The Dark Knight Calling All Creative People: Write Scenes that YOU'D Want to see in The Dark Knight!

[MAKIEVELLI]

Hey Mak...what do you think about mine...Nothing too fancy or elaborate...



CFE

Yup, I like that one. The majority of scenes written in this thread are decent. A few of them are amazing and really need to be in the movie.

 

[MAKIEVELLI]

[The scene is a broken-down funhouse. There are holes in the ceilings and roof, with gray rusty rainwater pouring through in rivers. The mirrors are rusted over and the wooden displays are rotting. Everything is brown and gray and black, with the occasional splash of color as the peeling paint from a display refuses to leave. Through one of the holes in the roof a shadow quickly and silently descends, then vanishes into the darkness. We cut to another scene and see a figure slowly emerge. It is Batman. He looks about carefully, then continues on into the funhouse.]

[Suddenly there’s a squall of feedback as an ancient PA system jumps to life in the ceiling. Batman shrinks to the floor, looking about.]

VOICE: Heh. I guess this is mike is a little bit live, huh? [Chuckles softly, which fade into silence.]

[Silence. Batman takes out his nightvision scanner and scans the premises. Jumbles of old walkways hang up close to the roof. There’s an old glass booth at the far back. But besides that, nothing moves. He walks forward, snaking through the ruins. Enormous clowns with gaping mouths tower over him, dancing elephants with ancient paper-mache skins watch him with runny eyes. It’s then that we hear a soft, quiet breathing over the PA that fills the entire room. Batman scans the area again, finds nothing. He steps over the decayed remains of an old animatronic pirate.]

VOICE: The time has come, the walrus said, to talk of many things.

[Batman snakes back into the shadows. His arm guards whir and buzz and a shruiken pops into his hand, but there is nothing to throw it at.]

VOICE: Of shoes, and ships, and sailing wax, and cabbages and kings, and why the sea is boiling hot, and whether pigs have wings… But you don’t strike me as much of a talker, anyways. Strong, silent type. Maybe a little dumb, a little dull. But maybe not. Maybe not.

[Batman pops out the grappling hook, shoots it into the ceiling, and vanishes among the scaffolding up top.]

VOICE: Impressive trick. I have a few tricks of my own, you know.

[Batman scans the area again. There is nothing. The place is a graveyard of smiling faces and laughing mouths, eyeless, tongueless, colorless.]

[Cut to another point of view, this one in infrared. It is a view of the funhouse, but it zeroes in on Batman’s heat signal.]

VOICE: [singing] I seeeee yooouuu…

[Batman crawls forwards among the metal jungle in the roof, still looking, still scanning.]

VOICE: I spy… With my little eye… Something that starts with the letter… dead.

[A gunshot rings out – the scaffolding next to Batman bursts, lurching forward, and he tumbles down, bringing down several yards of roofing with him.]

VOICE: [laughs] I told you I could see you. Don’t you listen? But no. You don’t listen. I do, though. I pay very close attention, honey. I pay very close attention, indeed. I looked. I saw. I took note. And then acted. People have to see. They have to see. I must make them.

[Batman, groaning with pain, struggles to escape the wreckage. He clambers to his feet and collapses next to a mirror.]

VOICE: You saw. You saw what I saw. But you didn’t do what I’m doing. That, I gotta confess, is a little bit confusing to me over here. Put my old noodle into overdrive, yeah, I sure did. I got to see this, I thought. I gotta see what this is. And now I’m seeing, ain’t I?

[Batman takes the batarang and flings it at the glass booth. The glass shatters, revealing a figure in black with a white face and green hair. He points the grappling gun at it, fires into the roof, and soars forwards, cape billowing behind him, tackling the figure. It collapses beneath him – a dummy, made of straw, with a paper bag face and goofy, painted smile.]

VOICE: Boy, you sure move quick on a first date. There’s just no romance in this modern world of ours, no sir. Pull a thing like that today and you’re liable to get, well… maced.

[The paper bag head explodes, sending confetti with the words SURPRISE and OUCH! on it everywhere along with a fine spray of gas. Batman cries out, swatting at his eyes and face, then rolls and drops back to the ground below where he clutches his eyes. The voice cackles above him.]

VOICE: Papa spank! That’s what happens when you try and open your presents early. Take a look at the world through that set of eyes, and see what I see. Come on, then. See what I see.

[Batman reaches down into his belt, takes out a plastic flask, and sprays it into his eyes. His panting stops and soon he blinks, ridding himself of the pain.]

