Batman: Dark Justice

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  1. Robin91939

    Robin91939 Master Tim

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    Here is the begining of my fan script, this is all I will be posting for a while. I just want to get some opinions on if it is any good.

    It is very much crossed between the COMICS and the ANIMATED SERIES. This story takes place in BATMAN BEGINS continuity, yet is not a direct sequel. It could really happen at any point of the continuity.

    The story chronicals Batman's struggle to take down a new crime lord, Oswald Cobblepot. There will be a cameo by BLACK MASK, also. The main plow is, Batman is trying to stop a crime lord's (COBBLEPOT) smuggling ring. Cobblepot seems VERY clean, and legitiment, but he hasn't tied up all his loose ends. One being his former enforcer, Tony Zucco. After Zucco was fired by Cobblepot as an enforcer, he becomes an insurance agent. You can basically see where it leads. The introduction of ROBIN. And the relationship between Grayson and Wayne. Black Mask, will be an enforcer for the "Penguin", and there will be another surprise villain. I am limited to "second tier" villains because I can't use villains like Joker, Two-face, or Scarecrow. But I will be utilizing these 4 villains in my story: Catwoman (love interest, not really a villain), Penguin (Main Villain, kinda), (Black Mask, enforcer for Penguin, kinda) (Riddler, Mastermind behind it all, even he death of the Graysons...Batman and Catwoman's relationship, penguins envolvment, and Black Mask really works for him) So it is really a Dark Victory/Robin's Reckoning/HUSH crossbreed.


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    -R
     
  2. The Spider-Bat

    The Spider-Bat Well-Known Member

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    oh, I like it so far. For some reason it reminds me a lot of the video game :confused:!

    Great so far, keep it up!
     
  3. Robin91939

    Robin91939 Master Tim

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    Which vieo game? DARK TOMORROW? Yeah, I think that the alleyway grapple is a little reminisant of that, but hey, its been done in the comics before too.
    :up:

    -R
     
  4. The Spider-Bat

    The Spider-Bat Well-Known Member

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    I meant BEGINS, the interigation.
     
  5. Robin91939

    Robin91939 Master Tim

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    Oh, well then I guess I'm doing something right, and it has the "BEGINS" feel.

    -R
     
  6. The Spider-Bat

    The Spider-Bat Well-Known Member

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    Yeah, keep it up.

    -SB (wanted to see how it feels)
     
  7. Robin91939

    Robin91939 Master Tim

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    UPDATE: I edited the first part, and have finished a few more scenes.
    ::edit::

    -R
     
  8. The Demon's Head

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    It's great so far. :up:
     
  9. Robin91939

    Robin91939 Master Tim

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    Thanks I hope to have it completed by The end of August...i still have to work out some story, and dialogue. Its BATMAN BEGINS style, along with a lot of influences from BATMAN: The Animated Series. As far as the personality of the characters goes.

    -R
     
  10. Robin91939

    Robin91939 Master Tim

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    Very cool man
     
  12. Robin91939

    Robin91939 Master Tim

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    Thanks, next few pages will be up soon.

    -R
     
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    Robin91939 Master Tim

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    It's really, really, really cool. It puts my work to shame :(.
     
  15. Robin91939

    Robin91939 Master Tim

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    Havnt read any of your work, gimme a link if its on here. I'm sure ur stuff is good.

    and give me about 10 more days, and Ill post 10 pages.

    -R
     
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    Robin91939 Master Tim

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    A little taste:


    Alone in the office, COBBLEPOT stands and begins to walk out. A shadow blocks the door. The shadow is the BATMAN.

    BATMAN
    COBBLEPOT.



    INT. ICEBURGE BACK OFFICE. NIGHT. (cont’d)


    COBBLEPOT sees the black figure as it steps into the dim light. He gasps, and lets out a little “squawk” like gasp. He drops his martini glass and it cracks as it hits the wooden floor.
    COBBLEPOT
    Ah, BATMAN. So the Legends are true.

    BATMAN
    Cut the crap COBBLEPOT, what’s you’re connection to TONY ZUCCO?

    COBBLEPOT
    ZUCCO? He is quite the scoundrel. The only pretense for his employment is that his uncle is my lounge’s biggest patron.

    BATMAN
    ZUCCO is connected to a smuggling ring, and to you.

    COBBLEPOT
    I know nothing of the sort. He is an errand boy. His uncle asked me to keep him out of trouble due to the fraud investigation he was under at his uncle’s company.

    BATMAN
    What kind of errands.

