A Superhero I invented

[DeGenerate10]

ok then well this is a Bio and a history I made of him just recently:

Universe--(Does not have one yet)
Real Name--Raymond Jewls. Jr
Aliases--none
Identity--unknown
Occupation--none
Citizenship--Canadian
Place of Birth--St. John, New Brunswick
Known Relatives--Raymond Jewls. Sr (Father), Jessica Jewls(mother), Michael Jewls(brother), Klinton Jewls(brother)
Group Affiliation--(none so far)
Education--Still a highschool student

Height--5'11
Weight--150 lbs
Eyes--Brown
Hair--Black

Powers--Two retractable bone claws at the back of each hand.
Minimum Healing Factor.
Extra sensory allows him to sense other life forms around him, and upcoming danger.

When I see his name I always picture him as being black and not Canadian but that's just me.

 

[donaldthe3rd]

hahahaha never thought of that

 

[OliPhoenixFire]

Lots of canadians are black, you know...

Describe him physically... more than his approximate weight and height.
I'll check here later to see the progress of your interesting character...
Instead of giving away one power that is too similar to Wolverine (because he is too similar...), try to give him something more... I'll try to give you some ideas later... I don't really have time now.

 

[dusk20]

Once again please remember that my characters are all still works in progress. Other than that, enjoy.


Prince, born Prince Erebus, is a member of the superhero team The Slingers.

HISTORY
Albatronia was a small island south of Australia. It was hidden from all forms of detection by use of advanced technology. This same technology is what has allowed the Albatronian’s to live without help from the outside world. Although the outside world knows of Albatronia, they don't know its true location.

In the tenth years under the ruling of King and Queen Erebus (Era-bus), they final gave birth to their son Prince Erebus. From a young age, the Prince was trained in all forms of combat. He was schooled in ways of both Albatronia and the outside world. As he grew into his teens, he Prince was told of the trails. These trails were set to any young prince as a way of training and testing his loyalty to Albatronia. As the Prince reached his twenty-first birthday, the King decided to call him into the Grand Throne Tower.

Once inside, the Prince was put into battle against five Throne Guards. Using every skill and item at his disposal the Prince managed to defeat the five Throne Guards. The King was pleased with his son and took him into the viewing room at the top of the Tower. All of Albatronia was visible and it was in this room that the Prince was told of the coming fate of the outside world. The King had been putting together an army for the past year that would one day invade the outside world.

From birth, the Prince was trained as a warrior and skilled man to lead these attacks. However the army was not yet large enough and the King needed his son to infiltrate to outside world and spy on them. The Prince would be a sleeper-agent. Before leaving Albatronia, the King and Queen handed their son a gift. The gift was something every King passed onto his son upon completion of the trails, a piece of Natevos (Nar-tay-vos) technology. Natevos was a simple orb that would provide the Prince with an unlimited supply of weapons, armor and communications he needed.

With everything set, Prince Erebus waved goodbye to his parents and land, then took off with Natevos in hand.

POWERS/ABILITIES
Prince Erebus is in peak human physical condition. Because he would one day grow to rule the land of Albatronia, Prince Erebus was trained in all forms of both weapon and hand-to-hand combat. Enhanced strength and agility are some of the many traits that Prince Erebus seemed to show (it is thought these may be from daily training) and when mixed with his combat training, he makes a fierce warrior.

Because of his title, Prince Erebus and the Natevos technology appear to have a bonding on a biological level. Starting out as an orb, Prince Erebus has found that the Natevos tech is like that in its beginning stage. As his trek to the outside world continued, Prince Erebus was able to see that the Natevos tech was made to completely bond with him. Now being fused with his DNA, Prince Erebus can willing control the Natevos to form the shape of weapons and armor as he sees fit.

Forming weapons and armor is done by the Natevos ‘bleeding’ out of the pours of Erebus’ skin and taking shape. To his liking, Erebus can form weapons and armor almost immediately. The down side to the Natevos is that prolonged absence from his body will cause it to breakdown into a powdery dust. This breakdown process can take anywhere from two minutes to twenty minutes depending on the amount.

It is yet unknown how long it takes Erebus’ body to replicate the Natevos, but it seems to be an instant action as seen when he forms a bow and arrow.

