Justice League Plot ideas for Jl part 1

[Lily Adler]

It's Darkseid and I definitely pulled a Thanos with that one.

But if I had Darkseid appear in a JL movie, I sure as hell won't kill him off. He's too powerful AND he's a gateway to a New Gods film.

 

[Lily Adler]

The plot is absolutely giant, but there are so many cool little moments, that I like. Will go into detail a bit later.

I'm not sure I like the sound of this.

 

[OutOfBoose]

About ACT ONE.
1) Beginning and setup. I like it. Goes in line with Suicide Squad. At least, to what Waller said in trailers.
2) I don't get the point of Firefly-Freeze and Nora subplot (for this film). Not to mention, those two guys working together. I'd kill for an opportunity to see a good Freeze portrayal, but maybe they should leave it for a Batman solo. Maybe it should be simpler. Bruce wants to meet Gordon after everything, that has happened, as well as to discuss the crime situation.
3) Maybe it shouldn't be just a meeting. Bruce meets Diana to discuss meta-humans and possible allies, maybe to try to convince her further, but then they suddenly learn of an attack on GCPD (as a part of increased crime situation subplot) and decide to act together again. They save Gordon and maybe it will be a good plot move to convince Diana there's no way back now. As well as first hint at restoration of relationship between Bruce and Gordon, if it became strained in the past. If Babs isn't introduced in UC of BvS, if she isn't crippled in BvS, edit her out.
4) Lois's relationship with Cat Grant... I don't know, it makes the story over-complicated. After all, it's a JL film. Unless she's a 7th member. Again, looks like something more fitting for a Superman solo.
5) Bruce-Alfred relationship - great. They need to argue and converse. Only... He leaves AGAIN? No, Alfred should stay. His abilities should be super-loyalty and super-sass.
to be continued...

 

[Lily Adler]

2) I wanted to show the crime escalation has hit closer to home for Bruce. I chose the combination of Firefly and Freeze mainly for visual flare as a contrast of fire and ice. Also to utilize lesser used members of Bruce's rogues gallery. I'm not overly attached with the usage of Firefly, but I wanted to use Freeze cause he's definitely a powerhouse that may require a little help from a metahuman to stop him.

3) I felt that maybe Diana and Bruce should have a debate on why she should get involved again with Man's World and its situations. Basically delve deeper into her decision to return in BvS. I like the idea of moving the situation to the GCPD. Barbra is used for the closure theme.

4) The subplot ties into the recurring theme of mourning and closure that I wanted to convey. It's also used to introduce Intergang and the history of the Mother Box to the story.

5) I always felt a passive aggressive Alfred wasn't my favorite Alfred. He can have his brass n sass, but I would believe he would have grown weary of Bruce's crusade as Batman, especially if he chooses to extend to the world rather than limit himself to Gotham.

 

[Tg11]

Yes but Loca with your set-up though it not only goes in with Suicide Squad in terms of tying it together but at the same time it also ties in with the other heroes in the Justice League to have their own separate solo franchises when the time comes but also at the same time builds towards Justice League Part 2 especially the ending with Darkseid which I really liked but then seeing the other heroes too all meeting but coming together forming that camaraderie too I loved it

It also has that dark tone to it but at the same time has that sort of comedic tone too just like The Avengers franchise but darker which is always a good thing

 

[OutOfBoose]

ACT ONE continued:
6) I like the idea of bringing Lex back through Amanda Waller.
7) There must be some other way to put Lois on investigation of shadow forces behind escalated crime. Maybe she should be in contact with Bruce and maybe she should argue with him about something, like his attempt to murder Clark, Lex involvement and so on. Maybe she should jump on him regarding what's going on in the crime world and when Bruce tells her not to get involved, she starts her own investigation. Since she's the key, maybe Bruce tries to keep her safe, but she resists this supervising. Or maybe Bruce outright tells her about the vision from the future. I'm not a big fan of this idea of introducing so many fly-by names. It will piss people off, it will confuse a lot of people. The story should be more focused. It's JL+Lois film.
8) I really like the idea of Clark's purgatory experience. It's cliched on surface, but execution can try something fresh. Not sure about a guide. But since there are overblown religious tones in DCEU so far, maybe it can be something inspired by Divine Comedy or whatever...

