Fantastic Four

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  1. Sentinel X

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    Fantastic Four

    Starring(forgive me if I spell these names wrong ) :

    Ioan Gruffud-Mr.Fantastic
    Jessica Alba-Invisable Woman
    Chris Evans-Human Torch
    Michael Chiliks-The Thing
    Juluan Machmon-Dr.Doom


    Well Ive noticed that ive never done a lighthearted fan fic so I decided F4.This is how I wouldve done my F4 if I had a chance.

    There will be some scene that will be similar to the movie because I did like some parts but they will be modified to how I wouldve done it and about 95% of it will be original.There is going to be a lot of destruction...since in the comics detruction was a big part of Fantastic Four and the 4 will use their powers often.

    Ahh...thats all I gotta say,and no I didnt post the story yet
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  2. bored

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    :doom: :mad: this not good enough?




    ;)
     
  3. The Phantom

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    Looking forward to it man.
     
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    uh.............
     
  5. Sentinel X

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    Im sorry for the wait guys I was extremly sick yesterday and Tuesday.Here some of it:

    FANTASTIC FOUR



    CUT TO:

    A microorganism is swirling around.

    ZOOM OUT:Billions of other microorganisms can be seen.





    ZOOM OUT:The microorganism form flesh,an eye.



    ZOOM OUT:A young woman’s eyes are wide open.She is in terrible pain.She is having a baby.



    WOMAN:Aaaahhhhhh!!!!!!



    Doctors support her while she is in her labor.



    The young woman’s hair is soaked with sweat and she feels exhausted.



    DOCTOR:It’s a boy.



    A midwife quickly cuts the baby’s umbilical cord.



    WOMAN(panting and anxious):Can I see him?can I please see him?



    The doctor hands the woman her baby.


    The woman cradles the baby in her arms.Abnormally the baby doesn’t cry but observes his surroundings as if he is a scientist.



    A man in his early thirties walks in to his wife who had just given birth.



    WOMAN:He’s so beautiful…



    MAN:What are we gonna call him?



    WOMAN:Reed…Reed Richards.



    EXT.RICHARDS HOME.DAY



    17 years later…



    Reed Richards was one of the rare geniuses a person would encounter once in a lifetime.His intellect was amazing.His parents were fond of him but now they prepared to say goodbye to their beloved son.



    MARGRET RICHARDS:Reed,when you get to Columbia,have some fun for once in your life.Your always studying…Im so proud of you.



    The family of three stood just by Reed’s taxi to Columbia University.



    GARY RICHARDS:Well,we cant keep you waiting…



    MARGRET RICHARDS:So aren’t you going to give me a hug…



    Reed walks over and hugs his mom then his father.He steps into the taxi.



    He quickly rolls down the window.



    GARY:You better call us when you get there.



    MARGET:We’ll be see you on Saturday.



    REED:Bye mom,bye dad.



    The Richards waved as they watch their son roll away in the taxi.







    INT.TAXI.DAY



    Reed looked out the window.He already missed his parents but was excited to go to Columbia in order to get his PhD in Astronomy.



    INT.TAXI.DAY



    12 years later…



    Reed looked out the window,he was excited yet still very nervous.



    To his side was his best friend Ben Grimm.Ever since Ben entered Columbia he and Reed instantly became best friends.Ben had an average height and was very muscular.


    BEN:Reed you’ve been starring out the window forever is something bothering you.



    REED:No…well…yes.We’re meeting Victor Von Doom for God sake…the Victor Von Doom.



    BEN:You guys used to be really god friends…what happened?



    REED:He competed against me.



    BEN:Well he should be satisfied now.He has the money,the chicks,the nice house,the company,oh and he has yet to become the president of that small country…oh and Sue,I heard he goin with Sue…who you once were dating and was madly in love with and you…you have just about nothing,why would he be jealous of you?



    REED(sarcastic):Geez Ben,you’ve made me feel so much better…thanks.



    BEN:Anytime pal.Not to mention…



    Ben handed Reed the magazine he was reading a few minutes ago.



    BEN:He’s even made the top 10 list as ho—



    REED:I can see Ben.



    Reed read the cover of the magazine.It read ‘Victor Von Doom tops People’s Hottest man list’. Intimidation over powered Reed’s current emotions just by reading his name and looking at him on the magazine cover.



    The taxi came to a halt.



    REED:I guess we’re here.


    Reed stuffed his hands in his pockets in search for money.He didn’t have much…he only had a dollar and 25 cents.



    BEN:Its okay reed I got it.



