Writing Competition #2: Enter the Phoenix

[ToriL90]

Thanks.

 

[BobJM]

Great scenes guys

 

[La_She-Beast]

Rats!

Don't worry Toril90, it's an interesting scene anyways. I liked the idea of the jersey.

And flavio, I liked yours too.I wish it was longer, heh

 

[TKing]

Thanks Bobby and TKing. Actually the scene was supposed to end before Storm comes in...but I just thought Storm could have one or two words with her. After I just read it again, I don't think it was a good idea. I should have finished without Ororo.

Nonetheless, scenes between those two are gladly welcome.

 

[TKing]

Ok, here's mine. It could use some work, and it's not all exciting, but I wanted to delve a little bit more into Jean's history. Enjoy:

EXT. FOREST - DAY

Phoenix, silent and regal, watches the mutant army from afar, perched on a shadowy hillside. She's unsettled -- reveal a flash of FIRE in her eyes:

CUT TO:
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INT. XAVIER INSTITUTE - CORRIDOR - NIGHT

A figure moves fast -- Jean (aged 14) rushes head-long into the darkness of the Institute's corridors, her eyes streaming with tears.

XAVIER (O.S.)
Are you lost, Ms Grey?

Caught by the voice, Jean halts. She turns... finding CHARLES XAVIER standing calmly in the doorway of an office, a wide smile adorning his face.

JEAN
I did it again, Professor.

INT. XAVIER INSTITUTE - OFFICE - NIGHT - MOMENTS LATER

Xavier retreats calmly behind his desk; Jean, protesting wildly, scrambles into a chair opposite.

JEAN
I didn't mean to, Professor. I swear I didn't!

XAVIER
I believe you.

JEAN
[Scowling]
If it wasn't for that puffed-up witch...

XAVIER
As a telepath myself, I am well aware of your animosity towards Ms Frost and do not require you to finish that sentence.

JEAN
I couldn't control it.

XAVIER
[A comforting smile]
That's why you're here, isn't here? Mishaps are a necessary step we must take in learning.

JEAN
It's like... I have too much power. And everyone knows it. I'm afraid, Professor.

XAVIER
I doubt the others will hold it against you, Ms Grey -

JEAN
[Sternly]
No, Professor. I'm afraid for them.

INT. SUBBASEMENT - VIEWING ROOM - NIGHT - LATER

Xavier stands with a strong-jawed, handsome figure: ERIK LENSHERR, who watches Jean through a viewing glass with surprising affection.

ERIK
Is this really necessary, Charles? Were we really destined to halt the future evolution laid out for us?

XAVIER
Her future is not a profitable one, Erik. Her mind is in turmoil, the loss of her childhood friend... I fear her powers will only continue to grow stronger.

ERIK
Your ideals are different to mine, Charles.

XAVIER
[A small grin]
There was a time when we inseparable. Do you remember?

ERIK
Vividly, my friend. There's not a reason why that should change.

XAVIER
You seek to enslave the world, Erik. I simply hope to live in it.

ERIK
You think mankind will ever accept us?

XAVIER
We will teach them how.

ERIK
What of Jean? Stripping away her powers, Charles, you're denying her destiny.

XAVIER
I'm offering her a life. Without my help, her powers will become uncontrollable. A danger to herself... and others.

Erik turns back to the young redhead; his face contorted with strict determination.

ERIK
We'll see.

INT. SUBBASEMENT - INFIRMARY - NIGHT - MOMENTS LATER

Jean lays flat on the medical table, biting her lip. Above her, hunches the Professor. He outstretches his hands, placing them either side of her head.

JEAN
[Nervously]
Will it hurt?

XAVIER
Not at all. This is for the best, Jean. For all of us. I promise.

EXT. FOREST - DAY

Phoenix stirs, her face betraying a look of unease and confusion.

 

[BobJM]

So far, TKing, your entry definitely has my vote. I loved the flashback!

I'll be entering my entry within the next few days.

 

[TKing]

Thanks for that. It's still early days, and yours is sure to be something amazing.

 

[ToriL90]

Would it break the rules if I edited my entry post? I meant to write one more small portion with Jean, but I forgot to before posting it.

 

[flavio_lebeau]

Winner so far, Tking. Awesome!

