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this is my transformers fan fiction. it is an alternate version of the new movie. The first 3 parts of this may be hard to understand but after that you will be able to understand just fine
 
Sam and Mikeala had gone into sector seven and were being intergoted by a cop named simmons. "Tell me kids what are you and your alien friends trying to accomplish" asked simmons "i already told you were not trying to destroy you were here to defend you from megatron" replied sam "and tell me whats a megatron" asked simmons "Its that big frozen robot that your hiding from the public" said sam. Simmons pulled out a pistol and pointed it at sam and said "il ask you again, What are you planing" "I already told you were not planing anything" Sam answered "Fine than. I gave you a second chance and you blew it so im saving america from another terrorist" replied simmons. "No" yelled mikeala as she got up from her chair and tackled simmons and started strangling him with her hand cuffs. Simmons was pointing the gun at mikeala when all of a suden there was a crash and the wall to the room came down to reveal ironhide standing at ther other side pointing his gun at simmons. Simmons shot ironhide but the bullets only rickoshet around the room. Ironhide pointed his gun at simmons and said "Let them go or I splater your guts all around the room" "Ironhide were not here to kill anybody, were here to rescue sam,mikeala, and bumblebee while rachet and optomis reason with the secretary of defense and the head of sector seven" said jazz as he came into the room.

Jazz and ironhide ran down the hallway and broke through the wall only to see some sector seven workers shooting some white foam onto bumblebee. Ironhide and jazz pointed there guns at the workers as sam came into the room and started yelling "LET HIM GO, you are ordered by the secretary of defense to let bumblebee go". The workers stoped shooting the foam on bumblebee and let him get up and then him and the rest of the autobots were on there way to the room where they were keeping the all spark.

"Optimus, whats the plan for the all spark" asked ironhide as the autobots came into the room. "The government has decided to let us destroy the all spark because they dont have a use for it." Ironhide pulled a rectangular shape bomb out of his chest and attached it to the all spark and said "After this we'll have two minutes to evacuate sector seven" as he activated the bomb. The whole crew got into a train shaped vehicle that went drove through a tunnel which ended at the out side of sector seven.

Everyone met outside of sector seven and then they heard an explosion and the wall to sector seven exploded. "Do you think megatron was destroyed in the blast?" asked rachet when all of a suden a huge jet flew out from the debris and turned around and transformed into a robot as the deceptacons came up behind him and transformed. "Autobots roll out" said optimus as they charged into battle.
 
The autobots transformed into vehicle form and drove away from sector seven so deceptacons would follow them away from the humans. The autobots made there way to the top of an over pass when all of a suden bone crusher came up in vehicle form and started ramming the sides of jazz and trying to knock him off the sides of the over pass when he accidently broke the side of it making jazz and himself fall of the side. "NO" yelled optimus as he transformed and jumped toward the side of the over pass and reached for jazz but he was too far away so he grabed the claw on bonecrushers back and flung him up to the top of the over pass. Bonecrusher transformed into robot mode and tackled optimus and knocked them both off the side of the overpass. Once they landed optimus got on top of bonecrusher and started punching him in the head. Bonecrusher grabed optimus's shoulders and rolled ontop of optimis and started doing the same thing as optimis noticed jazz fighting megatron on top of a building.
Megatron picked jazz up by the leg as jazz started shooting him. "You want a piece of me megatron huh you want a piece of me" said jazz as he was shooting megatron "Il rip you in half" said megatron as he grabed each of his arms and started to pull. Megatron looked up as he was pulling and was distracted by a meteor shower coming to earth. Jazz took advantage of the situation and broke free and pointed his gun in the oposite direction and fired it and was propeled forward and drop kicked megatron knocking both of them off the building.
Meanwhile across town ironhide was taking on brawl. Brawl,in vehicle mode, Shot a missle as ironhide. Ironhide jumped and fliped over a missle and shot his cannon arms toward the growned, dodging two more missle, than he shot his cannons again at which propelled him toward Brawl. Ironhide head butted Brawl as he transformed getting both of them in a fist fight.
In another part of the city rachet was fighting blackout with some help from the army. Rachet put his leg behind blackout's and pushed him over. blackout rolled over and pushed against the ground and got up than took his hellicopter blades off and threw them at rachet and like a boomarang and they came back. Rachet tackled blackout while some of the military started shooting misseles at blackout. Blackout pushed rachet off of him and got up and transformed into a hellicopter and flew away.
Not far from there barricade was getting his revenge for there earlier battle on bumblebee. Barricade started punching bumblebee in the chest. Bumblebee started punching barricade back hitting him in the head. Barricade and bumblebee were ecschanging blows when bumblebee looked up and saw starscream and blackout flyig over head and he realized he had to do something about them.
 