VOICE: Oh, shucks. I should have thought that you’d have something to help that, since you run into the cops so often. …maybe I should’ve put C-4 in my head instead. Though that would have made our little rendezvous a little shorter.

BATMAN: [whispers] Bastard…

[Batman shrinks back underneath the cover of the booth overhead. He ducks his head out once, twice, and spots a niche high up on the far wall. He spots a shine of light reflecting off of something hidden in a gap in the wall. He sits and thinks, and reaches back behind his belt.]

[Cut to another shot. It’s of the funhouse again, but the camera is moving, heading left, and into view comes the long, thick barrel of a high powered rifle, hidden in the niche in the wall. The Joker crouches behind it, grinning, a headset-microphone on his head and an expensive pair of thermo-binoculars sitting on the table. He snickers, moves the gun again. Cut to the view outside of the niche. The scope flashes faintly in the light.]

VOICE: Once could say we’re victims. Victims of this city. Pushed around, pushed down, back and forth and back and forth, until one day we just up and decide that we don’t care for the shape of things and did something about it. But we’re not. We’re not victims. I know that. Do you?

[Batman readies himself, holding something in his hand.]

VOICE: I know that we were gods waiting to happen. But why aren’t you on my side? Why ain’tcha doin’ what I’m doin’? I gotta know, honey. I gotta know.

[Batman flings himself out and hurls a small flashbomb up at the niche in the wall. The Joker fires, punching a hole in the wall behind Batman, when suddenly the flashbomb goes off and the world turns white. Screaming, the Joker tumbles out of his cover and falls to the ground with a grunt. Batman races over to him. Joker leaps to his feet, winding between the rubble, as three batarangs land around him. Batman takes out his grapple, fires into the wall over Joker and soars forward again, but lands too late as the Joker flies through the exit out.]

JOKER: [breathing heavily] Shucks.

[He runs off into the rain as the door buckles once, twice, and then Batman kicks it down and lunges after him.]

Nice, we truly have some amazing writers on this site.

 

[MAKIEVELLI]

thanx. but i really don't care about who likes what or doesn't like what.

Then why post......in a message board?

 

[SpinyNorman]

That's a great piece you've got there. I plan to write my own scene in due time, but I have one too many things going on at the momment. I'm curious, what material did your read to get into the character depth of the Joker? I say that because I'd don't know anyone who could possibly think up all that from the top of their heads, especially someone so complicated and advanced yet in a way of a clingy/upbeat "V" (V for Vendetta) like your Joker.

Hum. I read Blood Meridian.

If anyone wants to get a bead on what murderous insanity sounds like, read Blood Meridian.

 

[Carlito Jones]

Harvey Dent Scene With Rachel And Bruce And The Joker

Harvey Is Sitting Down At Table Rachel Walks Up To Him

Rachel " Harvey What You Gonna Do About Maroni"

Harvey" Don't Worry About Maroni You Need About To Worry About Bruce"

Rachel" Bruce Is My Friend Are You Jealous"

Harvey " No Bruce Is Shady"

Just Then Bruce Walks In


Bruce" Harvey We Need To Talk"

Harvey'' About What"

Bruce" I Think You Know"

We See Harvey Flip A Coin And Has A Smirk On His Face

Harvey" You Haven't Told Rachel"

Rachel Looks Puzzled And Says '' What Harvey Talking About Bruce"

Bruce" Politics"

Harvey''does Maroni Name Ring A Bell"

Just Then The Joker And His Goons Arrived Guns And All

Joker'' Bruce. Harv , Rachel What A Threesome"

Harvey'' You're Going Down With Maroni''

Joker Pulls Out A Knife And Throws It A Harvey Chair

Joker'' You Really Think So Harv You And Maroni Are In Bed Together Doing Snow White Up The Nose'' Laughs Wildly

Bruce'' You're Insane ''

Joker'' Bruce Bruce How's Your Momma And Dada You See I Came Here For An Deal''

Bruce'' I Want Rachel If You Can Drop Some G's Here Right Now If Not I Will Kill Her''

Rachel Starts To Run And One Joker Goons Throws A Joker Whip At Her And She Falls On The Floor

Bruce Throws A Bottle At The Joker And Harvey Is Seen Tossing A Coin And Witha Evil Look On His Face

Harvey'' Go To Hell Clown'' Harvey Takes The Knife Joker Threw And Throws It One Of Joker Goons And The Knife Hits His Goons In The Back

Joker Is Screaming '' My Face Oh My God'' And Stops Screaming And Starts To Laughs And Says'' Bruce Or I Should Call You Bats''

Bruce Looks Puzzled And Says'' What''

Just Then Joker Shoots Bruce And Bruce Falls Back Hitting A Glass Table

Joker Grabs Rachel And His Goons Leave

 

[Killing Joke926]

Hum. I read Blood Meridian.

