The Dark Knight Calling All Creative People: Write Scenes that YOU'D Want to see in The Dark Knight!

[theDarkerKnight]

I just wipped this one up....enjoy!!!!

Two-Face Beings: by td(est)k

INT. COURT ROOM HALL WAY – DAY

The sun beams its light through the giant window at the end of the long hall way. Large crowds walk through the hall way with trouble. The media is scattered through out. Photos are being snapped and reporters are shouting to a tall lean man. He is sharply attractive. This is Harvey Dent; he is ignoring all questions and continuing his way to the court room. Only one voice seems to cut through the noise and racket.

Maroni
(Shouting)
Hey! Harvey, Come here.

The voice gets Harvey to turn around. His eyes fall on a short stout man in a light grey suit with a crimson red tie. This man is known as Maroni. Harvey takes notice and walks over to the mobster who can not be caught. Yet.

Harvey
Are you here to confess?

Maroni smiles that thin smile.

Maroni
Confessions Harv? No, I have no such confessions, lest of all to you…this isn’t a church so I’ll keep my confessions where they belong. What I have is this…

Maroni reaches into his pocket and pulls out a silver dollar.

Maroni
I want you to have it Harv. It’s for good luck. I think that you deserve it. After catching Sal and all. From what I hear he’s a slippery fish. Been Tried 9 times and always comes off clean. And with the man who has put away so many of this city’s crooks who better to have a good luck trinket hm? Look, Harvey “Apollo” Dent, There is nothing. Nothing in this life I would love to see more than that crook put behind bars. See I got what I wanted with this coin…I got you at this trial to bring this lowlife to justice…so maybe with this coin you’ll finally catch that big fish. Huh?

Maroni shakes Harvey’s hand and leaves the coin in Harvey’s Palm.

Maroni
Well harv. I suppose it’s time to fry us some fish, huh? Hahaha! Come on I wanna get some good seats.

Harvey
Maroni, it’s going to take more than this to pay me off

Maroni
(Shouting)
It’s not a pay off, dent. It’s pure, simple luck.

Harvey looks down at the coin. Then he looks to Maroni, who is now walking towards the court room. Maroni turns and smiles. Harvey’s attention is drawn to the coin again.
On the coin the side facing Harvey is a profile view of lady liberty. He turns the coin using his middle and ring finger within his palm. On the other side the same profile view.
More photos are being shot as Harvey looks on to the coin, perplexed. He looks up at the media then stuffs the coin into his pocket. Harvey heads to the court room.


INT. COURTROOM – HOURS LATER

Inside the court room the trial of Sal has been going on for hours. It is stifling inside the room packed to the brim with people. Some are spectators others are members of the media. Camera flashes and murmurs fill the room. The judge looks on as Harvey Dent approaches the witness stand, where Sal is sitting. Sal is about the same height as Harvey only slimmer. His face seems to have been weathered by years of stress. Sal begins to cough.

Harvey
Sal…Is it true that back in November you where present at the Gotham Docks on that Thursday in question

Sal
(Cough) yeah, I was there…but I know enough law to know that you can’t touch me.

Harvey
Sal, did you not just admit that you where indeed at the docks that night?

Sal
I said I was…but (cough) does that mean I am guilty of anything? Look I was knocked out by a guy in a bat suit

The court room explodes in laughter. The judge picks up his gabble and starts hammering down.

Judge
(Shouting)
Order, Order I said…

The court begins to simmer down but the knocking of the gabble continues until all is silent.

Judge
Mr. Dent, continue…
Harvey
The Bat-man is nothing more than some mythic person your kind made up to scare each other…we all here have heard it before…so Sal

Harvey walks closer to the witness stand.

Harvey
…Instead of turning this court into your own comedy club why don’t you just tell us what you where doing down at the docks that Thursday night?

Harvey leans on the witness stand’s wooden beam. Waiting for a reply but all Sal could do was muster up more coughing. The coughs got a litter louder. Sal began to pat himself down seemed to be looking for something.

Sal
Look here dent (cough) As I have said the city has nothing…to me it is just that I was in the wrong place at the wrong time, that bat-guy set me up I tell ya.

Sal directs his attention to James Gordon in the pews. Harvey stands up straight to look at what Sal is looking at.