    EXT.VON DOOM INDUSTRIES MAIN BUILDING.DAY



    The VDI Main building was gorgeous and seemed flawless.It was one of the few skyscrapers of New York City that managed to keep a person starring at it for long periods of time…like any other normal people would who weren’t accustom in seeing the building.



    Reed and Ben starred at the skyscapper.



    REED:Wow…Incredible


    BEN:No…that’s not incredible…its fantastic.
     
  6. GOD90

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    It's pretty good
     
  7. Sentinel X

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    Thank-you God90


    Here is the second part

    INT.VDI CONFRENCE ROOM.DAY



    Reed Richards and Ben Grimm were on the top floor of the VDI building,they were in Victor’s preferable conference room.



    Reed looked down at the staggering view of the city.He was amazed by Victor’s success.



    BEN:Can you belive this??…this place is like a freakin five star hotel.

    REED:Wow…I wonder how he feels when he comes here.



    VICTOR:Like God…



    Reed and Ben turned around to spot Victor walking to them.Victor was a tall handsome man.His presence in the room spontaneously sparked tension and intimidation.



    VICTOR:I feel like God.Von Doom Industries has been doing so well this year…we’ve managed to raise our stock and surpass even Oscorp and Stark Enterprises.Not to mention the billions of dollars in revenue.



    BEN:Victor,I see you haven’t changed.Boastful…as usual.



    Ben gave Victor a cold hand shake.



    VICTOR:You too,always under Reed’s shadow.



    Ben gave victor a grimace that showed Victor that he was messing with the wrong guy.



    VICTOR:So Reed what have you been up to?



    Reed shook Victor’s hand and did not answer.



    VICTOR:Nothing I suppose.



    Reed could spot the scar that started above Victor’s eye and stopped right beneath it.It was a scar Reed admitted he was responsible for after a minor experiment went wrong.The experiment accident almost caused Victor to lose his eyesight and he did for a few months.



    REED:You know what I came here for…



    Victor sat in the chair of the conference room’s table.

    REED:I’ve managed to get revenue from NASA but I need Von Doom Industries to support us.



    VICTOR:Another one of your genius plans…Why do I have a feeling that this one might go wrong too?



    Victor rubbed the scar on his face with his hand



    VICTOR(sarcastic):perhaps someone may lose their eyesight.



    REED:Nothing will go wrong…nothing can.I’ve calculated the mathematical equations necessary for the experiment and not only are the results precise but they are accurate as well.



    VICTOR:Ive seen your results but your not answering the question I long for.Why should Victor Von Doom fund your expirement?



    REED:Because it will help mankind, can change this world forever.There is much more to Cosmic Radiation than we can imagine.If we can make this breakthrough we can change the face of this planet forever and Von Doom Industries will be unbeatable and will become the ultimate enterprise the world has and will ever see.Victor please??…Please just help me out just this once.



    Victor let out a sadistic laugh that sent a chill down the spines of Reed Richards and Ben Grimm.



    VICTOR:Amazing…The Reed Richards begging to Victor Von Doom like a dog.



    Ben clutched his fist,he felt like punching that smile right off Victor’s flawless arrogant face.



    BEN(firm):Listen Victor,we’re not here for a family reunion.Are you going to fund the damn thing or not?



    VICTOR:Ben,Ben,Ben…you need Von Doom Industries.You need me



    BEN:And Von Doom Industries needs a scientific breakthrough…or else Von Doom Industries won be doing so well this year.You need us



    REED:We need each other.There are disadvantages and advantages to both of us.It’s a win or lose situation,whats it gonna Vic?



    Victor looked at read with his evil sadistic eyes.He couldn’t tolerate Reed in anyway.



    Reed and Ben could instantly spot the flare of hatred in Victor’s eyes.



    VICTOR:Very well…Fine.
     
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    INT.VDI MAIN BUILDING ELEVATOR.DAY



    REED:That went well…



    BEN:Yeah right.



    REED:He’s Victor Von Doom what were you expecting.



    BEN:Its been 7 years Reed…7 years since the accident and 12 years since you seen him altogether and he still manages to act like the biggest ******* in the world.



    REED:Corrrection,arrogant *******.



    BEN:Yeah,thanks.



    REED:At least we got what we wanted.


    BEN(mocking):Im Victor Von Doom and I feel like Im a God.Von Doom Industries is so cool,Im rich,Im smart,Im just fantastic!



    Reed let out a giggle.


    REED:Ben what would I do with out you?



    BEN:You’d be getting owned by Victor.I cant believe you let him talk to you like that and if it wasn’t for me ya’d still be getting’ criticized by him



    REED:don’t you know when you want something really bad from someone that hates you,you have to kind of um…



    BEN:kiss up?