 

[dusk20]

I havent thought up his details (height, weight and main look) yet, but like i said, a work in progress

 

[donaldthe3rd]

This is Renegades costume and i will later on today put on his look without a costume. So tell me what you think

 

[donaldthe3rd]

This is Renegades costume and i will later on today put on his look without a costume. I did this on my computer. So tell me what you think.

 

[OliPhoenixFire]

He doesn't look very tall! lol

 

[donaldthe3rd]

well he is almost 6 feet tall and he's 14

 

[donaldthe3rd]

Dusk20 your guy seems pretty kool, i like the story, but do you have a picture of him?

 

[donaldthe3rd]

And if anyone would like to see some more of my super heroes I've created just go to www.herocustomz.piczo.com

 

[dusk20]

Dusk20 your guy seems pretty kool, i like the story, but do you have a picture of him?

Thanks mate. Yeah i like the story also, but it seems like i'm changing it every week. MY big problem is......i can't draw for ****. really, i've tried to bring my creations to life by drawing them, but they look like ****.

So if anyone wants to have a go at drawing him, contact me on PM and i'll run you through his details. I'd really like to see a picture of him

 

[donaldthe3rd]

HEY id draw him for ya if ya'd like

 

[donaldthe3rd]

Just give the details and I'll draw him then post it heret:

 

[Hugebear]

Hey dusk20, I like the story for your character and the history. It was different. Sounds like the adventure is about to begin.

 

[dusk20]

Hey dusk20, I like the story for your character and the history. It was different. Sounds like the adventure is about to begin.

Thanks

Yeah it's meant to be part of a larger story that i'd would love to finish off, but it takes alot of time.

 

[donaldthe3rd]

What does Prince Erebus look like? If you gave me some details i would draw him for you then post it.

 

[hippie_hunter]

This is Renegades costume and i will later on today put on his look without a costume. So tell me what you think

Even the costume is a Wolverine rip-off

 

[Hugebear]

Once again please remember that my characters are all still works in progress. Other than that, enjoy.


Prince, born Prince Erebus, is a member of the superhero team The Slingers.

HISTORY
Albatronia was a small island south of Australia. It was hidden from all forms of detection by use of advanced technology. This same technology is what has allowed the Albatronian’s to live without help from the outside world. Although the outside world knows of Albatronia, they don't know its true location.

In the tenth years under the ruling of King and Queen Erebus (Era-bus), they final gave birth to their son Prince Erebus. From a young age, the Prince was trained in all forms of combat. He was schooled in ways of both Albatronia and the outside world. As he grew into his teens, he Prince was told of the trails. These trails were set to any young prince as a way of training and testing his loyalty to Albatronia. As the Prince reached his twenty-first birthday, the King decided to call him into the Grand Throne Tower.

Once inside, the Prince was put into battle against five Throne Guards. Using every skill and item at his disposal the Prince managed to defeat the five Throne Guards. The King was pleased with his son and took him into the viewing room at the top of the Tower. All of Albatronia was visible and it was in this room that the Prince was told of the coming fate of the outside world. The King had been putting together an army for the past year that would one day invade the outside world.

From birth, the Prince was trained as a warrior and skilled man to lead these attacks. However the army was not yet large enough and the King needed his son to infiltrate to outside world and spy on them. The Prince would be a sleeper-agent. Before leaving Albatronia, the King and Queen handed their son a gift. The gift was something every King passed onto his son upon completion of the trails, a piece of Natevos (Nar-tay-vos) technology. Natevos was a simple orb that would provide the Prince with an unlimited supply of weapons, armor and communications he needed.

With everything set, Prince Erebus waved goodbye to his parents and land, then took off with Natevos in hand.

POWERS/ABILITIES
Prince Erebus is in peak human physical condition. Because he would one day grow to rule the land of Albatronia, Prince Erebus was trained in all forms of both weapon and hand-to-hand combat. Enhanced strength and agility are some of the many traits that Prince Erebus seemed to show (it is thought these may be from daily training) and when mixed with his combat training, he makes a fierce warrior.

Because of his title, Prince Erebus and the Natevos technology appear to have a bonding on a biological level. Starting out as an orb, Prince Erebus has found that the Natevos tech is like that in its beginning stage. As his trek to the outside world continued, Prince Erebus was able to see that the Natevos tech was made to completely bond with him. Now being fused with his DNA, Prince Erebus can willing control the Natevos to form the shape of weapons and armor as he sees fit.

