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The following is a screenplay for a film I am trying to get made next semester for a film club alongside school. Please post any comments you may have- constructive criticism would be greatly appreciated because I want/need this film to be as best as it can be.
EXT. BEACH
OPEN TO a WIDE SHOT of a beach. The waves wash up on shore. We see feet step towards the water, not going in.
MARK (V.O.)
Some people say that life begins when you take that first big plunge. When you fall into that deep dark abyss that we respectfully call adulthood.
Gradually dolly out to reveal a young guy looking out over the ocean. This is MARK RYANS (20).
MARK (V.O.)
I am here today to tell you
Mark turns around and stares straight into the camera.
MARK
Thats crap.
INT. MARKS DORM ROOM
CLOSE UP on Mark sleeping, sweating profusely. He JOLTS up, breathing heavily, and stares into the distance as though waking up from a terrible nightmare.
FADE TO:
INT. BATHROOM- SHOWERS
Mark stands underneath the running water of the shower, leaning against the wall. Eyes closed tight. He grits his teeth as though the waters scorching his skin.
FADE TO:
INT. HOFSTRA UNIVERSITY- CLASSROOM
Mark sits in a classroom staring off into the distance.
The TEACHER lectures the class about sociology.
ANDREW (20) takes a break from writing his notes and looks up to see Mark.
The teacher continues his lecture.
FADE TO:
EXT. HOFSTRA UNIVERSITY- CAMPUS
Mark and Andrew walk along the campus of Hofstra University. There is a long awkward silence
ANDREW
I saw you zoning out during Professor Bryces class.
Mark shrugs it off.
ANDREW
How are you holding up?
MARK
(lying)
Im fine.
Andrew nods his head okay, but he knows its not the truth.
They continue to walk along the campus in an awkward silence.
JUMP CUT:
INT. MARKS DORM ROOM- NIGHT
Mark reclines in his chair, distressed, staring out the window towards the New York City skyline.
BOY (O.S.)
Help me!
Mark closes his eyes, trying to block the noise.
We hear the sounds of waves.
BOY (O.S.)
Help me!
Mark groans in agony as he quickly gets up and approaches his cabinet. He takes out a plastic container and opens it. Inside is a syringe and drugs. He prepares the syringe and sits down on his bed, closing his eyes we continue to hear the sound of waves.
CLOSE UP on the Syringe nearing his arm
FADE TO:
EXT. HOFSTRA UNIVERSITY- CAMPUS- NIGHT
Silence. Mark walks along the campus of Hofstra University, completely alone and isolated. Compared to earlier that morning the campus seems dead.
Mark approaches Breslin Hall and looks up into the night sky.
CLOSE UP on Marks eyes, distant and pained, searching for an answer
Mark checks his watch and begins to walk away.
FADE TO:
INT. C-SQUARE SECURITY BOOTH
Mark sits on a rotating chair in the security booth staring towards the ceiling.
Mark checks the e-mail on his laptop computer. One new message: Hey Mark, its your Mom He quickly deletes the message.
Mark takes a deep breath as he looks out of the security booth seeing his own reflection he lowers his head.
He watches the television with a blank expression. A student enters and knocks on the glass. Mark lets him through without even looking.
Mark surfs the Internet as he gradually falls asleep on the job.
We fade to black and open to
A GUY enters the booth, Mark wakes up and looks towards him
MARK
Hey?
GUY
Im your replacement.
Mark nods his head okay; he grabs his backpack and is about to leave when
GUY
Hey dude
MARK
Huh?
GUY
You forgot to sign out.
MARK
Oh
Mark quickly signs out and leaves the booth.
EXT. C-SQUARE-MORNING
Mark exits the main entrance building of Newport C-Square.
FADE TO:
EXT. SUFFOLK HALL
Mark approaches Vander Poel Hall from a far off distance.
FADE TO:
IN. MARKS DORM ROOM
Mark reaches into his cabinet to retrieve his drugs. He opens the plastic container. Hes out.
Mark quickly checks his wallet. He only has ten dollars!
Mark looks around his room trying to figure out a plan.
FADE TO:
INT. SWIM CENTER ENTRANCE
Mark enters the Swim Center building and looks down through the glass window to see a beautiful young woman swimming in the pool below. This is SHANNON.
He looks down towards the water, frightened, not daring to go down there.
Shannon completes her lap and gets out of the pool. She looks up to see Mark staring down towards her. She smiles.
FADE TO:
EXT. SWIM CENTER
Mark and Shannon walk through the parking lot of the Swim Center.
SHANNON
So, how did you know where I was going to be?
MARK
I knew
(disdainfully)
Youre always here.
Shannon smiles as she brushes up besides him. He tries to smile, but something is holding him back.
