A Superhero I invented

[dusk20]

Well thank you very much donaldthe3rd...but i don't think anyone else is gonna post in here anytime soon.

 

[dusk20]

Hey if you don't mind donald, I've got another character i'm working on, maybe in the next few days i'll post it on here.

 

[donaldthe3rd]

sure go right ahead. this thred is for anyone who wants to post their creation of super heroes and villains.

 

[dusk20]

On second thought Donald, i'll have to wait until next week. I'm trying to fix up a few problems with the characters background.

 

[donaldthe3rd]

no prblm, take as long as you need

 

[donaldthe3rd]

I know its been long since the discussion on my character "the Hornet", and ive been tweaking up on some stuff and have come to realize that he needs a villain. Iv been finding it quite difficult to think of a villain for him. I hope anyone can make suggestions or ideas for a villain(s) suitable for this hero. thanks.

 

[dusk20]

This is my next character. Enjoy and be warned that i'm still tinkering with his history.


Soras, born Ji, is a member of the superhero team The Slingers.

HISTORY
Ji was a simple man who worked his land and was married to his beautiful wife Narhi. Life was good until Ji was asked by his fellow Nolis Warriors to come back into battle and fight against the God Keeper.

The God Keeper was a man who was leading his army to defeat the Elder Gods and reclaim his place above the simple men. While the Nolis Warriors easily took down the army, God Keeper proved a much greater challenge. Within days of the battle, the Nolis Warriors were down only twenty men.

Ji devised a plan to take down God Keeper, and during the plan, another seventeen Nolis Warriors were killed. Ji was beaten and broken at the hands of God Keeper but with a final swing, he managed to make contact.

The two Nolis Warriors watched as Ji impaled God Keeper with the enemy’s own weapon. Ji was then thrown off the cliff, and God Keeper died, but not before yelling to the Elder Gods. As his body was about to hit the rocks below, Ji begged the Elder Gods for help saying he had protected them from God Keeper.

The two Nolis Warriors walked toward the edge of the cliff to see the dead body of their friend. As they leaned over, Ji pulled himself over the cliff and stood up. His body was perfect and damage free. He smiled to the Nolis Warriors and then watched as an unseen force killed them in front of him.

Ji ran away from the area and finally made it back into the arms of Narhi. They kissed each other and soon Ji went back to working his land. As all seemed back to normal, Ji was woken up one night, not in his bed, but in the lands he worked on. Ji ran back to his home to see it burning in flames. Narhi was dead and the whole village was burning to the ground. Ji once again begged to the Elder Gods.

The flames continued with even greater fury as Ji was confront by an Elder God. The Elder Gods had told Ji that the only way to save his life was to serve the Elder Gods as their Soras Warrior. And as their Soras Warrior, Ji could have no name, family, or purpose other than serving the Elder Gods.

Ji broke this when he chose to return to his family, and as a result, the Elder Gods took everything that made him who he was. Ji then denounced his birth name and took up the title Soras. Because the Elder Gods are mystical people, they don’t exist on the physical world, but rather in the side world. For this reason, Soras is their servant who lives only to protect the Elder Gods.

POWERS/ABILITIES
As a servant to the Elder Gods, Soras is blessed with the greatest power ever wielded by man, the power of the Gods. Because the Elder Gods are many, Soras can tap into any one of their abilities at any time and harness it through his body.

Soras is a man with little to no limitations on what he can achieve with his mighty powers. With the Elder Gods behind him, Soras could fight off entire armies while powering through a thunderous wave. Whenever Soras needs, he can harness the power of a God and give himself abilities far greater than ever before. Also his powers, however strong they may be, are only as strong as Soras’ own will to wield them.

Soras is, what some would consider, a God. He has lived for hundreds of years and seen the world change and shape itself into the world it is today. The only problem is that Soras can never have a life for himself. He is forever a servant to the Elder Gods, and nothing can change that.

 

[Mrh7448]

ok then well this is a Bio and a history I made of him just recently:

Universe--(Does not have one yet)
Real Name--Raymond Jewls. Jr
Aliases--none
Identity--unknown
Occupation--none
Citizenship--Canadian
Place of Birth--St. John, New Brunswick
Known Relatives--Raymond Jewls. Sr (Father), Jessica Jewls(mother), Michael Jewls(brother), Klinton Jewls(brother)
Group Affiliation--(none so far)
Education--Still a highschool student

Height--5'11
Weight--150 lbs
Eyes--Brown
Hair--Black

Powers--Two retractable bone claws at the back of each hand.
Minimum Healing Factor.
Extra sensory allows him to sense other life forms around him, and upcoming danger.