If anyone wants to get a bead on what murderous insanity sounds like, read Blood Meridian.

I'll look into it.

 

[MAKIEVELLI]

Harvey Dent Scene With Rachel And Bruce And The Joker

Harvey Is Sitting Down At Table Rachel Walks Up To Him

Rachel " Harvey What You Gonna Do About Maroni"

Harvey" Don't Worry About Maroni You Need About To Worry About Bruce"

Rachel" Bruce Is My Friend Are You Jealous"

Harvey " No Bruce Is Shady"

Just Then Bruce Walks In


Bruce" Harvey We Need To Talk"

Harvey'' About What"

Bruce" I Think You Know"

We See Harvey Flip A Coin And Has A Smirk On His Face

Harvey" You Haven't Told Rachel"

Rachel Looks Puzzled And Says '' What Harvey Talking About Bruce"

Bruce" Politics"

Harvey''does Maroni Name Ring A Bell"

Just Then The Joker And His Goons Arrived Guns And All

Joker'' Bruce. Harv , Rachel What A Threesome"

Harvey'' You're Going Down With Maroni''

Joker Pulls Out A Knife And Throws It A Harvey Chair

Joker'' You Really Think So Harv You And Maroni Are In Bed Together Doing Snow White Up The Nose'' Laughs Wildly

Bruce'' You're Insane ''

Joker'' Bruce Bruce How's Your Momma And Dada You See I Came Here For An Deal''

Bruce'' I Want Rachel If You Can Drop Some G's Here Right Now If Not I Will Kill Her''

Rachel Starts To Run And One Joker Goons Throws A Joker Whip At Her And She Falls On The Floor

Bruce Throws A Bottle At The Joker And Harvey Is Seen Tossing A Coin And Witha Evil Look On His Face

Harvey'' Go To Hell Clown'' Harvey Takes The Knife Joker Threw And Throws It One Of Joker Goons And The Knife Hits His Goons In The Back

Joker Is Screaming '' My Face Oh My God'' And Stops Screaming And Starts To Laughs And Says'' Bruce Or I Should Call You Bats''

Bruce Looks Puzzled And Says'' What''

Just Then Joker Shoots Bruce And Bruce Falls Back Hitting A Glass Table

Joker Grabs Rachel And His Goons Leave

Very confusing to say the least.

 

[ComicBookGuy37]

INT. JOEY'S BAR - NIGHT​

Music blares in the background as JOEY moves around, wiping the surfaces clean. He turns his back to replace a glass on the back wall. As he looks away, someone moves into the shot, and sits down at the bar. Joey senses someone behind him, but carries on working.

JOEY
What'll it be, buddy?

MAN
Scotch. Make it a double.​

Joey prepares the drink, and then turns, placing it in front of the man. The man just sits there, his head bowed.
​

JOEY
There you go, man.
(Beat)
Hey, are you okay?​

The man slowly looks up, and we swivel to an over the shoulder shot. Joey's face turns white with shock.
​

JOEY
Oh, my god.
(Beat)
Harvey? I thought you were dead.
​

We swivel slightly to reveal the man is Harvey Dent. We can only see the left side of his face.
​

DENT
Half.
​

Dent picks up the drink and downs it in one gulp.
​

DENT
Gimme another.
​

Joey takes the glass and makes another. He hands it to Dent, who again downs the drink in one.
​

JOEY
I can't believe it, Harvey. Oh, my god.

DENT
(Shouting)
God had nothing to do with it.
​

Joey goes dead straight - shocked.
​

DENT
I'm sorry. I should learn to hold my temper. Sometimes, I just get the feeling I'm two people. I'm sure you get that a lot. Being a bar man.

JOEY
(Nervously)
Not really. No.
​

Dent chuckles.
​

DENT
Well, then I guess you never will.
​

Joey looks confused.
​

JOEY
What do you mean?
​

Dent sighs.
​

DENT
Grab yourself a drink, Joey. My treat.

JOEY
Man, I work here. What the hell do you mean I never will?
​

Dent reaches into his pocket.
​

DENT
Alright. I'll just pay and be on my way.
​

Dent pulls out a wad of dollar bills, and places it on the counter. He unwraps the folded wad to reveal a single silver dollar. He looks back at Joey. The bartender looks confused.
​

DENT
Chance. Luck. Life. Two sides to every coin. Two outcomes to every scenario.
​

Dent flips the coin, catches it and covers it.
​

DENT
Heads, I leave all my money and walk away. Tails, I snap your neck. You see, I know what you did to me Joey. I know what you sold that piece of slime, Maroni. But don't worry, I'm gonna get him later.
​

As Dent slowly removes his hand from the coin, Joey reaches under the bar for his gun. Before he can raise it, Dent grabs him by the throat, knocking the gun from his hand.