ACT TWO.
1) Lost married couple. Why do they approach BA? They know his identity (security video), why provoke him like that? It only makes him suspicious and it will cause trust issues in future. If you really want him to be your ally on good terms, approach the guy and be honest with him. Maybe Barry is being hunted by forces, allied with Lex/Darkseid? So Batman and Wonder Woman show up right on time to aid him with something. Maybe Barry doesn't have a suit yet and Alfred helps him making one...
2) Again, I'm fine with Lois investigation, it just needs to be more straight-forward, without all those subplots about Arkham, dead sons and so on... Too many names.
3) I like Waller-Lex subplot.
4) I'm OK with the idea of Clark confronting his demons in purgatory, but execution and presentation should try more originality and inventiveness.
5) I like this subplot with AC. Maybe they shake hands and Arthur grabs Diana's hand, removes her sleeve and sees the bracelet of submission (Pirates of the Caribbean style! ha-ha). Enraged, still holding her hand, he tries to deliver blows, but Diana gracefully avoids them and throws him to the ground, not hearing arguments of Batman and Flash, they're about to continue a fight, but disrupted by some outer cause.
to be continued...

 

[Tg11]

ACT ONE continued:
6) I like the idea of bringing Lex back through Amanda Waller.
7) There must be some other way to put Lois on investigation of shadow forces behind escalated crime. Maybe she should be in contact with Bruce and maybe she should argue with him about something, like his attempt to murder Clark, Lex involvement and so on. Maybe she should jump on him regarding what's going on in the crime world and when Bruce tells her not to get involved, she starts her own investigation. Since she's the key, maybe Bruce tries to keep her safe, but she resists this supervising. Or maybe Bruce outright tells her about the vision from the future. I'm not a big fan of this idea of introducing so many fly-by names. It will piss people off, it will confuse a lot of people. The story should be more focused. It's JL+Lois film.
8) I really like the idea of Clark's purgatory experience. It's cliched on surface, but execution can try something fresh. Not sure about a guide. But since there are overblown religious tones in DCEU so far, maybe it can be something inspired by Divine Comedy or whatever...

ACT TWO.
1) Lost married couple. Why do they approach BA? They know his identity (security video), why provoke him like that? It only makes him suspicious and it will cause trust issues in future. If you really want him to be your ally on good terms, approach the guy and be honest with him. Maybe Barry is being hunted by forces, allied with Lex/Darkseid? So Batman and Wonder Woman show up right on time to aid him with something. Maybe Barry doesn't have a suit yet and Alfred helps him making one...
2) Again, I'm fine with Lois investigation, it just needs to be more straight-forward, without all those subplots about Arkham, dead sons and so on... Too many names.
3) I like Waller-Lex subplot.
4) I'm OK with the idea of Clark confronting his demons in purgatory, but execution and presentation should try more originality and inventiveness.
5) I like this subplot with AC. Maybe they shake hands and Arthur grabs Diana's hand, removes her sleeve and sees the bracelet of submission (Pirates of the Caribbean style! ha-ha). Enraged, still holding her hand, he tries to deliver blows, but Diana gracefully avoids them and throws him to the ground, not hearing arguments of Batman and Flash, they're about to continue a fight, but disrupted by some outer cause.
to be continued...

Even I have to admit you bring up good points

 

[OutOfBoose]

Even I have to admit you bring up good points

Thanks.

 

[OutOfBoose]

Also, there's a potentially powerful moment, where Bruce approaches Barry and tells him about the future vision and how Barry himself delivered it. It can be as simple as that.

 

[Lily Adler]

ACT ONE continued:
6) I like the idea of bringing Lex back through Amanda Waller.
7) There must be some other way to put Lois on investigation of shadow forces behind escalated crime. Maybe she should be in contact with Bruce and maybe she should argue with him about something, like his attempt to murder Clark, Lex involvement and so on. Maybe she should jump on him regarding what's going on in the crime world and when Bruce tells her not to get involved, she starts her own investigation. Since she's the key, maybe Bruce tries to keep her safe, but she resists this supervising. Or maybe Bruce outright tells her about the vision from the future. I'm not a big fan of this idea of introducing so many fly-by names. It will piss people off, it will confuse a lot of people. The story should be more focused. It's JL+Lois film.
8) I really like the idea of Clark's purgatory experience. It's cliched on surface, but execution can try something fresh. Not sure about a guide. But since there are overblown religious tones in DCEU so far, maybe it can be something inspired by Divine Comedy or whatever...

