A Superhero I invented

[WeaponZ2]

Wait. Wait. Wait. So what your saying is that this clawed Canadian superhero is a rip off of this "Wolverine" character you keep going on about.....I just don't see it.

 

[hippie_hunter]

Wait. Wait. Wait. So what your saying is that this clawed Canadian superhero is a rip off of this "Wolverine" character you keep going on about.....I just don't see it.

 

[hippie_hunter]

To beleive with a mere Paint program I can do all this

 

[donaldthe3rd]

You know what. Your sick. How could anyone go to such an extent to try to humiliate, to try and make someone feel like a piece of crap. Yes his mask is "similar" to Wolverine's mask, but so is Demolitionman's mask, Grand Director's mask, Horus's helmet, and Lamprey's mask. As for his costume, I don't know how it's anywheres close to Wolverine. And as for his powers their not even Wolverine's powers, because if you haven't noticed, there is not any other character owned by Marvel, DC or any other company that has 2 claws. And for the record Wolverine has 3 not 2. So before you go putting people down, especially a 15 year old kid stop and think about who's feelings you might be hurting.

 

[Sloth7d]

I'm trying as hard as heck not to lmao.

 

[donaldthe3rd]

Powers Wolverine is a mutant who possesses the ability to regenerate damaged or destroyed areas of his cellular structure at a rate far greater than that of an ordinary human. The speed at which this healing factor works varies in direct proportion with the severity of the damage Wolverine suffers. For example, he can fully recover from an ordinary gunshot wound in a non-vital area of his body within minutes, but it took him almost two months to fully recover from injuries sustained in a duel with Lord Shingen, which included one from a sword that went all the way through his trunk. Wolverine’s natural healing also affords him virtual immunity to poisons and most drugs, as well as an enhanced resistance to diseases. For example, it is nearly impossible for him to become intoxicated from drinking alcohol. He also has a limited immunity to the fatigue poisons generated by bodily activity, and hence he has greater endurance than an ordinary human. His agility and reflexes are similarly enhanced.
In addition, Wolverine’s healing factor provides him with an extended lifespan by slowing the effects of the aging process. Although over a century old, Wolverine is as healthy and physically fit as a man in his prime.
Wolverine also possesses superhumanly acute senses, making him capable of seeing things at a maximum distance greater than a normal human’s. His hearing is enhanced in a similar manner, and he is able to recognize people and objects by scent, even if that person or object is hidden. Wolverine can use these enhanced senses to track any creature with an impressive degree of success.
Wolverine’s skeleton includes six retractable one-foot long bone claws, three in each arm, that are housed beneath the skin and muscle of his forearms. Wolverine can, at will, release these slightly curved claws through his skin beneath the knuckles on each hand. The skin between the knuckles tears and bleeds, but the blood loss is quickly halted by his healing factor. Wolverine can unsheathe any number of his claws at once, although he must keep his wrists straight at the moment his claws shoot from his forearms into his hands. When unsheathed, the claws are fully within his hands, and thus Wolverine can still bend his wrists. The claws are naturally sharp and tougher than that of normal human bone structure, allowing Wolverine to cut through most types of flesh and natural materials.
Despite the extent of his healing factor, Wolverine is not immortal. If the injuries are extensive enough, especially if they result in the loss of vital organs, large amounts of blood, and/or loss of physical form, such as having flesh burned away by fire or acid, Wolverine can die.

 

[donaldthe3rd]

Im sorry if i seem to be nagging but i really tried to make a superhero that i could call my own and for someone who took no pain into putting me down, i find offensive and hurtful.

 

[Sloth7d]