SHANNON
You seem worried
Mark shakes his head no.
MARK
Its nothing.
SHANNON
You sure?
MARK
Yeah, I just need to borrow some money. Thats all.
(beat)
Its important. I wouldnt be asking if it wasnt.
SHANNON
Its okay. How much?
Mark itches the back of his neck and shrugs, holding off on answering
MARK
Twenty dollars.
Shannon reaches into her purse, gets the money and hands it to Mark.
MARK
Thank you this, this really means a lot.
Mark wants to get something off his chest, but he holds himself back. Shannon notices.
MARK
So, Ill see you later?
SHANNON
Yeah.
Awkward silence. Mark walks off. Shannon watches him leave.
EXT. HOFSTRA UNIVERSITY- PARK
Wide distance shot of a DEALER standing beneath a tree in the park. Mark approaches him. Mark hands the dealer the money. He gets the drugs, stuffs the drugs into his jacket pocket, looks around, and casually walks away. The dealer remains behind standing under the tree.
EXT. TOWN OF AMITYVILLE
Mark and Andrew walk along the streets of Amityville. Awkward silence. Andrew looks at Mark concerned
FLASH CUT:
EXT. TOWN OF AMITYVILLE- FLASHBACK
Mark and Andrew walk along the streets laughing.
MARK
Thinking about just tossing my bags onto the Harbinger one day and sailing off
ANDREW
Yeah, where to?
MARK
I dont know. Just far away from here.
ANDREW
Yeah? And what about college?
MARK
Ill transfer.
(beat)
Come on man, weve been living on this island for nineteen years now. Dont you just want to go off and explore the world?
ANDREW
Into the wild, huh?
MARK
Yeah.
Mark grins liking the sound of that.
MARK
Into the wild
EXT. TOWN OF AMITYVILLE
Mark and Andrew walk by.
Mark notices Andrew glancing over towards him.
MARK
You have a problem man?
Andrew shakes his head no.
ANDREW
Nothing.
Andrew takes a deep breath, choosing to remain silent. They continue to walk through the town. Mark is noticeably sullen and depressed.
INT. HOFSTRA UNIVERSITY- CLASSROOM
The teacher lectures the class about sociology.
Mark is at the back of the class gradually falling asleep.
TEACHER
All right. That will be all for today.
The students get their belongings and begin to leave the classroom.
Mark is one of the last students to leave.
TEACHER
Mark, hold up, I need to have a word with you.
Mark stops and looks at the teacher, he breathes out and rolls his eyes.
MARK
What is it?
TEACHER
You are falling behind in your work. Your grades are readily declining.
(beat)
You were accepted into this university on a full ride. Whats happening to you?
MARK
Its none of your business.
The teacher nods his head okay and Mark leaves the room. The teacher begins to pack his suitcase.
EXT. LOWES RACEWAY 10
Mark and Shannon leave the theater awkward silence.
SHANNON
So, what did you think?
MARK
I thought it was okay.
SHANNON
Okay?
MARK
Yeah. Typical acting, typical Hollywood plot life isnt always one big happily ever after. Its phony.
They continue to walk through the parking lot in silence
SHANNON
I dont know. The family seemed pretty relatable and realistic to me.
Mark laughs and shakes his head no.
MARK
They were the Brady Bunch compared to real reality.
SHANNON
Oh? Whats so bad about your family?
Mark stops, obviously hurt by this comment. Shannon looks at him caught off guard.
SHANNON
I
MARK
Just drop it.
Shannon nods her head okay.
FADE TO:
INT. CAR
Mark and Shannon drive towards Hofstra University in silence.
EXT. HOFSTRA UNIVERSITY- MAIN
The car enters the main entrance of Hofstra University. Mark swipes his card and drives through.
FADE TO:
EXT. HOFSTRA UNIVERSITY- BROWER HALL
The car pulls up beside Brower Hall. Shannon gets out of the car and looks back towards Mark.
SHANNON
Thank you for a good time.
Mark nods his head okay.
SHANNON
Bye.
MARK
Bye.
Shannon walks off. Mark watches her leave.
Mark stares against the windshield lost in thought. He lowers his head and tries to regain composure. He drives off.
FLASH CUT:
EXT. HOFSTRA UNIVERSITY- PARKING LOT
Mark drives around the parking lot searching for a space. There is none!
Mark HITS the steering wheel.
MARK
****! Come on! Come on!
Marks eyes search around for a parking space. He finds one. He grins as he speeds towards the space and quickly parks the car.
BOY (O.S.)
Help Me!
FLASH CUT:
EXT. HOFSTRA UNIVERSITY- VANDER POEL HALL
Mark runs up the steps approaching Vander Poel Hall. We slowly begin to hear the sound of waves
FLASH CUT: Mark swipes his card and enters the building.