Joey struggles against Dent, kicking and thrashing wildly. Dent grits his teeth in anger.
​

DENT
You ruined my life, Joey. You are your boss. And because of you, I'm not me anymore.

JOEY
(Struggling)
Harvey....please...

DENT
You keep calling me Harvey. Why? Harvey died weeks ago.
​

There is a loud cracking noise, and Dent steps back, letting Joey's dead body fall to the floor.

Dent turns to the camera and for the first time we see his full, disfigured face. Half of his face is burnt away and scarred terribly. His teeth on one side are completely rotten. He is a monster.
​

DENT
I'm Two-Face now.
​

​

 

[Dark Sentinel]

INT. JOEY'S BAR - NIGHT​

Music blares in the background as JOEY moves around, wiping the surfaces clean. He turns his back to replace a glass on the back wall. As he looks away, someone moves into the shot, and sits down at the bar. Joey senses someone behind him, but carries on working.

JOEY
What'll it be, buddy?​

MAN
Scotch. Make it a double.​

Joey prepares the drink, and then turns, placing it in front of the man. The man just sits there, his head bowed.​

JOEY
There you go, man.
(Beat)
Hey, are you okay?​

The man slowly looks up, and we swivel to an over the shoulder shot. Joey's face turns white with shock.​

JOEY
Oh, my god.
(Beat)
Harvey? I thought you were dead.​

We swivel slightly to reveal the man is Harvey Dent. We can only see the left side of his face.​

DENT
Half.​

Dent picks up the drink and downs it in one gulp.​

DENT
Gimme another.​

Joey takes the glass and makes another. He hands it to Dent, who again downs the drink in one.​

JOEY
I can't believe it, Harvey. Oh, my god.​

DENT
(Shouting)
God had nothing to do with it.​

Joey goes dead straight - shocked.​

DENT
I'm sorry. I should learn to hold my temper. Sometimes, I just get the feeling I'm two people. I'm sure you get that a lot. Being a bar man.​

JOEY
(Nervously)
Not really. No.​

Dent chuckles.​

DENT
Well, then I guess you never will.​

Joey looks confused.​

JOEY
What do you mean?​

Dent sighs.​

DENT
Grab yourself a drink, Joey. My treat.​

JOEY
Man, I work here. What the hell do you mean I never will?​

Dent reaches into his pocket.​

DENT
Alright. I'll just pay and be on my way.​

Dent pulls out a wad of dollar bills, and places it on the counter. He unwraps the folded wad to reveal a single silver dollar. He looks back at Joey. The bartender looks confused.​

DENT
Chance. Luck. Life. Two sides to every coin. Two outcomes to every scenario.​

Dent flips the coin, catches it and covers it.​

DENT
Heads, I leave all my money and walk away. Tails, I snap your neck. You see, I know what you did to me Joey. I know what you sold that piece of slime, Maroni. But don't worry, I'm gonna get him later.​

As Dent slowly removes his hand from the coin, Joey reaches under the bar for his gun. Before he can raise it, Dent grabs him by the throat, knocking the gun from his hand.​

Joey struggles against Dent, kicking and thrashing wildly. Dent grits his teeth in anger.​

DENT
You ruined my life, Joey. You are your boss. And because of you, I'm not me anymore.​

JOEY
(Struggling)
Harvey....please...​

DENT
You keep calling me Harvey. Why? Harvey died weeks ago.​

There is a loud cracking noise, and Dent steps back, letting Joey's dead body fall to the floor.​

Dent turns to the camera and for the first time we see his full, disfigured face. Half of his face is burnt away and scarred terribly. His teeth on one side are completely rotten. He is a monster.​

DENT
I'm Two-Face now.​

excellent work ComicBookGuy. i would be perfectly happy with that reveal of Two-Face

 

[MiniBond]

INT. JOEY'S BAR - NIGHT​

Music blares in the background as JOEY moves around, wiping the surfaces clean. He turns his back to replace a glass on the back wall. As he looks away, someone moves into the shot, and sits down at the bar. Joey senses someone behind him, but carries on working.

