MakeMinesMarvel
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Re: new ending from alex
I think the Peter, Aunt May and Gwen beats feel really good.
There's something off for me about seeing the Gentleman walking through Special Projects for no reason other than to show the Rhino suit. Wish we could give this more purpose. I also think the pages read as though between this walk and his walk down the corridor at Ravenscroft to see Harry that five months have passed and I don't know why we need this scene between him and Harry. It sets up an expectation that Harry is going to break out at the end of the film but then it's Rhino we see Spidey fighting. I understand having a beat like that as a post credit piece to tease the next movie/Sinister Six but it feels odd and off-point in the midst of the Peter getting over Gwen story...
From: Belgrad, Doug
Sent: Friday, December 20, 2013 7:37 AM
To: Pascal, Amy
Cc:
Subject: Re: new ending from alex
I think it could use a little tweaking of the dialogue between May and Peter, and some of Gwen dialogue in speech. But other than that I like it.
On Dec 20, 2013, at 7:35 AM, "Pascal, Amy" <> wrote:
What do u think?
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There's something off for me about seeing the Gentleman walking through Special Projects for no reason other than to show the Rhino suit. Wish we could give this more purpose. I also think the pages read as though between this walk and his walk down the corridor at Ravenscroft to see Harry that five months have passed and I don't know why we need this scene between him and Harry. It sets up an expectation that Harry is going to break out at the end of the film but then it's Rhino we see Spidey fighting. I understand having a beat like that as a post credit piece to tease the next movie/Sinister Six but it feels odd and off-point in the midst of the Peter getting over Gwen story...
From: Belgrad, Doug
Sent: Friday, December 20, 2013 7:37 AM
To: Pascal, Amy
Cc:
Subject: Re: new ending from alex
I think it could use a little tweaking of the dialogue between May and Peter, and some of Gwen dialogue in speech. But other than that I like it.
On Dec 20, 2013, at 7:35 AM, "Pascal, Amy" <> wrote:
What do u think?
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I thought you made those calculations. XD
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