Powers Wolverine is a mutant who possesses the ability to regenerate damaged or destroyed areas of his cellular structure at a rate far greater than that of an ordinary human. The speed at which this healing factor works varies in direct proportion with the severity of the damage Wolverine suffers. For example, he can fully recover from an ordinary gunshot wound in a non-vital area of his body within minutes, but it took him almost two months to fully recover from injuries sustained in a duel with Lord Shingen, which included one from a sword that went all the way through his trunk. Wolverine’s natural healing also affords him virtual immunity to poisons and most drugs, as well as an enhanced resistance to diseases. For example, it is nearly impossible for him to become intoxicated from drinking alcohol. He also has a limited immunity to the fatigue poisons generated by bodily activity, and hence he has greater endurance than an ordinary human. His agility and reflexes are similarly enhanced.
In addition, Wolverine’s healing factor provides him with an extended lifespan by slowing the effects of the aging process. Although over a century old, Wolverine is as healthy and physically fit as a man in his prime.
Wolverine also possesses superhumanly acute senses, making him capable of seeing things at a maximum distance greater than a normal human’s. His hearing is enhanced in a similar manner, and he is able to recognize people and objects by scent, even if that person or object is hidden. Wolverine can use these enhanced senses to track any creature with an impressive degree of success.
Wolverine’s skeleton includes six retractable one-foot long bone claws, three in each arm, that are housed beneath the skin and muscle of his forearms. Wolverine can, at will, release these slightly curved claws through his skin beneath the knuckles on each hand. The skin between the knuckles tears and bleeds, but the blood loss is quickly halted by his healing factor. Wolverine can unsheathe any number of his claws at once, although he must keep his wrists straight at the moment his claws shoot from his forearms into his hands. When unsheathed, the claws are fully within his hands, and thus Wolverine can still bend his wrists. The claws are naturally sharp and tougher than that of normal human bone structure, allowing Wolverine to cut through most types of flesh and natural materials.
Despite the extent of his healing factor, Wolverine is not immortal. If the injuries are extensive enough, especially if they result in the loss of vital organs, large amounts of blood, and/or loss of physical form, such as having flesh burned away by fire or acid, Wolverine can die.

Wow, that explanation is so outdated. Obviously you missed the issue where wolverine regenerated from a skeleton. I mean just to let you know.

 

[donaldthe3rd]

No i read that one, i just got it from the marvel website

 

[donaldthe3rd]

No matter anyways I still think Renegade as one of my favorites that I have created and no matter how much you try and negatively criticize my character it's probably better than anything you could come up with.

 

[WeaponZ2]

Im sorry if i seem to be nagging but i really tried to make a superhero that i could call my own and for someone who took no pain into putting me down, i find offensive and hurtful.

Yeah. I get it. But your not thinking outside the box. Your not being creative enough. The superheros your creating arn't your own. They are massive rip offs.
If you want to write about a character like Wolverine then...write about Wolverine don't insult the creators by ripping them off. And don't humiliate yourself by trying to pass off the rip offs as your own.

 

[donaldthe3rd]

Well right now I'm working on him so that he can be his own character and not some rip off of Wolverine. So when I'm done I'll post it.

 

[C. Lee]

Im sorry if i seem to be nagging but i really tried to make a superhero that i could call my own and for someone who took no pain into putting me down, i find offensive and hurtful.

First.... your character is very derivative of Wolverine. Making minor changes to an existing character does not make it your own.

Second....you really need to learn to take criticism. I've seen worse comments made about people's art. If you plan on doing work like this in the future...you will have to listen to many comments about your work that you don't like...it's part of the game.

 

[EXCELSIOR]

Granted,
Whenever anyone posts artwork (good or bad), it is open to critique... that is to be expected... it goes with the territory!

But lets be fair here, nit-picking a drawing to the point of doing detailed break downs to illustrate where the influences came from is stooping pretty low... not to mention a huge waste of time that could be spent giving a little constructive criticism...

Lets all ease up a bit – OK!

donaldthe3rd,
You may want to check out the FAN ART threads for posting your artwork!

 

[dusk20]

Come on guys, give the guy a break. At least he is brave enough to post his ideas on the forum.

Donald, good stuff and hope you can post more story ideas.

Keep me posted by PM if this thread gets too heavy.

 

[donaldthe3rd]

Thanks that helps me out so now I think I'll try once more and make him his own and if it doesnt work then make up a different character.

 

[Hugebear]

I hope you don't get discouraged, Donaldthe3rd, you do have great ideas. Sometimes creating something really good takes more time and many attempts.
May I suggest you continue working on the story, then later work on the costume?

 

[donaldthe3rd]

Yeah I have been doing him over so many times but he is getting better so soon i hope to post him back here.

 

[dusk20]

Yeah I have been doing him over so many times but he is getting better so soon i hope to post him back here.

Can't wait to read it mate.

However I still like the way he was done before...i can see where you've borrowed from Wolverine, but who hasn't done that?