ACT TWO.
1) Lost married couple. Why do they approach BA? They know his identity (security video), why provoke him like that? It only makes him suspicious and it will cause trust issues in future. If you really want him to be your ally on good terms, approach the guy and be honest with him. Maybe Barry is being hunted by forces, allied with Lex/Darkseid? So Batman and Wonder Woman show up right on time to aid him with something. Maybe Barry doesn't have a suit yet and Alfred helps him making one...
2) Again, I'm fine with Lois investigation, it just needs to be more straight-forward, without all those subplots about Arkham, dead sons and so on... Too many names.
3) I like Waller-Lex subplot.
4) I'm OK with the idea of Clark confronting his demons in purgatory, but execution and presentation should try more originality and inventiveness.
5) I like this subplot with AC. Maybe they shake hands and Arthur grabs Diana's hand, removes her sleeve and sees the bracelet of submission (Pirates of the Caribbean style! ha-ha). Enraged, still holding her hand, he tries to deliver blows, but Diana gracefully avoids them and throws him to the ground, not hearing arguments of Batman and Flash, they're about to continue a fight, but disrupted by some outer cause.
to be continued...

ACT ONE
7) I actually wanted to give Lois something meatier for the film. I thought it was the perfect opportune time to explore her mourning of Clark which leads her on this a journey of tragedy and loss. It feels like a wasted opportunity not to, but I understand if you think it overstuffs the plot with all the details.

8) I chose Mxyzptlk as a guide because it will probably be the best chance to use the character as I know many would find him too strange on Earth under normal circumstances. Plus he also plays homage to Twin Peaks.

ACT TWO
1) I did forget about the security footage. That's what I get for writing in the continuity of a film I haven't seen in about month and a half. I just wanted a moment of levity (plus Bruce is wearing a similar outfit to Reeve's Clark Kent as a homage). Barry does get his revenge by unmasking Bats, but I can make adjustments to it. Plus how does one broach that conversation? Bruce saying to Barry, I've been dreaming of you. I would like some help if you have any ideas?

3) This is an early draft. I wanted it to be straightforward as possible, so I may try something more out there and work on my creative muscles for the next one. I'm thinking about including a joke by Mxyzptlk about the similarities to Luke and the cave in ESB.

Thanks for the feedback. Keep 'em coming.

 

[Tobias]

ACT ONE
7) I actually wanted to give Lois something meatier for the film. I thought it was the perfect opportune time to explore her mourning of Clark which leads her on this a journey of tragedy and loss. It feels like a wasted opportunity not to, but I understand if you think it overstuffs the plot with all the details.

8) I chose Mxyzptlk as a guide because it will probably be the best chance to use the character as I know many would find him too strange on Earth under normal circumstances. Plus he also plays homage to Twin Peaks.

ACT TWO
1) I did forget about the security footage. That's what I get for writing in the continuity of a film I haven't seen in about month and a half. I just wanted a moment of levity (plus Bruce is wearing a similar outfit to Reeve's Clark Kent as a homage). Barry does get his revenge by unmasking Bats, but I can make adjustments to it. Plus how does one broach that conversation? Bruce saying to Barry, I've been dreaming of you. I would like some help if you have any ideas?

3) This is an early draft. I wanted it to be straightforward as possible, so I may try something more out there and work on my creative muscles for the next one. I'm thinking about including a joke by Mxyzptlk about the similarities to Luke and the cave in ESB.

Thanks for the feedback. Keep 'em coming.

Like a lot of this.

IMO Lois should have a key role in discovering how to bring Supes back. A subplot - while Bats is off forming the JL, Lois is investigating what happened to Clark's body - after she visits the Kent farm and discovers it is missing. BTW, SH reports there seems to be activity at the Illinois set of the Kent farm. Maybe prepping for JL1?

As a Superman/Clark and Lois fan I don't want to wait till the end of the film to see them show up.

Batman should not be the one to figure out how to bring Supes back, he's forming the League and will lead it - enough, Lois should. Amy says she is excited about the script and I hope that portends well. But then what actor does not say they are excited for the script.

 

[Spider-Aziz]

ACT ONE:

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After an emotional debate, Alfred gives his notice that he will be vacating his position as his Butler and his partner in his initiative. Afterwards, Bruce is visited by an upset Barbra who chastises him for treating her as a charity case as Bruce gave Gordon his business card earlier. She tells Bruce to stay away from her family, claiming he tried to take away her independence. She leaves a silent Bruce who simply sits and stares as if blankly into space.

