Within The Shadows (Sequel to Desire of Power)

^ Yeah, I'm very lazy when it comes to spelling errors. Hell, It makes me mad, lol. Also, thanks a bunch.
 
Excellent work SMH12! I really like how Eddie Brock is developing!
 
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PART 4
We continue from where we left off last time...

Spidey: "Couldn't you have gone to the police?!"

Robbie: "NO!!! Don't you understand?! He'd know. Just like every other crime boss in this town."

Spidey: "....I'll take you home to your family, Robbie. Tell me where he is, though."

RObbie: "Well...He's at an abandoned warehouse on the other side of town."

Spidey grabs Robbie and jumps onto a boat in the waters below.

Driver: "S-S-Spider-m-man."

Spidey: "Can you give us a ride back to the city?"

The Driver nods. He looks a bit stunned as well as scared. Spidey then goes over to Robbie and sits down with him. Moments later, they arrive on land and Spidey jumps in the air, shoots a web and swings away high above the city streets with Robbie in his hands. Then, minutes later, Spider-Man lands on top of Robbie's house. He opens the window for him.

Robbie: "Thank you, Spider-Man. Please....just get him for me. For my family."

Spidey: "I will Robbie. I promise."

Then, as Robbie closes his window and walks away, Spidey, still on the roof, thinks for a brief moment.

Spidey: *So help me god, Robbie, I will.*

He then leaves. It is now 10:07 AM. Peter's heading to his apartment, walking down the busy NYC streets.

Peter: *Hmm, so, where do I begin? I can't search every damn alleyway in NYC to find this guy. I--wait! Maybe Betty could helpe me out! I should head to the Daily Bugle!*

So, minutes later we see Peter exit the elevator to the Daily Bugle. The whole office is busy, people walking fast, trying to get the job done like every other american. Peter then spots Betty walking rather fast to a cabinet.

Peter: "Betty!"

Peter walks over to her.

Betty: "Oh, hey, Peter! What's been going on?"

Peter, rather rushingly asks Betty..

Peter: "Betty, do you know any history on a man named Vladmire Dykstra?"

Betty, while still looking at peter, closes the cabinet door.

Betty: "...No, why, who's that?"

Peter: "Uhhh...long story. I need to find out more on this guy. It's...it's a matter of life or death."

Betty nods. Then, she realizes something.

Betty: "Wait, shouldn't Robbie be the one doing this? I don't have permission to access his desk."

Peter: "Well, you have a key don't you?"

Betty: "No, but I-I think I can get one. I--"

Suddenly, a loud screaming man slams the doors of his office open.

JJJ: "PARKER!!!!!!!! Where have you been?! I thought I told you to get me pictures of Spider-Man!"

Peter: "I-I know, and I almost did, but I got caught in the action and--"

JJJ: "Action?! You're a photographer! You risk your life for this! Get me pictures of that wall-crawling maniac or I swear I will"

Peter: "Okay, okay! I'll be back later!"

Then, as Betty laughs, we see peter run to the elevator. Now, we turn our attention to a certain red head. Mary Jane Watson. We see her jogging in Cnetral Park. Beautiful birds cherping, people walking, sitting down. Then, she decides to stop and head back home. Now, a half an hour later, we see her at her apartment all dressed in her normal clothes. She heads out of her apartment, and calls for a taxi. Ten minutes later, he drops her off at a cemetary. It's very quiet as she walks over to a certain grave. We then see the tombstone has Captain George Stacy and Gwen Stacy's names written on it. MJ goes to her knees and cries. She then turns her head to the side to see a man standing in front of a tombstone. From the back of him, we can see a long black trenchcoat, black slicked back hair, and his hands are in his pockets. He then turns to MJ to see that she made a quick glance at him. she still on her knees as the tall, very depressed looking man walks over to her. MJ looks up to see that his unbottoned trenchcoat reveals a shirt with a skull on the front. She knows who it is. Frank just stares then...

Frank: "Death. It something that we all have to deal with. It colud happen today, it could happen tommorow."

MJ stands up.

MJ: "I'm sorry, I didn't mean to stare."

Frank still serious.

Frank: "No reason to be sorry."

Then, after that, Frank turns around, closes his jacket, hands in pockets, and starts to walk slowly towards his van. MJ just stares as Punisher gets into his van, starts it up, then drives away.