JOEY
What'll it be, buddy?​

MAN
Scotch. Make it a double.​

Joey prepares the drink, and then turns, placing it in front of the man. The man just sits there, his head bowed.​

JOEY
There you go, man.
(Beat)
Hey, are you okay?​

The man slowly looks up, and we swivel to an over the shoulder shot. Joey's face turns white with shock.​

JOEY
Oh, my god.
(Beat)
Harvey? I thought you were dead.​

We swivel slightly to reveal the man is Harvey Dent. We can only see the left side of his face.​

DENT
Half.​

Dent picks up the drink and downs it in one gulp.​

DENT
Gimme another.​

Joey takes the glass and makes another. He hands it to Dent, who again downs the drink in one.​

JOEY
I can't believe it, Harvey. Oh, my god.​

DENT
(Shouting)
God had nothing to do with it.​

Joey goes dead straight - shocked.​

DENT
I'm sorry. I should learn to hold my temper. Sometimes, I just get the feeling I'm two people. I'm sure you get that a lot. Being a bar man.​

JOEY
(Nervously)
Not really. No.​

Dent chuckles.​

DENT
Well, then I guess you never will.​

Joey looks confused.​

JOEY
What do you mean?​

Dent sighs.​

DENT
Grab yourself a drink, Joey. My treat.​

JOEY
Man, I work here. What the hell do you mean I never will?​

Dent reaches into his pocket.​

DENT
Alright. I'll just pay and be on my way.​

Dent pulls out a wad of dollar bills, and places it on the counter. He unwraps the folded wad to reveal a single silver dollar. He looks back at Joey. The bartender looks confused.​

DENT
Chance. Luck. Life. Two sides to every coin. Two outcomes to every scenario.​

Dent flips the coin, catches it and covers it.​

DENT
Heads, I leave all my money and walk away. Tails, I snap your neck. You see, I know what you did to me Joey. I know what you sold that piece of slime, Maroni. But don't worry, I'm gonna get him later.​

As Dent slowly removes his hand from the coin, Joey reaches under the bar for his gun. Before he can raise it, Dent grabs him by the throat, knocking the gun from his hand.​

Joey struggles against Dent, kicking and thrashing wildly. Dent grits his teeth in anger.​

DENT
You ruined my life, Joey. You are your boss. And because of you, I'm not me anymore.​

JOEY
(Struggling)
Harvey....please...​

DENT
You keep calling me Harvey. Why? Harvey died weeks ago.​

There is a loud cracking noise, and Dent steps back, letting Joey's dead body fall to the floor.​

Dent turns to the camera and for the first time we see his full, disfigured face. Half of his face is burnt away and scarred terribly. His teeth on one side are completely rotten. He is a monster.​

DENT
I'm Two-Face now.​

Excellent...except the "I'm two face now" line maybe !!!

 

[Chucktallica101]

News crew reporting outside of Arkham Asylum...
TV Reporter: ...Arkham Asylum set to reopen next week after the terrorist attacks by foreign gangsters destroyed the maximum security wing in April...uhem...hack---heh--hackhack--hehehehehehehehahackhahahahahahaHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAmmmmmMAAaaah

Reporter starts to laugh uncontrollably with a hideous grin whilst turning white. Stops, dead, falls over as stiff as a board, revealing the outline of a man in a stiff brim hat and long overcoat. The Joker emerges from the shadows with a Smith and Wesson .45 Long Barrel Revolver pointed at the camera man. Joker picks up the reporters mic which had fallen to the ground and says...

Joker: Good Evening Gotham and Gothamites everywhere, Thought I'd take time out of my ever-so-busy schedule to say 'hello' and deliever a few not so veiled threats. So-Hello-Goodbye, you're all going to DIIIE!

The Joker laughs uncontrollably for about 30 seconds

Joker: Sometimes I just kill myself. Especially,when I think about killing you. That's why tonight, Carl Grissom, we are all going to have a little laugh at your expense. You have until tonight to enjoy the rest of your failed and useless life. Tolling at the stroke of midnight, you will cease your exsistence on this Earth and prance along laughing your way straight into Hell.



This type of delievery is what I want to see...

 

[OobeDoobBenubi]

Joker - Who hired this man to be part of my mob
Thug #1 - I did sir hes my cousin
Joker - Whos that
Thug #2 - Hes an ******* sir
Joker - I know that whats his name
Thug #2 - That is his name ******* major *******
Joker - & his cousin
Thug #2 - Hes an ******* to sir thug man Philip *******
Joker - How many *******s do I have in this gang anyhow
Thugs - Yo
Joker - I knew it Im surrounded by *******s, keep robbing & stuff *******s

 

[Juice2020]

Joker - Who hired this man to be part of my mob
Thug #1 - I did sir hes my cousin
Joker - Whos that
Thug #2 - Hes an ******* sir
Joker - I know that whats his name
Thug #2 - That is his name ******* major *******
Joker - & his cousin
Thug #2 - Hes an ******* to sir thug man Philip *******
Joker - How many *******s do I have in this gang
Thugs - Yo
Joker - I knew it Im surrounded by *******s, keep robbing & stuff *******s

lol

 

[MAKIEVELLI]

I like the 'Where's the van? There was supposed to be a van!" scene posted earlier.

