4-page Batman vs Black Panther fight

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Here's the originally 2-3 Batman/Black Panther that I scripted about 3-4 years ago. The final version has been altered do include suggestions from Bat82:

The cosmic time disruption has been eradically merging certain places together at the beginning of the book, Batman will have driven the Batmobile down an alley to the edge of where Gotham city has merged into the Wakanda Jungle, this is where Black Panther will sneak up on him and his shadow will be cast on the alley wall, a la Batman how Bats does to street criminals.

Bats will immediately throw some batarangs, and BP would leap at a downward angle from a tree or something, countering with his daggers and we see them cancel each other out.

Here they could exchange a shot or two, Bats could get knocked into the jungle while blocking a BP leaping kick, just from the force of it, he rolls with it, and when he recovers he looks around the jungle and there is no sign of BP. He guardedly takes a few steps, and out of no where BP leaps out and slashes bats across the chest emblem, leaving some bloody claw marks. Bats is now standing up, maybe braced against a tree holding BP's wrist to avoid another slashing. This is where we would see the Batmobile come crashing through the jungle at some ridiculous high speed headed towards BP. BP lets go and does a flip over the speeding Batmobile, landing on his feet of course. As they get ready to re-engage, another time disruption hits, re-separating Gotham and Wakanda.
I've tried to mess with them in photoshop to make them somewhat clearer.

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It's not bad. I think you need to try and make your pencils cleaner. Have you tried using a colour pencil for the roughs and then doing clean art with a lead pencil. This way you can colour strip the roughs out in photoshop and if you keep you actual pencils fairly clean it may look a bit crisper.
Also if the large shaded portions are to be just black it's better to delineate with a line and just mark it with an 'x' that way you don't end up smudging large areas when you're drawing.

Also I think there are a few anatomy and proportion issues as well.

That being said I think your storytelling is pretty good. I could follow it pretty well, the only confusing part was when Panther just disappears, but that would be cleared up with the narration or text.

Anyway that's just my opinion.

Good job regardless.
 

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