FLASH CUT:
INT. VANDER POEL HALL
Mark hits the call button for the elevator and waits.
BOY (O.S.)
Help Me!!
FLASH CUT: The elevator arrives and Mark enters.
FLASH CUT:
INT. VANDER POEL HALL- ELEVATOR
Mark stares towards the numbers counting up to the twelfth floor. The sound of the waves escalates, drowning everything else out.
The elevator doors open
FLASH CUT:
INT. VANDER POEL HALL- TWELFTH FLOOR
Mark runs towards his room. Unlocks the door and quickly enters.
BOY (O.S.)
Help Me!!!
FLASH CUT:
INT. MARKS DORM ROOM
Mark swings open his cabinet and begins to scour through looking for the plastic container.
MARK
****!!!!
EFFECTS: Random flash cuts as everything becomes disorienting; we switch between various shots and point of view shots. The sounds of waves become unbearable.
Mark finally finds the plastic container. He opens it and GRABS the syringe.
BOY (O.S.)
HELP ME!!!!
Mark screams in agony, on the verge of tears as he collapses against the ground syringe in hand. He rolls up his sleeve and STABS his arm with the syringe!
We slowly zoom out to a wider shot to see Mark leaning against his bed. Tears burning his eyes as he stares forward, zoning out.
We fade to black several seconds pass before we open to
INT. MARKS DORM ROOM- MORNING
Mark wakes up, still in the position he was the night before.
He reaches forward and grabs his cell phone. He checks the voice-mails.
EMPLOYEE (O.C.)
Hi Mark. This is Roland calling from campus security. We have been getting more negative reports falling asleep on the job, not showing up. We talked about this before and I warned you of the consequences. This is worst part of the job- but, youre fired Mark.
Mark deletes the message.
OPERATOR (O.C.)
Next new message.
FATHER (O.C.)
Mark, this is your father calling. Your mother is worried. Youve been ignoring
Mark quickly deletes the message. He gets up and approaches his cabinet looking for his fix.
He remembers the night before and sees that he is out of drugs.
Mark SLAMS his fist against the cabinet door.
MARK
God damn it!
Mark takes out his wallet and checks to see how much money he has nothing.
MARK
****.
FADE TO:
EXT. HOFSTRA UNIVERSITY- PARK
Mark approaches the dealer and tries to bargain with him. The dealer refuses. Mark gets frustrated and walks off. Another buyer approaches the dealer and gets his fix.
FADE TO:
EXT. HOFSTRA UNIVERSITY- PARKING LOT
Mark sits alone in his car. He starts the engine and drives off.
EXT. LONG ISLAND
Mark drives along Long Island. We see passing directions and signs reading Jones Beach.
EXT. JONES BEACH- TICKET BOOTH
Mark hands the person in the booth money and he is allowed through.
EXT. JONES BEACH
Mark drives up to an isolated part of the beach and stops the car. He looks out over the ocean. He stays there all afternoon.
Night. Mark continues to stare at the ocean. He gets out of the car and approaches the water.
We hear waves splashing.
BOY (O.S.)
Help me
Mark looks out over the water, trying to restrain his tears.
FLASH CUT:
EXT. FOREST- LAKE
We see a small child no older than seven years old in a small lake, drowning. Splashing and screaming this is the BOY.
BOY
Help me!
FADE TO:
EXT. JONES BEACH- NIGHT
Mark sits on the sand looking out over the ocean, remembering he lowers his head. We stay on this shot before fading to
EXT. HOFSTRA UNIVERSITY- VANDER POEL HALL- MORNING
Mark walks through the campus and bumps into Andrew.
Andrew looks at him startled and relieved.
ANDREW
Where were you man? I tried calling numerous times. Thought something might have happened.
Mark looks at Andrew, lost
MARK
Have you ever felt like you were sinking into a deep abyss and there was no way out?
Andrew looks at Mark caught off guard.
ANDREW
Yeah yeah
(beat)
Why whats this about?
Mark looks at Andrew, wanting to answer him wanting to tell him he sighs and shakes his head no.
MARK
Nothing.
Mark looks up to see the small boy standing on the steps above looking down towards him. Mark quickly looks away.
INT. HOFSTRA UNIVERSITY- LIBRARY
Shannon works on the middle computer in the library. Searching for information. She finds an article: BOY DROWNS IN LAKE SALINGER. Accompanying the headline is a centered black and white picture of a wide shot of the lake and Mark standing beside it crying. Andrew is also in the shot. Close up on her reaction startled and sympathetic.
INT. SHOWER ROOM
Mark takes a shower, leaning against the wall. Eyes shut tight. We hear the sound of waves splashing and the boy screaming for help. Mark begins to slip against the wall as he stares up into the water.
