X3: Rewrite-A-Scene

:yay: It probably won't be ground-breaking, but here goes nothing!
A few lines I used are from fan-fics/comics, not my own mind.

Magneto and Pyro have just broken into the goverment's van
that holds Mystique and other mutant criminals.

Juggernaut, Multiple Man and Mystique have all been broken
free. There is one more cell left that seems heavily gaurded
and cannot been seen into. Someone's locked in rapping on the door
sounding ever so agitated.

Gambit: Y' mind helping a guy out ? Unless Gambit 'aint special enough t' join in de festivities.

Magneto pulls the door off, locks and all.

Looking into the darkness, we see burning red eyes.
Slowly, heavy footsteps are heared along with the shuffling
of cards as he steps out. He looks like a biker, wearing
only a grey vest,dark jeans and black boots.

The man is slightly taller then average with dark auburn hair
and is strikingly handsome. His muscular build and general
attitude signals trouble.

A dangerous yet charming grin is on his face.

Pyro:What's your power ? Gonna paper-cut somone to death ?

Gambit continues to grin, letting his actions speak for him.
He stops shuffling, taking a card out of the deck. It glows bright
magneta, almost blinding. Sparks fly everywhere.
The man whirls around and throws the card at one of the abandoned
cars outside. It explodes on impact.

Gambit: So, Mes Braves, what's up ?

Magneto: We require everyone's talents. And you, I believe, will fit in quite nicely.
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This one is taking a liberty. Just something I pulled out of my head.
Whoot! Let the Romy begin!

Rogue is walking thru the crowd of mutants getting the cure.
She bumps into someone.

Gambit: Now, now. What's a beautiful girl like yourself doin' in a place
like dis ?

Rogue: None o' your business. Now step aside, won't you ?

Gambit: Didn't say "please", Cherie.

She lowers her voice.

Rogue: Please step aside before I have t' send you into a world of pain.

Gambit: Fiesty. I like dat...an' more.

He reaches out to touch her face. She steps back.

Rogue: Don't!

Gambit looks up to see Pyro signaling him to leave.

Gambit: Fine, but just remember; I never forget a pretty face.
____________________________________________________

And, that's it. Maybe I'll think of more later, but I think we've collectivly
covered everything.
 
I rewrote the final battle. Anyone wanna read it?
 
Vilya said:
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You have talent! haha. Are you working on more? would be nice one of all the x-men in the final battle, with Rogue, Angel and Cyclops.
 
I'm currently in the process of putting together a sequence of Angel avoiding a Sentinel attack. At this moment I'm building up the Sentinel appearance and will eventually write a sequence where three Sentinels take to the sky, chasing Angel, and firing various lasers and missles at him.

It's very complicated to write it without the whole concept sounding silly. However, the story scene is bubbling to the surface and will be written in full along with being posted on here.
 
Enjoy!

Cyclops arrives at Alkali Lake. He parks his motorbike, gets down and walks towards a lake’s shore. He stops. And starts listening…
Jean (voice in OFF): Scott…Scott…
Cyclops looks around.
Jean (voice in OFF): Scott…Scott… Scott…Scott…
He looks around again, desperately. The voices continue, and Scott brings his hands onto his head.
Cyclops: Stop it.
Jean (voice in OFF): HELP ME Scott, Scott, where are you? Scott… Scott…
Cyclops: ¡¡¡STOP!!!
He violently takes off his visor and stabs the lake with his ocular laser. He closes his eyes. Falling down on his knees, he shudders. A tear runs over his cheek.
Suddenly, something catches his attention. The lake creates a whirlwind and explodes. Such explosion pushes Cyclops onto a rock, hitting his back. He lets out a cry of pain… and raises his head.
A figure in a woman’s form walks slowly on the water, towards Cyclops. It’s Jean.
She reaches the shore, and stops, staring at him fixedly.
Cyclops (getting up): Jean…
He holds her hands.
Cyclops (smiling): Are you…? Are you an angel?
Jean smiles too.
Cyclops: I… I missed you so much… I didn’t know… without you…
Jean touches his lips, making him quiet. She strokes his cheek.
Jean: I want to see your eyes.
Scott (stops smiling): What?
Jean: Your eyes, Scott… I want to see them.
Cyclops lets go of her hands.
Cyclops (shaking his head a bit): No.
Jean: Don’t worry… I can control it.
Cyclops doubts a bit, and she takes his glasses off. He keeps his eyes closed.
Jean: Come on. Open them.
He slowly opens them, and bit by bit the red lights in his eyes dissipate… revealing Scott’s blue eyes. He smiles again… and they kiss.
They start levitating, away from the floor. Cyclops hardly is surprised, since he’s gazing at Jean.
Cyclops (hugging her): It’s incredible Jean… you survived… it’s as if… as if god gave you a chance…
Jean stares at him with a categorical look.
Jean: God?
She lowers her head, thoughtful. She uppers it… showing flames in her eyes.
Jean (deep voice): God?
Cyclops moves his head away from her shoulder.
Cyclops: Jean, but what is…?
Jean (deep voice): You don’t know anything about god.
Flames begin to rise from her. Cyclops gets away, staring horrified, how she’s burning.
Jean (deep voice): A god… like me… (smiles wickedly) never dies. But… needs…
Cyclops keeps staring at her, and suddenly, his eyes burn too- a laser shoots against Jean… and she absorbs it- while Cyclops falls onto the lake, because of the clash. He’s now on the lake’s bed, with his laser stopping him from moving.
Jean continues smiling devilishly and the flames grow larger and larger, absorbing Cyclops bottomless laser… creating a chain, a bond in which nor one or the other can separate.
Cyclops doesn’t drown, since his own laser moves away and avoids the water passing through. Even so, water begins to filtrate to his ears, to his mouth…
Cyclops: JEAN!!!
Jean’s eyes darken, now serious, and fire around her start to create a shape, a figure… a bird.
Cyclops: JEAN!!!
He attempts on resisting, but his own laser still pushes him in.
Suddenly, Jean clasps her hands on her head and a bird’s screech is heard over the whole lake. Cyclops starts to have difficulty on breathing.
Jean: Too much…
She opens her mouth, trying to scream. The flames abandon Jean, slowly disappearing.
Jean: TOO MUCH.
Cyclops hides the laser with his eyes, breaking the chain. The water covers him. Jean slowly falls to the floor from the air, while we see Cyclops body, drowned.
Jean (closing her eyes): Scott… Scott…
Xavier: Scott…

