BvS Write-A-Scene for the Superman/Batman movie

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  1. Gamingboy Registered

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    It's a SHH tradition...

    INT- LEXCORP TOWER- DAY
    LEX LUTHOR sits at his desk, his back to the large STAS-esque windows the give him a view of the rebuilding Metropolis. He is viewing a news report about how mercenary John Corben, who tried to assassinate him a few days before during a ribbon-cutting, is still in extremely critical condition at Byrne Street General Hospital after a car accident he suffered while being pursued by Superman. Suddenly, a beep is heard. He reaches over and presses a button on his speaker, and the voice of his assistant, MERCY GRAVES echoes from it.

    MERCY
    Sir, Mr. Wayne is here for the One-Thirty...

    LEX
    Send him in, Mercy.

    A beat, and then BRUCE WAYNE enters the room, wearing a suit and looking a bit tired.

    LEX (standing up to go and shake Bruce's hand)
    Bruce! Glad to see you...

    Bruce begrudgingly extends his hand and gives Lex a firm handshake, engaging in small-talk:

    BRUCE
    Lex, I'm impressed, I must say that you are being quite the humanitarian rebuilding downtown, despite that... critic... a few days ago.

    Lex smiles and then replies...

    LEX (lifting his finger up high in the air for emphasis, like he's saying he's number one)
    What aliens destroy, man will rebuild, Mr. Wayne! I'm sure you would do the same if Gotham's pests ever went above the level of rodents, clowns and.. what was it, a clay-person? Ridiculous.

    Lex then turns and walks back towards his desk, allowing Wayne to smirk a bit. He would do the same for Gotham... but he knows full well that Gotham's clowns are no joke.

    Lex sits down and gets to business.

    LEX
    Now, what brings the head of the Wayne empire to Metropolis? If you wanted to give me a get-well-soon card in person, I'm sorry to disappoint, but I'm perfectly fine. Corben missed completely.

    BRUCE
    Actually, it's about something else...

    BRUCE reaches into his coat and produces a copy of the Daily Planet. He puts it on the desk of Luthor. LUTHOR THREATENS TO SHUT DOWN PLANET, blares the headline.

    BRUCE
    I want to buy the Daily Planet from you.

    LEX
    Oh, now, Bruce, you know that print is dying, why would you want to waste your money?

    Bruce picks up the paper and reads a bit from it:

    BRUCE
    "According to sources inside the LexCorp conglomerate's news and information division, CEO Lex Luthor has become personally displeased with the Planet's coverage on Superman- believing it to be too positive- and is enraged by the recent reports by Lois Lane and Clark Kent that allege that LexCorp used illegal means in order to gain the contracts for the rebuilding of downtown Metropolis..."

    He drops it on Luthor's desk again. A beat.

    BRUCE
    Wayne Enterprises was also bidding for that contract, Lex.

    Lex rolls his eyes, then gets up and turns to look over Metropolis.

    LEX
    Bruce, before those aliens came, we were important. We could DO things! But now, our fates are being decided by some man from space who flies around in underwear deciding what is right and wrong like he thinks he's some messiah. And yet we all seem to forget that it was because of HIM that Zod came, because of HIM that so many people died that day in this city.

    (
    As Lex is monologuing, Bruce "accidentally" drops a thumb drive by Lex's desk.)

    LEX (cont.)
    And yet, because only this city was destroyed instead of the entire world, the sheep below have decided that he is the world's greatest hero... forgetting that he was willing to kill one of his own kind. If he's willing to do that, who knows what he'd be willing to do to us mere mortals? Why, even John Corben... why didn't Superman save him?

    Lex turns back towards Bruce.

    LEX
    I've read your biography, Mr. Wayne, I know what happened to your parents. That was just one ordinary desperate man with a gun... who knows what a desperate SUPERman would...

    BRUCE interrupts Lex.

    BRUCE
    I'm not here for your pontificating, Lex. I came here for the Planet.