INT. MARKS DORM ROOM
Mark enters his dorm room and notices his phone ringing. He looks towards the caller I.D. to reveal that it is Shannon.
FADE TO:
EXT. HOFSTRA UNIVERSITY- KATE AND WILLIES
Mark sits on the center circular curb outside of Kate and Willies. Shannon approaches him and he quickly gets up.
SHANNON
Hey.
MARK
Hey, you said you wanted to meet me?
Shannon nods, hiding her tears.
SHANNON
Im sorry.
Mark looks at her caught off guard and confused
SHANNON
I know. I know about your brother.
Mark staggers back as he quickly shakes his head no.
SHANNON
Its not your fault.
Mark breathes heavily as he looks at her with disgust and anger.
MARK
I told you to leave it alone! What gives you the right to investigate my life?! I thought I knew you better than that.
Mark walks off, noticing the people looking towards his outbreak. Shannon watches him go feeling guilty that she brought it up.
INT. MARKS DORM ROOM
Mark sits on his bed completely in the dark staring out the window. We hear waves splashing and his brother calling out for help. Mark quickly leaves his room and grabs his jacket on the way out.
EXT. HIGHWAY- NIGHT
We see cars drive by on the highway.
INT. CAR
Mark drives along the highway lost in thought.
FADE TO:
EXT. FOREST
Mark pulls into a road leading to a clearing in the forest.
We see a wide shot of the car driving away from the screen.
FADE TO:
EXT. FOREST- LAKE
Mark arrives at the spot at the lake and parks his car. He gets out and looks over the lake.
The boy appears in front of him, looking at Mark confused.
Mark looks at him on the verge of tears.
MARK
Im sorry.
Mark bends down to his brothers level.
MARK
Mom and Dad left me in charge, I should have been watching you instead I was off hanging out with my friends
FLASH CUT:
EXT. FOREST- LAKE- AFTERNOON- FLASHBACK
We see Mark and Andrew tossing back and forth a football.
In the distance we see the boy approaching the lake. He looks towards his brother not paying attention. He shrugs as he gets into the lake to go swimming.
MARK
Im telling you man, any day now freedom.
Andrew laughs. Marks brother begins to drown in the distance.
ANDREW
Youve been saying that for a long time.
MARK
Yeah, well, this time I mean it.
Marks brother tries to regain composure struggling to keep afloat. Andrew notices.
BOY
Help! Help me!!!
Mark glances behind his back to see his brother struggling, splashing water everywhere.
MARK
Wait Im coming!
Mark takes off running towards his brother.
BOY
Help!
Marks brother goes under. Mark runs and jumps into the lake and drags his brother out and onshore.
MARK
Come on
Mark checks his brother for a pulse and begins checking to see if hes alive. Andrew slowly approaches them. Close up on Mark, breaking, no reaction at all. Andrew looks at Mark wanting to know if he is still alive. Mark shakes his head no.
EXT. FOREST- LAKE- NIGHT
Mark breaks down into tears hugging his brother.
MARK
Im sorry.
The boy hugs him back. We gradually dolly out taking in the moment. The boy disappears and Mark remains behind staring out over the lake in front of him.
LATER:
Mark leans beside his car talking on his cell phone.
MARK
Mom, this is Mark. Do you think its okay if I come home this weekend?
Mark wipes the tears away from his eyes as we
FADE TO:
EXT. CEMETERY- AFTERNOON
Mark stands beside his brothers grave.
MARK (V.O.)
Only in the end, can we acknowledge the past.
FADE TO:
EXT. HOFSTRA UNIVERSITY- CAMPUS- FLASHBACK
Mark and Shannon sit on a bench, close up on them beginning to hold hands.
FADE TO:
EXT. TOWN OF AMITYVILLE- FLASHBACK
Mark walks along the streets with Andrew. They laugh and talk as they walk by the screen.
MARK (V.O.)
The path that got us here in life
FADE TO:
EXT. BEACH
Mark looks out over the ocean.
MARK (V.O.)
In order to find who you are. You first have to be ready to take the plunge. To fall into that deep dark abyss
Mark steps into the water.
MARK (V.O.)
That we call life
[FADE TO BLACK]
Just a quick shout out- thanks to 'The Lookout,' 'Requiem for a Dream,' 'Guide to Recognizing Your Saints,' and 'Catcher in the Rye.' These are the films and stories that inspired me in addition to some of the insecurities I've had in life- such as in the opening & ending monologue. Don't worry though, the younger brother and drugs part is not true.
I am also bringing this to a film group to be talked about tonight and I sent it to my teacher.
I will keep this page updated with filming details and pre-production details as it moves into further stages of pre-production and later production.