Sal
Gordon, Does that guy work for the cops?

Everyone in the court directs there attention to Gordon. Gordon stands to address the court.

Gordon
No. I don’t even know of any man dressed as a bat…the only thing I know of it is just as Harvey here as said…nothing more than an urban myth.

Sal begins to laugh but the violent coughs interrupt the laughing.

Sal
Ya, see Dent…I was taken down by some nut who claims that I was a master mind of this crime that happened at the docks. (Cough) give me a break here huh? Let’s just wrap this up so we all can go home and eat with family. What do you say?

Harvey’s eyes go cold. He leans back down on the witness stand. Harvey’s hands go white from the presser of his weight.

Harvey
I want you to understand Sal; there are miles of evidence stacked. Right over there on that table all with your name smack dap on them all pointing to you being the ringleader at that murder down at the docks…

Defense attorney
(Shouts)
Objection, sir. He’s leading the witness.

Harvey turns his head to look at the defense attorney. His eyes go wild

Harvey
Withdrawn

Harvey turns back his head to look at the coughing Sal. Just as Harvey’s head turns he sees that Sal has just pulled out a small bottle out of his breast pocket. The bottle is small and aqua-blue the label reads “Cough-Syrup” Sal twists off the cap.

Sal
See Harv...what you’ll never understand is I’d rather go down for something big than to go down for some small fish that was snuffed out because he screwed with the shark…A shark is a dangerous animal to corner Harvey…very dangerous…

Just then Sal thrusts his hand forward and Harvey turns his face to avoid the liquid hurling towards him. But Harvey has no such luck. The liquid splashes onto the left side of his face. The pain is unbearable and it sends Harvey down to his knees screaming.

The judge takes hold of the gabble again to call for order. Two of the officers stationed in the courtroom take hold of Sal with out hesitation. Harvey continues to the marble floor with is face searing with pain.

He holds himself up with his arm. Suddenly a silver dollar rolls from underneath Harvey. The coin rolls to a stop just below Harvey’s face. And for that moment the pain seems to stop and all the noise in filling the court room goes to a faint white noise.

Harvey’s eyes go dead at the sight of the coin that Maroni gave to him hours earlier. Then the pain comes roaring back. Harvey then blacks out

Fade to black

 

[hatesworking]

darker knight- thats an epic in itself

blimey i thought i was a nutter

 

[theDarkerKnight]

darker knight- thats an epic in itself

blimey i thought i was a nutter

come again?

 

[MAKIEVELLI]

Here's my take on a climax of THE DARK KNIGHT.

I did it on final draft, so it's in .pdf form for you all. Let me know what you think!

I didn't like it. I don't think Gordon should ever die in the Batman series, at least not until he's a comissioner.

 

[theDarkerKnight]

because my ego is hungry and i want to post a second part but i am timid and not sure how the 1st one was accepted...so please comment on what i have posted (the two face begins)

and i speak for my ego when i say thanks.

 

[Joker'sHenchman]

Shoot, I have been screenwriting for almost a year now, and I feel like a real amateur.I didn't know you were supposed to write what the camera angles were. I thought that was left up to the director. Anyhow, I do have an actual script that I will post at a later date, but for now I have an idea I would like to run past all of you.

Riddler (Re-imagining) - Multi-million dollar fashion mogul Ed Nigma comes to Gotham to promote his new fashion line, Riddles. (His tag line: You'll look so good, you'll have them riddled.) Looking for Bruce Wayne's support Ed holds a fashion show expecting Bruce to show up. Bruce, aggravated by Ed's harassment after respectfully declining, decides to take a look at Ed's corporate history. Doing a little more research into the Riddles line of clothing Bruce/Batman discovers that Ed is involved in a corporate scam. (What exactly the scam is, I am not sure yet.) As the Riddles line of clothing heads south, Ed starts becoming more and more angry, until finally the company is forced to close because of Bruce Wayne (who exposes the sham). Donning his own failed clothing line, Ed, calling himself Riddler begins to wreak havoc in Gotham. Causing a gang war and eventually uncovering Batman's secret identity.
The whole idea is a little new and sketchy. I even made some stuff up while I was writing this, but I def. know that i want the new Riddler to be a failed fashion mogul who uncovers Batman's identity, without being to obsessive like he was in Batman Forever. I think it's time that Riddler got a re-imagining. He was great in Hush, but then just got foolish shortly there after. (Beaten by Poison Ivy??? C'mon.) Any constructive criticism would be nice.