Born and raised in Saint John, New Brunswick of Canada, Raymond Jewls grew up in an average home. Two loving, caring affectionate parents and two other older and younger brothers. While growing up in such a caring home, Raymond grew to understand the difference between right and wrong, and that his actions had their consequences. One day at the school that he attended he found himself in class when a small group of anti-mutant terrorists hijacked the school.
Struck with fear Raymond followed their routine they had practiced for emergencies like like these. Raymond started to fell as if they were all in grave danger, as if his head was going off like a fire alarm. Suddenly the window in the door of the classroom was shattered by bullets and a hand reached in to open the door. The terrorrist took hostages. Raymond stood up over his terrified peers and tried his best to convince the man to let them live. Uncaring of what he had to say the terrorist shot Raymond in the head.
This is when Raymond's powers first appeared. Activated by his anger, and need to save his peers. Slowly but surely the bullet gauged deep within his head was pushed out by his slow healing factor. Raymond arose not thinking of what had just happened and without a thought he lept out towards the killer. Raymond roared in pain as two bone claws on each hand tore through his flesh and sunk into the terrorist's chest.
The screams of pain and horror drew the rest of the group of terrorists towards Raymond. Raymond then again without a thought and choice slaughtered them. His claws then retracted back into his forearms and what was done, was done. The students his classroom could only watch as Raymond forced himself painfully out of the school and into the nearby forest.
From there he watched the police, ambulance and news crews arrive. Raymond still aching with the pains and horrific memories of what had happened, his curiosity called him closer to the news crews, ambulance and police. But it only brought him pain to see the ambulance being filled with injured and killed students. Now Raymond had blamed himself for what had happened. Raymond disgusted by this he drove himself further into the wilderness. He started to smell and hear things that he couldn't understand. He reached a peak of a hill where he could see the city below him, but now he could see far out past the horizon, far better than his sight before. Not understanding what was happening to him, he still felt fill filled with blame, pain, regret and loss, Raymond decided to use this power he weilded for a better use to make sure that this would not happen again. So he took on the name Renegade and set forth on his adventure that has yet to be seen.

tell me what you think of it so far and if you wnat to see a picture of his costume then go to www.Marvel-comics.piczo.com and at the bottom of the pages it will say Renegade. Thanks.

This is a lot like Wolverine. I really think you need to push yourself with this character make more alterations to the powers maybe to the history. The powers are the basically the same and the history has strong similarities. Causing a death, running into the woods. I think you need to push yourself a lot more here with the powers and the story.

Some things you might want to think about:
He has a loving family, why would he run off? Why wouldn't they accept him for who he is no matter what?
Despite some of his classmates being killed how many did he save by killing the main baddy? Why wouldn't he be considered a hero because of that?
Why were terrorists attacking the school in the first place?

With the powers can you alter them to seem a little more new and innovative. Are the bone claws just the beginning of what he can do with his body? Could he create spikes, armour do other things (Yes I realize this is a bit like Marrow or Spyke from evolution) but it would get a little further away from the Wolvie comparisons. The extra senses he has how can you push that beyond the extra smell, hearing and sight.

I personally think it's an interesting beginning but to get to a character that is really yours you really need to push yourself. Unfortunately, whenever you do a character that has claws and healing factor you will have comparisons to Wolvie and there have already been a lot of Wolvie inspired characters.

 

[The_Dark_Knight]

Hey dude!! You created another Wolverine!! SWEET!! We REALLY do need two of them!

[/sarcasm]

Drop the character all together. seriously. hes a 15 yr old Wolverine.

 

[dusk20]

Thats the problem with Wolverine though, just because he is popular, no one can make a character with powers like him.

But with Superman its different and I can't understand why.

If somebody is like Superman, its okay. why?

 

[donaldthe3rd]

Well Im still working on Renegade to make him his own and its taking me forever to do that, i hope soon that i can post him back on here in his finished state. And Dusk20 nice stufft: , I like the whole concept of how he can tap into the Elder Gods powers and make them his own, thats really kool

 

[dusk20]

Well Im still working on Renegade to make him his own and its taking me forever to do that, i hope soon that i can post him back on here in his finished state.

I can't wait for that Donald. Just take your time.