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After Alfred hanging with cruel Bruce, this kind of feels wrong.
And Barbra getting this angry instead of thinking of him as a friend of her father's (Batgirl past or not)... that is quite annoying

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Meanwhile at Belle Reve, Amanda Waller is tasked by the government to probe Lex Luthor for information he obtained from the derelict scout ship, after several attempts to mine the ship's databanks are thwarted due to his hacking the ship to give him access to he alone. Lex initially refuses to answer, instead posturing different sayings to Waller. After a heated confrontation, Lex reveals to Waller that something is coming to Earth.

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By probing his mind do you mean a psychic? Hope there is explanation as how he hid info from the psychic.

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Lois goes to Metropolitan to apologize to Cat Grant, but Cat doesn't want anything to do with it as she plans to file a lawsuit against her for aggravated assault. Lois tries to reason with her, but Cat walks away until Lois tells her about Clark's death. Cat relents and invites her to tag along to an appointment. As they head to the appointment, Cat reveals the tragic death of her son, Adam Morgan and his murderer the Toyman. She tells Lois that she visits him every year to persuade him to reveal the whereabouts of Adam's body, revealing that is the appointment.

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Doesn't Cat read the papers to know about Clark's death? It was there in the end of BvS

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In a cornfield, Clark Kent awakes in a world between life and death. He meets a reality warping, little person in a purple suit named Mr. Mxyzptlk. Clark asks Mxyzptlk why he is here and Mxyzptlk answers that he is to help Clark deal with his inner demons to help him crossover to the afterlife. The pair begin their journey.

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Not the grounded storytelling this world is supposed to have, but I might be a bit too picky here.
And fanboy nitpick, but MXYZPTLK does not do that, can we have someone like Kismet instead?

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In Arkham Asylum, Lois and Cat meet Winslow Schott, the Toyman. Tensions quickly escalate when Cat refuses to refer to Winslow by his moniker, and after an emotional moment of Cat trying to persuade Toyman to reveal Adam's location using a picture of him, Toyman refuses to tell her of his whereabouts. Cat quickly leaves the room with Lois following behind, leaving Toyman.

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What is Toyman doing in Gotham?
This one is a fanboy nitpick, you can shrug it off.

ACT TWO:

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In Central City, a crime lab forensic scientist named Barry Allen prepares for his date with his longtime crush and now girlfriend, Iris West. After being alerted that he is late, he quickly rushes off to Iris's location. While he leaves, he is approached by a lost married couple asking for the location of the crime lab. When asked what business they have there, the couple respond that they're visiting their friend Barry. Barry becomes suspicious as he recognizes the man but can't place him, but refuses to reveal his identity and points them to the direction of the lab. On his way as The Flash, Barry learns, via Iris, of a hostage situation taking place by The Shade. As he tries to apprehend the villain, he is helped surprisingly by Batman and Wonder Woman. After The Shade is defeated, Batman and Wonder Woman approach Barry about joining their initiative. Barry recognizes Diana as the woman of the married couple from before. He's hesitant to join and demands Batman reveal his face as a form of trust. Batman initially refuses, but with some persuasion from Wonder Woman reveals his face. Barry finally recognizing him as 'Howard Hughes' reclusive billionaire, Bruce Wayne and joins their league before meeting Iris.

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Much, MUCH, better than Diana causing chaos. Wonder who suggested that plot before.

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In Metropolis, Lois investigates Toyman to see if she can learn where he hid the bodies of his victims and to give Cat closure. After talking to Captain Maggie Sawyer of the Metropolis Police, Lois learns that Toyman's father, Lazlo Schott had ties with Metropolis mob boss, Bruno Mannheim. She learns Mannheim is attending a funeral of an associate named, Vincent Edge and decides to crash it for an interview. At the funeral, Lois has an ominous discussion with Mannheim and his relation with Toyman. The interview is quickly interrupted by Vincent's son, Morgan Edge, owner of multinational media corporation, Galaxy Communications, as he warns Lois that Mannheim is extremely dangerous and asks her not to get involved with him. She quickly notices that both Edge and Mannheim are wearing rings adorned with the Omega symbol, but is quickly escorted out by Mannheim's bodyguard before questioning further.

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Wasn't Toyman in Arkham Asylum? And refused to comment?