(that’s when it continues with the scene we all know)

I "modified" this scene because I thought it was short and lacked romance... tomorrow I'll post two more.

Merry Christmas everybody!! :D
 
La_She-Beast said:
Enjoy!

Cyclops arrives at Alkali Lake. He parks his motorbike, gets down and walks towards a lake’s shore. He stops. And starts listening…
Jean (voice in OFF): Scott…Scott…
Cyclops looks around.
Jean (voice in OFF): Scott…Scott… Scott…Scott…
He looks around again, desperately. The voices continue, and Scott brings his hands onto his head.
Cyclops: Stop it.
Jean (voice in OFF): HELP ME Scott, Scott, where are you? Scott… Scott…
Cyclops: ¡¡¡STOP!!!
He violently takes off his visor and stabs the lake with his ocular laser. He closes his eyes. Falling down on his knees, he shudders. A tear runs over his cheek.
Suddenly, something catches his attention. The lake creates a whirlwind and explodes. Such explosion pushes Cyclops onto a rock, hitting his back. He lets out a cry of pain… and raises his head.
A figure in a woman’s form walks slowly on the water, towards Cyclops. It’s Jean.
She reaches the shore, and stops, staring at him fixedly.
Cyclops (getting up): Jean…
He holds her hands.
Cyclops (smiling): Are you…? Are you an angel?
Jean smiles too.
Cyclops: I… I missed you so much… I didn’t know… without you…
Jean touches his lips, making him quiet. She strokes his cheek.
Jean: I want to see your eyes.
Scott (stops smiling): What?
Jean: Your eyes, Scott… I want to see them.
Cyclops lets go of her hands.
Cyclops (shaking his head a bit): No.
Jean: Don’t worry… I can control it.
Cyclops doubts a bit, and she takes his glasses off. He keeps his eyes closed.
Jean: Come on. Open them.
He slowly opens them, and bit by bit the red lights in his eyes dissipate… revealing Scott’s blue eyes. He smiles again… and they kiss.
They start levitating, away from the floor. Cyclops hardly is surprised, since he’s gazing at Jean.
Cyclops (hugging her): It’s incredible Jean… you survived… it’s as if… as if god gave you a chance…
Jean stares at him with a categorical look.
Jean: God?
She lowers her head, thoughtful. She uppers it… showing flames in her eyes.
Jean (deep voice): God?
Cyclops moves his head away from her shoulder.
Cyclops: Jean, but what is…?
Jean (deep voice): You don’t know anything about god.
Flames begin to rise from her. Cyclops gets away, staring horrified, how she’s burning.
Jean (deep voice): A god… like me… (smiles wickedly) never dies. But… needs…
Cyclops keeps staring at her, and suddenly, his eyes burn too- a laser shoots against Jean… and she absorbs it- while Cyclops falls onto the lake, because of the clash. He’s now on the lake’s bed, with his laser stopping him from moving.
Jean continues smiling devilishly and the flames grow larger and larger, absorbing Cyclops bottomless laser… creating a chain, a bond in which nor one or the other can separate.
Cyclops doesn’t drown, since his own laser moves away and avoids the water passing through. Even so, water begins to filtrate to his ears, to his mouth…
Cyclops: JEAN!!!
Jean’s eyes darken, now serious, and fire around her start to create a shape, a figure… a bird.
Cyclops: JEAN!!!
He attempts on resisting, but his own laser still pushes him in.
Suddenly, Jean clasps her hands on her head and a bird’s screech is heard over the whole lake. Cyclops starts to have difficulty on breathing.
Jean: Too much…
She opens her mouth, trying to scream. The flames abandon Jean, slowly disappearing.
Jean: TOO MUCH.
Cyclops hides the laser with his eyes, breaking the chain. The water covers him. Jean slowly falls to the floor from the air, while we see Cyclops body, drowned.
Jean (closing her eyes): Scott… Scott…
Xavier: Scott…

(that’s when it continues with the scene we all know)

I "modified" this scene because I thought it was short and lacked romance... tomorrow I'll post two more.

