The Venom Within

[Arcturus]

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[thejon93]

Kick ass, Arcturus. Nice to see you back with the writing

 

[I'm Venom]

Very nice, friend. I’m really looking forward to the first entry.

 

[Arcturus]

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[thejon93]

I'm liking this, so far, 'Arcturus'. Adrian reminds me of Michael Douglas' character from the movie 'Falling Down'. My only real problem with this part is that you pulled out the cliche "Thug Wannabe" trick, where the thugs provoke the character into his coming (extreme) action. Anyhow, all I'm hoping for (from this) is that you build up some real pathos behind Adrian's crazed nature (instead of just making him a loose cannon for villainous intentions).

 

[Arcturus]

Cool, thankyou for the response! I'm glad you like it.

However, I think I could have done much better. I don't know what's going on, I can't seem to stay on focus as of late when it comes to writing.

 

[thejon93]

Cool, thankyou for the response! I'm glad you like it.

However, I think I could have done much better. I don't know what's going on, I can't seem to stay on focus as of late when it comes to writing.

I know what you mean, mate. But don't downsize yourself. The only way to improve your writing is to continue writing, whether it's one project or another. That's why I'm skipping out on this 'Spider-Man 4' project and have begun working on 'Disaster Report'.

Anyhow, whatever you do... I'll (pretty much) always be there to check it out. Good luck, my friend