BvS Writers Workshop: Pen Your Own BvS Ideas

[BatmanVSuperman]

Credit to Jc's original workshop thread btw I've read through a good bit of the posts on there. Very interesting ideas in them old days.

 

[Lily Adler]

So I finally think I can weave a tangible plot with these snippets. I'll post a summary when I'm done.

 

[Rodrigo90]

I did want to write a script for this...but I'm struggling with it now

There's elements I'm fond of, that will only clash with the rest of the story I have in mind.
I want to include John Corben, who's a spy for Lex and gets close to Clark and Lois, her especially, in order to discover more about Superman.
And I can't think of a way to include him, and I throughly believe the idea that someone would try to go for Lois in order to get to Superman. I want him to be more than just "Metallo".

 

[BatmanVSuperman]

I did want to write a script for this...but I'm struggling with it now

There's elements I'm fond of, that will only clash with the rest of the story I have in mind.
I want to include John Corben, who's a spy for Lex and gets close to Clark and Lois, her especially, in order to discover more about Superman.
And I can't think of a way to include him, and I throughly believe the idea that someone would try to go for Lois in order to get to Superman. I want him to be more than just "Metallo".

I think if you just start writing stuff will come to your head as you go. For example, a little blurb I just wrote for ya.

INT. DAILY PLANET - MORNING

JOHN
Miss Lane...
(looks at Clark)
It is MISS Lane correct?

LOIS
You know it is John. What can I do for you?

JOHN
It's what I can do for you.

John shows Lois a folder. It has an X on it and reads "Project Metal-10"
Detailed photos of a new type of metallic substance fall out of the folder and CLARK picks them up and hands them over to LOIS.

CLARK
Lois, you're about to get us into something complicated aren't you?

LOIS
We've been in something complicated since I met you Clark.

JOHN
I knew your father Lane, and served under him. I trust you...
(turns to Clark)
but Clark stays out of this one. Sorry you're an outsider on this one.

CLARK
I'm not worried about the story...
(gets interrupted)

LOIS
Good. Then we are in agreement. You'll find I can handle myself just fine without you tagging along, Smallville.

 

[Rodrigo90]

That's pretty sweet actually
What can be done is, he's the muscle at the end for Supes to fight.
And I like how you put in his connection with Lois' dad. That way it deepens a connection and also states John was in the Army...perhaps without himself realising it or the audience, he's already a cyborg? And the memories of knowing General Lane were implanted within Corben by Lexcorp to make him more believable to Lois in order to connect with her? They've forged a fake life and identity into him
And that would be pretty sad if you like the guy somewhat through the story.

 

[BatmanVSuperman]

Just write something up, lol don't overthink it

 

[Rodrigo90]

It's a curse of mine to over think!
Damn OCD

 

[BatmanVSuperman]

I wouldn't forge a fake life or any of that, he should know the difference of his body because the lack of feeling compared to when he was human.

 

[Rodrigo90]

Ah, I forgot. That's what turned him mad in the first place. He couldn't cope with the lack of feeling. He couldn't feel, smell or taste and it drove him over the edge

 

[BatmanVSuperman]

Would it be too coincidental for Lois to know John before he becomes Metallo? I like the idea of her knowing some military personnel because of her father. Oh and metal-10 the ten refers to number of unknown elements. Obviously we read this as Metal-10 or Metallo.

 

[Guts]

I think several people have already mentioned the idea of Lex taking Zod's corpse and possibly cloning him and making bizarro or superboy. But what if Lex takes Zod's corpse and makes some kind of drug that will give regular humans the abilities of Kryptonians.

 

[Hypestyle]

interesting.. i wish that there would be some official short films to coincide with the film or the DVD release.

 

[Arrowshieldfan]

I think several people have already mentioned the idea of Lex taking Zod's corpse and possibly cloning him and making bizarro or superboy. But what if Lex takes Zod's corpse and makes some kind of drug that will give regular humans the abilities of Kryptonians.

maybe a setup for Project Cadmus? for Justice league movie

 

[roach]

Part Two

Ext. Paradise Island - Sunset

DIANA, on horseback, watches the sun go down on a serene beach. A bell rings. Diana realizes she is late and races through the jungle until she comes to ---

EXT. Themyscira - Same

The capitol city of the amazons. The building and architecture are very greek as are the clothing of the various amazons. Diana rides breakneck speed through the cobblestone streets. She skids to a stop in front of the Palace steps. In front of the palace stands PHILIPPUS, she is not amused.

Philippus: "You're late."
Diana: "Just watching saying good night to Father Helios."
Philippus: "The Queen mother awaits you in the dining room."