    COBBLEPOT
    Look, as much as I enjoy entertaining guests, I’d advice you to see yourself out. I have a business to tend to.


    COBBLEPOT turns to the door and turns the handle, turns back and sees that the BATMAN is gone. COBBLEPOT walks out into the plush nightclub/restaurant.



    -R
     
  17. The Demon's Head

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    Can't wait to read more. :up:
     
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    [thread=190148]Spider-Bat A Batman 89' Spoof[/thread]
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  19. Robin91939

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    next page, all I'll have for a little while. Almost right off the pages of Dark Victory.

    EXT. CIRCUS GROUNDS. NIGHT.

    Two men, HARRISON HALY and TONY ZUCCO walk across the empty fair grounds. A dry wind rolls over the cool AUGUST night and GOTHAM skyline is seen in the distance. They walk as ZUCCO puts his arm around HALY like a crooked car salesman selling a heap out of a chop shop.


    EXT. CIRCUS. NIGHT. (cont’d)

    ZUCCO
    Common HARRY, it’s not like I’m askin’ you to change the name to the ZUCCO circus.

    HALY
    But…

    ZUCCO
    You got some nice trucks, I got a LOT of nice trucks.

    HALY
    But…

    ZUCCO
    You get to cross state lines every which way, ‘cause like I said, EVERYBODY loves the circus.

    HALY
    But…

    ZUCCO
    HARRY, you worry too much. I have stuff that has GOTTA get across those lines.

    The two men walk by a big billboard. “HALY CIRCUS PRESENTS, THE FLYING GRAYSONS.” A mother and father standing next to their son, all wearing bright red and yellow acrobat costumes.

    ZUCCO (looks at the billboard)
    The FLYIN GRAYSONS. So that’s your star attraction huh? Be a shame if anything happened to them, ya know? I mean I’d hate for you to have to use uncle Stromwell’s insurance. With them being way up there, and the ground way down here.

    HALY
    But…

    ZUCCO
    I know you’ll do the right thing HARRY.

    The two men walk away. A child, the one from the BILLBOARD about 15 steps out of the shadows from behind the billboard.

    -R
     
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    Robin91939 Master Tim

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    HERE ARE THE FIRST 16 PAGES all in one spot:











    DARK JUSTICE
    (working title)























    Story by: Robin91939
    Screenplay by: Robin91939










    BRUCE (vo)
    I never chose this life. I never wanted it. I had a life. But it was taken. It still feels like a dream, a dream that took all of my dreams.

    Sometimes I dream…sometimes. Sometimes they’re good dreams, most of the time it's only the bad one. It's always the same dream. We walked down that alley, that never ending alley. He stepped out of the shadows, the same ones I use today. Then the gun fired twice, they fell almost as if it was in slow motion; they fell to the ground. He starred at me with this look of fear in his eyes; he was scared, scared of MY eyes. He ran and left me there in the cold. Alone in the eternal loneliness that I will never escape. Then, other nights, there is the good dream. The good dream is when he fires three times, and we are together.

    ALFRED
    Master Bruce

    BRUCE
    Yes.

    ALFRED
    I hope that I am not interrupting sir, but there is a situation.

    BRUCE
    No; not interrupting anything.

    BRUCE (V.O)
    This is my life…my nightmare…I didn’t choose it…it chose me.

    BRUCE
    I should get to work

    -Opening Credits-

    BATMAN:
    DARK JUSTICE

    EXT. Docks. NIGHT.

    Outside of a huge warehouse on the docks by the river,
    a large cargo ship pulls into the docks. It stops and after
    EXT. Docks. NIGHT. (cont’d)

    a few minutes of preparations, men are unloading wooden box crates of the ship. In the distance a large shadow is seen. The men are hauling the remaining boxes onto three eighteen wheel trucks.

    MAIN THUG
    I want those crates unloaded
    And on the trucks in
    half an hour!

    There are grunts and mutters by the other workers as the look up at the large clock that reads quarter past 3 a.m.


    The men pull a large crate off the boat with a fork lift, as two others carry a smaller one to the truck. One of the two thugs loses his handle on the box and it slips to the ground, the lid cracks off, as the contents fall out. An assortment of rifles and handguns

    EXT. ROOFTOP. NIGHT

    BATMAN
    As suspected.

    The BATMAN sits atop a nearby ware house roof, with night vision binoculars, crouched down on the edge, with his cape billowing in the wind.

    BATMAN (cont’d) [angrily]
    It’s time.