Forming weapons and armor is done by the Natevos ‘bleeding’ out of the pours of Erebus’ skin and taking shape. To his liking, Erebus can form weapons and armor almost immediately. The down side to the Natevos is that prolonged absence from his body will cause it to breakdown into a powdery dust. This breakdown process can take anywhere from two minutes to twenty minutes depending on the amount.

It is yet unknown how long it takes Erebus’ body to replicate the Natevos, but it seems to be an instant action as seen when he forms a bow and arrow.

 

[Hugebear]

ok then well this is a Bio and a history I made of him just recently:

Universe--(Does not have one yet)
Real Name--Raymond Jewls. Jr
Aliases--none
Identity--unknown
Occupation--none
Citizenship--Canadian
Place of Birth--St. John, New Brunswick
Known Relatives--Raymond Jewls. Sr (Father), Jessica Jewls(mother), Michael Jewls(brother), Klinton Jewls(brother)
Group Affiliation--(none so far)
Education--Still a highschool student

Height--5'11
Weight--150 lbs
Eyes--Brown
Hair--Black

Powers--Two retractable bone claws at the back of each hand.
Minimum Healing Factor.
Extra sensory allows him to sense other life forms around him, and upcoming danger.



Born and raised in Saint John, New Brunswick of Canada, Raymond Jewls grew up in an average home. Two loving, caring affectionate parents and two other older and younger brothers. While growing up in such a caring home, Raymond grew to understand the difference between right and wrong, and that his actions had their consequences. One day at the school that he attended he found himself in class when a small group of anti-mutant terrorists hijacked the school.
Struck with fear Raymond followed their routine they had practiced for emergencies like like these. Raymond started to fell as if they were all in grave danger, as if his head was going off like a fire alarm. Suddenly the window in the door of the classroom was shattered by bullets and a hand reached in to open the door. The terrorrist took hostages. Raymond stood up over his terrified peers and tried his best to convince the man to let them live. Uncaring of what he had to say the terrorist shot Raymond in the head.
This is when Raymond's powers first appeared. Activated by his anger, and need to save his peers. Slowly but surely the bullet gauged deep within his head was pushed out by his slow healing factor. Raymond arose not thinking of what had just happened and without a thought he lept out towards the killer. Raymond roared in pain as two bone claws on each hand tore through his flesh and sunk into the terrorist's chest.
The screams of pain and horror drew the rest of the group of terrorists towards Raymond. Raymond then again without a thought and choice slaughtered them. His claws then retracted back into his forearms and what was done, was done. The students his classroom could only watch as Raymond forced himself painfully out of the school and into the nearby forest.
From there he watched the police, ambulance and news crews arrive. Raymond still aching with the pains and horrific memories of what had happened, his curiosity called him closer to the news crews, ambulance and police. But it only brought him pain to see the ambulance being filled with injured and killed students. Now Raymond had blamed himself for what had happened. Raymond disgusted by this he drove himself further into the wilderness. He started to smell and hear things that he couldn't understand. He reached a peak of a hill where he could see the city below him, but now he could see far out past the horizon, far better than his sight before. Not understanding what was happening to him, he still felt fill filled with blame, pain, regret and loss, Raymond decided to use this power he weilded for a better use to make sure that this would not happen again. So he took on the name Renegade and set forth on his adventure that has yet to be seen.

tell me what you think of it so far and if you wnat to see a picture of his costume then go to www.Marvel-comics.piczo.com and at the bottom of the pages it will say Renegade. Thanks.

 

[Hugebear]

I like the stories, so I made this copies just in case either of you make any chances.

 

[dusk20]

What does Prince Erebus look like? If you gave me some details i would draw him for you then post it.

Okay

He is 5’10” and a very athletic body and look. Has blue eyes and shoulder length dark brown hair that is tied back.

His clothing looks like a cross between medieval armour with a sleek new modern twist. Because Albatronia is all based on advanced alien technology, everything they wear must look almost like a cross between medieval/sleek/advance/sci-fi.

That pretty much all.

Reading back on all that, I guess I really need some more thought about his look don’t I?

 

[donaldthe3rd]

How's this for a first draft drawing of Prince Erebus?

 

[hippie_hunter]

 

[Sloth7d]

Id like to see what other people have come up with

Man, I've come up with a whole universe of heroes and villains. But I don't want to post them here, because they aren't copywritten and hopefully I plan to use them.