    LEX
    Oh, please, Wayne... are you so sore over losing the contract to Metropolis that you'd protect that rag just so that my victory has to also bring endless aggravation to me?

    BRUCE (glibly)
    No, but I am a big fan of an independent and uncensored press... (cracks a smile) even if it does like sending paparazzi after me.

    LEX reaches down and grabs the newspaper and throws it to BRUCE.

    LEX
    How much?

    BRUCE
    $100 million.

    LEX
    You're an idiot, your board of directors would have your head if you had any other last name. Come to our second attempt at a ribbon-cutting tomorrow and we're announce it there.

    BRUCE
    Thank you, Lex... I'm sure that the people of Metropolis will thank you as well.

    BRUCE begins to leave and opens the door, but LEX then shouts something else:

    LEX
    Oh, Bruce, I was just curious... would Wayne Enterprises be interested in collaborating with LexCorp on a safeguard in case Superman turns against us? The government has let us take a look at some of the Kryptonian technology, I'm sure...

    BRUCE
    I don't like guns.

    The door slams. Lex is again alone. He sees the dropped Wayne Enterprises thumb-drive and, seeing a possibility of getting some of a competitor's secrets, quickly grabs ahold of it and puts it in his computer.

    CUT TO: LEXCORP ELEVATOR
    Bruce now is browsing the contents of Lex's computer- the thumb-drive had a trojan horse on it- and on Lex's computer he finds a communication between him and John Corben...

    BRUCE (quietly to himself, in a voice that sounds more Batman than Bruce Wayne)
    False flag...
     
  2. Hyde Ooga-Chaka

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    That was excellent :up:
     
  3. ThePowerCosmic Hyped Up

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    I did like that. Bruce's "I don't like guns" line was the greatest to me for some reason. So simple, but it says a lot. But I do remembering hearing it in that WF cartoon, so maybe that's why.
     
  4. ЯɘvlveR danneB

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    lol, soon as i read "accidentally dropped a thumb drive" i thought you just got batman'd!
     
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    Yeah, that's kind of where I got the idea, too. I have another idea for a scene- which sort of sets up the REAL reason why Bruce is in Metropolis (oh, he does want to buy the Daily Planet, but...).
     
  6. ThePowerCosmic Hyped Up

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    I'd love it if you posted it! Maybe I'll come up with a scene if my imagination is feeling active enough. :woot:
     
  7. Gamingboy Registered

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    I'll probably put it up later.
     
  8. Tra-El Registered

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    Awesome stuff, Gamingboy. I have an idea for a flashback scene between young Clark and Lex Luthor as childhood friends crossing paths and why Lex ultimately hates Superman and knows who Superman's secret identity is...
     
  9. StraightSix Registered

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    That's a great scene! WB should hire you!
     
  10. ThePowerCosmic Hyped Up

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    Cool. I even liked that finger-pointing thing you did with Luthor when he was talking to Bruce. I actually pointed my finger up and moved it back and forth as I read that line. :woot:
     
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    LEX
    You're an idiot, your board of directors would have your head if you had any other last name. Come to our second attempt at a ribbon-cutting tomorrow and we're announce it there.

    Rookie mistake, throw this in the trash!

    Just messing, this was really, really good.
     
  12. ThePowerCosmic Hyped Up

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    Omg, I just realized that Lex put that thumb drive in his computer after Wayne "accidentally" dropped it. Genius. That's some slick Batman s**t right there.
     
  13. kguillou Registered

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    That was a good scene, man. Quite honestly, this made me more excited for this film and the possiblities. I really hope Goyer writes a scene akin to this one where Lex and Bruce "square off".
     
  14. MrMaooz Registered

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    That was pretty good!
     
  15. Deserana 2005/2008/2012

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    Really good! I may do one myself I do like a bit of writing.
     