So, stage 1, crafting the story... tell me what you think...
EXT. BEACH
OPEN TO a WIDE SHOT of a beach. The waves wash up on shore. We see feet step towards the water, not going in.
MARK (V.O.)
Some people say that life begins when you take that first big plunge. When you fall into that deep dark abyss that we respectfully call adulthood.
Gradually dolly out to reveal a young guy looking out over the ocean. This is MARK RYANS (20).
MARK (V.O.)
I am here today to tell you
Mark turns around and stares straight into the camera.
MARK
Thats crap.
INT. MARKS DORM ROOM
CLOSE UP on Mark sleeping, sweating profusely. He JOLTS up, breathing heavily, and stares into the distance as though waking up from a terrible nightmare.
FADE TO:
INT. BATHROOM- SHOWERS
Mark stands underneath the running water of the shower, leaning against the wall. Eyes closed tight. He grits his teeth as though the waters scorching his skin.
FADE TO:
INT. HOFSTRA UNIVERSITY- CLASSROOM
Mark sits in a classroom staring off into the distance.
The TEACHER lectures the class about sociology.
ANDREW (20) takes a break from writing his notes and looks up to see Mark.
The teacher continues his lecture.
FADE TO:
EXT. HOFSTRA UNIVERSITY- CAMPUS
Mark and Andrew walk along the campus of Hofstra University. There is a long awkward silence
ANDREW
I saw you zoning out during Professor Bryces class.
Mark shrugs it off.
ANDREW
How are you holding up?
MARK
(lying)
Im fine.
Andrew nods his head okay, but he knows its not the truth.
They continue to walk along the campus in an awkward silence.
JUMP CUT:
INT. MARKS DORM ROOM- NIGHT
Mark reclines in his chair, distressed, staring out the window towards the New York City skyline.
BOY (O.S.)
Help me!
Mark closes his eyes, trying to block the noise.
We hear the sounds of waves.
BOY (O.S.)
Help me!
Mark groans in agony as he quickly gets up and approaches his cabinet. He takes out a plastic container and opens it. Inside is a syringe and drugs. He prepares the syringe and sits down on his bed, closing his eyes we continue to hear the sound of waves.
CLOSE UP on the Syringe nearing his arm
FADE TO:
EXT. HOFSTRA UNIVERSITY- CAMPUS- NIGHT
Silence. Mark walks along the campus of Hofstra University, completely alone and isolated. Compared to earlier that morning the campus seems dead.
Mark approaches Breslin Hall and looks up into the night sky.
CLOSE UP on Marks eyes, distant and pained, searching for an answer
Mark checks his watch and begins to walk away.
FADE TO:
INT. C-SQUARE SECURITY BOOTH
Mark sits on a rotating chair in the security booth staring towards the ceiling.
Mark checks the e-mail on his laptop computer. One new message: Hey Mark, its your Mom He quickly deletes the message.
Mark takes a deep breath as he looks out of the security booth seeing his own reflection he lowers his head.
He watches the television with a blank expression. A student enters and knocks on the glass. Mark lets him through without even looking.
Mark surfs the Internet as he gradually falls asleep on the job.
We fade to black and open to
A GUY enters the booth, Mark wakes up and looks towards him
MARK
Hey?
GUY
Im your replacement.
Mark nods his head okay; he grabs his backpack and is about to leave when
GUY
Hey dude
MARK
Huh?
GUY
You forgot to sign out.
MARK
Oh
Mark quickly signs out and leaves the booth.
EXT. C-SQUARE-MORNING
Mark exits the main entrance building of Newport C-Square.
FADE TO:
EXT. SUFFOLK HALL
Mark approaches Vander Poel Hall from a far off distance.
FADE TO:
IN. MARKS DORM ROOM
Mark reaches into his cabinet to retrieve his drugs. He opens the plastic container. Hes out.
Mark quickly checks his wallet. He only has ten dollars!
Mark looks around his room trying to figure out a plan.
FADE TO:
INT. SWIM CENTER ENTRANCE
Mark enters the Swim Center building and looks down through the glass window to see a beautiful young woman swimming in the pool below. This is SHANNON.
He looks down towards the water, frightened, not daring to go down there.
Shannon completes her lap and gets out of the pool. She looks up to see Mark staring down towards her. She smiles.
FADE TO:
EXT. SWIM CENTER
Mark and Shannon walk through the parking lot of the Swim Center.
SHANNON
So, how did you know where I was going to be?
MARK
I knew
(disdainfully)
Youre always here.
Shannon smiles as she brushes up besides him. He tries to smile, but something is holding him back.
SHANNON
You seem worried
Mark shakes his head no.
MARK
Its nothing.