    REED:Yeah,something like that.



    The elevator door opened.



    INT.VDI MAIN BUILDING 1st FLOOR.DAY



    Ben and Reed walked out of the elevator.



    BEN:I’ll be right back.



    REED:Where are you going?



    BEN:Bathroom,I nearly pissed in my pants in there.



    REED:I’ll be waiting for you outside.



    Reed watched his best friend leave.He turned around and began walking toward the enormous exit of the building.Hegripped his black briefcase tightly, anxious to leave the premises he sped up on his walking but quickly stopped in his tracks after he heard a familiar voice call his name.It a voice he longed to hear throughout his days of college.The beautiful voice that matched with a flawless blonde haired woman.



    SUE:Reed?Is that you?



    Reed turned around.It was Susan Storm,the woman he always loved.Reed felt suddenly nervous in her presence.She walked closer to him and his breathing became deep each step she took closer.



    REED:Susan?Wow!You’ve changed.



    SUE:I haven’t seen you in a long time.Where you’ve been?



    REED:Around…I-I-uh…I’ve been around.



    SUE:So did you make it?



    REED:Make what?



    SUE:Columbia



    REED:Yeah…I got a PhD In astronomy and physics.



    SUE:Its not like I ever doubted you,you were the smartest boy in the whole school,probably in all of New York.



    REED:What about you?



    SUE:I did manage to get my PhD in astronomy.Did you ever meet anyone?



    REED:What do you mean?



    SUE:Anyone special?

    REED:You were only one



    SUE:Reed,I cant keep thinking about our relationship.Its in the past…Im with Victor now.



    REED:I understand.



    Reed’s heart sunk.


    SUE:Whys a guy like Reed Richards working for Victor Von Doom?


    REED:I-I don’t know.Should I be working for him?



    SUE:Not many people like to…he is…a little



    REED:Intimidating?



    SUE(giggling):Yeah but just a little.



    REED:Im really happy to see you?



    SUE:Really?



    REED:Yeah,you wouldn’t imagine.



    SUE:Tell me about.Look I gotta run…but I want see you again Reed Richards.



    She handed Reed her business card.



    REED:Well Bye!



    SUE:Bye!



    She smiled a flawless smile and walked away,

    her high heels pounding against the marble floor.
     
  9. Sentinel X

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    EXT.SKY.DAY



    Jets glided throughout the sky.The jets moved quickly,they were under pursuit and were being attacked.



    The jet named black hawk moved speedily above the clouds as another jet chased it.The enemy’s jet shot bullets at the blackhawk.



    The black hawk made a 180 degree turn dodging all the bullets.



    INT.BLACK HAWK.DAY



    Johnny Storm was the sole pilot of the Black hawk jet.He donned a helmet and a jet suit.



    OPPERATOR:Storm what are you doing!?



    JOHNNY:Im getting him off my ass.



    OPERATOR:You’re moving at Mach 3…you’re going too fast.



    JOHNNY:I can handle it.



    EXT.SKY.DAY



    The black hawk took a nose dive toward the Pacific ocean water and the enemy jet followed.



    Black Hawk_2 tried escaping the barrage of bullets by the enemy jet that chased it.In front of him was another enemy jet,all he had to do was lock on it,shoot the missile,and avoid the enemy bullets behind it.







    INT.BLACK HAWK_2.DAY



    OPERATOR:pull back Carter,I repeat pull back!



    CARTER:I can do it sir!



    OPERATOR:No,you cant pull back damn it!



    EXT.SKY.DAY



    The enemy jet had Black Hwak_2 on lock and didn’t hesitate to pull the trigger.



    The missiles were released from the jet and literally ripped of Black Hawk_2’s left wing.



    INT.BLACK HAWK_2.DAY



    Alerts rang in the ears of Sarah Carter.



    CARTER:Im hit!!Im hit!!



    EXT.SKY.DAY



    Just feet before crashing to the sea Johnnny managed to shift the jet to avoid the crash but the enemy jet did not and it slammed into the water causing a huge splash.



    Johnny maneuvered the jet upward,he could see his ally jet falling toward the ocean with smoking coming from its broken wing.



    INT.BLACK HAWK.DAY



    OPERATOR:Storm,what are you doing?



    Johnny:I think I can save her dad!



    OPERATOR:Johnny,no you cant save everybody!

    Johnny ignored his father,he already made his decision.



