Then we'd go disco dancing and do some blow.
I know I'm massively off topic, but I laughed at this. Hard. This reminded me of a quip in the Hobgoblins episode of Mystery Science Theatre 3,000
[A bunch of painfully 80s teenagers are dancing in the saddest house party ever]
Mike (singing): It's the 80s yea! Gonna do lots of coke and vote for Ronald Regan.
Ahem on topic now:
Overall, as opinions are going this way and that, I felt that this story had potential, but it's being tackled wrong. I'm incredibly biased, but I don't think the idea me and Moraldeficiency tossed around was all that bad. I mean if they wanted to do a chase and endurance arc, I think certain things could have been better done. Overall, I just feel like we haven't done much. Though the previews or "pissed silent serious" Pete do look interesting, we'll have to see how that plays out today.
I'm still pretty surprised they didn't have anyone help out; BlackCat, Avenger #2152aa, Human Torch, or in what I think would be a rather interesting surprise; Anti-Venom.
Now before you all drop the bus on me (Greyhound specifically, not a typical Nun & Innocent school kid filled bus), I'm not on an Anti-Venom trip. (Well I sorta have been, but this idea could work)
IDEA MODE:
Say we have Brock and Jenna doing their thing when they notice the streets are a buzz with activity. Jenna makes a comment that they've been busting their humps in the blistering heat for nothing as today has been quiet, so they decide to duck into a coffee shop. Suddenly they notice all the inhabitants in a trance-like gaze staring at the TV sets. Brock walks up to a beared fellow who's shaking his head in concern; he's so fixated on what he's viewing that he's unknowingly spilled his expensive latte.
"'Scuse me buddy, but what's going on?"
"Just get outta bed pal? Spider-man's hauling ass all over the city with a kid in tow!
All the crazies are after him for some reason, and no one's showed up to help ol' webhead. Now me, I don't buy the crap that Jameson guy spouts out...I mean would you trust a guy with a 'stache like....that?"
Suddenly he turns around and notices Brock gone. We soon see Spider-Man dispatching the latest goons and narrowly escaping. He ducks into an alley looking for a new path.
Basically from here, he notices his powers shorting out, and Brock steps in, still eager to earn ol' Pete's trust. Pete,
not wanting to 1, give Brock the baby and 2, inform him of the power shorting side effect, remembers Brock impersonated him in New Ways to Die and suggests Brock divert attention for a bit while he gets the baby to safety. Brock makes a comment about being thrown under the bus, and Spidey makes a quip that this is for everything (from all the beat downs, to spawning Carnage and scaring his wife) Brock blankly questions him getting married. Spidey tells toothy to get going. (Okay, the wife part is stupid on my part, but I just thought it sounded funnier in my head)
Anyways, Brock helps settle things down for a bit, but Doc Ock planned for a potential sudden ally. "Heroes always have a knack for miraculous coincidences...I will not allow for dumb luck to position the arachnid alongside an ally for long." He sends out other agents, one of which is the Gargan faced Gargan-headded Mac. (His inclusion is to tie him into his reversion back to ol' Scorpy for Big Time and maybe to tie into the Carnage special if it isn't crap??? Yea I dunno about that...)
Of course, somehow Brock screws up when Gargan is there and the other peeps realize that Brock was Spidey. The other special squad is now fighting Spidey. (who has now managed to hole the baby up in a hospital and sneak away, but not before pulling another switcheroo; at the hospital, he managed to find sympathetic people there who decide to help him, he also meets a little girl who is a
HUGE Spidey fan, and gives him her doll. He wraps it up as a decoy and continues to fight AWAY (but not far enough so he can keep tabs on the hospital) <---I feel this is important; showing more people coming together to believe in Spidey, but since it's a bit lengthy, it's told partially in flashback snippets during his fight with the current ugiles.
Brock and Gargan aren't really featured, but their main struggle could be covered in that one-shot that was supposed to happen forever ago or it could be retold in Big Time if time is short.
Eventually Doc Ock himself shows up after Spidey is getting drained (in a similar manner to the wearing down of Batman in Knight Fall, but in a slightly sped up manner) after the gauntlet is thrown down over and over again. A beaten and bloody Spidey loses the baby to Ock in the way we posted about a bit ago, then you have some wacky reason for the heroes not showing up and the previously mentioned lead ins to his new status are followed through. (I didn't really feel like re typing what me and MD posted in the previous page)
While my idea isn't the best, and a bit controversial due to the inclusion of Brock, I think it works a bit here and there. Now, I could be seen as a Brock fanboy for including him, but I think he works for the sole reason that he can, as an ally, shape shift, thus allowing Spidey to get precious moments away from the madness, to get the baby safe and distract and defeat the baddies. But of course, Ock being desperate, eventually counters Pete and gets the baby for story purposes, and this leads to bigger things eventually. I don't know how I'd go about it, but my inclusion of Gargan was to divert Brock and not have him take away too much attention, but set up for other things. Another factor of dealing with their grudge here is because, Carnage is coming back and I'm unsure of how much of a push the new incarnation may get. I was thinking Brock either seriously BLaRgHs up the symbiote or kills it; either way, the effect is enough, via psychic scream, to some how give the Carnage symbiote in space that final push to return to Earth (how this will happen I have no IDEA since re-entry would toast it, unless it's bonded to something offering it protection, or frozen in some rocky....rock...rockness. I don't know. No one's accused me of being a brilliant writer, so I'm forgetting that.
Anyways, sorry for the uber long post. It's just that whenever I have to writer a paper, I always get storyline ideas or "How I would fix this" moments.