Now, hours later, around 7:00 PM, we turn to Ryker's Island. The cell of Eddie Brock. Eddie Brock is fast asleep. He's having some sort of nightmare. It's like he's moaning in his sleep. Then, obviously unaware, a dark, black substance has snuck it's way through the bars on the windows, and down the wall into Brock's cell. It silently crawls up Brock's bed, onto his leg and slowly up it. His leg is starting to get covered with black. Now, it's moving it's way up his torso and into his mouth while he's having a nightmare, and then, suddenly, his eye's open wide and he smiles. Eyes are yellow, teeth are sharp.

To be continued in Part 5! Stay tuned! :yay:



 
I liked it, but my favourite thing about this part was The Punisher. Very cool to read
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PART 5
It is now morning time in NYC. Bright, busy, and somewhat beautiful, however, over the waters, from a distance, we see Ryker's prison. We now turn our attention to Ryker's prison, specifically in a room with Eddie Brock and Dr. Tinsesnt.

Dr. Tinsent: "Good morning, Eddie! You look a bit...more awake."

Eddie smirks a little, though, Tinsent doesn't suspect anything. Tinsent opens up his folder, takes out his daily papers to write on about Brock, and he takes out his recorder. Tinsent looks at Brock.

Tinsent: "Heh, you seem a bit...well...happy today Brock."

Brock shrugs.

Brock: "Just a pleasent day, I guess. Happens sometimes when you're locked up in here even, though it seems unlikely."

Tinsent now has everything set up including the recorder.

Tinsent: "Let's talk your future. Now, I know that you want to get out, live a normal life, you know, all the stuff a normal person does. Well, quite frankly, Eddie. I......I don't think it's possible. You're sentenced to life...without parole. There's nothing more I can do."

Eddie shrugs once again, nods....

Eddie: "Ohhh, don't worry about it. Being locked up in here isn't so bad. I mean, sometimes, things go bump in the night when you are fast asleep. Those things aren't always....scary. Sometimes, it could be a gift from god."

Tinsent looks suspiciously

Tinsent: "What are y-y---"

Now, Eddie's eyes turn yellow and his teeth are sharp. Now, Brocks hand is black with symbiote goo. He flips over the desk. Now, Brock..is Venom! Venom grabs Dr. Tinsent.

Venom: "Can't keep a monster in it's cage."

Venom then throws Dr. Tinsent into the wall, though, not killing him, but enough to knock him out. Now Venom's running and jumping through the prison. He comes across a security gaurd and symbiote goo oozes from his fingers into his nostrils and mouth, killing him. He then shoots a web at another security gaurd and pulls him up to the ceiling where he (Venom is).

Venom: "Ohhhh...you're scared! Sometimes, a little fear can change you're life!"

Venom uses his sharp nail and scrapes it slowly along the security gaurd's head.

Venom: "Criss....cross..."

says Venom as he's doing it. Gaurd screams in agony. Venom then webs him to the ceiling. Jumps back onto the floor and jumps through the brick wall and out the prison. Moments later, we see security grauds rushing into the hall of cells. All the prisoners are going crazy in their cells. They see the gaurd webbed to the ceiling with scratches on his head from Venom. Then another, on the ground with ooz coming out of his eyes and mouth.
Gaurd #1: "Somebody get over here and help that man down. Larsen, go down that hall and search for any other bodies."

Another gaurd walks up to the body on the floor.

Gaurd #2: "Jesus..."

Then, gaurd #1 grabs gaurd #2 by the face.

Gaurd #1: "Don't you even dare mention that name in situation like this. Do you hear me?!"

Then, from in the background down another hall.

Larsen (gaurd#3): "Jackson! (gaurd #1)"

Larsen lets go of gaurd #2.

Larsen: "What is it?!"

Jackson: "It's Dr. Tinsent! He's alive!"

Larsen and a couple of gaurds run down the hall to find Dr. Tinesnt knocked out. They also noticed a hole in the wall back in the other cell block. Larsen shakes Tinesnt.

Larsen: "Dr. Tinsent! Dr. Tinesnt, are you all right?!"

Tinsent opens his eyes slightly, glasses broken, bruised.

Tinsent: "E-Eddie...Eddie!"

Then, he falls back to sleep.

Larsen: "Let's call the army. It appears as though something came through here and then bashed through that wall to escape along with Brock."

We now turn our attention to a certain chelsea apartment back on land in manhattan. Peter is at his desk looking at the files of Vladmire Dykstra. There's a picture of him with Hammerhead.
Peter: *Hammerhead?! I wonder if he has anything to do with this?"