 

[MAKIEVELLI]

Shoot, I have been screenwriting for almost a year now, and I feel like a real amateur.I didn't know you were supposed to write what the camera angles were. I thought that was left up to the director. Anyhow, I do have an actual script that I will post at a later date, but for now I have an idea I would like to run past all of you.

Riddler (Re-imagining) - Multi-million dollar fashion mogul Ed Nigma comes to Gotham to promote his new fashion line, Riddles. (His tag line: You'll look so good, you'll have them riddled.) Looking for Bruce Wayne's support Ed holds a fashion show expecting Bruce to show up. Bruce, aggravated by Ed's harassment after respectfully declining, decides to take a look at Ed's corporate history. Doing a little more research into the Riddles line of clothing Bruce/Batman discovers that Ed is involved in a corporate scam. (What exactly the scam is, I am not sure yet.) As the Riddles line of clothing heads south, Ed starts becoming more and more angry, until finally the company is forced to close because of Bruce Wayne (who exposes the sham). Donning his own failed clothing line, Ed, calling himself Riddler begins to wreak havoc in Gotham. Causing a gang war and eventually uncovering Batman's secret identity.
The whole idea is a little new and sketchy. I even made some stuff up while I was writing this, but I def. know that i want the new Riddler to be a failed fashion mogul who uncovers Batman's identity, without being to obsessive like he was in Batman Forever. I think it's time that Riddler got a re-imagining. He was great in Hush, but then just got foolish shortly there after. (Beaten by Poison Ivy??? C'mon.) Any constructive criticism would be nice.

That's kind of a sexist statement. Why should he not be beaten by Poison Ivy? Just because she's a woman? She has powers, he doesn't, why is getting beaten by Poison Ivy such a big deal?

 

[Joker'sHenchman]

That's kind of a sexist statement. Why should he not be beaten by Poison Ivy? Just because she's a woman? She has powers, he doesn't, why is getting beaten by Poison Ivy such a big deal?

Yeah... Kinda is, but I still stick to it. Woulda been just as bad, though, if it had been Scarecrow or Mad Hatter.

 

[Two-Sided-Deal]

EXT. ROOF-TOP - DAY

TWO ROBBERS, Both masked with clownish-expressions, stand patiently on a roof-top. TWO duffel bags lay near-by.

ROBBER #1
Fifty-Five seconds. Get ready. Hook that wire up.

ROBBER #2
Forty-five. Wire going up.

In a whirl, ROBBER #2 retrieves a ZIP-LIKE wire from the black bags. He begins to twirl it over his head, swings, and grasps the other wall.

ROBBER #1
Twenty-Seconds. Attach harness.

ROBBER #2 begins to attach a metallic harness, strapping it onto his waist.

ROBBER #2
Five seconds. Get on the wire.

BOTH men graps the wire.

-ZIP-
-ZIP-
-ZIP-

Both swing down to the other rooftop, a gnarled LAUGH is bellowed.

 

[kidbateman]

i want to see a scene were you see batman come back from a long night out, dirty, bruised, beatten, and tired. showing him taking off his mask sitting down at the his bat computer turning it on. on the screen is nothing but scenes of fire, rape, crimes he could not get to. things that he was unable to stop. you see his grime expression fall deeper into saddness and regret. maybe have alfred come in and say something like "you're only one man. Master bruce." or "you can not save them all" and then bruce say something like he could or should have.

 

[milarc]

That's an awesome idea, kidbateman.

Here's another scene of mine...


INT. GOTHAM NATIONAL BANK - DAY

Bruce leaves the office, escourted by the manager, Mr. Tanson.

TANSON
Of course, Mr. Wayne, our deposit insurance will continue-​

BANG! Gunfire echos through the bank.

TANSON
What the hell?​

Screams are heard from the main hall. Two men have entered the bank, their faces concealed inside the masks of hideous clowns.

CLOWN 1
EVERYBODY ON THE FLOOR! DO IT!​

The customers drop to the floor. Women are crying, men are swearing.