INT. Dining Room - minutes later

QUEEN HIPPOLYTA sits at the dining table. A vast abundance of food is laid out. Diana races into the room and stops.
Diana: My Queen.
Queen Hippolyta: A queen must be punctual. I have several meetings I will now be late for.
Diana: My apologies.
Diana sits at the table.
Queen Hippolyta: "Have you given thought to what profession you will take up? I've heard you have a beautiful singing voice."
Diana: "I am thinking of joining the royal guard."
Queen Hippolyta: "I will not allow that to happen. Choose again."
Diana: "Philippus says I am second to none with the sword."
Queen Hippolyta: "Philippus? Is everyone going against my wishes? Does the title 'queen' mean nothing?
Diana: "What about my wishes?"
Queen Hippolyta: "You will find that what we have to do does not always align with what we wish."
Diana: "Yet your wishes always override mine."
Diana exits the room.

EXT. Yacht - later

Dead seaman lie on the decks. Cassandra stands before a cauldron full of blood. She gestures and the cauldron glows white hot. Mystic energy pierces the heavens and enters hits the cauldron.

An island in the distance uncloaks. Mr. Chronis smiles.

 

[Black Narcissus]

Part Two

Ext. Paradise Island - Sunset

DIANA, on horseback, watches the sun go down on a serene beach. A bell rings. Diana realizes she is late and races through the jungle until she comes to ---

EXT. Themyscira - Same

The capitol city of the amazons. The building and architecture are very greek as are the clothing of the various amazons. Diana rides breakneck speed through the cobblestone streets. She skids to a stop in front of the Palace steps. In front of the palace stands PHILIPPUS, she is not amused.

Philippus: "You're late."
Diana: "Just watching saying good night to Father Helios."
Philippus: "The Queen mother awaits you in the dining room."

INT. Dining Room - minutes later

QUEEN HIPPOLYTA sits at the dining table. A vast abundance of food is laid out. Diana races into the room and stops.
Diana: My Queen.
Queen Hippolyta: A queen must be punctual. I have several meetings I will now be late for.
Diana: My apologies.
Diana sits at the table.
Queen Hippolyta: "Have you given thought to what profession you will take up? I've heard you have a beautiful singing voice."
Diana: "I am thinking of joining the royal guard."
Queen Hippolyta: "I will not allow that to happen. Choose again."
Diana: "Philippus says I am second to none with the sword."
Queen Hippolyta: "Philippus? Is everyone going against my wishes? Does the title 'queen' mean nothing?
Diana: "What about my wishes?"
Queen Hippolyta: "You will find that what we have to do does not always align with what we wish."
Diana: "Yet your wishes always override mine."
Diana exits the room.

EXT. Yacht - later

Dead seaman lie on the decks. Cassandra stands before a cauldron full of blood. She gestures and the cauldron glows white hot. Mystic energy pierces the heavens and enters hits the cauldron.

An island in the distance uncloaks. Mr. Chronis smiles.

Are you going to write a full script? I can't take these bit pieces , mayne.

 

[roach]

I would but life is catching up with me....a new show I'm helping to create may be picked up by Hulu....Ne-yo (the R and B singer) is reading one of my scripts now with an eye to be the lead...and I have to move by next Sunday.....

 

[WoodyROM]

Priorities man...just tell them you've got some fanfic to write. They'll totally get it

Seriously though, congratulations Roach! I hope it works out well for you.

 

[roach]

Thanks

 

[Rodrigo90]

Try and get a gig at Gotham too, while you're at it!

 

[Tra-El]

My Daily Planet scene

-Enter- The Daily Planet newsroom. 5:33 pm. The directing camera is attached above on the ceiling, motioning and scanning a crowded but yet busy and frantic Daily Planet reporters scrambling to meet their overwhelming deadlines.

-Scanning camera; above shot. Phones are ringing. Fingers are pounding down on keyboards. Microwaves in the lunchroom are heard beeping in the near distance. Chattering is becoming deafening. The entire newsroom in complete peak mode.

-As we scan across the ceiling, the camera and focal point finds none other than Clark Kent, wearing a navy blue suit; pencil in his ear with newly shined up shoes sitting there, still. The only one on the entire work floor in a motionless position. Glaring.

-CLOSEUP- of an EAR as we hear the now deafening newsroom a moment before become faint and static, as if putting a glass bowl around your head.

-CLOSEUP- of pure blue eyeballs, distinctly making out black frame glasses just barley fitting into the screen.

Front shot of Clark Kent sitting at his desk, level-view. He's seen channeling his superhearing.

The noisy newsroom still in static fashion. The mood is silent but yet relentless in the white background noise.