And Dusk20 nice stufft: , I like the whole concept of how he can tap into the Elder Gods powers and make them his own, thats really kool

Thanks mate, but like i always say, its not complete just yet.

 

[dusk20]

By the way Donald, any chance you drawing my character Soras?

 

[donaldthe3rd]

I could give it a whirl i guess no problem.t:

 

[donaldthe3rd]

Ive just made a super-hero team and will post on the team members shortly

 

[dusk20]

I could give it a whirl i guess no problem.t:

Thanks mate

 

[donaldthe3rd]

This is just one of my super-heroes that i have created and put into a team. So tell me what you think:

Super-Hero Name--Lynx
Real Name--Robert Kensworth
Aliases--Bobby
Identity--Known to few
Occupation--Adventurer
Citizenship--African-Canadian
Place of Birth--Somewhere in Central Africa
Known Relatives--Unknown
Group Affiliation--The Lost Boys
Education--Home schooled.

Height--5'5
Weight--120 lbs
Eyes--Blue
Hair--Blonde

Powers-- Robert has talons that reside within his hands. He has a piece of a talon in each of his fingers. When he releases his talons from the end of each finger, each talon gets longer as it passes through his fingers. A side from his razor sharp talons, Robert also has equally sharp fangs. Robert also possesses the super human strength, agility, endurance and speed of a great cat and the acrobatic prowess of an accomplished circus aerialist.

Abilities-- Robert is an excellent tracker and hunter. He has great knowledge of the wilderness and how to live within it. He also has knowledge of the herbs and spices within the jungles and how to create medicines and antidotes out of the vegativity in the jungles.

Arch enemies--Savage, Frostbite.

Born into a native tribe in the jungles of Central Africa known as the Felis Clan, Robert lived along side them while his parents studied the wild life within the Central African region. This clan of natives were devoted to preserving the wildlife of animals and vegetivity in the jungle.
While growing up in the native village, Robert learned from the elders of the village how to create medicines and antidotes from the vegative life around them, and he also learned the ways animals lived. While living with these natives since birth, Robert befriended a boy named Gabriel Bashur. The two were the best of friends for years and had plans to open a medical center when they were adults.
Robert's parents returned to the village one day after receiving a radio conversation between a group of poachers. Robert's parents alerted the natives of the poachers. All of the women, children, and elders abandoned their belongings and village to find a safer place to hide, while the warriors of the tribe tried to ward off the poachers which lead to a battle between the two. Robert was sent to hide with the other natives while his parents tried to negotiate with the poachers. Robert suddenly realized that his friend Gabriel was nowhere to be found, until his eyes came across some other poachers capturing Gabriel and imprisoning them within their truck.
Robert cried out for help but all was silent as a final gunshot was fired and Robert's parents had died. Robert unable to witness anymore ran out towards his parents attackers and released the razor sharp talons from within his hands through his fingers where they found themselves stabbed deeply into his parents murderer. The poacher fell back silent and dead cold. The other poachers terrified by the sight of this hurried back into their jeeps and trucks, and fled the scene.
Robert's talons retracted back into his hands and he sat and sobbed at the thought of his parents death and did not turn to view their bodies. Robert turned away from the village and fled into the wilderness. He had always wondered the life of an animal in the jungle and would soon find out as he lived among the animals for many years until his 16 birthday. He had tattered fur clothing to wear and was living in a group of lions. He had hunted, ate, bathed, and lived with them for all these many years. Though Robert had lived among these animals he still had not forgot the day his village had seen its destruction and his parents death.
One day a small group of scientists were researching the wild life in the jungle when Robert was out for a hunt, the scientists were working in the same field of expertise as Robert's parents had worked on. Curious Robert crept closer.
Robert was spotted by another scientist. When the two finally met the small group of scientists, the scientists found Robert an extremely fascinating being to have lived alone in the jungle for so many years. They offered Robert a chance to come to Canada where Robert's parents had once lived at. Robert accepted after a few days of thinking if he should return to civilization, the same civilization that he came to think had killed his parents. But he felt that it was important to go back to his parents homeland. When they reached Canada Robert was fascinated by the technology and lifestyle of the other people around him, though they did not notice him quite as much as he did them for he now looked as a normal teenager.
Robert noticed pictures and videos in the news paper and on the television of people who were just like him. Who had gifts or curses, but used them for the betterment of man kind. They did not use their powers for greed. And those who used it for greed and dominancy were fought off by these heroes.
Robert attended high school for the first time ever and quickly befriended Raymond Jewls. Raymond was a boy of many talents and soon would show himself to Robert as Renegade. Robert was amazed by how his new found friend was a super-hero. Robert replied to this by revealing to Raymond his powers and unsheathed his talons. Raymond suggested the idea that they start a super-hero team known as, The Lost Boys, from Raymond's favorite novel Peter Pan by J.M. Barrie.
Robert agreed and dawned a costume and dubbed himself, Lynx. Raymond introduced Robert to his friend Jonathon Young who also had a special gift. The three worked together and fought off the evil that resisted peace, each with their own motive, each with their own power, but it was Robert alone who fought to destroy the evil, the pain, that murdered his parents, and stole his life away.