TANSON
Jesus...


BRUCE
Stay calm.​

Tanson breaks for his office. The first clown sees him.

BRUCE
Wait!​

CLOWN 1
Get him!


BRUCE
No!​

The second clown takes aim and fires. The bullet slams into Tanson's back. He falls down, groaning. Bruce drops to the floor, his hands over his head. The second clown walks slowly over to Wayne.

Bruce glares at the clown mask grinning back at him.
The clown kneels down, pushing his gun against Wayne's forehead.

CLOWN 2
It's impolite to stare.​

Bruce says nothing, continuing to gaze into the eyes of the sadistic clown. The other clown screams at his partner as he frantically empties registers.

CLOWN 1
Stop messing around and help me!​

The second clown seems to not even hear his partner. He loads his gun, still pressed against Wayne's head. The other clown is in hysterics, frantically trying to grab all the money himself while crying out over his shoulder.

CLOWN 1
JACK!​

The second clown starts to slowly pull back the trigger. Bruce flinches.

Suddenly, the clown stands up.

CLOWN 2
Heh.​

The clown takes his gun off Bruce and fires another bullet into Tanson's back.

Bruce watches helplessly as Tanson lets out a limp wail and dies. The screams of the bank's hostages fill the air. The clown bows to Bruce, and runs off...

 

[kidbateman]

milarc that was cool, but do you think bruce would flinches because he is in character or because he is actually scared?

 

[milarc]

milarc that was cool, but do you think bruce would flinches because he is in character or because he is actually scared?

You know what? I'm not sure, lol. It would be more in Bruce Wayne's character if he was just pretending to be scared, wouldn't it?

I actually wrote the scene with the idea that Bruce is caught in a situation where he's helpless to do anything...and he meets the Joker for the first time. In my mindset the flinch is real - But it's not so much him being scared, but rather him conceeding defeat...for now.

Good question though, kidbateman, good question...

 

[Penismightier]

I wouldn't say this was an idea for a scene as much as for the entire movie. Long story short, Joker is Ledger as classic Joker from the get go. I wouldn't have it set as a bank robbery as they apparently have, that's a little cliche for The Joker, even though it is all in how it was written. But for this exercise, let's just say it's a bank robbery. My idea would be the movie starts out with the bank robbery and he's already the classic joker, no boring origin, no explanation, no dead weight to slow down the pace. And since I feel that the Batman movies haven't really explored into very much depth how he's a master detective, a subplot would be how Batman would be trying to figure out who The Joker really is. Thus, creating more conflict, thus making the movie more interesting. The way that it appears now is that Ledger's Joker is being set up to have some complicated origin. We'll see if that is the case and if it actually works.

Another thing I would do if I was an executive at Warner Brothers is to deal with rewrites in the most productive way possible. I'll explain it this way. A rewrite for a script would be $50,000 (set by the screenwriters guild). So, if they're spending 150 million, 200 million on this movie, what's 50 grand to have someone like Paul Dini or Grant Morrison come on and do a rewrite?

That's basically off the top of my head, I'm sure I could come up with a whole treatment if anyone is interested. Writing an entire script would sort of be frivolous since the movie is already being filmed. This is a long, long first post so I'm just going to end it right now and hope the criticism isn't too harsh...

 

[kidbateman]

You know what? I'm not sure, lol. It would be more in Bruce Wayne's character if he was just pretending to be scared, wouldn't it?

I actually wrote the scene with the idea that Bruce is caught in a situation where he's helpless to do anything...and he meets the Joker for the first time. In my mindset the flinch is real - But it's not so much him being scared, but rather him conceeding defeat...for now.

Good question though, kidbateman, good question...

i was thinking what if you played it as if maybe bruce was stunned, bewilder, or like mesmorized by him and the click of the gun just knock him back into reality. i dont know that can go off different ways. but never the less great scene.

 

[WalterKovacs]

these are all intimidatingly good

 

[1000 Miles]

Taking inspiration from similar scenes in Year One / Knightfall / MOTP:

BATMAN reaches a storeroom within the abandoned warehouse and presses himself against the far wall. A helicopter buzzes overhead and a spotlight stabs through the rotted skeleton of the roof. BATMAN shields himself under his heat reflective cape.