-SUPERHEARING-
(The voice of Perry White talking to somebody; not seen in frame-just his voice at a low volume)

Perry White:
I'm not sending our stringer out there with you. It's too dangerous.

Lois Lane:
Perry, I'm not going alone this time. Gotham may be dangerous but it's the best and only spot to..

-Quick shot of Clark Kent- listening. All of a sudden, a foot kicks Clarks chair (shaky cam effect). Clark is startled as we are now back to the loudness of the newsroom in real time.

Steve Lombard:
Come on Kent, snap out of it. Perry sees you staring into outer space again and he'll never sign you off

Clark (startled)

Clark:
Oh, right, uh.. I guess I have a lot on my mind

Lombard:
It's not so bad, Kent. Sooner or later, Gotham would of been a destination point eventually. We've all had to do it. I would go, but, as they say,not lower on the totem pole anymore if you catch my drift

-Lombard winks at Clark-

Clark Kent:
It's fine, Steve. I've been waiting for this chance for some time now

Steve Lombard:
Right, Kent, just don't blow i..

-All of a sudden, the door to Perry White's office flings open hard enough to slam off the wall behind it.-

Perry White:
Kent. My office. I would like to have a word with you

-Lois is seen standing behind Perry's left shoulder. Perry quickly turns to Lois and whispers. -

(Whispering; turns to Lois)
Perry White:
..and you better watch over him, Lane. If anything happens, it's your ass.

-Same frame- Clark instantly appears in the shot. Perry turns and looks Clark up and down; smirks.

Perry White:
Good luck, kid. Gotham City. Follow Lois and don't leave her sight.

Clark Kent:
Thank you, Mr.White.

Perry White:
Don't thank me.

-Pause-
(Perry glances at Lois; Lois glances at Clark.)

Perry White:
Now get goin' and report back to me immediately. Cardinal rule. You break it. You're fired.

(Perry walks in his office and shuts the door as Lois and Clark start speed walking away.)

The door opens back up
Perry White:
..and Kent!

-Lois and Clark stop and look back-

Perry White:
....don't get killed.

(Shuts the door.)

 

[WBwins]

Been thinking about writing a story treatment for my BVS instead of a full script.

One idea Ive been thinking about is the idea of Superman Followers.

Considering that Supes would have been saving loads of people by the time of BVS I expect he will have LOADS of admirers not just haters.

Realistically some would look up to him as a benevolent god.And like all gods Superman will have followers whether he wants it or not.

Supermans followers will probably be human beings inspired by Superman to help the world.Maybe they'll wear Superman Tshirts/medallions to honor their "god".Maybe even have the statue built in honor of him.technically they wont actually worship Superman but they the reverence and admiration they give him is almost like they do.


I would call the Superman followers "Kalites".

Naturally the Government will not be happy at the rise of Kalites all over the world,Lex especially.So they'll want to kill Superman down just like the Pharisees wanted to put Jesus down.

Thoughts on this?

 

[BatmanVSuperman]

LOL Kalites?

 

[Rodrigo90]

EXT. LEXCORP - NIGHT

Lois and Lex both step from the elevator. Lex walks on ahead and turns to her, as the lights come on, illuminating the darkness.

LEX
Welcome to my world.

Lois looks at around at all the sights. Heavy machinery assembles what appear to be robotic limbs. She can't believe her eyes. Bubbling tanks of various sizes, rows and rows, are lined against the walls. They each contain human appendages, some with even human shapes inside, deformed and with limbs missing or not quite developed to the correct size. Other numerous experiments are present around the lab.

LOIS
What is all this?

LEX
Like I said, it's my world. I've been dreaming of it since I was a kid.

Lex stops and turns to her. A smug look on his face.

LEX ( CONT'D )
I know what you're thinking. I'm sick? All this is crazy? I should be locked away and have the key thrown away?

LOIS
...It's like you can read my mind.

LEX
It's simply because you lack the vision. Obviously, like a lot of the population out there. So, I guees I can't really criticise you for your lack of understanding and acceptance. Ignorance can be such a tragic trait to possess. It ends up wasting the potential within us that could be quite beneficial for mankind.

Lois rolls her eyes. She's becoming agitated with this man and with her surroundings.

LOIS
Could you try talking like a being with lesser intelligence for once, Luthor?! What the hell is going on in this place?!

Lex sighs and gives Lois a gentle smile. It gives her a slight chill. Added that with everything else, it's amazing how she's keeping her nerve!

