way he is, like any little boy feels about his father.

Dr. Connors injects himself late one night and passes out on his lab bench. Peter comes early to class with Gwen to ask a few questions. Gwen and Peter are shocked to see their beloved teacher passed out on the marble table top. They wake him up and ask if he is alright. He nods, wipes his face and shuffles the two back into the classroom, Gwen's purse if left behind. Connors twitches and itches the place where his missing arm should be as he teaches. Class is dismissed and Connors drudges back into his lab as the class files out. The two see him bending over the table picking up the mess he left in his lab as they walk out. Connors inspects himself in the mirror, his pupils seem dialated and his skin itches something awful. He opens up his coat to notice scales on the nub of his missing arm. He picks at them in disgust and pops his neck. He decides to continue working. The pain is becoming more and more unbreable however and he drops to his knees to examine the pain. Gwen clumsily finds out she left her purse in Connor's lab and heads back up that night to get it. Peter and MJ are having a good night out, walking the streets together and happen to pass by his college. Gwen walks through dark classroom to get to her purse. "Dr. Connors," she softly mutters as she continues to walk. A figure darts by the dimly lit windows, wisping pass her. "Dr. Connor," she asks again as she follows the figure into the lab. A longue tongue licks the exterior of the purse in the dark room and sniffs it and gives a long growl. The figure is now visible inside the glowing room of gadgets and tools, his white lab coat hanging low to the ground and his head stooped below the collar. Gwen reaches to turn on the light but it doesn't work. "GET OUT," the figure yells "GET OUT NOW GWEN," his low hanging tail swipping back and forth, moving chairs and tables. The figure points to the door, his scaly hand now visible through the light of the moon streaming through the windows. Gwen gives out a quick yelp and runs from the classroom. Peter and MJ see her dart onto the campus lawn crying, running from fear.

Gwen tells Peter of the event the next day and Connors is once again missing from lecture. Peter goes to work and J.J. tells him that there have been sightings of giant lizards in the area and he wants pictures. "We've gotten a giant Spider, a giant Octopus, a giant sandcastle, and now a giant Lizard...what's next?" Peter notices Connors office and the glowing lights that usually meant experiments were in progress. He heads up and his Spider sense goes off. He rushes into Connors office as a giant tail swipes at him. The torn lab coat is now the only recognizeable thing of what is now a giant Lizard. The Lizard roars and rushes to attack again. Peter asks "Dr. Connors, is that you?" The Lizard stops, lowly grumbles and jumps out of the window and onto the lawn below. Peter gazes out the window as people scream in terror as the giant Lizard runs past them, throws open a sewer-lid and climbs inside. Peter throws on his mask and suit and follows the Lizard into the sewer. Spider-Man climbs along the walls, looking for signs of the creature. Suddenly, the Lizard leaps out of the shadows and at Spider-Man. A fight ensues and Spider-Man must keep his wits about him as jagged teeth and tail swipes inch near his face. Spider-Man is completely confused at the sight of his once loved mentor now a raging monster trying to kill him. Peter keeps proclaiming that he can help Dr. Connors while the Lizard utters an almost unrecognizeable "No," and continues fighting. The fight spills out into a large water treatment area underground, tunnels pouring water from every direction. Spider-Man lands a powerful kick and the Lizard flys downward into the water. He shakes his head, hisses and scurries into the maze of pipes. "Was that really Dr. Connors," Peter asks himself as he heads back to Connor's lab. He notices all the experiment and the video log of Connor's attempts. He watches it as the camera shows the painful transformation of his mentor into a huge Lizard. The camera suddenly turns into static as the Lizard swipes at it.

MORE TO COME!!!

ACT 2: The Hunter and the Hunted; Enter Kraven

ACT 3: The Trophy and the Friend

 

[I'm Venom]

Here's what I'd love to see in Spider-Man 4:

1. Dr. Connors transforms into Lizard and escapes from his lab.

2. Eddie Brock and Gwen Stacy return.

3. Peter finally proposes to Mary Jane, but then word breaks out about Lizard terrorizing citizens before fleeing underground. Peter dons the suit, but is intercepted by a black, mysterious figure. The figure turns out to be Eddie. He explains that the suit fully bonded with him in the explosion, and he and the suit are now one and call themselves Venom. Spider-Man and Venom proceed to fight from rooftop to rooftop.

4. Venom knows about Gwen, and the little Eddie Brock that's left drives him thirsty for revenge. Gwen is held captive on a tower by Venom, and Spider-Man arrives to fight Venom, who throws Gwen off the tower. Spider-Man catches her with a string of web, but the sudden deceleration snaps her neck. He thinks he has saved her, but when he pulls her up, he realizes she's dead. Captain Stacy is devastated and vengeful, swearing it was Spider-Man's fault that his daughter died.

5. This all leads up to the final battle. The battle starts off with Lizard making mince meat out of cops, then Spider-Man arrives, only to be too late. Captain Stacy tells Spider-Man that Lizard escaped into the sewer and he's the only one who can stop him. Spider-Man then goes after Lizard, only to be joined by Venom.

