A Prayer for the dying

[Showtime]

I am liking this, I am can stop watching 1 hour dramas now.

 

[DBella]

Intrigue, seduction and murder ...oh my.

It' so hard to find good murderous help these days.

And all those charges on my expense account for nothing!

It's not for nothing. Honest. It's just that cmill was too good. At least I died happy. I think.

 

[DBella]

Bella's such a ****.:heart:

Just doin' my job, suga'.

 

[NDX]

Remember. More NDX.

 

[green]

Great update Hunter...that kid is so dead.t:

 

[DBella]

Great update Hunter...that kid is so dead.t:

I will be VERY surprised if Emily ends up dead. I think Kmack and cmill will hook up and they'll adopt Emily. But that's just my guess.

 

[Angry Sentinel]

Nope, he saves his wife and child this time... err I mean Kmack and Emily and gets some redemption by sacrificing himself.


How this will all happen I'm not quite sure yet.

 

[green]

I will be VERY surprised if Emily ends up dead. I think Kmack and cmill will hook up and they'll adopt Emily. But that's just my guess.

Yeah I know
Ive been bugging Hunter since he started this story about killing the kid though.t:

 

[Hunter Rider]

Nope, he saves his wife and child this time... err I mean Kmack and Emily and gets some redemption by sacrificing himself.


How this will all happen I'm not quite sure yet.

Haha thank Sentinel i was hoping someone would feel that

 

[DBella]

Yeah I know
Ive been bugging Hunter since he started this story about killing the kid though.t:

Why, you evil... evil... you!
I think Emily's character needs some development though. I don't feel like I know her. She's just a kid with the disc.

 

[DBella]

Haha thank Sentinel i was hoping someone would feel that

I should've guess there's no "happily ever after".

 

[Mister J]

Naturally, my character's inclination is that Emily dies.

At any rate, I just hope she doesn't hurl a piano at someone (namely me).

 

[DBella]

Naturally, my character's inclination is that Emily dies.

At any rate, I just hope she doesn't hurl a piano at someone (namely me).

Uhh... cmill is Superman??

 

[green]

Why, you evil... evil... you!
I think Emily's character needs some development though. I don't feel like I know her. She's just a kid with the disc.

Eh why develop her, just kill her.
Like you said earlier you would be very suprised if the kid died, I was pushing for something shocking.

But I know what ever we get will be great

 

[Angry Sentinel]

Haha thank Sentinel i was hoping someone would feel that

Yeah, I like how you set it all up...timeless, classic redemption story. Even still, it's not boring or uninteresting because your characterizations are the shizzz. Not to mention I love classic redemption stories

How long have you been wrinting Hunter? You are seriously good man, really. I read a lot, so I'm very into stories and storytelling and I gotta say man you've got the goods.

 

[Cmill216]

Uhh... cmill is Superman??

Damn straight. I got my card for the Jack Bauer Club of Kickass coming through the mail later this week.

It's amazing how much discussion these recent chapters have sparked, hunter. That lets you know you are doing something right. And boy, are you ever.

 

[Mister J]

Uhh... cmill is Superman??

You'll ruin the surprise twist ending!

Besides, after SR, hurling pianos became a regular inclusion in all grade school Physical Education regiments.

 

[DBella]

Eh why develop her, just kill her.
Like you said earlier you would be very suprised if the kid died, I was pushing for something shocking.

But I know what ever we get will be great

If her character is not developed, then I won't be surprised if she dies. If cmill dies, I'll be very sad coz his characterization is so good that you feel like you almost know him. His job makes you want to hate him but he also have some redeeming qualities about him that makes you like him.

 

[Hunter Rider]

Yeah, I like how you set it all up...timeless, classic redemption story. Even still, it's not boring or uninteresting because your characterizations are the shizzz. Not to mention I love classic redemption stories

How long have you been wrinting Hunter? You are seriously good man, really. I read a lot, so I'm very into stories and storytelling and I gotta say man you've got the goods.

Thanks actually until i wrote my first fic a few months ago ive never wrote a story since year 10 English

 

[green]

If her character is not developed, then I won't be surprised if she dies. If cmill dies, I'll be very sad coz his characterization is so good that you feel like you almost know him. His job makes you want to hate him but he also have some redeeming qualities about him that makes you like him.