    EXT. DOCKS. NIGHT.

    MAIN THUG
    Hey, pick those up, Mista ZUCCO will not want the merchandise if it is damaged. NOW PICK UP THOSE DAMNED-

    The MAIN THUG’s sentence is cut off by a piercing, shooting pain, in his shoulder. We see that it is a small BATARANG.

    MAIN THUG (cont’d)
    What the hell-?

    He looks around at the back of his shoulder, and sees the
    EXT. DOCKS. NIGHT. (cont’d)

    small BATARANG. Within seconds the shadow of a bat covers the area, and swallows up thug after thug. The MAIN THUG begins to run, banging on the doors of an eighteen wheeler.

    MAIN THUG (cont’d)
    Get those trucks outta here!

    THUG DRIVER
    Right, boss.

    The MAIN THUG stops and starts to run around the avenue, and down into a dark alley. He walks, back peddling, with his pistol drawn, breathing deep.

    EXT. ALLYWAY. NIGHT.


    MAIN THUG (panting)
    Alright, Monster, show yourself. SHOW YOURSELF!

    The MAIN THUG begins to stammer out of the alleyway. Then he hears a noise, behind him. He turns, and is so startled he fires a round, but nothing is there.

    MAIN THUG (to himself)
    Get a grip, Tommy. He went after the truck.

    After assuring himself that it is safe he begins to turn to leave the alley, he turns right into the demon of the night.

    MAIN THUG/ TOMMY (shocked)
    Holy ****!

    BATMAN grabs the thug by his throat.

    BATMAN (mater of fact)
    Let’s talk.

    The MAIN THUG drops his gun to the pavement. The BATMAN lifts the man off of his feet.

    BATMAN
    Who’s your boss?

    EXT. ALLYWAY. NIGHT. (cont’d)


    TOMMY
    I don’t know. I get my instructions by phone.

    BATMAN
    Well, who do you take the orders from?

    TOMMY
    I don’t know. I never met him.

    The BATMAN takes out a small, folded BATARANG from his belt. He holds it up, the BATARANG pops open with a SHNKIT.

    TOMMY (cont’d)
    Okay, okay, I’ll talk. His name is Zucco, Tony Zucco. I’m not even sure if he is the head guy. But the guy’s got connections. If any ****’s goin’ down, that’s who you wanna talk to. He knows it all.

    BATMAN
    Zucco…

    TOMMY
    Yeah, a real *******, arrogant, used to be an insurance salesmen. Then he got busted for fraud.

    BATMAN
    That’s all I’ll need.

    TOMMY
    You’re gonna let me go?

    BATMAN (almost smirks)
    No.

    BATMAN throws him against a wall into a pile of black garbage bags and trash cans. A small silver cell phone falls out into the alley. BATMAN, kneels down cuffs up the hoodlum, and grabs the cell phone, places it into a compartment of his Belt. He reaches around his back, and grabs his grapple launcher from the back of his belt. Aims the launcher up, and fires. The hook catches, and BATMAN rigs the D CEL cable to his belt, and presses a button on his belt. The wire begins to retract and it propels BATMAN skyward onto a 20th story fire escape.
    EXT. ALLYWAY. NIGHT. (cont’d)

    Then, presses a small button on his belt and a subtle ‘beep’ is heard.

    BATMAN touches his temple and activates his radio receiver.


    BATMAN
    Alfred.?

    ALFRED (over headset)
    Here sir. I trust everything went accordingly.

    BATMAN
    You could say that. I have a lead. Apparently a TONY ZUCCO had a hand in this. One of his thugs gave me his name.

    BATMAN searches number’s on the cellphone.

    BATMAN (cont’d)
    I have a business number for a STROMWELL FINANCIAL. I’m going to need an address.

    INT. BATCAVE. NIGHT.

    ALFRED stands next to a large table. On the table is a laptop computer along with a desktop computer, and several other monitors and speakers. A wire connects a headset to the desktop computer. ALFRED wears the headset, and types into the main computer, “STROMWELL FINANCIAL”. An address appears, “Stromwell Financial Group

    ALFRED
    I have the listing.

    BATMAN (over headset)
    I’m listening.

    ALFRED
    It is on the on the corner of Dini and 5th. Should I call Lucious and tell him you won’t be at the share holder’s meeting tomorrow morning?



    EXT. FIREESCAPE. NIGHT.
    BATMAN
    Yes, tell FOX I have an early Tee time- BATMAN out.