Minutes pass as Peter goes through the file. He comes across a police report. It tells about how Vladmire was aressted once back in 1995 at a warehouse in a certain part of New York. It's located at a dock.

Peter: *Hmmm, it appears to be located at a....wait a minute! I know that warehouse. I've gone past it so many times. Maybe, his group is still running there though. Or maybe..just him."
Peter gets into his Spider-Man suit jumps out the widnow. Minutes later Spidey jumps off his web and onto the roof of the warehouse.

Spidey opens up the latch to reveal a darkened room. He jumps down into it.

Spidey: *Hmmm...no Spider sense means no danger."

He continues walking and then, his spider sense goes off as a gunshot is heard and he then dodges the bullet and jumps on the ceiling. The lights turn on.

It's a masked thug, like all the others. He's carrying a revolver.

Spidey then shoots a web at the nostril.

Spidey: "A revolver only carry's 6 shots."

He then jumps off the ceiling and kicks the thug in the chest sending him right into the wall.
Spidey: "But, for you, it's only one. So tell me, do you feel lucky? Do you? Ahhh, Eastwood is better at it then I am."

Now, his spider sense goes off as more men come in. All armed with M-16's, Shotguns, pisols, etc."

Spidey: "You guys here for the party? I forgot the cake."

One thug says...

Thug: "Get him!"

They shoot at Spidey, but Spidey jumps in the air, spinning, twisting, twirling. He swings on a ceiling pipe and slams into a thug, then throws him into another. He then does a big flip over one guy and punches right in the jaw sending him into 2 other guys. Now, two guys are on both sides of Spidey. One on the left and one on the right.

Spidey: "Hmmm, my quips were never delayed like this. HA! Aw, what the heck? I'll say it anyway. Get him? Seriously, that's the best you guys can come up with."

Now, the two guys are about the shoot Spidey, but he shoots a web at one nostril of a gun, then another. He then shoots a web at both guys and pulls them to him, but jumps out of the way, causing them to slam into eachother. Now, as all the guys are knocked out, except one. However, he's nearly asleep. Spidey neels down and grabs him by the shirt.

Spidey: "Okay, punk! Now tell me, where is Vladmire DYkstra?!"

Thug: "I-I-I..D-don't...know!"

Spidey: "*sigh* Well...."

Spidey picks up the gaurd and slams him against the wall threatring to hurt him even more.

Spidey: "TELL ME! WHERE IS VLADMIRE DYKSTRA?!!!! Tell me, or so help me I'll..."

Thug: "O-okay! O-okay! Please, just don't hurt me!"

Spidey: "Good boy! Sorry, I don't have any dog treats on me right now."

Spidey sets him down.

Thug: "Vlad....i-is...."

He passes out.

Spidey: "Wake up!"

Spidey sighs.

Spidey: "Damnit! Well, sweet dreams. When you wake up, you'll need some pills for that headache."

Spidey then puts his hand on his head until he hears screeching of tires outside. He jumps up in the air and onto the roof of the warehouse as he notices a car speeding out of the dock. It must be Vlad!

Spidey: *That must be him!"

To be continued in part 6! Stay Tuned!
 
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It's the best one so far. I can tell you're getting better.
 
Wonderful work, SMH12. It's been a blast reading this story.

Keep up the good work! I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
 
Not that I noticed the PM (:whatever:), but this was a good chapter. There are a lot of grammar mistakes (gaurd(s)/graud(s) = guard(s)), but at least it's obvious that you're getting better. My only gripe (over than the grammar) is that the story seems to be moving [*snap*snap*] too fast. If this were a television show, it would work. For a full-length movie though... it may not work, unless you pull in more sidestories or something. However, I like the dialogue, I like the narrative-feel you deliver with your descriptions, I like some of the images (I can see this projecting on the screen in my mind)... I have just enjoyed reading this. Good reading, my friend.
 
^^ That's odd, I could have sworn I corrected the grammar. I will admit something here, this wasn't the most fun of writing I've had up until part 5. Part 5 was very fun, but the other parts were really meh for me to write. Also, thanks!
 
Spider-ManHero12 said:
^^ That's odd, I could have sworn I corrected the grammar. I will admit something here, this wasn't the most fun of writing I've had up until part 5. Part 5 was very fun, but the other parts were really meh for me to write. Also, thanks!
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I had a feeling I could sense that from your opening chapters. Now you appear to be more relaxed and focused with your writing, and it's turning out just fine.
 
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