    EXT.SKY.DAY



    Black Hawk was at 8,550 feet in the air.One of the enemy jets instantly spotted it and wasted no time perusing after it.The enemy jet began shooting,Johnny maneuvered the jet in a way that caused the jet to move around in circles.The enemy jet did the same but tried harder to keep up.The enemy jet shot a missile at the Black Hawk.



    In order to out run the missile Johnny was already at mach 4.The missile was still on Johnny’s tail.

    Johnny almost outran the enemy jet that was moving along in circles.Johnny shifted the control gear and as a reaction the ship went just inches above the other jet!



    Now the black hawk was many feet ahead of the jet.The enemy jet already was locked on Johnny but little did he know that the missile he had launched came back full circle and bombed his jet.The enemy jet was in flames.



    INT.GOVERNMENT JET COMMUNICATION ROOM.DAY



    General Storm stood up and looked at the extremely large computer screen that showed the jets on radar.



    FRANCIS:We have one down sir!



    The crowd in the room cheered.


    FRANCIS:uh-oh.



    GENERAL STORM:Whats wrong?



    FRANCIS:Theres one more jet and its hot after Johnny sir.



    EXT.SKY.DAY



    The other enemy jet shot bullets at Black Hawk but being the skilled pilot he is Johnny managed to dodge every single bullet.



    INT.BLACK HAWK.DAY



    OPPERATOR:Johnny!!…get away from him.



    JOHNNY:I have a plan.



    He looked up at the falling flaming jet that was hit by its own missile.



    EXT.SKY.DAY



    The black Hawk did a series of flips dodging every single bullet the enemy jet shot at it.



    The Black Hawk made a semi-circle around the sky and went straight ahead and the enemy jet followed.The enemy jet locked on the Black Hawk and quickly sent a missile at the agile jet to quickly dispose of it.



    As the enemy jet chase Johnny the flaming jet fell and crashed onto it,the 2 jets collided and fell to the ocean.



    The missiles were still in venery after the Black Hawk.



    The jet was now speeding at Mach 4.It was going closer to the falling jet.





    INT.BLACK HAWK_2.DAY



    Sarah Carter’s heart raced with fear.She pressed the ejection button and she flew out of the falling jet.





    EXT.SKY.DAY



    Sarah wasn’t able to open her parachute,it was jammed.She knew she wouldn’t live.



    CARTER:My chute is jammed!



    OPERATOR:Damn it!!



    She floated down the sky in broad daylight.



    EXT.SKY.DAY



    The missile was just 20 feet from hitting the jet.

    A body came flying out of the jet,he was about 75 feet away from the falling woman.



    He had ejected himself from the jet and in a matter of second after he did the missiles collided with the jet and an enormous explosion took place in mid-air.



    As if he were skydiving,Johnny Storm was heading toward the falling woman.He was just a few feet away from her and all he had to do was reach.



    Within a few seconds Johnny caught up to her,he embraced her and pulled his parachute open.



    He held on to her and she held on to him.



    A piece of metal from the sky-high parachute slashed through the chute and they began falling again.



    Sarah let out a shrill scream of terror.



    JOHNNY:HANG ON!!



    Unattached the parachute from his torso and opened the emergency parachute.



    This time he knew they were safe.



    INT. GOVERNMENT JET COMMUNICATION ROOM.DAY



    The crowd in the room cheered.



    General Storm let out a heavy sigh,his always managed to get off death’s list just in time.



    OPERATOR(relieved):Johnny Storm…why cant you be more…’safe’ like your sister?
     
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    Soes anyone else have any comments on how Im doing so far? [​IMG] :doom: [​IMG][​IMG]
     
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    squeekness The mighty squeek!

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    It's too soon for me to tell if I like this or not. I do prefer prose over screenplays so don't take what I say too seriously. I thought the beginning was too much like the movie but I am hopeful the rest of it won't be. I am also hoping that this won't take too much time away from your Batman fic, I am eagerly awaiting the next piece. Keep writing and posting for both of these and I will read them.:up:
     
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    Good Fan Fiction.:up::up::ff::thing:
     
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    Thank-you Squeekness :)

    Thank-you High Voltage :)
     
  14. Sentinel X

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    Hmm...Yes its been a long time but my interest in Fantastic Four and fan fiction has been revived


    EXT.COLUMBIA UNIVERSITY.LATE AFTERNOON

    Reed could hear the loud traffic of the New York streets behind him. It was a typical day at Columbia, there were a few scholars studying and some playing Frisbee, the weather was fair and summer-like.

    STUDENT
    Hi, Professor Richards

    Reed nodded at one of his scholars, he was a renounced and well known professor at the university, known for his amazing genius and scientific breakthroughs, not to mention his long after-work hours in his laboratory and class room.