Im hoping the kid gets it and it pushes cmill and kmack together even more, then the two split to live a life of sin.

 

[Angry Sentinel]

Thanks actually until i wrote my first fic a few months ago ive never wrote a story since year 10 English

Ah, I see you're just one of those naturals then... I hate you fargin, iceholes, you don't have to work for it at all, it just happens for you.

You're all such cool bastages

Im hoping the kid gets it and it pushes cmill and kmack together even more, then the two split to live a life of sin.

haha, with this guy you never know but I think Cmill has lived a life of sin long enough.

Maybe in a prequel?

 

[DBella]

You know what? I really don't want to guess where the final destination of this story will take us, I just want to enjoy the ride and so far, it's been one thrilling ride.

 

[Hunter Rider]

Chapter 9

Mister J sat staring at Sarge from over his desk

Mister J:"Bella is dead ?jesus christ what a waste of money,are any of these schmucks even getting close ?"

Sarge:"Well Bella got close enough to let him leave a deposit"

Mister J:"he rubbed one out and then rubbed her out ?"

Sarge:"yep"

Mister J:"Y'know i'm starting to like this bastard"

Sarge:"Heh me to boss"

Mister J:"I still intend to rip his liver out and then dance on his grave of course"

Sarge:"Yes Sir"

The phone rang and Mister J picked it up

Mister J:"Yeah.........really ?........heheh excellent work"

he put the phone down and smiled

Mister J:"Sarge,looks like we just need to sit back and let this sh1t play itself into our hands"..............................................


Cmill and NDX loaded the car up for the trip

NDX:"I received this,this morning"

he handed Cmill is PDA over and Cmill looked at the screen,on it was a blurry picture of a ninja assassin known as enterthemadness...he had arrived in the US yesterday on.......business

Cmill's mind wandered

Tokyo Japanctober 2005

The rain pattered off the rooftop as Cmill steadied himself.....he was on top of a clothing store across the way from the exclusive Osaka Gambling club where Tako Omiguchi spent his Tuesday nights
Omiguchi was an up and coming gangster in the Yakuza but the older Oyabun's took a dislike to his brash americanised ways of doing business and his lack of respect for tradition and decided to have him removed

At 23:30 Omiguchi like clockwork came out of the club,flanked and surrounded by bodyguards with a woman in tow.....Just as Cmill was about to take his shot an old stooped over bum in a long coat stumbled towards them,suddenly the coat flew off and a man dressed in some sort of body armour with a hood on looking like a Ninja was slicing and dicing Omiguchis men into pieces before they could even draw their weapons......Omiguchi made a run for it as his men fell
The Ninja took a bolo off his belt and wound up....he unleashed it and it wrapped around Omiguchi's legs taking him down....the Ninja was quickly standing over him,as Omiguchi pleaded on his knees Cmill made some of the Japanese out......the Ninja's name was enterthemadness

One swipe of the sword later and Omiguchi was dead....Cmill stepped back into the shadows and watched as the Ninja disappeared into an alley.....for the first time in a long time he was looking at someone maybe even better than himself

NDX Nudged Cmill

NDX:"This guy got you spooked ?"

Cmill:"Not spooked but i wouldn't take him lightly,hopefully we get this done and the hit will be called off before i have to deal with him"

Kmack and Emily came out of the house and got into the car and they set off for the meet
As they were driving along past some fields Emily sat forward and pointed to the horses in the field

Emily:"I want to see the horses"

NDX looked at Cmill and he motioned for him to pull over,Kmack took Emily up pet the horse

NDX:"Do you ride Emily ?"

Emily:"Yes,i have my own horse,his name is dynamo,Mommy took me every week"

Kmack:"Wow i always wanted a horse remember Cmill:"

Cmill:"Yeah,there wasn't really a place to ride one where we lived heh"

Just then Cmill's face changed

Kmack:"What is it ?"

Cmill:"Get in the car........NOW!"