Optimus was fighting bonecrusher and saw jazz fighting megatron and realized if he didnt act fast jazz was going to die. Optimus triped bonecrusher and ran to hide behind a pilar under the bridge. Bonecrusher quickly followed optomis behind the pillar only to find optimus with a sword ejected from his hand. "This is for jazz" said optimus as he cut off bonecrusher's arm and transformed into a semitruck and drove off to help out jazz.
Bumblebee was fighting barricade and saw blackout and starscream flying over his head and he knew he had to do something. Bumblebee transformed into a camero and drove away and than turned around and drove toward barricade. Bumblebee transformed and ran and jumped and with one leg kicked barricade and got higher in the air and grabed blackout's back propellar and landed on a building. While holding blackout's back propellar bumblebee started spining and than let go throwing blackout at starscream making both of them crash in the air and land on top of barricade making a three decepticon pile up. Bumblebee looked down from the building he was on top of and saw ironhide fighting brawl so he transformed into a camero and drove off the building and crashed into brawl which made brawl black out.
Megatron was fighting jazz and was ready to kill him. Jazz leaped at megatron but megatron just grabed him with one hand and pointed his gun at him with the other. Megatron started charging his gun and said "Time to die autobot" "PULL THE TRIGER AND YOU DIE" said optimus as he came up behind megatron and held his sword up to megatron's neck. The rest of the autobots drove up and transformed and pointed there guns at megatron. "Scorponok attack" said megatron as a robot scorpion jumped out of a whole in the ground and tackled optimus and tuneled back into the ground. The autobots started shooting at the ground as megatron turned into a jet and flew off. "Optimus what should we do" asked jazz "Let them retreit that meteor shower had to have brought plenty of transformers to earth that we need to find before megatron" said optimus as him and the rest of the transformers with sam and mikeala went on there way to a junk yard where they would set up their head quarters.
 
Maybe if you make it less jumbled you'd get more responses?
 
ya gotta unjumble it please. then we'll be able to understand it better.
 
autobots

optimus prim- transforms into a semi truck
jazz- transforms into a car
ironhide-transforms into a truck
rachet-transforms into a search and rescue humer
bumblebee-transforms into a camero

decepticons

megatron-transforms into a cybertron jet
starscream-transforms into a jet
blackout-transforms into a hellicopter
bone crusher-h.mine protected vehicle
brawl-transforms into a tank

sorry about how i called brawl devastator. that just goes to show you not to trust wikipedia. I just played the game and saw the toy and found out his name was brawl. this means i will have to edit parts of the story ive posted and ones i havent yet
 
The autobots and sam and mikela had been waiting in there new base as they listened to police reports of the new transformers. they had heard one about a monster truck at a monster truck show attacking the audience and a race car coming alive and walking over competiteon and one about a sports car getting up and walking out of the dealership. "Ok autobots i think we should get to this sports car transformer before the decptacons do" said optimus "but optimus this monster truck guy sounds pretty strong why dont we go after him" asked ironhide "because i remember him, he was one of megatrons favorite soldiers, his name was monstron and he might have killed me if i hadnt knocked him out and lost him in space. I guess the explosion of the all spark must have lead him here" explained optomis. "Ok guys lets move out, sam mikela you stay here and work on the base while we find this new guy" said jazz.

The autobots made there way to the car dealership and heard a car moving fast. "That must me him" said bumblebee. "Hold it right there, whos side are you on" said optomis. The a blue car with flames on its paint job came towards them and transformed into a blue robot "My name is sideburn and im and i guess im an autobot.

After sideburn got to know the team, there was a crash and the autobots turned to see a monster truck running over the cars. The monstertruck turned into a big tansformer about the size of optomis came forward. "Optomis im back" said monstron as he punched optomis in the side of the head. Optomis fell to the ground as ironhide jumped ontop of monstron and started punching him in the head. All of a suden the was a thud and a missle hit ironhide knocking him off monstron.