Aside from some comments and certain nitpicks, I'm liking it so far.
Need to read 'Act 3' now.

 

[Lily Adler]

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After Alfred hanging with cruel Bruce, this kind of feels wrong.
And Barbra getting this angry instead of thinking of him as a friend of her father's (Batgirl past or not)... that is quite annoying

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It's all supposed to tie in to the theme of mourning and closure. Bruce pursues closure by mending his broken bond with Barbra which he still feels guilty about. Alfred is in mourning of the loss of Bruce's innocence and the life he could have lived.

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By probing his mind do you mean a psychic? Hope there is explanation as how he hid info from the psychic.

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Just a simple probing for information as in interrogating.

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Doesn't Cat read the papers to know about Clark's death? It was there in the end of BvS

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She wanted a woman's perspective on the article, but it was actually not her intent and instead to get Lois to open up on her relationship with Superman.

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Not the grounded storytelling this world is supposed to have, but I might be a bit too picky here.
And fanboy nitpick, but MXYZPTLK does not do that, can we have someone like Kismet instead?

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Mxyzptlk is only doing this as a form of community service for his excessive meddling with the third dimension by the elders (he may have had a hand in the creation of Jar Jar Binks). He only has limited access to his powers. Mxyzptlk also talks about how he would like to visit Clark in his dimension sometime.

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What is Toyman doing in Gotham?
This one is a fanboy nitpick, you can shrug it off.

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I know right, but Gotham is right across the bay. It wouldn't be too farfetched he was sent there.

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Wasn't Toyman in Arkham Asylum? And refused to comment?

Aside from some comments and certain nitpicks, I'm liking it so far.
Need to read 'Act 3' now.

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Yes. He was caught by MPD, but given over to Arkham due to being criminally insane.

 

[Spider-Aziz]

ACT THREE:

This feels like a lot of fun, and I have nothing to pick apart about it.
The whole plot could use a great execution in script.

 

[Lily Adler]

Well this is a skeleton and I go into greater detail in the scenes I have written which inspired the whole plotline. Thanks for your comments.

 

[OutOfBoose]

About ACT THREE:
1) I can't accept Alfred leaving Bruce. So I'll say I don't like this subplot with Barbara taking place of Alfred. There must be something to include Barbara, if she's needed.
2) Cool stuff with Martha discovering destroyed grave.
3) Because Lois wanted to know. I don't like it for a numerous reasons. Villains explains their motivation for no reason at all - it's as cliche as it can be. Lois - damsel in distress AGAIN.
4) I like the egg timer. ) Mirrors BvS. Kinda unites all DS cultists. Though I don't get the reason for setting the clock.
5) Swanwick's restroom saga continues.
6) Mannheim's sudden teleport to the lab?
7) Batman saving Lois is a cool idea (outside the fact that she requires saving again), but we need to know how he got there. Did he track Lois somehow?
8) Not a big fan of the idea of Lois going everywhere with JL. What's the reason for her to be there anyway?
9) Cool utilization of MM.
10) How does Superman find Lois?
11) Also, I love the tone of the ending and Superman delivering a speech on behalf of other heroes.
12) I don't think it should be a montage. Things like Clark returning home should be a really powerful moment. The ending should take it's time to wrap these stories. It doesn't need to show all JL members doing something. Just enough to setup future films. For example, show a scene where they part ways till they're needed again. Like where they can find each other.

Overall impressions:
-It looks like it's a story of Lois in the first place, not Batman assembling JL to protect the Earth, it feels like she has the most important job to do and and a key to everything. JL is just brute force. I would totally put Lois back a bit;
-Superman's resurrection is handled well, and it's an awesome idea to introduce MM though his resurrection;
-I would cut Batfamily subplot in favor of JL doing something. Alfred helps Bruce and other JL members;
-Darkseid cult is an awesome enemy, but provides little action;
-Leave individual JL members enemies outside of the story. There should be one common enemy and maybe some tension between Themyscira and Atlantis;
-I like the idea of using Waller and Lex more, linking Lex to Darkseid cult and overall subplot of opening a portal;
-I haven't noticed much opinion of JL members on JL as an idea, why they should act together and so on...

That's it for now.