 

[TKing]

Relax, It doesn't take away from your scene

Yeah, it's a nice scene, Toril.

 

[TKing]

Winner so far, Tking. Awesome!

Thanks, just wait for Bobby's.

 

[BobJM]

Would it break the rules if I edited my entry post? I meant to write one more small portion with Jean, but I forgot to before posting it.

I'm sorry, ToriL90, but I can't make any exceptions. All entries are final.

 

[ToriL90]

K. Thanks, anyway. If anybody is interested in seeing what I forgot to put in my entry, check out the "improved X3" thread here.

 

[Nadino]

TKing, Tha Winnah!!
Lovely entry, you get my vote!!! t:

 

[TKing]

Aww thanks.

 

[BobJM]

Might take a bit longer than I thought regarding my entry. I've got a **** load of homework and projects and what not.

 

[BobJM]

One week to go...

Unfortunately, I don't think I'll have time to enter a scene for my own competition. Lot of projects going on right now.

 

[TKing]

I was looking forward to reading your entry.

 

[ToriL90]

One week to go...

Unfortunately, I don't think I'll have time to enter a scene for my own competition. Lot of projects going on right now.

Not even something quick? I pounded my scene out in probably less than 1/2 an hour altogether.

 

[BobJM]

I'm the kind of person where I have write and rewrite scenes over and over. Maybe this weekend I can sneak in the time.

 

[ToriL90]

I'm the kind of person where I have write and rewrite scenes over and over. Maybe this weekend I can sneak in the time.

Yay! t:

 

[Phoenix_Flare]

EXT. San Fransico, Ca - Alcatraz Island - Night

The battle for the cure has begun mutanta against mutant. The X-Men have managed to take out every mutant in Magneto's Brotherhood now only the Phoenix/Jean Grey remains.

Magneto: This is what they want for all us. to be human. to be powerless

Phoenix looks a him confused and angry

Cyclops: It's over Jean...it's over

Jean starts to approach Cyclops when armed troops come from behind and open fire on Jean.
Jean now Dark Phoenix stops in her tracks, freezes the cure darts and 1 by1 they explode. She turns around, eyes lit with fire, she levitates herself, surrounded by a orange glow.

Cyclops: NO!!!!!!!!!!!

Dark Phoenix: Misguided fools

One by one she demoleculrizes the soliders. She turns to face Cyclops, Beast, and Wolverine who look on in astoniment and fear. The orange flames surrounding her body builds in intensity and finally the Phoenix has rising.

Beast: Everyone get out of here!

Soliders and mutants desperately try to escape the island that is being torn apart by Dark Phoenix.

Magneto: Dear God, what I have done?

Kitty emerges from the building with Leech and Colossus carrying Juggernaut.

Shawdocat: Bobby! I found him

Iceman: Kitty I need you to take the boy and help gets these people to safety.

Shawdwcat: But, Bobby I' not going to leave...

Iceman: Kitty please!!

Colossus: I would make sure everyone gets to safety.

Bobbdy nods his head and he looks at Kitty as if he won't see her again. They depart.
Meanwhile Dark Phoenix is tearing Worthington Labs brick from brick. Quil, ArcLight, and Pyslocke emerge from the building. Dark Phoenix rips them apart except Psylocke who teleported to safety.

EXT. - Washington, D.C. - Night
INT. - White House - Underground war room

Secritary(female): Mr. President the scales readings are off the charts.

Trask: Mr. President if we don't end this now I'm afraid the rest of the world will go with it.

Pres. McKenna: What do you purpose?

Trask: We have one last sentinel on standbye.

Beat

Pres. McKenna: Get it operating.

Trask: Yes, sir!

Cyclops, Beast, Woverine flanked by Storm, Gambit, Rogue and Iceman look at the destruction Jean is causing.

Cyclops: Jean!! I know you're still there.

Dark Phoenix(telepathically): Jean Grey can hear nothing! Speak only to the Phoenix!

Cyclops: Fight her Jean! Use the powers of your mind.

For a mintue Jean re-emerges

Jean: Scott? Scott help me...

and then Phoenix re-emerges

Dark Phoenix:Nice try Summers..

Cyclops: I'm the only one she'll listen to the rest of you leave!

Wolverine: Not a chance bub. We're in this together.

Cyclops: ughh, Logan!