SHANNON
You sure?
MARK
Yeah, I just need to borrow some money. Thats all.
(beat)
Its important. I wouldnt be asking if it wasnt.
SHANNON
Its okay. How much?
Mark itches the back of his neck and shrugs, holding off on answering
MARK
Twenty dollars.
Shannon reaches into her purse, gets the money and hands it to Mark.
MARK
Thank you this, this really means a lot.
Mark wants to get something off his chest, but he holds himself back. Shannon notices.
MARK
So, Ill see you later?
SHANNON
Yeah.
Awkward silence. Mark walks off. Shannon watches him leave.
EXT. HOFSTRA UNIVERSITY- PARK
Wide distance shot of a DEALER standing beneath a tree in the park. Mark approaches him. Mark hands the dealer the money. He gets the drugs, stuffs the drugs into his jacket pocket, looks around, and casually walks away. The dealer remains behind standing under the tree.
EXT. TOWN OF AMITYVILLE
Mark and Andrew walk along the streets of Amityville. Awkward silence. Andrew looks at Mark concerned
FLASH CUT:
EXT. TOWN OF AMITYVILLE- FLASHBACK
Mark and Andrew walk along the streets laughing.
MARK
Thinking about just tossing my bags onto the Harbinger one day and sailing off
ANDREW
Yeah, where to?
MARK
I dont know. Just far away from here.
ANDREW
Yeah? And what about college?
MARK
Ill transfer.
(beat)
Come on man, weve been living on this island for nineteen years now. Dont you just want to go off and explore the world?
ANDREW
Into the wild, huh?
MARK
Yeah.
Mark grins liking the sound of that.
MARK
Into the wild
EXT. TOWN OF AMITYVILLE
Mark and Andrew walk by.
Mark notices Andrew glancing over towards him.
MARK
You have a problem man?
Andrew shakes his head no.
ANDREW
Nothing.
Andrew takes a deep breath, choosing to remain silent. They continue to walk through the town. Mark is noticeably sullen and depressed.
INT. HOFSTRA UNIVERSITY- CLASSROOM
The teacher lectures the class about sociology.
Mark is at the back of the class gradually falling asleep.
TEACHER
All right. That will be all for today.
The students get their belongings and begin to leave the classroom.
Mark is one of the last students to leave.
TEACHER
Mark, hold up, I need to have a word with you.
Mark stops and looks at the teacher, he breathes out and rolls his eyes.
MARK
What is it?
TEACHER
You are falling behind in your work. Your grades are readily declining.
(beat)
You were accepted into this university on a full ride. Whats happening to you?
MARK
Its none of your business.
The teacher nods his head okay and Mark leaves the room. The teacher begins to pack his suitcase.
EXT. LOWES RACEWAY 10
Mark and Shannon leave the theater awkward silence.
SHANNON
So, what did you think?
MARK
I thought it was okay.
SHANNON
Okay?
MARK
Yeah. Typical acting, typical Hollywood plot life isnt always one big happily ever after. Its phony.
They continue to walk through the parking lot in silence
SHANNON
I dont know. The family seemed pretty relatable and realistic to me.
Mark laughs and shakes his head no.
MARK
They were the Brady Bunch compared to real reality.
SHANNON
Oh? Whats so bad about your family?
Mark stops, obviously hurt by this comment. Shannon looks at him caught off guard.
SHANNON
I
MARK
Just drop it.
Shannon nods her head okay.
FADE TO:
INT. CAR
Mark and Shannon drive towards Hofstra University in silence.
EXT. HOFSTRA UNIVERSITY- MAIN
The car enters the main entrance of Hofstra University. Mark swipes his card and drives through.
FADE TO:
EXT. HOFSTRA UNIVERSITY- BROWER HALL
The car pulls up beside Brower Hall. Shannon gets out of the car and looks back towards Mark.
SHANNON
Thank you for a good time.
Mark nods his head okay.
SHANNON
Bye.
MARK
Bye.
Shannon walks off. Mark watches her leave.
Mark stares against the windshield lost in thought. He lowers his head and tries to regain composure. He drives off.
FLASH CUT:
EXT. HOFSTRA UNIVERSITY- PARKING LOT
Mark drives around the parking lot searching for a space. There is none!
Mark HITS the steering wheel.
MARK
****! Come on! Come on!
Marks eyes search around for a parking space. He finds one. He grins as he speeds towards the space and quickly parks the car.
BOY (O.S.)
Help Me!
FLASH CUT:
EXT. HOFSTRA UNIVERSITY- VANDER POEL HALL
Mark runs up the steps approaching Vander Poel Hall. We slowly begin to hear the sound of waves
FLASH CUT: Mark swipes his card and enters the building.