Cmill had heard engines coming towards them in the distance,they hurried to the car and as Cmill closed his door he looked over his shoulder...bearing down on them were 4 vehicles
a lone rider on a motorbike,a battered old chevy,a ford pick up truck and a Mack Rig

The rider pulled an uzi out it's jacket and started firing

Cmill:"Both of you get your heads down and STAY DOWN"

Bullets ricochet off the car as Cmill got his gun out,as he looked over his shoulder to see what the best approach would be something flew into the Chevy and it exploded in a sea of flames flipping onto it's roof

NDX and Cmill both looked upwards through the left hand door window and there was a chopper in the air above them

Fran:"Woooohoooo take that mother****ers"

Tzarinna smiled,C Lee had suggested a chopper tail them to the meet "Just in case" Tza and Fran were on board playing lookout

Tza:"Let me take the pick up"

Fran:"It's all you baby"

Tza Looked through her scope and lined up the drivers head


BANG!!!......the bullet whizzed through the air and his head popped,the pick up swerved off the road and crashed

Fran:"What we gonna do with the Mack truck ?"

Tza:"Can't you use another rocket ?"

Fran:"No,it's to close to the car,if it blows the blast could take out the car as well"

Tza:"****"

Back in the car...

Cmill:"flip the glove box NDX"

the glovebox opened to reveal a lightweeght M16 assault rifle,Cmill grabbed it and aimed his handgun at the door hinges and shot one of them loose,the door swung open

NDX:"Are you ****ing insane ?"

Cmill:"Possibly"

He shot the other hinge away and lent into the door as it flew off,his weight driving it to the road as it hurtled backwards away from the car,on his knees on the car door he slid past the bike and grabbed onto the back of the Mack truck and pulled himself onto it.

Cmill quickly climbed onto the roof of the cab and down onto the bonnet,the driver looked up to see Cmill with a M16 pointed at him

BRRATATATATATATATATATATATATAT!!!!!!!!!!!!

From the chopper Tza and Fran watched as Cmill stood on the bonnet of the moving Mack truck emptying rounds into the cab as the bike gained on the others in the car

Fran:"Awwwwww now the ****er's just showing off"

Tza:"That's hawt"

Cmill dropped the M16 to the ground as the truck kept on moving and turned drawing his sidearm as his coat flowed to the side,in one swift movement he aimed and fired at the bike hitting it's tank and causing it to explode,throwing the rider off to the floor

NDX brought the car to a stop and Cmill climbed into the ruck and pulled it over.he got out and went over to the downed biker,the helmet was lying on the ground as the person pushed the long hair out of their face,it was a girl.........Joliemendez

Her Uzi was shattered and her leg broken but her side arm was right there,Cmill looked over to the car and saw Emily watching

Cmill:"Walk away"

Joliemendez:"What ?"

Cmill:"I'm giving you the chance to walk away,there's no way you can pull that gun before i can pull this trigger.......walk away"

Jolie's face turned into a determined fearless glare

Joliemendez:"This is what i do for a livin' mister"

Cmill:"Dyin' ain't much of a livin' kid"

jolie went for her gun.......BANG!!!!.........she slumped over dead

Cmill got back into the car and waved to the chopper to move on

Emily:"Is that girl dead ?"

Cmill:"Yes,if she wasn't she would have tried to hurt you"

Emily:"then i'm glad she's dead"

Cmill turned angrily

Cmill:"DON'T EVER SAY THAT!"

Emily cowered into Kmack

Kmack:"You're scaring her"

Cmill's face softened

Cmill:"I'm sorry Emily,i just don't want you to lose sight of the value of human life and take it as something trivial......some of us have done that over time and it eventually eats away all that is good in you"


They car started up and they continued down the road

POP!!!!!!!!!!

The tyres on their car exploded and NDX couldn't control it as it swerved off the road into a tree
A van pulled out from behind a set of trees across the road from the crash and pulled up next to the car......Cmill was crawling out as Kmack and Emily lay shaken in the back and NDX was slumped over the wheel

Suddenly Cmill felt a sharp pain in his neck and everything started spinning,just as he passed out he made out the figure of a man standing over him with some sort of blow pipe in his mouth...........it was Cinemaman!

To Be Continued

 

[Fran]

Dude, awesome!

 

[Showtime]

Wow...that was one of my favorites. I hope that I make a stunning cameo in one of these puppies someday.