Like I said Before this will not be a film.......yet
t: I'm just making a script for fun and seeing how this is working out I changed quite a few things since many peeps said it's too fast paced and needs character development so I'll need to slow things down. Here's my second shot at this and I'll keep changing till the majority is happy.
Spider-man : Sinister Six
V.O
"It's been five years since my Uncle Ben was murdered , and I put on these red and blue......uhh.....tights. I've battled Goblins, an Octopus, and my inner demons all to live one more day on Earth with Mary Jane Watson, the love of my life, I don't know what I'd do without her......well, this is my city.......my playground"
Man on street is pushed out of car and is sitting on street
Man: "Hey ! Hey!He just stole my car! He just stole my car!!!"
Spidey swings passed man
Spidey: "I'm on it."
Man:"(jumps up and down) GO SPIDEY!"
Spidey swings toward stolen car dodging traffic on the way and lands on top of car
Car Jacker: "Get off! Get the hell off!"
Car moves side to side trying to get Spidey to fall off
Spidey: "(yells) There's a reason they call me Spider-man you know!"
Spidey rips entire roof of the car and throws man up in the air and webs him
Spidey: "Bye! Bye!"
Spidey jumps in and pushes on brake and steps out of car and people on strreet start cheering
Lady: "WOOO!! Go Spidey!(claps)"
Cut to Spidey landing in his apartment building and taking off mask
Spidey: "(tiredly says)What a day."
Not knowing that MJ is home , Mj hears the thump of Peter landing
MJ : "Peter! Peter! Is that you?"
MJ walks over to stairs not knowing peter is standing behind her
Peter: "Boo!"
MJ: "(screams) Ahh!!! Oh my god!.....oh my god Peter!"
MJ lightly hits Peter on the chest
MJ: "Don't do that again."
Peter: "(laughing) ah.....good times well what did you make for dinner?"
MJ: "The usual sadly....chicken"
Peter and MJ sit down at the table and Peter takes a bite out of chicken
Peter: "Never get sick of chicken."
MJ: "(sighs and whispers to her self)well, I do."
Peter stands up and walks to MJ
Peter: "No worries babe."
Peter takes a card out of pocket and flips it over to MJ
MJ: " Are you serious?"
Peter: " Oh yeah I'm serious!"
MJ takes card kisses Peter
MJ: " I have to call Liz and tell her that on Friday I'm finally going to an actual restaurant!"
MJ runs to telephone while Peter cleans up and takes garbage outside
Peter: "(spider sense tingling) AH! my head....."
Peter looks around to see what's going on but doesn't see anything, but what he doesn't know is that a dark figure is watching him in the trees
Peter: "Who's there !?"
Peter hears something moving in the tree and walks toward it
Peter: " Who's there !?"
Peter enters back into the building
Cut to closeup on dark figure's bottom half of face turning into a sinister smile.
Tell me what you people think of my changes and if it's any better