 

[Joker'sHenchman]

INT. JOEY'S BAR - NIGHT​

Music blares in the background as JOEY moves around, wiping the surfaces clean. He turns his back to replace a glass on the back wall. As he looks away, someone moves into the shot, and sits down at the bar. Joey senses someone behind him, but carries on working.

JOEY
What'll it be, buddy?

MAN
Scotch. Make it a double.​

Joey prepares the drink, and then turns, placing it in front of the man. The man just sits there, his head bowed.
​

JOEY
There you go, man.
(Beat)
Hey, are you okay?​

The man slowly looks up, and we swivel to an over the shoulder shot. Joey's face turns white with shock.
​

JOEY
Oh, my god.
(Beat)
Harvey? I thought you were dead.
​

We swivel slightly to reveal the man is Harvey Dent. We can only see the left side of his face.
​

DENT
Half.
​

Dent picks up the drink and downs it in one gulp.
​

DENT
Gimme another.
​

Joey takes the glass and makes another. He hands it to Dent, who again downs the drink in one.
​

JOEY
I can't believe it, Harvey. Oh, my god.

DENT
(Shouting)
God had nothing to do with it.
​

Joey goes dead straight - shocked.​

​

DENT
I'm sorry. I should learn to hold my temper. Sometimes, I just get the feeling I'm two people. I'm sure you get that a lot. Being a bar man.

JOEY
(Nervously)
Not really. No.
​

Dent chuckles.
​

DENT
Well, then I guess you never will.
​

Joey looks confused.
​

JOEY
What do you mean?
​

Dent sighs.
​

DENT
Grab yourself a drink, Joey. My treat.

JOEY
Man, I work here. What the hell do you mean I never will?
​

Dent reaches into his pocket.
​

DENT
Alright. I'll just pay and be on my way.
​

Dent pulls out a wad of dollar bills, and places it on the counter. He unwraps the folded wad to reveal a single silver dollar. He looks back at Joey. The bartender looks confused.
​

DENT
Chance. Luck. Life. Two sides to every coin. Two outcomes to every scenario.
​

Dent flips the coin, catches it and covers it.
​

DENT
Heads, I leave all my money and walk away. Tails, I snap your neck. You see, I know what you did to me Joey. I know what you sold that piece of slime, Maroni. But don't worry, I'm gonna get him later.
​

As Dent slowly removes his hand from the coin, Joey reaches under the bar for his gun. Before he can raise it, Dent grabs him by the throat, knocking the gun from his hand.

Joey struggles against Dent, kicking and thrashing wildly. Dent grits his teeth in anger.
​

DENT
You ruined my life, Joey. You are your boss. And because of you, I'm not me anymore.

JOEY
(Struggling)
Harvey....please...

DENT
You keep calling me Harvey. Why? Harvey died weeks ago.
​

There is a loud cracking noise, and Dent steps back, letting Joey's dead body fall to the floor.

Dent turns to the camera and for the first time we see his full, disfigured face. Half of his face is burnt away and scarred terribly. His teeth on one side are completely rotten. He is a monster.
​

DENT
I'm Two-Face now.
​

​

Everything I put in bold was brilliant. Seriously, if you could come up with more of that kind of writing, i suggest you look into professional screenwriting. Everything after the bold, i thought, was a little sorry and strayed away from the Two-Face that has thus far been portrayed from what we have seen and concluded.

Oh, and the exact quote is:
Tender: Dent?! I thought you was dead! :P

 

[MAKIEVELLI]

There are some really great writers on this MB.

 

[griffolyon12]

Here is my shot at writing a scene for TDK. I should note that I really don't know any spoilers so this is just more of how I want to see the film end. This scene takes place shortly before the end. It is after the climax, Joker is already busted. Rachel was killed in a struggle between Two-Face and the Joker.

INT. WAYNE PENTHOUSE - DAY

BRUCE WAYNE is standing alone in his penthouse staring out of the window, looking out over the Gotham skyline. It is late in the afternoon, the sun is beginning to go down. ALFRED enters through the door from the kitchen, he stops shortly behind Bruce.