 

[Immortalfire]

yeah you pretty much scattered my script notes all over the place. no offense immortal but the smart thing would've just been to leave it the way it was that way you don't mix scripts or ideas with other scripts or ideas and other feedbacks. i don't think we would run out of "PAGES" in this board if everyone had their own thread for their own script so that way they can get their own feedback. i mean if you read pages 1-whatever in this thread i don't know who's talking about what. again no offense but if you can change it back to the way it was that would be appreciated

thank you

We try to limit the clutter however we can. It's no different that combining all the "OMG VENOMZ!!111" threads into one.
And I'm sure you are able to backtrack your posts to find your script.

 

[Spider-ManHero12]

We then see Spidey land ontop of a building and into his apartment. Spidey takes off his costume, and gets into bed, he is thinking about how much he loves MJ, and if MJ is going to be all right with marrying him.

the camera then goes black and we open up to a close up of Kraven's face. And as the camera pulls back, we see that Kraven is on his way to NYC, on a motorized boat. Kraven is sitting in on the boat and says

Kraven: "take me to NYC!"

And as Kraven sits there in deep thought, we see a flashback of how Kraven got his powers. We see a doctor giving Kraven jungle eleixirs. We then see Kraven attacking snakes, bulls, and rhinos.

then the camera opens up to morning in NYC. we see the sun rising, and all the buildings. Then the camera show's Peter Parker looking at a picture of Harry, MJ and himself. Peter smiles and then looks at his clock. He is shocked to see what time it is. Peter hurrys to Dr. Connor's class and gets there just in time. The camera then shows the front of a Jazz club, then the camera shows all of the inside of the Jazz club, and then we see MJ. MJ is serving drinks and is shocked to see Gwen in the jazz club. Gwen walks up to MJ and says

Gwen: "umm...hi."

MJ: "Hi..."

Gwen: "Listen...I just wanted to talk to you. you have five minutes?"

MJ: "yeah, sure."

the camera then shows MJ sitting down at a table with Gwen.

Gwen: "I'm sorry that I made it look like me and Peter had something special."

MJ: "It's okay....I was going through a really rough time,"

Gwen: "It's my fault Mary Jane. I shouldn't have when't with him. He told me that you dumped him. I should have known."

MJ listens and you can tell MJ isn't mad.

MJ: "I'm not mad. Peter has been in love with me since as far as I could remember. I knew he was my true love. He did break my heart that night though. He...um....he still loves me, and I love him, I always will. Gwen, we should all forgive eachother. It's not worth being mad at somebody for a long time."

Gwen: "Yeah, I understand. I never really got to know you MJ. You seem like a very nice person, and I think you and Peter should stay togeather."

MJ: "thank you, Gwen. who was your last boyfreind?"

Gwen: "Well he wasn't really my boyfreind, more of a good freind. Last time I talked to him was when I gave Spider-Man the key to the city. I don't know what happened to him, or where he when't."

MJ smiles at Gwen, and Gwen smiles back. The camera then shows Dr. Connor's class. It's almost the end of class. Once the bell rings Dr. Connors says

Dr. Connors: "remember students, look over chapter 7 tonight for the quiz tomorrow."

Peter is about to leave until

Dr. Connors: "wait Peter."

Peter: "yes Dr. Connors?"

Dr. Connors: "since your my top student, I was wondering, would you like to have dinner with me and my wife and son?"

Peter: "Sure. I would love to. See you then."

The camera then turns to Peter's apartment. we see MJ and Ursala talking. We then see Peter walking up the stairs and then

MJ: "Hey Peter! I missed you."

They both hug and Ursala watches, and smiles.

Peter: "I missed you to MJ. Oh, hey Ursala."

Ursala: "Hey Pete, I...."

And then we hear the landlord yell her name.

Mr. Dikovitch: "Ursala! get in here!'

Ursala: "I have to go. I will talk to you later Peter."

Peter: "Okay, bye."

MJ then says

MJ: "Peter, want to go have dinner tonight?"

Peter: "....Ummm....Dr. Connors wanted me to have dinner with him and his family tonight. How about tommorow?"

MJ: "Sure, honey. I will see you then."

They both kiss and hug. The camera then shows a motorized boat arrive at a dock in NYC. The boat driver says

Boat driver: "you need help with those bags?"

Kraven: "no!"

Kraven then walks onto the dock, bag in hand, and finds an empty warehouse. The camera slowly moves around the inside of the warehouse.

Stay tuned for more of my edited script.

 

[HughJackFan420]

We try to limit the clutter however we can. It's no different that combining all the "OMG VENOMZ!!111" threads into one.
And I'm sure you are able to backtrack your posts to find your script.

yeah but speaking of clutter i have to go though everyone elses clutter of scripts and feedbacks and to follow up on who saying what about who's script is a pain in the @%& just thought it would've been easier the way it was before. i mean it's not like we would run out of pages for the board. no biggie but it would be nice for people to have their own threads for their own scripts to get their own feedbacks on it instead of mixing it up with everyone elses.