CUT TO HELICOPTER PILOT POV, CLOSE UP OF HEAT VISION CAMERA DISPLAY, REGISTERING NO TRACE OF BATMAN

CUT BACK TO BATMAN as the spotlight passes. He is shaken, his breathing laboured. He removes a bandage from his utility belt, strapping his wounded thigh.

THE SOUND OF MANY, HEAVY FOOTSTEPS, PUNCTUATED BY THE SOUND OF RIFLES BEING COCKED.

BATMAN, quickly crosses the room, slamming and bolting the heavy door behind him.

JUMP CUT TO SWAT TEAM OF SIX MEN, WEARING NIGHT VISION GOGGLES, RUNNING THROUGH THE WAREHOUSE, GATHERING BY THE LARGE BOLTED DOOR. SWAT #1 GESTURES TOWARDS CAMERA

SWAT #1: Knock this down

Camera pans to two SWAT OFFICERS with a BATTERING RAM

Jump cut to BATMAN, crouched in the centre of the storeroom, calmly removing items from his belt. His cape partially obscures our view, but as the camera pans around him we can see that he is kneading a plasticine like substance into a long thin circle around him. He looks up briefly as THUMP, the door begins to give way, the hinges spreading.

CUT BACK TO SWAT TEAM WITH BATTERING RAM

A second THUMP, and the door begins to peel away from its hinges.

CUT TO CLOSE UP ON BATMAN'S FACE, DETERMINED, TEETH GRITTED AS

THUMP - the door gives out, the sound of wood splintering, the SWAT TEAM begin to pile in through the doorway when

CUT TO SWAT TEAM POV, BATMAN VISIBLE THROUGH THE DOORWAY, NOW STANDING IN THE CENTRE OF THE ROOM, HIS CAPE PULLED COMPLETELY AROUND HIS BODY. THE CAMERA FOLLOWS THE SWAT TEAM IN TO THE ROOM AS SMALL LAZER TARGETING BEAMS PICK OUT BATMAN'S SILOUHETTE.

The SWAT TEAM begin to circle BATMAN, barking orders for him to 'Put your hands up'.

Just as the final member of the SWAT TEAM falls into position...

FLASH - the room is flooded with light and smoke. The SWAT TEAM members recoil, some discarding their night vision goggles, the camera follows one pair as they are thrown to the floor. All are overcome by the fumes.

The camera switches focus from the goggles to BATMAN'S feet, now visible, as he sweeps his cape back. The camera tracks up. BATMAN has a device in his hand, and a rebreather in his mouth. (The 70s Neal Adams type) He presses the device in his hand and...

A MUTED EXPLOSION, THE SOUND OF FLOORBOARDS SNAPPING AND BATMAN DROPS SUDDENLY FROM VIEW

CEILING POV - A LARGE, ROUGH CIRCULAR HOLE IN THE MIDDLE OF THE ROOM, THE STILL DAZED AND COUGHING SWAT TEAM MEMBERS IN DISARRAY

Cut to darkened warehouse floor, as BATMAN falls through the ceiling. He hasn't enough space to activate his cape, and it flaps behind him as he lands, awkwardly, on the dusty floor. He flinches and, grabbing his injured leg, hides himself behind a crate. The helicopter buzzes past again, this time its spotlight highlighting the large windows of the warehouse floor. BATMAN consults a small handheld GPS style device.

CUT TO THE STOREROOM AS SWAT #1 GETS TO HIS FEET. TWO SWAT TEAM MEMBERS TIE OFF A ROPE AT HIS ORDER, AND HE ABSEILS THROUGH THE HOLE IN THE FLOOR

Camera, from POV of SWAT #1 as he reaches the warehouse floor. He is no longer wearing his night vision goggles. Instead he activates a torch attached to the barrel of his rifle. He stalks forward, the torch picking out a line of crates.

SWAT #1: [to himself] Where are you?

A short burst of footsteps from the near darkness, the flutter of material, as SWAT #1 trains his gun on a familiar silhouette.... he fires a full clip of bullets... and the shape drops sharply to the floor.