ALFRED
Your dinner is ready sir.

BRUCE
(Still looking out of the window.)
I'm not hungry.

There is a slight pause. Alfred comes up to Bruce's side and gingerly puts his hand on Bruce's shoulder.

ALFRED
There was nothing you could of done sir. There was nothing anyone could of done for Rachel.

Bruce continues staring out the window.

ALFRED
I'll leave you to your thoughts.

Alfred turns around and begins walking back towards the kitchen door.

BRUCE
Tell me Alfred, how many more people have to die for my cause?
My parents, Rachel, they're all dead.

Alfred turns back around and stares at Bruce with concern. Bruce turns to face Alfred.

BRUCE
I saved Gotham, but look at the costs. Many died, most didn't have to.

ALFRED
None of this was your fault sir. It was him. And what happened to Rachel, you couldn't of helped her, she chose her path a long time ago.

Bruce turns back to face out the window.

BRUCE
That's not all. Last night, when I had the Joker in my grasp, I wanted to, kill him.

ALFRED
(Slightly scared.)
But you didn't, and that is what is important!

BRUCE
But I still thought it, I wanted to do it! Does that make me any better than him? He's a madman, a monster! I hate him!!! After I came back to Gotham I thought I could save it, and all it seems like I've done is help make things worse.

ALFRED
I wish I could tell you that things will get better, but I can't guarantee these things.

There is a small pause. Bruce and Alfred both look out the window the sun has nearly gone down. The BATSIGNAL is now shinning brightly in the sky.

BRUCE
I've got work to do. Jim will be needing my help.

Bruce walks past Alfred and walks over to an elevator. He presses the down button. DING! The elevator door opens, Bruce goes inside. Alfred looks off after him as the elevator doors close.

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[Shoemeister]

I think we should FINALLY see a scene where Bats tries to take a dump while in the Batsuit. It seems virtually impossible.

Unless if he's got some sort of special Bat Guano Release Mechanism built into the suit?

 

[DeathRaven]

There are some really good writers in here, I cant really choose my favorite because they would all be really great to see in the film.

 

[MAKIEVELLI]

Here is my shot at writing a scene for TDK. I should note that I really don't know any spoilers so this is just more of how I want to see the film end. This scene takes place shortly before the end. It is after the climax, Joker is already busted. Rachel was killed in a struggle between Two-Face and the Joker.

INT. WAYNE PENTHOUSE - DAY

BRUCE WAYNE is standing alone in his penthouse staring out of the window, looking out over the Gotham skyline. It is late in the afternoon, the sun is beginning to go down. ALFRED enters through the door from the kitchen, he stops shortly behind Bruce.

ALFRED
Your dinner is ready sir.​

BRUCE
(Still looking out of the window.)
I'm not hungry.​

There is a slight pause. Alfred comes up to Bruce's side and gingerly puts his hand on Bruce's shoulder.​

ALFRED​

There was nothing you could of done sir. There was nothing anyone could of done for Rachel.​

Bruce continues staring out the window.​

ALFRED​

I'll leave you to your thoughts.​

Alfred turns around and begins walking back towards the kitchen door.​

BRUCE​

Tell me Alfred, how many more people have to die for my cause?


My parents, Rachel, they're all dead.​

Alfred turns back around and stares at Bruce with concern. Bruce turns to face Alfred.​

BRUCE​

I saved Gotham, but look at the costs. Many died, most didn't have to.​

ALFRED


None of this was your fault sir. It was him. And what happened to Rachel, you couldn't of helped her, she chose her path a long time ago.​

Bruce turns back to face out the window.​

BRUCE​

That's not all. Last night, when I had the Joker in my grasp, I wanted to, kill him.​

ALFRED


(Slightly scared.)


But you didn't, and that is what is important!​

BRUCE


But I still thought it, I wanted to do it! Does that make me any better than him? He's a madman, a monster! I hate him!!! After I came back to Gotham I thought I could save it, and all it seems like I've done is help make things worse.​

ALFRED


I wish I could tell you that things will get better, but I can't guarantee these things.​

There is a small pause. Bruce and Alfred both look out the window the sun has nearly gone down. The BATSIGNAL is now shinning brightly in the sky.​

BRUCE​

I've got work to do. Jim will be needing my help.​

Bruce walks past Alfred and walks over to an elevator. He presses the down button. DING! The elevator door opens, Bruce goes inside. Alfred looks off after him as the elevator doors close.​

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I like that scene, but I don't want Two Face or any other villain to interrupt the movie. Joker should be the main villain, he should be the only one in on the climax. Two Face shouldn't appear until the third movie.

