Here is my take guys.
Darkness.
Voice (O.S):
I love the smell of the Narrows don't you? I don't know what it is, but it's intoxicating. Each breath you take makes you feel...alive. You and your little friend have been busy havn't you?
BOOM. A light is turned on. AND WE ARE IN:
Int. Warehouse - Night.
The ware house is old and abandoned. The rotten smell and fumes from the nearby sewers fill the room. In a dark corner of the warehouse, we see a man (JACK NAPIER) standing over a woman (RACHEL DAWES), who is tied to a chair. Her dark hair is filled with blood and sweat, and she can barely sit up staright in the chair. Jack is wearing a long dark coat, a hat and is smoking a cigarrette. He walks over to Rachel, and kneels down in front of her.
Jack:
It's a shame, a beautiful woman like yourself has to end her life this way.
Jacks blows smoke in her face, and pulls her hair behind her ears.
Jack:
I can't even imagine the pain your in. What my men did to you... well it's a miricale that your're even alive.
Rachel looks him in the eyes.
Rachel:
It... It doesn't matter what you do to me... he'll find me.
Jack puts his mouth beside Rachel's ear.
Jack:
I know he will Miss Dawes... In fact I'm counting on it.
Jack gets up, and walks away from Rachel. As he walks away from her he pulls out a little remote and pushes the button.
LATER...
Ext. Warehouse - Night.
High above the city a dark figure is engolfed in the shadows. The sound of a cape billowing is the only sound we hear. TILT UP. We see BATMAN, crouched in the shadows, looking at the warehouse from high above the city. His eyes are burning with rage. He rises untill...WUFF. He throws himself of the ledge and into the night.
Int. Warehouse - Night.
Rachel is still tied to the chair, but she is more weakened than before. Her breathing is raspy and a puddle of blood has gather by the foot of the chair. BANG. Batman comes smashing though the roof windows and lands beside Rachel. He grabs Rachel.
Batman:
Rachel.
Rachel looks at him with teary eyes.
Rachel:
...Bruce?
Batman:
I'm here Rachel...I'm here. It's gonna be alright.
Batman tries to lift Rachel, but sge screams in agony.
Rachel:
My...my neck.
Batman pulls the blood hair in the neck away and reveals the BOMB, that has been surgicly operated into her neck. It reads ONE MINUTE.
Rachel:
Leave me... You have to leave me.
Batman looks at Rachel.
Batman:
No there's time I can still...
Rachel:
I love you Bruce.
Batman looks tearfully at Rachel. He takes off his cowl and reveals his face to the only person he has ever loved. Rachel give him a little smile.
Bruce:
I...I love you to.
Rachel:
Then leave me. This city is more important than me. Leave me Bruce. There isn't much time...Hurry.
Bruce puts on his cowl and takes the magnetic gun and fires it towards the roof of the warehouse. He looks one last time at Rachel.
Batman:
I'm sorry Rachel. I...
Rachel:
Don't...
WUSS. Batman is lifted from the gorund. The timer reads TEN SECONDS.
Ext. Sky scaper - Gotham - Night (continued).
Jack Napier is lookking at the warehouse from a beatifull skyscaper in the city of GOTHAM. He's is smoking on a cigarette. BOOM. The Warehouse explodes. As the warehouse is burned to the ground ZOOM IN on Jack's smilling face. Jack laughs. His Laughter sounds so meanizing and it would send chills down the backs of any who heard it. CONTINUE TO ZOOM IN ON HIS EYES UNTILL.
DARKNESS.
Jack's laugh still echoes in the night.
Tell me what you think guys.