chaseter said:
I think Cylcops should have been there too...but that is all I agree with. He should have been trying to get to her...Jean kills him. She realizes what she has done and turns back into good Jean...the debris around her begins to drop. She cries and the X-Men realize now is the time to stop her. Storm and Beast try but she knocks them back and begins to turn into Phoenix again. This is when Logan knows he must do it as she begins to turn evil again. But I liked the final battle overall. The only major complaint I have is the lack of Angel fighting.
Nah, it shouldn't have even gone down like that.
Here's how it should have played out, in my opinion, from the very beginning.
Scott hears Jean's voice, he goes to Alkali Lake. She rises, they meet. She begins using her powers to hold back his optic blasts. This awesome display of power unleashes the Phoenix personality, and it takes over. In a huge blast of telekinetic engery, both Jean and Scott are sent flying, and knocked unconcious.
Wolverine and Storm arrive at the lake. Wolverine finds Scott's glasses, and goes looking for him. He finds him, but is distracted by a distress call from Storm. He runs over, and he finds Jean lying there. They take both Scott and Jean back to the mansion.
Xavier explains that he placed the psychic blocks in her mind at a young age to help control her powers. The blocks were destroyed during the Liberty Island incident, by Magneto's machine. Her "death", which all but obliterated her conciousness, allowed a dormant alter ego to surface, one created during Xavier's sessions, one created because he was isolating her powers from her, a personality of selfishness, becoming consumed by this absolute power that she had. The display of power unleashed that personality, and caused both Jean and Scott to become injured.
Scott is unconcious throughout the movie, clinging on for dear life. The "real" Jean is devestated that she did something that could lead to Scott's death, and we have our infirmary scene as normal. The movie progresses just as it does, like normal.
Scott comes out of his coma while Wolverine is off searching for Jean (nice character moment oppourtunity between Scott and Ororo to show their bond, and a chance for discussion to show that Ororo hasn't given up on Jean). When Wolverine comes back, after finding Jean, and learning where Magneto is going, Scott insists on going.
Storm: Scott, you watched Jean die before your very eyes. Her presence has been haunting you since her death, and you watched her resurrect before your very eyes. And now, she's almost killed you. You are in no shape, physically, or emotionally, to go into battle and confront Jean. Scott, stay here. I can lead the team.
Cyclops: No, Storm. I lost Jean once. I'm not losing her again. I'm still the leader of the X-Men, and I'm not giving up on them. I'm not giving up on Xavier's dream. And I'm damn well not giving up on Jean. I'm going to Alcatraz with you, Storm.
Storm: Okay, let's suit up.
(Side note: Angel sees the conversation, overhears about the attack on Alcatraz, and sneaks down to the subbasement. In the subbasement, the interaction goes like this:
Cyclops, Storm, Wolverine, and Beast, walk out of the War Room, heading down the hall towards the X-Jet Hangar
Beast: I don't believe this once fit me.
Wolverine:If Magneto gets ahold of that cure, there'll be no stopping him.
Beast: Can you estimate how many he has?
Wolverine: An army, and Jean.
Beast: His powers have limits, her's do not.
Suited up, Iceman, Kitty Pryde, and Colossus approach Cyclops, Storm, Wolverine, and Beast
Wolverine:Just what do you think you're doing, kid?
Iceman: We're going with you.
Wolverine: This isn't a game, kid. This isn't some Danger Room simulation. This is the real deal. Magneto's got an army out there. You go to war, you might not come home. She might not come home. You ready for that?
Iceman: We're not kids anymore.
Cyclops: Look, we've lost the professor, and if we don't fight now, everything he stood for will die with him. I'm not going to let that happen. Are you?
Wolverine glances Cyclops
Cyclops: We stand together. X-Men. All of us.
Wolverine: Let's go.
Enter Angel from the elevator
Angel: Not without me.
Wolverine: You know what you're getting yourself into, kid?
Angel: My father is on Alcatraz. I'm not just going to sit by while he's caught in the middle of a war. One way or another, I'm going to Alcatraz. But with you guys, it will be a lot easier.
Cyclops: Storm, get him a uniform.
All suited up, the X-Men: Cyclops, Storm, Wolverine, Beast, Iceman, Colossus, Kitty Pryde, and Angel, all head into the hanger, and onto the X-Jet)
The rest of the film plays out as it did in the real film. The only difference, there's some optic blasts, and some punches from a winged man, in the final battle that weren't there.
At the end of the final battle, the ground troops come over the ridge and start firing onto the field of battle. The Phoenix is unleashed, and the Phoenix rises. EVERYTHING from this point on, is exactly the same, only with Cyclops in place of Wolverine.
In the midst of destruction caused by Phoenix...
Cyclops: Storm, get everyone out of here!
Storm: Scott, what about you?
Cyclops: I'm the only one that can stop her. Don't worry about me, Storm. GO!
Wolverine: Good luck, slim.
Storm flies off, gathering up the X-Men and leading them to the X-Jet (editor's note:

The X-Jet doesn't blow up amongst the destruction caused by Phoenix)
Cyclops: (Looking up at Jean) JEAN!
The destruction caused by Phoenix increases. The waters from San Francisco Bay begin to rise around Alcatraz Island. In the middle of it all, Cyclops looks around at all the destruction being caused by the woman he loves. He turns around to face her, fire buring all around her from the destruction caused of her own device. He looks up at her, and begins heading towards her. Phoenix fights him off, with waves of telekinetic blasts, but he keeps marching up towards her.
Cyclops: Jean! I know you're still there!
Phoenix continues the onslaught of telekinetic waves, and he continues marching up towards her, until he finall reaches her.
Phoenix: Fool, you would die for them?
Cyclops: No! Not for them... for you.
Jean begins to slowly regain control.
Cyclops: For you!
Jean, becoming herself again...
Jean: Scott...
Cyclops: Jean.
Jean: Please... save me.
Cyclops: (A tear coming down from behind his visor) I love you.
Cyclops pulls off his visor, but his eyes are closed. Another tear comes from behind his closed eyes, and he grabs Jean and holds her in his arms.
Cyclops: I love you.
Cyclops opens his eyes. View switches to an overhead view, where an enormous red wave of optic blast comes from Scott's eyes. The wave ends, and the camera switches to a closeup of Scott, falling to his knees, now fully crying. He is holding Jean's lifeless body in his arms.
The camera pulls away to a shot from a distance of Alcatraz Island, as the waters begin to fall back down into the Bay.
The camera again shows Scott on his knees, with his eyes closed, with Jean's body in his arms, crying over what just transpired. He pulls Jean's body closer to his, and kisses her on the forehead.
The camera zooms away from Alcatraz Island, showing the night sky, and the San Francisco skyline in the background. Water from the Bay still falls like rain.
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Not to toot my own horn, but GOD DAMN I know how to write X-Men