    BATMAN walks to the rail of the platform, surveys the city, and looks up a large clock tower. The tower reads roughly 20 past 4 a.m.


    EXT. BUILDING ROOFTOP. NIGHT.

    BATMAN walks across the rooftop, and makes his way to the roof access door, it is locked. He pulls out a small lock pick device and opens the lock and enters the building.


    INT. BUILDING. NIGHT.

    BATMAN continues down the long stairwells -empty- not a sound. He jumps over the railing and glides down the remaining flight. He lands like a gymnast, and arises slowly and continues down the corridor.

    INT. HALLWAY. NIGHT (continuous)

    BATMAN walks down the empty hall- when suddenly a light is seen and footsteps break the silence. These footsteps are heavy and not of a trained fighter- BATMAN moves fast.

    GUARD
    Who’s there? (pauses) Mr. Zucco…Is that you? Mr. STROMWELL?

    BATMAN (mumbles to self)
    Zucco…

    The GUARD shines his light around the room back and forth nothing, and then as he turns the corner in the hallway the light catches something- BATMAN.

    GUARD
    Who the-??

    BATMAN
    …

    GUARD
    What the hell are you?
    INT. HALLWAY. NIGHT (cont’d)

    BATMAN (walks closer)
    ….

    GUARD
    Hel…-

    BATMAN’s large hand covers the GUARD’s mouth and he goes silent. Moments later the man is cuffed.

    BATMAN
    Where’s Zucco

    GUARD
    Who?

    BATMAN
    Cute…

    The BATMAN takes out a BATARANG.

    BATMAN (cont’d)
    We’ll do it my way then.

    BATMAN starts to trace a line around the guard’s cheek with the razor sharp bat- not yet breaking the skin.

    GUARD
    Okay…okay.

    BATMAN
    Where’s Zucco?!

    GUARD
    Who?

    BATMAN applies pressure to the bat, piercing the skin.

    GUARD (cont’d)
    He’s this GUY! Acts real tough thinks he’s hard or something.

    BATMAN
    Where can I find him?!


    INT. HALLWAYS. NIGHT. (cont’d)

    GUARD
    The a…the Iceberg. It’s a lounge. Zucco works with for the owner, I don’t know his name.

    BATMAN
    Thanks.

    GUARD
    …


    BATMAN throws an elbow to the face of the GUARD. Who falls to the ground. He hears a sound, looks away from the incapacitated GUARD and to the end of the hallway. The shine of a flashlight begins to bend around the corner. Batman fades into the shadows, as the SECOND Guard walks around the corner.

    EXT. ROOFTOP. NIGHT.

    BATMAN kneels over a skylight, looking down at the SECOND GUARD who discovers the incapacitated GUARD. BATMAN turns, and runs towards the edge of the roof and leaps, he falls into the abyss, then sticks his gloved hands into the pockets of his cape, the electrical current surges through the memory fabric as the cape goes rigid. BATMAN then glides out of sight.

    INT. BATCAVE. DAWN.

    The TUMBLER roars into the BATCAVE, through the waterfall entrance, causing a huge splash. The cockpit door opens and reveals BATMAN. He jumps out, and walks over to the computer desk. There is a digital clock that reads, 5:47 a.m. Next to the computer monitor is a bowl of soup with a post-it next to it.

    “Master Bruce, apologize if its cold.”

    He takes off his cowl. There is still black eye makeup around his eyelids.

    INT. WAYNE MANOR STUDY. DAWN.

    A grandfather clock swings open and reveals BRUCE WAYNE.

    INT. WAYNE MANOR STUDY. DAWN. (cont’d)

    He walks across the oriental area rug wearing only pajama
    pants. He passes a large fireplace. Above the mantel is a large portrait of his parents.

    [FLASH]

    EXT. CIRCUS TENT. DAY.

    The sun is shining and the sky is clear. We see a family walking towards the big top. MARTHA and THOMAS WAYNE hold their son BRUCE’s hand as they walk towards the tent. A large banner reads. HALY’S CIRCUS: THE GREATEST SHOW ON EARTH, BROUGHT TO YOU BY THE WAYNE FOUNDATION. The young boy looks up to his parents and smiles. They pass by a large poster that shows a picture of two young acrobats, one man and one woman wearing bright red and green costumes. The poster reads THE FLYING GRAYSONS.

    [FLASH]

    INT. WAYNE MANOR STUDY. DAWN. (cont’d)

    He looks at it and smiles for a second at the memory. Then he sees his own reflection in the portrait and notices the black eye make-up. A scowl re-covers his face, and he wipes it off, along with a tear, and walks away.