 

[donaldthe3rd]

While it's taking me forever to do Renegade over, I'm gonna post another guy that I've made but this guy is a Super Villan instead of a Super Hero.

Real Name--Damian Cortez
Aliases--None
Identity--Known to few
Occupation--Member of the Operation 6 Corperation
Citizenship--Unknown
Place of Birth--Unknown
Known Relatives--None
Group Affiliation--Operation 6, The Dark Angels
Education--Unknown

Powers--Nightmare has telepathic and telekinetic powers beyond any comprehension. One of the most powerful minds known to man, he is so powerful that he can even create life with his bare hands. Nearly immune to any means of injury. Can absorb the life out of any lifeform around him.

Abilities--Extremely high IQ. Fluent in almost any language on Earth. Highly skilled swordsman.

The place of his birth is unknown, but for the youth Damian Cortez he was even unsure about his past. He found out at a young age that he could speak fluent in almost any language that he met. Growing up he found him self in Berlin, Germany where he met and befriended Nikolai Vildelchi (who would later on become known as Genocide). (They worked together for many years stealing from the local stores and market places. As the years went by and the two continued their lives of thieving, Damian and Nikolai were walking back to their secret home in an abandoned building one nigh along the dark street with their day's stolen goods, when they were attacked by a leech mob who were enraged by having their goods stolen from them for so long. They chased the boys into an alleyway where there was no escape. The crazed mob stepped closer to the boys, readying their weapons of choice. One man lept out and cut open Damians arm with a knife. The man and a few others suddenly were thrown almost by an invisible force into the wall then burst into pieces that almost resembled dust. This dust then flew over to Damian and healed him of his wounds. The rest of the mob then attacked unthinkingly at them again but from where Nikolai was standing a strange gas seemed to flow from his body. This gas found its way to their attackers and killed them instantly, but had almost no affect on Damian. The two boys sat their slighlty frightened and dumb founded at what had happened. It soon came to their minds later on in their juvinial years that they had been given powers of a great meaning. Though now already on the path for danger, they continued their lives of crime but now with a new deadly power was wielded within themselves. Damian to learn more about his telekentic and telepathic powers, and how he could heal himself from others life. Nikolai also studied how he could release a toxic gas from the pores in his skin and inject his victims with a poisin. The two joined the German army when leaning on their early adulthood and were sent immediatly to Alaska on a secret spy mission. On coming to Alaska their air plane was shot down and they were taken hostage. Their captors were not all American, as some spoke in languages of both German, Russian and Japanese. Their captors then introduced themselves to Damian and Nikolai as Operation 6. They were a biblical group who were almost satanic. They told Damian and Nikolai of an ancient prophecy that told of 3 beings with great power each whaving a number would conquer the world and bring peace. This number was 6. They later on for months kept them as their hostages and studied them like lab rats). As the months passed Damian and Nikolai witnessed hundreds of other mutants before him die in experimentation. One day they came for Damian, it was now his turn to be experimented on. They injected many needles of an antidote that put him to sleep for hours. They studied him and worked on his body in an extremely large tank filled with antibiotics and water. Hours passed after their sick and twisted experiments ended and then came a moment of silence as the tank that held Damian's sleeping body was emptied and layed out on a large metalic table where he was fitted in a metal armor suit. The table rose upwards for all to see. He was released of his bonds to the table ant stepped forward where his experimenters thought to themselves if he was sufficient. To prove himself he used his telekinetic powers to burst a nearby person into pieces of dust. They then found the first part to their goal. And from that day on he was dubbed Nightmare. Nightmares number is 222.

The meaning of the number 222, has to do with 2 other super villains that i will post here soon.

 

[dusk20]

I like that character. He has total power...and for once, he uses it.

I've always wanted someone like him in comics. Most times they create a character that is too strong and put these ****ty limits on them.