 

[MAKIEVELLI]

Here is my shot at writing a scene for TDK. I should note that I really don't know any spoilers so this is just more of how I want to see the film end. This scene takes place shortly before the end. It is after the climax, Joker is already busted. Rachel was killed in a struggle between Two-Face and the Joker.

INT. WAYNE PENTHOUSE - DAY

BRUCE WAYNE is standing alone in his penthouse staring out of the window, looking out over the Gotham skyline. It is late in the afternoon, the sun is beginning to go down. ALFRED enters through the door from the kitchen, he stops shortly behind Bruce.

ALFRED
Your dinner is ready sir.​

BRUCE
(Still looking out of the window.)
I'm not hungry.​

There is a slight pause. Alfred comes up to Bruce's side and gingerly puts his hand on Bruce's shoulder.​

ALFRED​

There was nothing you could of done sir. There was nothing anyone could of done for Rachel.​

Bruce continues staring out the window.​

ALFRED​

I'll leave you to your thoughts.​

Alfred turns around and begins walking back towards the kitchen door.​

BRUCE​

Tell me Alfred, how many more people have to die for my cause?


My parents, Rachel, they're all dead.​

Alfred turns back around and stares at Bruce with concern. Bruce turns to face Alfred.​

BRUCE​

I saved Gotham, but look at the costs. Many died, most didn't have to.​

ALFRED


None of this was your fault sir. It was him. And what happened to Rachel, you couldn't of helped her, she chose her path a long time ago.​

Bruce turns back to face out the window.​

BRUCE​

That's not all. Last night, when I had the Joker in my grasp, I wanted to, kill him.​

ALFRED


(Slightly scared.)


But you didn't, and that is what is important!​

BRUCE


But I still thought it, I wanted to do it! Does that make me any better than him? He's a madman, a monster! I hate him!!! After I came back to Gotham I thought I could save it, and all it seems like I've done is help make things worse.​

ALFRED


I wish I could tell you that things will get better, but I can't guarantee these things.​

There is a small pause. Bruce and Alfred both look out the window the sun has nearly gone down. The BATSIGNAL is now shinning brightly in the sky.​

BRUCE​

I've got work to do. Jim will be needing my help.​

Bruce walks past Alfred and walks over to an elevator. He presses the down button. DING! The elevator door opens, Bruce goes inside. Alfred looks off after him as the elevator doors close.​

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I like that scene, but I don't want Two Face or any other villain to interrupt the movie. Joker should be the main villain, he should be the only one in on the climax. Two Face shouldn't appear until the third movie.

 

[CARNAGE-COMETH]

Joker: "To Perma or Not To Perma...That Is The Joke..rr"

Harvey Dent: "Good Night Sweet Knight, May flights of Chiroptera carry you to your rest."

Batman: "POW!..BAM!...ZAP!"

Gordon: "But I didn't believe...."

Batman: "That is why you Fail..."

*John Williams Music*

THE END!

 

[TheCaptain]

Bruce: Look at them all down there. They look like rats. Murderers, rapists, perverts, petty thieves... they have no regard for human life... I hate them all. My parents are DEAD! They all just do what they want whatever they want to. Why should they get to be happy. My parents are DEAD! I won't allow it. Not in my city. If I'm not happy, then nobody's gonna be happy. My parents are DEAD! MY PARENTS ARE DEEEAAAD! MY PARENTS ARE DEAD! Now you're dead. Just like my parents.

-scene-

 

[CaptainClown]

Bruce: Look at them all down there. They look like rats. Murderers, rapists, perverts, petty thieves... they have no regard for human life... I hate them all. My parents are DEAD! They all just do what they want whatever they want to. Why should they get to be happy. My parents are DEAD! I won't allow it. Not in my city. If I'm not happy, then nobody's gonna be happy. My parents are DEAD! MY PARENTS ARE DEEEAAAD! MY PARENTS ARE DEAD! Now you're dead. Just like my parents.

-scene-

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I know 267 ways of killing a man, fist to face is number 56

 

[Darkness Falls]

this would take place after racheal's death
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joker sits at a desk just sitting there waiting
when he hears something on the roof

joker looks up and smiles
Batman jumps through the glass panels in the roof
he lands a few inches from joker
batman's has a murderous look in his eyes

Joker: I thought you'd never get here

Batman grabs joker and throws him up against the wall

Batman: when you left your calling card , you knew I would find you

Joker giggles

Batman throws joker over his desk

Joker staggers at first his mouth bleeding slightly

Batman: No more games joker, it ends tonight