    INT.COLUMBIA UNIVERSITY.LATE AFTERNOON

    BEN
    You know Reed, I just seem to have a bad
    feeling about this

    REED
    Why Ben? This is what we’ve
    Always been looking for.

    The two walked up the stairs dodging a few scholars who seemed to be in a rush to leave.

    BEN(sarcastic)
    Ha!...Why am I worried?...I don’t
    Know Reed, maybe because we’re
    Dealing with Victor Von Doom.

    REED
    Ben, seriously there is absolutely
    Nothing to worry about. There isn’t
    Much Victor can do at this point, I
    Mean, all calculations are done

    BEN
    So why are you going back to your class?

    REED
    You can never be to sure, this is a once
    In a lifetime chance, I cant screw up.And
    As compensation for being unable to have
    Multiple trials I need to make sure the
    Calculations are accurate.

    Ben rolled his eyes. As he followed Reed up the stairs.

    BEN
    Reed..

    Reed turned his attention to Ben

    BEN
    You’re such a nerd

    Reed chortled as he took out the keys to his classroom.

    REED
    That’s not true

    BEN
    You practically live here

    INT.REED’S CLASSROOM.LATE AFTERNOON

    Reed opened the door, he signaled Ben to get in with his free arm.

    REED
    Ladies first

    BEN
    Don’t be a jerk

    Ben flicked open the lights to the empty room, meant to fit in about 150 pupils. Reed rested his stuff on his front desk. Reed walked to a chalkboard filled to the brim with advanced science equations. He grabbed a piece of chalk.

    REED
    See Ben, there really only one
    Thing that’s bothering me…

    Ben tried to look interested.

    REED
    Any advanced physics that we know of in this
    Universe, all those laws seem to be abandoned
    In secotor 345_HG456.

    BEN
    HUH?

    REED
    Sector 345HG456 is that alternate dimension
    I’ve been talking about, abnormal energy-mass
    Ratio complex…not dark matter, actually very
    Far from it…It seems impossible

    BEN
    Oh…umm…why don’t you
    Call it the negative
    Zone?

    REED
    That works…I guess

    BEN
    Speaking of negative…

    Ben tried to spark a new conversation before he died of boredom.

    REED
    Ben lets not get off track here

    Ben sighed, he cleared his throat. He tried to think of something else to talk about as Reed worked his equations on his board.

    BEN
    What about Susan?

    Reed eyed Ben

    REED
    Hey, you were suppose
    To be in the restroom

    BEN
    Reed, we’ve known each other since we
    Were kids, by now you should know that
    Im clairvoyant…I find everything out.

    Reed smiled


    REED
    Well, she looked nice

    BEN
    That’s it? She didn’t say anything?

    REED
    She was in rush…She gave me her card

    BEN
    Progress..good start

    REED
    Ben, I can’t love Susan anymore…I mean sure,
    We shared something special but now shes with
    Victor and Im happy for her.

    BEN
    You’re such a liar

    REED
    BEN

    BEN
    Okay! Okay! I’m off the subject

    Reed got back to his work but was distracted, he kept on thinking about Susan. He paused for a second and looked at Ben.

    REED
    So, do you think shes interested…
    I mean, why would she give me her
    Card?

    Ben nodded

    BEN
    She’s interested​
     
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    EXT.VON DOOM INDUSTRIES TOWER.LATE AFTERNOON

    The Von Doom Tower was located in Eastern Manhattan. The infrastructure was somewhat intimidating, not only because of the name it carried but its staggering size. It was clearly one of the tallest buildings in New York. Third place only to the Empire State Building and the World trade Centers.

    INT.VON DOOM TOWERS CONFERENCE ROOM.LATE AFTERNOON

    The conference room was placed on one of the upper floors of the tower, it overlooked the entire city.
    12 board members sat before Victor Von Doom across an elongated conference table. They placed their documents and papers on the desk.

    VICTOR
    As of Today Von Doom Industries
    Has reclaimed its position as the
    Primary suppliers for NASA as well
    As being America’s top pharmaceutical
    Company.

    BOARD MEMBER 1
    A fact Im very proud of Victor, the
    Company has been striving, especially
    With you as CEO. Your father left his
    Company in good hands​
    Victor smiled.

    VICTOR
    We’ve officially surpassed both Oscorp
    And Stark Industries in the divisions
    Ive mentioned earlier, particularly
    Aerospace.

    BOARD MEMBER 2
    And what about military supplies, its
    Equally as important.