FLASH CUT:
INT. VANDER POEL HALL
Mark hits the call button for the elevator and waits.
BOY (O.S.)
Help Me!!
FLASH CUT: The elevator arrives and Mark enters.
FLASH CUT:
INT. VANDER POEL HALL- ELEVATOR
Mark stares towards the numbers counting up to the twelfth floor. The sound of the waves escalates, drowning everything else out.
The elevator doors open
FLASH CUT:
INT. VANDER POEL HALL- TWELFTH FLOOR
Mark runs towards his room. Unlocks the door and quickly enters.
BOY (O.S.)
Help Me!!!
FLASH CUT:
INT. MARKS DORM ROOM
Mark swings open his cabinet and begins to scour through looking for the plastic container.
MARK
****!!!!
EFFECTS: Random flash cuts as everything becomes disorienting; we switch between various shots and point of view shots. The sounds of waves become unbearable.
Mark finally finds the plastic container. He opens it and GRABS the syringe.
BOY (O.S.)
HELP ME!!!!
Mark screams in agony, on the verge of tears as he collapses against the ground syringe in hand. He rolls up his sleeve and STABS his arm with the syringe!
We slowly zoom out to a wider shot to see Mark leaning against his bed. Tears burning his eyes as he stares forward, zoning out.
We fade to black several seconds pass before we open to
INT. MARKS DORM ROOM- MORNING
Mark wakes up, still in the position he was the night before.
He reaches forward and grabs his cell phone. He checks the voice-mails.
EMPLOYEE (O.C.)
Hi Mark. This is Roland calling from campus security. We have been getting more negative reports falling asleep on the job, not showing up. We talked about this before and I warned you of the consequences. This is worst part of the job- but, youre fired Mark.
Mark deletes the message.
OPERATOR (O.C.)
Next new message.
FATHER (O.C.)
Mark, this is your father calling. Your mother is worried. Youve been ignoring
Mark quickly deletes the message. He gets up and approaches his cabinet looking for his fix.
He remembers the night before and sees that he is out of drugs.
Mark SLAMS his fist against the cabinet door.
MARK
God damn it!
Mark takes out his wallet and checks to see how much money he has nothing.
MARK
****.
FADE TO:
EXT. HOFSTRA UNIVERSITY- PARK
Mark approaches the dealer and tries to bargain with him. The dealer refuses. Mark gets frustrated and walks off. Another buyer approaches the dealer and gets his fix.
FADE TO:
EXT. HOFSTRA UNIVERSITY- PARKING LOT
Mark sits alone in his car. He starts the engine and drives off.
EXT. LONG ISLAND
Mark drives along Long Island. We see passing directions and signs reading Jones Beach.
EXT. JONES BEACH- TICKET BOOTH
Mark hands the person in the booth money and he is allowed through.
EXT. JONES BEACH
Mark drives up to an isolated part of the beach and stops the car. He looks out over the ocean. He stays there all afternoon.
Night. Mark continues to stare at the ocean. He gets out of the car and approaches the water.
We hear waves splashing.
BOY (O.S.)
Help me
Mark looks out over the water, trying to restrain his tears.
FLASH CUT:
EXT. FOREST- LAKE
We see a small child no older than seven years old in a small lake, drowning. Splashing and screaming this is the BOY.
BOY
Help me!
FADE TO:
EXT. JONES BEACH- NIGHT
Mark sits on the sand looking out over the ocean, remembering he lowers his head. We stay on this shot before fading to
EXT. HOFSTRA UNIVERSITY- VANDER POEL HALL- MORNING
Mark walks through the campus and bumps into Andrew.
Andrew looks at him startled and relieved.
ANDREW
Where were you man? I tried calling numerous times. Thought something might have happened.
Mark looks at Andrew, lost
MARK
Have you ever felt like you were sinking into a deep abyss and there was no way out?
Andrew looks at Mark caught off guard.
ANDREW
Yeah yeah
(beat)
Why whats this about?
Mark looks at Andrew, wanting to answer him wanting to tell him he sighs and shakes his head no.
MARK
Nothing.
Mark looks up to see the small boy standing on the steps above looking down towards him. Mark quickly looks away.
INT. HOFSTRA UNIVERSITY- LIBRARY
Shannon works on the middle computer in the library. Searching for information. She finds an article: BOY DROWNS IN LAKE SALINGER. Accompanying the headline is a centered black and white picture of a wide shot of the lake and Mark standing beside it crying. Andrew is also in the shot. Close up on her reaction startled and sympathetic.
INT. SHOWER ROOM
Mark takes a shower, leaning against the wall. Eyes shut tight. We hear the sound of waves splashing and the boy screaming for help. Mark begins to slip against the wall as he stares up into the water.