Beast: Scott he's right as a team we're stronger

Cyclops: People protect yourself's, but remember Jean is up their with her.

Storm'e eyes turn white as she summons a hurricane to end Jean's rampage. Each of the X-Men grab on to debris from being sucked in.

Dark Phoenix(telepathically): Ha! Ha! Do you really think your elemental powers mean anything to me?!

Storm lifts off the ground and is face to face with Phoenix.

Storm: Jean, I'm sorry, but I can't let you harm anymore people

Dark Phoenix: Let me? Oh Ororo I have been waiting for this a long time. Goddess to Goddes.

With all her might Storm summons lighting from the skies and her hands ad strikes, but Dark Phoenix surrounds herself with a telekinetic sheild.

Dark Phoenix: mmmmm what a rush! now it's my turn.

She hits Storm with a physic blast sending the goddess falling to the ground.Beast catches her.

Rogue: Storm!

Rogue catches Storm

Beast lifts up a light pole and launches it toward Jean who turns it into rumble.
Gambit launches 5 charged cards at her and she reversed them, knocking him unconscious.
Iceman attempts to freeze her in a block of ice and she falls back to the Earth.

The X-Men look in puzzlement wondering if the block of ice has atleast stopped her. Wrong! With a gust of flame she melts the ice and the Phoenix re-emerges.

Wolverine: I knew it would come to this

He launches at Jean, claws unchieved

Jean:Logan? Please do it! Stop her now. if you truly love me don't let her..

Wolverine: I- I can't do it, Jean

Dark Phoenix: (evil laugh) How touching

She grabs Logan with her right talon and throws him

Dark Phoenix: You are X-Men are boring me

With a lift of her finger she telekintically slams Iceman, Beast, Gambit, and Storm.

Rogue: You shouldn' t have done that. let's see how sure you are once I drained some of your power.

Rogue takes off her gloves, lifts off into the air, and grab holds of Jean's face. the power is to much for Rogue to handle

Dark Phoenix: Stop it!

She telekintically throws Rogue back and the only X-Men remaining is Cyclops

Dark Phoenix: Lay down now and I won't torture you that much.

Cyclops: forgive me Jean...

Cyclops unleashes a full optic blast at Jean

Dark Phoenix: Now, is that anyway to treat your wife..

She throws a psionic blast at Cyclops damaging his uniform. Scott gathers himself and presses on. He unleases another optic blast.
Dark Phoenix forms a telekintic sheild

Dark Phoenix: You're strong, but I am the DEFINITION OF RAW POWER!!!!

Cyclops: You want it raw, then take it RAW!!!

he rips off his visor and unleashes his optic rage. The other X-Men look on in fear and awe as Cyclops and Phoenix both struggle to keep there power over the other
Scott manages to reach Dark Phoenix, she holds his optic blast back and we see the real color of his eyes.

Dark Phoenix: YOU, will die for them?

Cyclops: No, not for them. For you,(beat) for you..

For a second Jean has control over Phoenix

Jean: Scott, Scott kill me...

Cyclops: Jean we can help you...

Jean: No you can't...everyday I live Phoenix grow sstronger and eventually she'll claim the people I love. Scott please!

In the heat of the night a sentinel descends from the heavens

Sentinel: Mutant objective secure. Eliminate.

Jean turns to face Scott, she looks into his blue eyes and they share a deep passionate kiss

Cyclops: If this is the end, then we'll face it together. They both turn to face the sentinel

Gambit: Get out of their!!!!

And from afar we see the sentinel raising his hand preparing to blast, Jean releases his optic blast and Dark Phoenix re-emerges and from the back view of the X-Men we see a huge explosion and the last of the Phoenix rapture.

The X-Men look on in shock and horror. They run to the rumble where Scott and Jean last stood.They find Scott's visor and Jean's Phoenix pendant necklace. They break down in tears for their falling comrades....


I know its hell a long, but i believe this shoudl've been the final battle in X3 or in Singer's X3 or X4....so what do u think??

 

[ToriL90]

Scene must fit within X3's continuity (don't write a scene that would throw X3 out of whack).

 

[Phoenix_Flare]

Ha!! most of X3 scenes were threw X3 out of whack...that should've been the final battle. period.

 

[javphonic]

Tking's got my vote