The autobots saw that the decepticons had come to help monsterus. Barricade, in his car form, drove toward bumblebee and transformed and tackled bumblebee. Before barricade could do any real damage a police jeep drove up and on its loud speaker said "Step down officer or else i will use force". Bonecrusher yelled and ran toward the car but before he could hit it the car zoomed a few feet away and transformed into a robot somewhat similar to rachet and piledrived bonecrusher. Rachet attacked monstron and tried to keep him busy but monstron was to strong and started beating rachet. Jazz jumped onto scorponox and they too joind the fight. Megatron ran towards optimus who also did the same. Megatron and Optimus clashed and started fighting fiercly. Ironhide had taken on brawl again and they started shooting at each other. Sideburn took on blackout for his first fight but was inexperienced and couldnt do too much damage.

The battle went on and starscream came in and flew barely over the cars when out of no where a yellow car transformed and grabed onto starscream and they crashed into a building. Bumblebee turned into a car and ran into brawl while ironhide took on barricade. The new cop autobot had taken out his gun and started shooting at bonecrusher not giving him a chance to fightback. Rachet was taking a beating from monstron who was way stronger than he thought. Optimus seemed evenly mached with megatron but was still losing the fight when all of a suden megatron transformed into a jet and flew at optimus. Optimus ducked and megetron ran into monstro accidently which knocked him off rachet. Jazz was easily beating scorponox when all of a suden scorponox transformed ,into a robot with scorpion claw hands and scopion legs, who started fighting jazz back but was almost an even mach.

While fighting optimus,megatron looked up to see something yellow and grey in the sky heading right for him which ended
up to be the new yellow autobot taking control of starscream which ran into megatron knocking him off optimus. Optimus prime and the new autobot took advantage of the situation and pointed there guns at the decepticons heads. "Autobots quick stun attacks" commanded optomis. Ironhide realized how easy he could beat barricade, he jumped and rolled to the side of him and kicked the back of his legs knocking barricade to the ground. The new cop car transformed into his police jeep and ran into bonecrusher's legs making him fall forward barely missing the new cop. Bumblebee was smaller and faster than brawl so he easily dodged his attacks and hit back with strong counter attacks. brawl swung at bumblebee but bumblebee just dodged it and rolled to the back of brawl and grabed his shoulders and pulled hard and made him fall to the ground. Rachet realized he wasnt as strong as monstron but alout quicker, so he transformed into his hummer form and started driving but monstron was right on his tail. Rachet drove right towards a building and when ho got within a few feet of the building and drifted and turned around only he was a few feet to the right. Monstron didnt have the agility to turn so he ran into the building stopping him in the building, so rachet ran into the building and a sword ejected from his hand and he cut into the back of the monster truck. Jazz was fighting scorponox but he couldnt trip him because he had 3 feet on each side, so he quickly dodged scorponox's next attack and rolled behind him. Jazz put his arms under scorponx's shoulders and picked him up and slammed him on the ground. Sideburn would have taken down blachout but before he could do anything blackout transformed and flew away.

The autobots all had the guns pointed at the decepticons at close range which could severely damage them if they fired. All of a suden about 10 helicopters came and sorounded the transformers. "Only shoot at the ones pointing guns i repeat only shoot the ones with guns" said one of the hellicopters on its loud speaker. Siderburn yelled and jumped and rockets fired out of his feet and he grabed the helicopter who said the order and it transformed and kicked sideburn off of him. Megetron turned into a jet and ran into optimus and flew away while starscream and blackout folowed. Brawl transformed and shot bumblebee and one of the helicopters and drove a way while mostrus also transformed and pushed rachet over and then transformed back and drove away. Barricade and bonecrusher transformed and sped off to join the others, while the hellicopters followed.
"Ok who are these new guys" asked bumblebee "Im red alert and this yellow car is my partner hotshot and we've been looking for you optimus"said the cop car. "well welcome to the team" said optimus prime as they headed back to there base to help sam and mikeala fix up the base.
 
i dont want to sound desperate but please some one read and post on this story
 
Well I can say you manage to spell Optimus Prime differently just about everytime you wrote it.

But really nobody is reading it because it's not written properly. It's all slammed together with little to no punctuation and in improper use of paragraphs.

Basically, it's just hard to read.
 
ok i just started reading and unscrambling the story and i just want to say im very sorry i didnt realize how many typing errors and im trying to edit them
 
Spider-Girl™;12335549 said:
Well I can say you manage to spell Optimus Prime differently just about everytime you wrote it.