  16. Gamingboy Registered

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    Yeah, I actually read somewhere that some companies and governments are worried about stuff like that, since curiosity gets the best of everyone. When I read that I immediately thought: "That is so something Batman would do."
     
  17. I SEE SPIDEY Registered

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    Great job Gamingboy! I really enjoyed reading that. :up:
     
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    Really cool. Here's something I've posted elsewhere but it works here. It was from this one thought somebody else had about that Comic-Con quote about a possible direction that rather than Bruce/Batman saying that, what if it was Lex Luthor saying that to a beaten down Superman. It's not in a movie-script format like and impressive as the 1st post and not as detailed. Call it a draft of a draft of a draft haha.

    (Superman is all bloodied and beaten on the ground with his costume in tatters in the big climatic battle with Lex in the Zod armor with Kryptonite ring)

    (Camera moves to close-up of Lex with his hands at Superman's throat)

    Lex: "I want you to remember you disgusting filthy... ALIEN!"

    (Camera flashes to Clark's bloody face as he gasps to breathe)

    Lex: "In all the years to come in your most private moments"

    (Camera flashes to Clark's bloody face again as he slowly passes out)

    Lex: "I want you to remember my hand at your throat"

    (Camera then flashes to Lois running in and witnessing the ensuing scene and starts to tear up with hand at the mouth)

    Lex: "I want you to remember the one man who beat you, LEX LUTHOR!"

    Lois: "NO!"

    (As Lex moves to deliver the killing blow smoke bombs roll in releasing smoke disorienting Lex)

    (Batman jumps out, punching Lex out of the way, who gets knocked back toward Lois, and he grabs her, holding her by her throat as a human shield. Superman strains and manages a tiny bit of heat vision near Lex. Lex taunts him for missing, then Batman sneaks behind Luthor. Luthor raises his gauntlets up to hit Batman, but Lois headbutts Luthor and knocks him out. Batman calms Lois, and puts the Kryptonite back into to the lead box.Superman thanks him, and then flies an unconscious Luthor near a tv station, in order to publicly humiliate him (like Luthor has tried to do earlier).

    I also imagined a scene where both Superman and Batman saves the life of a one Amazonian Princess aka Princess Diana before she became Wonder Woman as a way of introducing her to the audience. If people want one, I'll try and get one together unless someone beats me to it.
     
  19. ThePowerCosmic Hyped Up

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    That's an interesting idea, smallville fan. Giving the line to Lex instead... I like it a lot.
     
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    Superman goes to snap jokers neck

    Batman: No that's enough.

    Superman: His a homicidal maniac that will kill millions.

    Batman: There is always another wa....... Wait aren't our roles reversed? Your meant to be the homely boyscout and me the on the edge antihero.
     
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    P { margin-bottom: 0.08in; } Okay, here's that other scene I was thinking of. It takes place after Corben's assassination attempt on Lex and his car accident when he tries to avoid Superman but before any sort of opening credits.

    EXT- GOTHAM CITY DOCKS AND SHIPYARD- NIGHT
    It's raining in Gotham, the pavement's becoming puddles, the dirt becoming mud, and the sky as dark as the the souls of the criminals that inhabit it. It is one of these muddy patches that we see a yellowed and wet copy of the
    Gotham Globe, a Daily News-style tabloid, showing the Superman logo and the headline- MAN OF STEEL! It is then that a foot steps down onto it, a police boot. The newspaper becomes stuck to the police officer's boot, but he doesn't care, and as he approaches a warehouse with a megaphone in hand, SWAT teams alongside him, we see it is not the Commissioner Gordon everyone was expecting, but instead DETECTIVE HARVEY BULLOCK, fat but fit, with an unkempt face. We hear some idle chat between some of the other cops, about how Clayface is on the loose, how somebody tried to shoot Lex Luthor in Metropolis, about how the Commissioner is at some magic show with his daughter... but they all stop with a few glares from Bullock. He raises the megaphone and speaks. One of the SWAT team members behind him stares down and sees the paper stuck to Bullock's foot, but doesn't do anything but roll his eyes.