 

[Lily Adler]

About ACT THREE:
1) I can't accept Alfred leaving Bruce. So I'll say I don't like this subplot with Barbara taking place of Alfred. There must be something to include Barbara, if she's needed.
2) Cool stuff with Martha discovering destroyed grave.
3) Because Lois wanted to know. I don't like it for a numerous reasons. Villains explains their motivation for no reason at all - it's as cliche as it can be. Lois - damsel in distress AGAIN.
4) I like the egg timer. ) Mirrors BvS. Kinda unites all DS cultists. Though I don't get the reason for setting the clock.
5) Swanwick's restroom saga continues.
6) Mannheim's sudden teleport to the lab?
7) Batman saving Lois is a cool idea (outside the fact that she requires saving again), but we need to know how he got there. Did he track Lois somehow?
8) Not a big fan of the idea of Lois going everywhere with JL. What's the reason for her to be there anyway?
9) Cool utilization of MM.
10) How does Superman find Lois?
11) Also, I love the tone of the ending and Superman delivering a speech on behalf of other heroes.
12) I don't think it should be a montage. Things like Clark returning home should be a really powerful moment. The ending should take it's time to wrap these stories. It doesn't need to show all JL members doing something. Just enough to setup future films. For example, show a scene where they part ways till they're needed again. Like where they can find each other.

Overall impressions:
-It looks like it's a story of Lois in the first place, not Batman assembling JL to protect the Earth, it feels like she has the most important job to do and and a key to everything. JL is just brute force. I would totally put Lois back a bit;
-Superman's resurrection is handled well, and it's an awesome idea to introduce MM though his resurrection;
-I would cut Batfamily subplot in favor of JL doing something. Alfred helps Bruce and other JL members;
-Darkseid cult is an awesome enemy, but provides little action;
-Leave individual JL members enemies outside of the story. There should be one common enemy and maybe some tension between Themyscira and Atlantis;
-I like the idea of using Waller and Lex more, linking Lex to Darkseid cult and overall subplot of opening a portal;
-I haven't noticed much opinion of JL members on JL as an idea, why they should act together and so on...

That's it for now.

I would have responded much sooner had this thread not been bumped to the bottom. So sorry.

1) I'm sorry you feel that way. I understand it feels redundant after TDKR, but I thought it and Barbra fit into the theme of the story I was telling.

2) Thanks.

3) Mannheim is portrayed as a deranged individual who has the tendency to overshare. His sadistic side is hinted when Lois asks him about Lazlo Schott in the funeral scene where he also hints at his cannibalism. She's the epitome of the damsel in distress, but she only needed saving like twice.

4) Theatrics. I love countdowns. But if I would I can make it so that Mannheim promises Cyborg that he wouldn't get near or kill his father being a man of his word.

5)

6) The warehouse they were in is surprisingly close, I'm thinking of changing the time to thirty minutes. It's also how Bruce and Lois get there, so fast.

7) I purposely didn't want to go into detail cause this is a skeleton. Bruce explains the warehouse was owned by LexCorp and Luthor's prison visitor's records showed Edge visiting him frequently. Mannheim was receiving payments from an offshore bank account which was linked to Luthor. He discovered that Edge was contacting Mannheim as well through his investigation of Victor and Silas Stone. Bruce deduced that Mannheim and Edge were planning something with Luthor, but did not know what exactly. He hacked into Edge's phone and traced his last call to the warehouse. It's shown in a brief "walk and talk" scene ala Sorkin.

8) Lois is driven by her desire for closure and wanting to bring Mannheim to justice and wants to see it for herself.

9) Thanks.

10) Superhearing.

11) Thank you. I'm still debating whether or not they say the name Justice League. I wanted his speech to be like they were recruiting other members, so more heroes will come out of the woodwork. I'm thinking maybe Raven sees this and think she can find refuge with them...

12) The speech serves that purpose as Superman says they will form when the world needs them most as did the earlier scene with Bruce giving the communicators. I could do without the montage, but I wanted to show the League members in a more human capacity. I could do a dialogue between Clark and Bruce.

Overall comments:
- Well she is the key.
- I'm using the various enemies of the League to showcase the escalation of crime and to show that there are instances where one hero is not enough to deal with the situation, motivating the others to assemble.
- As for the Shade, should I do the other idea of a Superman fanatical terrorist group?

Thank you for your comments Boose. I honestly don't know if I was putting too much detail in this outline or not enough, so I will probably do another rewrite with all your comments in mind.

 

[WBwins]

@Libido Loca
Nice plot.Especially like the Superman in astral plane storyline.Will be ripping off it for my plot.