LEX
I really hate being right all the time, you know that? Fine. I'll make it easy for you to comprehend. Simply put, Miss Lane...I'm carrying out my dream. Even as a child, I was creative. Never lacked any sort of imagination. And this dream I have, started when I was that young. To be correct, it followed after I did certain things. Things that both astonished people around me...and terrified them at the same time.

Lois' reporter intrigue is kicking in. She knows better than to indulge Luthor with his bloated psychotic ego. But, he's too fascinating for her not press him further for his tale.

LOIS
What things?

LEX
It was simple, at the start. It began with me trapping a dragonfly inside a glass jar, when I was six. My parents couldn't afford to keep a pet and I desperately wanted one. I was an only child and it got lonely, at times. But, I felt guilty at seeing it trying to escape. So, I decided to let it out...However, to make sure it didn't get away from me, I pulled each one of its tiny wings off. I would observe it every day with complete fascination.

Lex s******s at himself upon saying that. Lois' slight pity for the guy has turned back into disgust.

LEX (CONT'D )
It gave me a sense of feeling. Something unique, that I'd never experienced before. I didn't quite fully understand it, but I soon became addicted to that feeling. It was as if the wingless dragonfly was my own creation. I had done something that no one else had. I was pleased with myself. Of course I was young at the time, and didn't fully realise the concept of cruelty in others out there...And once I did, I wanted to go further. I needed to stand out from the rest of them. Even if they were simple-minded schoolchildren, I craved the attention.

LOIS
So all this? It came from you wanting to impress a bunch of kids? Didn't have many friends, did you? I'm not surprised.

Lex walks up to Lois and proceeds to stroke her hair. He gently observes his hand in motion through her hair. She's repulsed, but is frozen. She dare move. His eyes on hers.

LEX
I wanted respect, Lois. Respect and love. I never got any from my parents. So, I sought it from anybody who would pay attention to me.

He stops stroking her hair and continues to walk on ahead. Lois reluctantly follows. Her stomach and legs are feeling shakey now. Not with fear, not as much. It's anger.

LEX ( CONT'D )
As I was saying. It soon escalated beyond pulling the wings of flies, I'll tell you.

LOIS
Oh, I can clearly see that...and another thing, Luthor.

LEX
What's that?

LOIS
Don't ever touch me again

Lex stops. He turns to face her. Despite him being this seemingly weedy nerd, Lois is pretty scared of the guy.

LEX
Or what? You'll tell the Alien I touched his little mate?

Lex points at the large tubes behind Lois, the ones filled with chunks of human like limbs. She turns to look. She's disturbed at the sight.

LEX ( CONT'D)
You see them? Tell me what you think they are. Or, rather, what they were.

Rather than indulging him, again. Lois has given up on her curiosity now, she doesn't know what to think. Things are starting to really get to her, but she maintains her cool.

LOIS
Your ex-girlfriends? I don't know.

LEX
Men and women you can find in cardboard boxes in the slums. Those who won't be missed. Even those who will be missed and remembered! Men and women you often see fighting for their countries. I have a collection of what's left of them, you see? When you're experimenting, you need more than one guinea pig, don't you? But it was all in the interest of science, I assure you. They didn't die for nothing.

Lois slowly turns to Lex. She's pissed now! If she wasn't handcuffed, she'd be tearing chunks out of him!

LOIS
You evil, monster...

LEX
I prefer the term, God! You see, that's my dream!

Lex is starting to change. His behaviour a lot more erratic and manic.

LEX (CONT'D)
Tearing wings off flies, cutting up animals, and replacing their limbs and organs with whatever I could find to stitch them up with, vandalism of public property to suit my tastes, it was the beginning! Whatever created this Universe, be it the Lord our Father, or the Big Bang. Whatever you choose to believe, something created us...This world, these creatures that inhabit it, they're somebody else's creations...they're not mine. In my dream? I'm the one who created everything...

Lex, slowly and menacingly comes up to Lois. She wants to back away and run, but she stands her ground.

LEX (CONT'D)
This world, Miss Lane. Everything and everyone in it, will belong to me. I can make my dream come true...and the wheels are already in motion.

LOIS
Not if Superman has anything to say about it.

LEX
He'll be dead. And do you know how I know that?

He turns to point at a large blast door in the back of the room.

LEX (CONT'D)
Because what's going to kill him? It's in there. Would you like to see?

 

[WBwins]

LOL Kalites?

Best name I cld come up with

 

[Rodrigo90]

...Hypothetically, would WB accept a script that has Morgan Edge based on Rupert Murdoch and Galaxy Communications based on NewsCorp?

And in my script Edge was sent to prison for sexual assault of a young girl and having GC cover it up by eliminating any news story over the claims and rumours of his ties to the mob? [Which will later become Intergang]