    EXT. GOTHAM. NIGHT.

    The dark sky is disrupted by the shine of the BATSIGNAL. The beam of light comes from the top of the GOTHAM CITY POLICE DEPARTMENT. Standing on the roof is COMMISSIONER JAMES GORDON. He stands there in the silence.

    EXT. GOTHAM PD ROOFTOP. NIGHT.
    BATMAN
    Commissioner?

    BATMAN apparently sneaks up behind the commissioner, startling him.

    GORDON
    Do you have to do that?


    EXT. GOTHAM PD ROOFTOP. NIGHT. (cont’d)

    BATMAN
    Well?

    GORDON
    We discovered who was behind that contraband you disrupted last night.

    BATMAN
    Who?

    GORDON
    Our investigation has pointed us to an ANTHONY ZUCCO.

    BATMAN
    Mine also.

    GORDON
    Oh?

    BATMAN
    Yes, I...a... chatted with a few of the right people. They all pointed me towards the ICEBURGE lounge.

    GORDON
    COBBLEPOT’s place.

    BATMAN
    COBBLEPOT?

    GORDON
    Yeah, OSWALD COBBLEPOT. He’s a very odd character. Runs a nice place though, I took my niece there for her 8th birthday.

    BATMAN (to self)
    Eight years old…
    [FLASH]

    EXT. ALLEYWAY. NIGHT.

    The fog is thick outside the opera house, as the WAYNE family walks down the alley. They are approached by a man with a gun. The rest is so fast it is a blur two shots are fired, both parents fall.
    [FLASH]

    EXT. GOTHAM PD ROOFTOP. NIGHT.

    GORDON
    What’s that?


    BATMAN
    Nothing. I’ll get on it. Word is this ZUCCO works for COBBLEPOT. I talk to COBBLEPOT, I find ZUCCO.

    GORDON looks away for a second, removes his glasses and wipes his eyes.
    GORDON
    The ICEBURGE closes at…

    GORDON looks up. Nobody is there on the roof but him.

    GORDON (cont’d/smiles)
    Every time.

    INT. ICEBURGE BACK OFFICE. NIGHT.

    OSWALD COBBLEPOT, a portly little man, all or 5 and a half feet, stands behind his desk, wearing what appears to be a 500 dollar tuxedo. In his right hand, a martini with an olive floating in it, in the left, He props himself up with an umbrella, holding it like a cane. On the other side of the desk is another man, TONY ZUCCO. Zucco is a sharp dresser and is wearing a brown sports coat with alligator skin shoes. The room is dark, with the only light coming from the antique lamp that sits on the large mahogany desk. A third man in the room, RAMON SINOSIS, stands in the shadows, behind the desk next to his employer COBBLEPOT.

    COBBLEPOT
    What went wrong, ZUCCO, and keep it short, I have a business to run here.

    ZUCCO
    The…a…Batman. He showed up. I wasn’t there to supervise. But my boys tell me that the Bat showed up.

    COBBLEPOT
    I see, how much of the shipment made it to the stockhouses?
    INT. ICEBURGE BACK OFFICE. NIGHT.

    ZUCCO
    Almost all of it.

    COBBLEPOT
    What are our losses?

    ZUCCO
    A couple grand, but Mista COBBLEPOT we can-

    COBBLEPOT (cuts in)
    A COULE THOUSAND! Do you know why I was able to come to Gotham and take over this town?

    ZUCCO
    …

    COBBLEPOT (cont’d)
    Because I don’t make bad investments. And I don’t involve myself with those who are not competent to get the job done, like the FALCONES, the VITTIS or the MARONIS did. I keep things quiet, the last thing we need is you faltering my shipments, and getting the BATMAN involved.

    ZUCCO
    It won’t happen again Mista COBBLEPOT.

    COBBLEPOT
    See to it that it doesn’t. You know how I greet failure here Mr. ZUCCO. I am trying to run a business here and you are destroying it. We can’t use the harbor any more to smuggle the arms. BATMAN knows too much. We have to find another way.

    ZUCCO
    I think I have an answer. I made a few contacts when I was doing that insurance **** with my uncle. I think I have a way to transport the guns.

    COBBLEPOT pulls his desk chair out and sits in the swivel chair. He grabs a black cigarette holder out of his inner coat pocket, and a lighter. He places a cigarette from the box on his desk into the holder and lights it, takes a puff, exhales.