INT. MARKS DORM ROOM
Mark enters his dorm room and notices his phone ringing. He looks towards the caller I.D. to reveal that it is Shannon.
FADE TO:
EXT. HOFSTRA UNIVERSITY- KATE AND WILLIES
Mark sits on the center circular curb outside of Kate and Willies. Shannon approaches him and he quickly gets up.
SHANNON
Hey.
MARK
Hey, you said you wanted to meet me?
Shannon nods, hiding her tears.
SHANNON
Im sorry.
Mark looks at her caught off guard and confused
SHANNON
I know. I know about your brother.
Mark staggers back as he quickly shakes his head no.
SHANNON
Its not your fault.
Mark breathes heavily as he looks at her with disgust and anger.
MARK
I told you to leave it alone! What gives you the right to investigate my life?! I thought I knew you better than that.
Mark walks off, noticing the people looking towards his outbreak. Shannon watches him go feeling guilty that she brought it up.
INT. MARKS DORM ROOM
Mark sits on his bed completely in the dark staring out the window. We hear waves splashing and his brother calling out for help. Mark quickly leaves his room and grabs his jacket on the way out.
EXT. HIGHWAY- NIGHT
We see cars drive by on the highway.
INT. CAR
Mark drives along the highway lost in thought.
FADE TO:
EXT. FOREST
Mark pulls into a road leading to a clearing in the forest.
We see a wide shot of the car driving away from the screen.
FADE TO:
EXT. FOREST- LAKE
Mark arrives at the spot at the lake and parks his car. He gets out and looks over the lake.
The boy appears in front of him, looking at Mark confused.
Mark looks at him on the verge of tears.
MARK
Im sorry.
Mark bends down to his brothers level.
MARK
Mom and Dad left me in charge, I should have been watching you instead I was off hanging out with my friends
FLASH CUT:
EXT. FOREST- LAKE- AFTERNOON- FLASHBACK
We see Mark and Andrew tossing back and forth a football.
In the distance we see the boy approaching the lake. He looks towards his brother not paying attention. He shrugs as he gets into the lake to go swimming.
MARK
Im telling you man, any day now freedom.
Andrew laughs. Marks brother begins to drown in the distance.
ANDREW
Youve been saying that for a long time.
MARK
Yeah, well, this time I mean it.
Marks brother tries to regain composure struggling to keep afloat. Andrew notices.
BOY
Help! Help me!!!
Mark glances behind his back to see his brother struggling, splashing water everywhere.
MARK
Wait Im coming!
Mark takes off running towards his brother.
BOY
Help!
Marks brother goes under. Mark runs and jumps into the lake and drags his brother out and onshore.
MARK
Come on
Mark checks his brother for a pulse and begins checking to see if hes alive. Andrew slowly approaches them. Close up on Mark, breaking, no reaction at all. Andrew looks at Mark wanting to know if he is still alive. Mark shakes his head no.
EXT. FOREST- LAKE- NIGHT
Mark breaks down into tears hugging his brother.
MARK
Im sorry.
The boy hugs him back. We gradually dolly out taking in the moment. The boy disappears and Mark remains behind staring out over the lake in front of him.
LATER:
Mark leans beside his car talking on his cell phone.
MARK
Mom, this is Mark. Do you think its okay if I come home this weekend?
Mark wipes the tears away from his eyes as we
FADE TO:
EXT. CEMETERY- AFTERNOON
Mark stands beside his brothers grave.
MARK (V.O.)
Only in the end, can we acknowledge the past.
FADE TO:
EXT. HOFSTRA UNIVERSITY- CAMPUS- FLASHBACK
Mark and Shannon sit on a bench, close up on them beginning to hold hands.
FADE TO:
EXT. TOWN OF AMITYVILLE- FLASHBACK
Mark walks along the streets with Andrew. They laugh and talk as they walk by the screen.
MARK (V.O.)
The path that got us here in life
FADE TO:
EXT. BEACH
Mark looks out over the ocean.
MARK (V.O.)
In order to find who you are. You first have to be ready to take the plunge. To fall into that deep dark abyss
Mark steps into the water.
MARK (V.O.)
That we call life
[FADE TO BLACK]
Just a quick shout out- thanks to 'The Lookout,' 'Requiem for a Dream,' 'Guide to Recognizing Your Saints,' and 'Catcher in the Rye.' These are the films and stories that inspired me in addition to some of the insecurities I've had in life- such as in the opening & ending monologue. Don't worry though, the younger brother and drugs part is not true.
I am also bringing this to a film group to be talked about tonight and I sent it to my teacher.
I will keep this page updated with filming details and pre-production details as it moves into further stages of pre-production and later production.
So, stage 1, crafting the story... tell me what you think...