But really nobody is reading it because it's not written properly. It's all slammed together with little to no punctuation and in improper use of paragraphs.

Basically, it's just hard to read.
im sorry i had the first couple of parts on marvel.com and than something happened to it and no one could read it anymore. so i did it again on a word pad and i kind of rushed cause i wanted the story back up. and when i copy and paste this from my word pad the pragraphs arent showing up right
 
ok has anyone here tried paragraphing, WELL IT DOESENT WORK, seriously ive made like 6 spaces but they dont show up
 
ok i just corected all the errors i found in the first 3 parts, sorry about the paragraphs i made plenty of spaces before the first word but they never show up
 
ok i just corected all the errors i found in the first 3 parts, sorry about the paragraphs i made plenty of spaces before the first word but they never show up

For paragraphing, try hitting ENTER instead.

Geez. :rolleyes:
 
ok i finally made paragraphs and corrected all the optimus prim typing errors and changed the monster trucks name to monstron and i am going to post the next part of the story. thanks to the people who have helped me correct the story cause i never noticed how many errors were in the story
 
The autobots started listening to police reports of cars without drivers causing damage and they were everywhere so they decided they would have to split up to get all of them. Optimus stood up and said "Ok jazz, bumblebee, sideburn, and hotshot; you go after the two racers tearing up the track. Me, ironhide, rachet, and red alert will check out the reports of a tractor getting up and walkling around."

Jazz and the rest of his team got to the race track only to find a drag racer and a stock car raming into each other trying to knock the other off the track. Jazz's team decided to observe there behavior a little longer so they could figure out which was the autobot and which was the deceptacon when all of a suden a tank broke through the wall and came through along whith a cop car, a h.mine protected vehicle , and a helcopter. The two race cars were headed toward the tank and once the got close they transformed and jumped over brawl revealying themselves to be mirage and soundwave, who were famous autobot and decepticon warriors on cybertron. Mirage jumped over brawl and shot a missle out of the cannon on his shoulder while soundwave stayed on the ground and shot at mirage with the minigun on his shoulder. Mirage transformed back into his dragster and drove farther around the track when he saw barricade coming right for him. Barricade was about to run into mirage when sideburn rammed into the side of barricade knocking him of course. Devestator started shooting at mirage when jazz drove toward him and transformed threw himself into the side of brawl's tank form. Bonecrusher drove beside mirage and was about to stab his back with it when hotshot ran up to him and grabed the claw and lifted him over his head and slamed him on the ground. Blackout came in flying over mirage and droped a cable out of the back of him when bumblebee grabed on just before it hooked onto mirage and started spining around and let him go and he flew right into brawl.

Meanwhile hundreds of miles away optimus and his team drove up to the farm that was reported to have a tractor walking around. The autobots looked up and saw two jets flying over them and one of them transformed and grabed a boy who was playing in the yard near the house of the farmer. Megatron picked up the boy by his shirt and threw him into the air making the boy scream for his life. "BILLY" yelled a tractor as it transformed into a robot about the size of optimus and ran and jumped into the air and grabed the boy and tackled megatron "billy get your parents and get as far away from here as possible, il come find you when its safe to come back" said the tractor robot as he started fighting megatron. Rachet ran to help the new robot when all of a suden a giant scorpion jumped out of the ground and tackled rachet. Scorponok got off rachet and transformed into a robot and opened up his drill armes to reveal missle silos which he used to shoot missles at rachet. Starscream swooped down from the sky to bomb the area but before he could do anything redalert jumped into the air and grabed each of starscream's wings and slamed him into the ground. Optimus saw a monstertruck trearing up the field "monstron" said optimus to himself as he ran into the field and pulled out his gun and started shooting at monstron. Monstron transformed and tryd to ignore the lazzers bieng fired on him and tackled optimus. Ironhide ran to help the new robot who megatron was now on top of and beating him half to death. Ironhide started shooting at megatron as he ran and once he got close he tackled him and then him and the tractor were working togethor to fight megatron.

The two team's battles raged on each autobot threw punches at there decptacon as the did the same each team fighting over soundwave, mirage,and the new tractor robot named maxitrack.
 
so are there any compliments. come on all that editing errors and stuff deserves something good from the story
 
you know the only thing i miss about marvel.com is that people read my story there and no one noticed the errors but than me and my stupid self had to say swear words to the mods because of the bugs on there sight
 

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