 

[donaldthe3rd]

 

[donaldthe3rd]

And for Dusk20 here is my idea for what Ji looks like:

 

[dusk20]

Very nice

 

[dusk20]

And for Dusk20 here is my idea for what Ji looks like:

I like also. you even made him bald like i wanted

Thanks.

But i'm thinking that instead of a moden costume, maybe he should be more 'olden' if thats even a word. I've been looking at old Greek Warriors and i'm thinking something closer to them, but then again i still like it.

 

[donaldthe3rd]

Thanks , but its still your character so do what ever you want to do with itt: . Just show me when its done.

 

[SammyLoLoc (SW)]

Hey what's up guys, I don't know if you guys are still post'n here but here's my original "hero". He's from a series of stories I'm writing called "Neo Genesis".


Name: James Wong
Alias: HotStreak
Age:19
Nationality: Korean/American
Place Of Birth: ???
Height: 5'8
weight: 155
Eye color: Drk Brown
Hair color: Black, with red highlights
Abitlity: Pyrokenesis
Group: The AlterMan, The Generation
Personality: Like fire James can be unpredictable. He often comes off as being brash, and arogant. And at times unsure of himself.

His Style: HotStreak a kind of alt. punk style. His hair is shaved close on the sides but gelled spikey on top, with red highlights. He wears a black waist lenght leather jacket, with a thin red racing stripe along the left sleave. He also wears a brown leather studded wrist band on his right wrist. He wears a grey t-shirt with the Misfits logo on it, and black jeans.

How He Aquired the ability: Kidnapped at the age of seventeen by the Purge Corp. (One of the most powerful commercial entities in southern California) He was subjected to the extremely painful, and torturous NanoTech experiments. The long (and often deadly procedure) of infusing Nanos into the brain allowed James to tap into his mind's full potenial. Granting him the ability (not power) to create and manipulate fire in any way he wished.

Weakness: Though powerful his ability is not without limits. It's extremely
taxing on James' mind, and body to generate and aim fire projectiles using only his brain. He found it easier to form the flame in his hands and throw it himself.

Knowing The Enemy: The Purge Corparation, is a influential company that has their claws embeded in every aspect of american life. Everything from law enforcement, to politics. On the surface they're human rights actavists, and Genetic researchers. But that only aids in hiding their true intent. Beneath the shroud of deception beats the heart of true evil. But the Corp. itself is just a weapon, the man who runs it, the man who plays GOD above the chess board. Is D. Anthoy Purge. "A war hero". A man so bent and twisted by greed he's become a danger to everyone. With a team of top regarded scientist working under him, they create the weapons of the future and sell them to the armies of today.

A Little On James' Escape: After being submited to a year and half's worth
of torture the moment finally came for James to make his escape. When he awoke he was in his cell, alone like so many nights before. Or days, he didn't know, didn't care, he had to get out. That's what was important. As he arose to a standing position, the sounds of what seemed like a struggled erupted from outside of his paddded flame ******ent cell. "ON YOUR GAURD!" he shouted to himself inside his head. It'll be just his luck if one of those sick bast###s came in here to hide from GOD knows whats outside. And when he does He'll be ready. "KNOCK HIM OUT! THEN GET OUT!.... NO PU##Y FOOT'N AROUND!" Four years of martial arts training aided in steading his mind. Taught him to drop his opponent as fast as possible. Well that's not what it taught him, but that's what he took from it. Tightly clenching and unclenching his fist, he readied himself. As the door cracked open he ignited his flames and made his move............

 

[donaldthe3rd]

i like the whole i dea of pyrokenesis, how he can just think of some thing and its on fire, thats so cool.

 

[SammyLoLoc (SW)]

He's one of my fav. chracters in the stories, but there's so many others.