SWAT #1 runs forward to apprehend the wounded BATMAN to find only

A BROOM, ATTACHED TO WHICH IS BATMAN'S CAPE AND COWL, HOLED FROM THE BULLETS

SWAT #1 studies it in disbelief. A movement behind him, but before he can turn

BATMAN, unmasked, but for black camouflage cream around his eyes, with rough additional camouflage cream added to his forehead and cheeks, cracks SWAT #1 across the back of head, knocking him unconscious.

BATMAN pauses briefly to inspect his cape and cowl, but as they are now too holed to wear, discards them.

BATMAN: [quietly] Alfred is going to kill me.

Consulting the GPS device again he runs as best as he can towards the the far corner of the warehouse, as the rest of the SWAT TEAM can be heard regrouping behind him , calling out for SWAT #1

BATMAN reaches the far wall of the warehouse. He is looking for something, and he finds it - a pipe running along the wall into the darkness. He follows it.

CUT TO SWAT TEAM FINDING SWAT #1 UNCONSCIOUS, BATMAN'S DISCARDED CAPE

SWAT #2: [holding up cape] Man, look at this!

SWAT #2: No time for that...

A SCREECH OF METAL AND LARGE CLANG

The SWAT TEAM run towards the noise, finding... nothing

A SHORT CONVERSATION ENSUES BETWEEN THE MEN. WHERE COULD BATMAN HAVE GONE? THEIR TORCHES DART AROUND FOR THE ANSWER REVEALING

A sewer grate... but BATMAN is long gone

 

[MAKIEVELLI]

Me likey, 1000 miles. I actually would like to see Bruce in battle as Batman but with his mask off. I think that would be an awesome scene.

 

[Drunken Savior]

I really enjoyed that. Good job!

 

[1000 Miles]

Me likey, 1000 miles. I actually would like to see Bruce in battle as Batman but with his mask off. I think that would be an awesome scene.

I really enjoyed that. Good job!

Thanks guys!

I remember in Returns when Keaton ripped off his mask and the eye make up magically disappeared... and how jarring that was. I was watching The Deer Hunter the other day, and it struck me that that assuming Batman kept the camo cream in his belt, he could add to the camo cream round the eyes it if he ever had to lose the mask; enabling him stay hidden in darkness and reasonably anonymous. I can imagine Bale, hair slick with sweat, with roughly daubed camo cream on his face sneaking up on SWAT #1. Like Dafoe in Platoon!

(I toyed with him making a mask from part of his cape, worn like a Old West train robber across his nose and mouth, and with him resorting to the ski mask from Begins, but I thought the camo look would be more dramatic.)

I also was writing it as the scene that could explain why the change of outfit halfway through TDK.

If you don't hear from me again, and a scene similar to the one I wrote ends up in TDK, WB have either paid me off, or made me 'disappear'... ha!

 

[Bond]

TWO-FACE shoots FLASS

THE END

What do you guys think?

 

[Crook]

It's almost Shakesperean in execution.

 

[Bond]

Why thank you!

It took me like 30 minutes to come up with. Nothing flashy, but I'm proud of it.

 

[Dark Sentinel]

TWO-FACE shoots FLASS

THE END

What do you guys think?

Best. Surprise. Ending. EVER

hopefully thats what we'll get

 

[Gamingboy]

INT DISTRICT ATTORNEY'S OFFICE OF GOTHAM CITY- NIGHT

THE JOKER has tied up DISTRICT ATTORNEY HARVEY DENT with GIFT WRAP and IS PILLAGING the OFFICE.

Joker (Singing)
​

I believe in Gotham City. I believe in Har-vey-Dent. An apollo for our city, I believe in Harvey Dent! (stops singing) I gotta say Harv, whoever came up with that Campaign Jingle had better have been paid good. Because next to that freak in black, Batman, it's the most annoying thing in the world. And isn't that what politics is all about?

Dent (muffled by gag)

I could kill you you demented freak!

Joker

What's that? I must say that such naughty words from a person like you would indicate that you and I aren't so different after all, you two-faced tight ass. Why, I bet you'd be JUST like me, if you had just one really bad day.

Dent (still muffled)

You're wrong freak!

Joker (turning towards Dent, with Camera zooming in close to face)

Really? I think we'll soon test my theory. Because, Harvey Boy, you bad day..... is TONIGHT.


Joker breaks off into laughter.
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