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[Victarion]

The idea I'm shooting for is that the people hearing the hellhounds equate their howls with laughter; their cause in the prior entry amounted to nothing more than a bloody joke.

Introducing the sequel via a dialogue in which a frightened character who interprets the howls as laughter might work better. This would lead into the rest where the hellhounds tear into them.

 

[Kyle]

I'd have to read it to be able to judge it, because it feels like it can go one way or another. Right now the original beginning is a great opening because it's immediate with a grisly image that stands out. An impact that hearing the howl then dialogue doesn't seem like it would necessarily have, unless accompanied by something that's as strikingly visual.

 

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