    VICTOR
    Oscorp and Stark Industries are still
    The elite but I can assure you this
    Will change with the new head of the
    Weaponry division

    BOARD MEMBER 1
    Seems like everything is going well
    Victor​

    The other board members nodded in agreement. They were all very cold, almost as much as Victor.

    BOARD MEMBER 3
    The new project seems very
    Promising.

    VICTOR
    Thank-you, I’ve gathered the five
    Going out to space, who includes
    Reed Richards and Susan Storm​
    Cut to:​

    INT.VON DOOM TOWER SUSAN’S OFFICE.LATE AFTERNOON

    Susan looked out her office and out into the city. The Manhattan skyline was breathless, the sun had almost set, and it was getting dark. She had been out of it the whole day, she kept on thinking about Reed Richards. It was so long since she had seen him, she wondered what he thought of her now. She smiled at the thought of him.

    The phone rang, her daydreaming instantly ceased. She walked to the phone and pressed the speaker button.

    SUSAN(Phone)
    Hello?

    VICTOR
    Susan?

    SUSAN
    Victor.How was the board meeting?​

    She began gathering her stuff.

    VICTOR
    It went well, as I expected.
    Susan, do you mind stopping
    By my office for a second.

    SUSAN
    Umm…yeah sure, just let me
    Get my stuff real quick.​

    She pressed the speaker button, closing the phone.

    INT.VON DOOM TOWER VICTOR’S OFFICE.NIGHT

    Susan walked into Victor’s large office. Everything about it matched victor’s personality, the office was so luxurious it could even put the white house to shame.

    Susan looked around, she couldn’t spot Victor. She walked closer to his desk, her stilettos tapping the marble tiles. She noticed Victor outside, on his office’s balcony.

    EXT.VON DOOM TOWER VICTOR’S OFFICE.NIGHT

    Susan stepped onto the balcony.

    SUSAN
    Victor​

    She gave him a peck on the cheek.

    VICTOR
    Susan

    SUSAN
    So how did it go, seriously. I want the
    Details, that means ‘fine’ is no answer

    VICTOR
    It was fine​
    Susan gave him a fake smile

    VICTOR
    The board members seemed really
    Happy by the fact that we were
    Overall ahead of both Oscorp
    Stark Industries.​
    There was a silent pause.

    VICTOR
    You know Susan, theres something
    I’ve been wanting to tell you​

    Susan gave him her utmost attention.

    VICTOR
    We’ve been together for two years and
    I’ve been madly with you

    SUSAN
    Victor…

    VICTOR
    And Im ready to take the next step with you…​
    Susan forced a smile

    VICTOR
    So, Ill cut the chase…​

    Victor kneeled on one knee and pulled out a jewelry box.
    He opened it up.

    VICTOR
    Will you marry me Susan Storm?​

    Susan was silent, the silence actually bothered Victor.
    She nodded her head.

    SUSAN
    Yes…Yes!​

    Victor hugged her. She wasn’t focused, she was disoriented. She had just accepted to spend the rest of her life with Victor, was it really what was best for her, was it what she wanted?

    Cut to:​


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    EXT.VON DOOM TOWER VICTORS OFFICE.DAY

    The next day…

    VICTOR(V.O)
    We’ve gathered here today…​

    INT.VON DOOM TOWER PRESS CONFERENCE ROOM.DAY

    Victor held his fiancée’s hand. Susan was somewhat uncomfortable but didn’t resist.
    Reed caught notice instantly and felt uncomfortable as well. In fact, everyone in the round press conference table had noticed, Victor steadily pulled his hand away as Ben cleared his throat. Cameras flashed.
    Reed focused his attention back at Victor but he caught something in the corner of his eye, it was a diamond ring on Sue Storm’s finger.

    VICTOR
    As of now we are the official five
    Participating in the Von Doom funded
    Mission to space…were we will intuitively
    Study cosmic radiation and what not.​

    The room was filled to the brim with photographers, journalist, and news reporters; all reporting on what was said to be the ‘next big scientific breakthrough’

    VICTOR
    Johnny Storm will be our main pilot.​

    Johnny smiled and waved his hand. The cameras flashed.Susan gave Johnny a contemptuous look.

    JOHNNY
    WHAT?

    VICTOR
    Mr.Ben Grimm over here…​

    Victor gestured to Ben

    VICTOR
    Will be our co-pilot​

    Ben wanted to roll his eyes. No matter how many times he had heard it, he still could not believe Johnny Storm, a previous student of his, would be the main pilot of the mission. It infuriated him, picking Johnny as head pilot was like letting a five year old drive a sports car, it just didn’t make sense.