    BULLOCK (into megaphone)
    Attention, this is Harvey Bullock of the GCPD, drop your weapons and come out with your hands up!



    A beat. Nothing. Then gunfire, screams.


    BULLOCK
    C'mon!


    The police rush towards the warehouse, with but then, upon reaching the door, notice that the sounds have ended, replaced only by some pained groaning. Bullock turns to a cop.


    BULLOCK
    I'm going in.


    A female police officer- screw it, let's call her Renee Montoya- not too far away is incredulous, shocked at the idea he'll go in alone.


    MONTOYA
    But, Detective Bullock...


    BULLOCK
    Don't 'Detective Bullock' me, if it works for our new commish, it works for me....


    CUT TO:
    INT- WAREHOUSE – NIGHT
    The warehouse has haphazard lighting, with some of it of it having been destroyed in the battle. But there is enough lighting for us to see a few mooks knocked out, some storage boxes and other containers, and for us to see the door that BULLOCK busts in through.


    He steps forward a few steps and sees an imposing man in kevlar body armor that has been cut up, a stylized balaclava (like the usual mask of KGBeast) sits not too far away from him. The camera follows BULLOCK as he walks up to the man, he kneels by him and notices a BATARANG laying nearby. He grabs it, lifts it up, and pokes the man with it, producing a half-awake groan. Then a voice comes from the shadow that causes Bullock to drop the Batarang, the voice of the Batarang's original owner... the voice of THE BATMAN!


    BATMAN
    His name is Anatoli Knyazev. He's a mercenary, ex-Russian Military. He and his thugs were here to protect shipments.


    BULLOCK
    Shipments of what?


    BULLOCK finally realizes the newspaper stuck to his boot and picks up and uses the discarded Batarang to get it off as Batman speaks.


    BATMAN
    Something from the India. It's gone now, Knyazev and his thugs were just cleaning up, getting rid of the evidence. Obviously our informant didn't tell us in time.



    BULLOCK
    What would these mooks want to protect from India? Curry?


    A beat, just long enough for you to imagine Batman thinking about how much he wished Jim Gordon was there instead of Harvey Bullock.


    BATMAN
    I don't know. It wasn't drugs or guns, though. It was something else. And I'm going to go find it.


    Cut to Batman in a corner of the warehouse, not truly visible in anything but as a silhouette. He is looking at something- a delivery slip? A manifest? A letter? We can't see it...


    BATMAN (cont.)
    Tell Jim that I'll be out of town for a few days.


    Back to Bullock...


    BULLOCK
    But what if Clayface shows himself?



    BATMAN
    ...Then I'll come back. But something was happening here that's bigger than Gotham.


    Bullock gets back up fully on his feet, dropping the batarang to the ground as he goes to check out the shipping containers and crates.


    BULLOCK
    Yeah, well, let me take a look.


    He turns on his flashlight and moves close to one open and empty crate. A label is on the side of it.


    Close in the label: SHIP TO LEXCORP LAB FACILITY, METROPOLIS.


    BULLOCK
    Luthor? What the hell does he want with stuff coming through Gotham?


    Silence.


    Bullock is seen from above, turning and looking around.

    BULLOCK

    Batman? (beat) Batman?


    The Batman, of course, has left the building. And the camera pans back to that batarang... now sitting next to that old newspaper. We see them next to each other: The Batarang and the Newspaper. The floor of the warehouse fades away, and now only the paper and the Batarang remain. Soon, the rest of the paper fades, and we see just two things, two icons, soaring on the movie screen: the SUPERMAN S and the BATMAN LOGO. And then, they move towards each other, COLLIDING TO FORM THE LOGO OF THE FILM. ROLL OPENING CREDITS!
     
