emmymae
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Hi,
I have some difficulty understanding your writing. It's a good idea for a plot though and at least you have Gambit. But Gambit would never be part of the Evil Brotherhood of Mutants. He passionately hates Magneto. Gambit actually worked for Sinister because he helped him with his powers, but Sinister used him. And his steel pole is called a bo staff and it's made out of adamantium. You give Rogue a much more substantial part and that's great. If you can't tell already, I'm a big fan of Gambit and Rogue.
You just have to work on your grammar, do some more research so you really know the characters and the X-Men plots, and put the story into screenplay format. After you post a bit more, you can put your story into it's own thread.
I have some difficulty understanding your writing. It's a good idea for a plot though and at least you have Gambit. But Gambit would never be part of the Evil Brotherhood of Mutants. He passionately hates Magneto. Gambit actually worked for Sinister because he helped him with his powers, but Sinister used him. And his steel pole is called a bo staff and it's made out of adamantium. You give Rogue a much more substantial part and that's great. If you can't tell already, I'm a big fan of Gambit and Rogue.
You just have to work on your grammar, do some more research so you really know the characters and the X-Men plots, and put the story into screenplay format. After you post a bit more, you can put your story into it's own thread.