    VICTOR
    Reed Richards will be our chief
    Engineer. ​

    Victor’s voice grew somewhat cold from the mention of Reeds name but nonetheless the cameras flashed.

    VICTOR
    And my lovely fiancée, Susan Storm​

    Victor rubbed her hand, Susan smiled. Reed looked at the couple holding hands. He noticed Susan was smiling, did that mean she really cared for Victor? He couldn’t understand, his face was motionless and sober at the same time. Susan glanced at him and smiled and he forcefully smiled back. She starred into his eyes and Reed starred back into her dark ocean blue eyes, then she turned away. The cameras flashed rabidly due to Victor’s newly found fiancée.

    VICTOR
    Will be co-commander and I commander​
    Victor looked at Reed and gave him demeaning smile, attempting to emotionally crush Reed anyway possible despite him being the main engineer and analytical scientist aboard.

    VICTOR
    Any Questions?​
    The media workers went crazy, all asking questions simultaneously. It came down to who ever had the loudest and clearest voice.

    JOURNALIST
    Victor, where exactly will the mission be taking
    place?

    VICTOR
    We will all be residing temporarily
    At the Dryden Flight research center,
    One of NASA’s main testing facilities
    In Edwards, California.We’ll engage in
    Intensive aeronautical training and from there we will launch into the dark abyss

    TV REPORTER
    How long are you planning to orbit
    The Earth?

    SUSAN
    Actually, we’re not planning to orbit.
    We’ll be operating at the international
    Space station and residing there for a
    5-6 day period.

    JOURNALIST (2)
    And what do you plan to do there once
    You all arrive?

    JOHNNY
    I plan on doing some pretty sweet dance
    Moves in zero gravity​

    The crowd laughed, the cameras flashed.

    SUSAN
    He wasn’t being serious.​
    She looked at Johnny and grunted under her smile for him to stop.

    REED
    I can assure you that no one will be dancing in
    The trip…other than Johnny​

    The meadia laughed again.

    REED
    But in all seriousness, what we plan to do
    During this trip is a true breakthrough in
    The scientific community. We will have an
    Extensive study on cosmic radiation that may
    Explain and solve a lot of question regarding
    Captivating universal phenomena such as black
    Hole, stars, etc. We’ll also focus on a newly
    Discovered alternate dimension known as Sector
    345HG456

    BEN
    Also known as the negative zone​

    Reed smiled.

    REED
    This abnormal dimension is an disproportional
    Energy-mass complex that can solve the universal
    Secrets we have longed for throughout the
    Prolonged history of mankind. Such as whether
    Life exist beyond our heliosphere and it may even
    Allow us to explain the very existence of the
    Celestial universe itself.

    JOURNALIST(3)
    NASA claimed in an earlier documented paper
    That the mission would also be aimed to solving
    Cures for multiple genetic and terminal diseases,
    Can anyone of you confirm this.

    VICTOR
    Yes, as we discover the intriguing origins and
    Function of cosmic radiation our previous studies
    On the subject matter has proven that cosmic
    Radiation has had a significant and fundamental
    Role in the evolutionary of homosapien and other
    Hominid species, such as the homoerectus. With
    Extensive studies from our lead scientist we
    We believe that a new sort of genetic engineering
    Is possible through a complex process involving
    Cosmic radiation that can restructure our DNA,
    Curing a wealth of genetic and terminal diseases.​
    Johnny looked at Sue.

    JOHNNY
    Okay...Is he speaking Latervia?

    SUSAN(mutter)
    Johnny shutup…

    TV REPORTER(2)
    Sir, with this bombardment of cosmic
    Radiation you have foreshadowed, is
    It not a possibility that perhaps you
    Five may be struck with this cosmic
    Radiation

    BEN
    Everything is in control. We have the
    Dr.Reed Richards who has calculated the
    Cosmic storm’s acceleration.

    REED
    I’ve accurately recorded my calculations
    And I’ve been extremely careful, we’re
    Dealing with five lives here and I’ve made
    Sure that the calculations are correct



    TV REPORTER(3)
    Im Roger from the Daily Bugle and
    This question is really for Susan
    And Victor…When are you guys getting
    Married​
    Susan and Victor laughed

    VICTOR
    We haven’t decided

    TV REPORTER(3)
    And one more…do you guys plan on
    Having children of your own or to
    Adopt

    SUSAN
    We’re not really rushing things for
    Now, were taking things steady and
    Who knows…maybe…I think its definitely
    A possibility

    JOURNALIST(4)
    And how do you feel about that Johnny?