  22. ЯɘvlveR danneB

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    awesome stuff smallville fan and gamingboy. I wasn't too keen on the kryptonite being in this universe but, i think it works great as a plot device to bring batman and superman together because it shows the batman in his habitat, in the streets.
     
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    Just imagining the logo coming together gave me chills.
     
  24. ThePowerCosmic Hyped Up

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    This movie better not disappoint, because Gamingboy's scenes so far have me hyped and my expectations are higher. That was good. I need more scenes, Gamingboy!

    "What would these mooks want to protect from India? Curry?" This was too funny. Sounds just like something a *****ebag like Bullock would say.
     
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    I have a cool idea in mind so I hope it will translate over to writing. Compliments of GAMINGBOY for inspiration to write. AWESOME, AWESOME thread!


    WARNER BROTHERS LOGO

    FADE IN

    --Arial view--
    METROPOLIS.

    A faint eerie glow from our over-sized yellow sun glistens behind a thick, musky cloud of dust that has spread throughout a once beautiful city skyline.

    Behind it, piercing blue skies of what would of been a brisk summer day.

    Hundreds of pieces of office paper happily dance through the heavy air of sad death.

    --A quick shot of a flock of WHITE DOVES fleeing elsewhere.

    [CLOSE UP]

    CAMERA 1
    --Rubble--
    A single NIKE shoe; laces untied; corroded with powdery dust of falling debris.

    CAMERA 2
    A Teddy Bear; one eye shattered; barley recognizable from the manifestation of burning ash.

    [/CLOSEUP]

    --Inside ground level of a hotel lobby; shattered glass everywhere--

    --Silence & Muted--like a 1920's picture film--

    The camera slowly moves closer and closer towards two firetrucks speeding through the city
    streets in the distance.

    --Dramatic slow motion--NO SOUND--

    Fire Fighters hanging on the sides of their fire trucks; commotion; ringing sirens and screaming in bravery
    as the rotating glow of orange and red sirens pierce through the alleyways of a once
    crowded intersection as CITY-RESCUE races against time to find survivors of this fatal alien invasion.

    --A whispering VOICE-OVER is heard--

    VOICE
    My city. My poor, poor city. Ruined.

    --Lens-flare-- to a glossy sky-scrapper window where we can only makeout a set of blood-shot eyes reflecting back at us;
    stalking, gazing at the surreal damage and destruction.

    VOICE
    I should have known this day would come. Years of power. Decades of hard work. Gone.

    --PAUSE--

    VOICE
    --SCREAMS--
    IMBECILE!

    --Back-shot of this figure looking out at the Metropolitan skyline. Standing spine towards the camera with his hands behind his back.

    The reflection this time ricocheting off the adjacent window as we see a "LEXCORP" billboard shadowing the beam of sunlight
    on the floor beneath.

    --Head tilts towards a flat-screen television mounted in the corner of the room. News coverage and reporters seen across the globe bringing us this special news bulletin.


    VOICE
    --WHISPER--
    Nobody threatens war against LEX LUTHOR and lives to see another day..


    LEX LUTHOR
    --SCREAMS-
    ..NOBODY!

    --CLOSEUP shot at the reveal of LEX LUTHOR as his face escapes a silhouette of himself against the wall beside him.

    LEX LUTHOR:
    What nerve. Petty alien. I warned it. I threatened it. In the end, it just couldn't help itself, could it?

    --LEX stumbles over to his abandoned office chair. Throws it aside. LEXCORP evacuated. LEX leans over with both arms on his desk, hands shaking.
    He slowly reaches under his top drawer and pulls out a double-shot glass as he pours a flow of WHISKEY to the brim.

    --Putting the wine glass up to his lips; stops for a brief second-- smells the WHISKEY around his nose--

    --SMIRKS--

    LEX LUTHOR
    Clark Kent..

    --PAUSE--

    ..is going to wish he had never been born....

    --FLASHBACK--

    To be continued..
     
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