    INT. ICEBURGE BACK OFFICE. NIGHT. (cont’d)

    COBBLEPOT
    I’m listening.

    ZUCCO
    Alright, there was this one client I had. HARRY HALY, owned a traveling circus. Very old-school guy, they come through GOTHAM every few months or so. We can place our stuff on the rigs and transport it from city to city.

    COBBLEPOT
    Hmmm…I do like that idea, it would open our market up to new buyers. However, how will you get him to allow the contraband on the rig?

    ZUCCO
    Insurance.

    COBBLEPOT
    I beg your pardon?

    ZUCCO
    I’ll show him how useful his insurance can be, if there were say…an accident. I can be very persuasive Mista COBBLEPOT.

    COBBLEPOT
    Call me on the private line. RAMON, escort MR. ZUCCO to the back entrance.

    RAMON
    Yes, sir.

    RAMON steps out of the shadows and is wearing a grey and black pinstripe suit, and a black fedora. His face is concealed by an ebony mask, carved of wood. He walks over to ZUCCO, and escorts him out.

    Alone in the office, COBBLEPOT stands and begins to walk out. A shadow blocks the door. The shadow is the BATMAN.

    BATMAN
    COBBLEPOT.



    INT. ICEBURGE BACK OFFICE. NIGHT. (cont’d)


    COBBLEPOT sees the black figure as it steps into the dim light. He gasps, and lets out a little “squawk” like gasp. He drops his martini glass and it cracks as it hits the wooden floor.
    COBBLEPOT
    Ah, BATMAN. So the Legends are true.

    BATMAN
    Cut the crap COBBLEPOT, what’s you’re connection to TONY ZUCCO?

    COBBLEPOT
    ZUCCO? He is quite the scoundrel. The only pretense for his employment is that his uncle is my lounge’s biggest patron.

    BATMAN
    ZUCCO is connected to a smuggling ring, and to you.

    COBBLEPOT
    I know nothing of the sort. He is an errand boy. His uncle asked me to keep him out of trouble due to the fraud investigation he was under at his uncle’s company.

    BATMAN
    What kind of errands.

    COBBLEPOT
    Look, as much as I enjoy entertaining guests, I’d advice you to see yourself out. I have a business to tend to.


    COBBLEPOT turns to the door and turns the handle, turns back and sees that the BATMAN is gone. COBBLEPOT walks out into the plush nightclub/restaurant.

    EXT. CIRCUS GROUNDS. NIGHT.

    Two men, HARRISON HALY and TONY ZUCCO walk across the empty fair grounds. A dry wind rolls over the cool AUGUST night and GOTHAM skyline is seen in the distance. They walk as ZUCCO puts his arm around HALY like a crooked car salesman selling a heap out of a chop shop.


    EXT. CIRCUS. NIGHT. (cont’d)

    ZUCCO
    Common HARRY, it’s not like I’m askin’ you to change the name to the ZUCCO circus.

    HALY
    But…

    ZUCCO
    You got some nice trucks, I got a LOT of nice trucks.

    HALY
    But…

    ZUCCO
    You get to cross state lines every which way, ‘cause like I said, EVERYBODY loves the circus.

    HALY
    But…

    ZUCCO
    HARRY, you worry too much. I have stuff that has GOTTA get across those lines.

    The two men walk by a big billboard. “HALY CIRCUS PRESENTS, THE FLYING GRAYSONS.” A mother and father standing next to their son, all wearing bright red and yellow acrobat costumes.

    ZUCCO (looks at the billboard)
    The FLYIN GRAYSONS. SO that’s you star attraction huh? Be a shame if anything happened to them, ya know? I mean I’d hate for you to have to use uncle Stromwell’s insurance. With them being way up there, and the ground way down here.

    HALY
    But…

    ZUCCO
    I know you’ll do the right thing HARRY.

    The tow men walk away. A child, the one from the BILLBOARD about 15 steps out of the shadows from behind the billboard.


    -R
     
  22. Robin91939

    Robin91939 Master Tim

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    Thoughts?

    -R
     
  23. The Spider-Bat

    The Spider-Bat Well-Known Member

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    It's not good.























































    It's greeeeeeeaaaaaaaat!
     
  24. Robin91939

    Robin91939 Master Tim

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    Bump...Update coming very soon.

    -R
     
  25. Comic Book Boy

    Comic Book Boy Producer/Writer/Director

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    Hey Robin91939,

    Not dissing on your script, but you should know that title is already taken by a cool fan film.

    (Not that it CAN'T be re-used, just FYI)
     

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