    JOHNNY
    As long as Im not touching feces and diapers
    …Im cool​
    The crowd laughed.

    Cut to:

    EXT.VON DOOM TOWER.DAY

    REED
    So the first half of the
    Press conference was okay
    Til they got to Victor’s
    Proposal to Susan

    BEN
    Don’t even get me started on
    That

    JOHNNY
    Hey baldie wait up!!!

    BEN
    Oh God…Reed, just kill me
    Right now.​

    Johnny caught up to both Ben and Reed. He put his arm around Ben.

    JOHNNY
    Looks like you puller a Homer Simpson,
    Ben, you must have gained at least 40 pounds

    Ben smiled

    BEN
    Johnny, Im gonna break your face in
    A second



    JOHNNY
    You know, Im really excited for this
    Trip…

    BEN
    I wish I could say the same

    JOHNNY
    Its so funny how Im the one who’ll be
    Giving you orders

    BEN(sarcastic)
    Mmmmhmmm…Hilarious…

    JOHNNY
    It reminds me of the good ol’ days back
    In space training…You remember Ben?

    BEN
    Yeah, Ive tried to forget

    JOHNNY
    I can't, the glare on your bald head
    left me half blind


    BEN
    Johnny…GET!​

    Ben pointed his hands back to the Von Doom tower, signaling him to leave him alone. His tone was strict.

    JOHNNY
    What ever you say Ben…but-

    SUSAN
    Johnny, leave Ben alone…​

    Casually walked toward the three men, she looked very professional. She was in a discrete yet sexy business suit and on high heel stilettos.

    Ben smiled at Johnny, a cold smile.

    JOHNNY
    Yeah, I think I got better things
    To do.

    BEN
    Like go party with girls?

    JOHNNY
    Pretty much…you got me. Later big guy…
    Reed.​

    Reed was the only one who waved back.

    BEN
    That boy better not…

    REED
    Ben, don’t get too angry​

    Ben grunted

    BEN
    Susan, thank-you so much

    SUSAN
    No problem, Ben, we all know Johnny,
    Always been a hothead.Reed, you left
    Your documents back in the media
    Conference room​

    Susan handed reed a manila folder full of documented papers.

    BEN
    Congratulations with Victor, I didn’t
    Know you two were so…

    SUSAN
    Serious?

    BEN
    Mmmmhhmmm…Susie, Id like to stay but I really
    Have to head home.​

    Reed started walking with Ben.

    BEN
    But…Reed will stay here​

    Ben winked his eye at Reed

    SUSAN
    Alright Ben, take it easy Ben, tell Debbie
    I said hi.

    BEN
    I will​

    Ben walked off while he whistled for a cab.


    Reed looked down at his shoes, he was nervous. He tried to control himself repeating in his head over and over that he didn’t love Sue anymore. I don’t love Sue He thought, Then why am I still acting this way?


    SUSAN
    Reed...​





    Reed looked up at her.

    REED
    Oh…Im really happy for you and Victor.
    You guys look great together.​

    Reed knew he was lying but there was nothing else he could say.

    SUSAN
    Thanks, we really love each
    Other​

    Reed nodded

    REED
    I can see that.​

    Sue smiled, she couldn't tell if he was being serious or sarcastic, she looking deep into his eyes. There was short silence, not so much awkward.

    SUSAN
    Is there something you wanna say?

    REED
    Umm…I hope you’re really happy with victor​

    She looked at him, still expecting him to say more. It wasn’t the answer she wanted, then again she wasn’t even too sure what she wanted him to say.

    SUSAN
    I am… I don’t think I’ve ever been
    Happier in a relationship before…
    I have everything I can ever want​

    Reed gulped.


    REED
    Well that’s good…​

    Was that all he had to say!? Susan thought

    REED
    If you really meant that
    SUSAN
    Of course I do, I mean, we shared
    Something special Reed its just that
    You never moved to the next step.

    REED
    I was ready to make the next step
    Susan, I just needed you to wait

    SUSAN
    Wasn’t it enough to know that I loved you?​

    Reed was speechless, he didn’t know what to say yet and Susan still wanted his answer.

    SUSAN(whisper)
    Say something…​

    She stepped a bit closer to him.The hairs on his skin rose, he became nervous.
    A car honked from behind. Reed turned around, it was a rare 1934 Bentley, Victor was in the back seat and the chauffer was up front waiting for Susan.

    Susan smiled at Reed.

    SUSAN
    Reed…not everything has to be calculated
    or researched to know its there
    Cut to:​

     

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