Once again, good stuff

 

[donaldthe3rd]

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[donaldthe3rd]

Here's the next villian I've been working on. The next villain I make will have a significant role to play in my comics. If you know a little about the bible and stuff like that then you'll understand why they have a number, such as "222", or "444". Its all part of a big event I'm making. I hope to post its summarized version here later on. So lets here some feedback on this guy:

Real Name--Nikolai Vildelchi
Aliases--Black Plague, Nicholas
Occupation--Crime Underworld ruler, Member of Operation 6
Identity--Known to few
Citizenship--German
Place of Birth--Berlin, Germany
Known Relatives--Nikolai Vildelchi Jr(son, aka DeathStrike), Josepha Vildelchi(son, aka Frostbite), Katarine Vildelchi(daughter, aka Gorgon)
Group Affiliation--Operation 6, The Dark Angels
Education--Unknown

Powers--When powers are in use he is able of causing victims to die almost instantly by injecting them with a fatal venom through the needle-like claws at the end of each finger. This toxin can also come in gaseous form, exiting the pores in his skin and spread for a large radius. Immune to all poisons.

Abilities--A near genius IQ, highly trained in martial arts and other self defense. An accomplished scientist and inventor.
Born and raised in Berlin, Germany, Nikolai Vildelchi saw first hand what the holocaust's effect was on the world of the Jews around him and as well as himself and his family. Nikolai was taken at an extremely young age to a concentration camp where he was imprisoned for a short while as his mother saved him from that hell bound place, by finding a small opening in the long wire fence that surrounded the camp. He fled undetected into the forest and soon found himself in the city of Berlin. There he found and befriended another young boy named Damian Cortez. They worked together for many years stealing from the local stores and market places. As the years went by and the two continued their lives of thieving, Damian and Nikolai were walking back to their secret home in an abandoned building one nigh along the dark street with their day's stolen goods, when they were attacked by a leech mob who were enraged by having their goods stolen from them for so long. They chased the boys into an alleyway where there was no escape. The crazed mob stepped closer to the boys, readying their weapons of choice. One man leapt out and cut open Damians arm with a knife. The man and a few others suddenly were thrown almost by an invisible force into the wall then burst into pieces that almost resembled dust. This dust then flew over to Damian and healed him of his wounds. The rest of the mob then attacked unthinkingly at them again but from where Nikolai was standing a strange gas seemed to flow from his body. This gas found its way to their attackers and killed them instantly, but had almost no affect on Damian. The two boys sat their slightly frightened and dumb founded at what had happened. It soon came to their minds later on in their juvenile years that they had been given powers of a great meaning. Though now already on the path for danger, they continued their lives of crime but now with a new deadly power was wielded within themselves. Damian to learn more about his telekinetic and telepathic powers, and how he could heal himself from others life. Nikolai also studied how he could release a toxic gas from the pores in his skin and inject his victims with a poison. The two joined the German army when leaning on their early adulthood and were sent immediately to Alaska on a secret spy mission. On coming to Alaska their air plane was shot down and they were taken hostage. Their captors were not all American, as some spoke in languages of both German, Russian and Japanese. Their captors then introduced themselves to Damian and Nikolai as Operation 6. They were a biblical group who were almost satanic. They told Damian and Nikolai of an ancient prophecy that told of 3 beings with great power each having a number would conquer the world and bring peace. They later on for months kept them as their hostages and studied them like lab rats. As the months passed they witnessed the other mutants who had been captured before them be taken away to be experimented on. One day they had came for Damian, and now Nikolai felt alone once again in the world. Again and again others were experimented on and never had he seen of Damian yet. Until one day when his captors came for him to be the next in line for experimenting on. He gave no resistance knowing that there would be no point to fight against them and soon he to just like his friend before him found himself being drugged into sleep and put into a tank of water and chemicals. From his flesh were tubes that few him with a variety of chemicals. Needles on tubes as well were stuck far into him. Hours had passed and soon once again came their moment to check to see if this had been a failed experiment or their next key to achieving their goal. They emptied the tank holding Nikolai and laid him along the same table that Damian was on and soon he rose along with the table upwards to the viewing crowd. They brought him into a room that was completely sealed, but had a small window for viewing. They placed Nikolai in the center of the room and forced in some of the other mutants that they had captured before. Nikolai then released without warning his toxic gas which spreaded quickly throughout the room and immediately killed the others around him. Please with what they had, they fitted him with a full black suit. No sooner had he been fitted with his uniform was he named Genocide. Genocide's number is 444.

 

[dusk20]

It has been kind of dead in here lately. Glad you're still posting Donald.

And i really like your ideas.

 

[donaldthe3rd]

Thanks, and i hope it livens up in here soon. I'd like to see some other peoples creations, both villain and hero. But good stuff as well Dusk20