Merry Christmas everybody!! :D
You're fired for killing Scott.:o
 
Whoops, silly me :oldrazz: No but seriously, I think that the best, with dignity, death for Cyke is Jean killing him.
Long live the king and queen :p
 
La_She-Beast said:
Whoops, silly me :oldrazz: No but seriously, I think that the best, with dignity, death for Cyke is Jean killing him.
Long live the king and queen :p
That kinda contradicts itself.:huh:
 
Yeeeeesss... it's a jooooke... the smiley next to the phrase shoud give you an idea
 
Well I couldn't sleep, so I decided to post another one. Fortunately, nobody dies in this scene.

Wolverine enters through a corridor from Cerebro, towards the recovery room. He listens to two people speaking from far away, thanks to his fine ear…
Xavier: Thank you, Hank, for coming as soon as possible. It was an emergency…
Beast: There’s no problem.
Xavier: Are you sure?
Beast: They might need me from the government, but definitely, family’s first… Ill begin right now.
Xavier: Good. I’m leaving you alone, while, I’m… going to see Jean.
Beast (nods): Perfect.
Wolverine stops when Xavier exits the recovery room.
Wolverine: How’s Jean?
Xavier: Better. Now I will check her.
Wolverine: And him… (directs his look onto the room) what’s he gonna do?
Xavier: He’s going to make sure she recovers. Building a machine that will control visually her mental state.
Wolverine: Sure. (continues staring the room, suspiciously)
Xavier goes towards the corridor’s exit.
Xavier: Logan…
Logan turns round.
Xavier: Be good.

The recovery room. Beast squatting on a desk, wearing a labcoat and a pair of goggles. He gets two cables from the floor and joins them, causing sparks. He raises his look, and notices Wolverine in front of the room's door. He lowers his look, and sighs.
Beast: Try to not distract me.
Wolverine: The professor seems to trust you a lot.
Beast: Yes.
He takes off the goggles and gets some pliers, beginning to link both cables.
Beast: You, on the contrary… it seems not.
Wolverine: It’s hard to believe that Jean’s life depends on a stranger… and that a gadget can possibly help her.
Beast: She depends on the professor. And I’ve known Jean Grey for a long period of time -my whole life, perhaps- I know what I’m doing. I trust on her potential. She’ll do more than me with this apparatus.
Beast: Also… Ororo told me how she saved your life. It’s impossible to have more than that potential… Heh. Hard to believe she was once the innocent child who lifted books with her mind and whom I helped with her geometry homework.
But, I’m afraid things don’t long on forever.
He lets out a sniggger, gets a screwdriver, and begins to close the cable compartment.
Wolverine: You seem to take everything as a joke.
Beast stares at him for a few seconds.
Beast (keeps screwing on): I’m nervous, Logan. Between the cure and Jean… I don’t know what kind of treatment the professor will use, and that makes my fur stand on end. I trust him, but, on the other hand…
Wolverine enters the room, with a cocky walk, checking out a larder.
Wolverine: You speak as if he were going to kill her.
He frowns, seriously staring at Beast.
Beast: You don’t know what the professor is capable of.
Wolverine: I know. I knew it when he made the whole world almost had an attack in just a few minutes.
Beast: Yes… he made us alter ourselves…
Pause. Beast stares down. He lowers the screwdriver and moves it with anxiety.
Wolverine: I guess it affected you. But, after all, (shrugs shoulders) it wasn’t his fault.
Beast: Yes.
Beast hesitates. He stops moving the screwdriver, holding it tightly.
Beast: Actually…
We change scene. A man with a labcoat walks in a room, presumably a lab, judging for its flasks and test tubes. An oversized hand gets one of the flasks, and suddenly a deafening and horrifying sound is heard. The hand lets off the flask, we hear a scream and CRASH! It breaks into pieces. Then a growl it’s heard and that hand begins to grow blue fur…
Wolverine: Whoa. That must’ve been a pain in the ass.
Beast: Yes, pain in the ass.
We hear a SNAP!. Beast moves his head to one side.
Beast: Excuse me. I'm going to get another screwdriver.
He jumps off the desk, towards the door. Wolverine observes how he leaves the room raising an eyebrow.
Wolverine: McCoy…
Beast stops. He lifts his head, attentive, without looking at him.
Wolverine: I’m sure you weren’t the only one. Even Jean… could’ve…
Pause.
Beast keeps walking.



Yep, I inserted that famous scene which wasn't included in X2.
 
anyone rewrote the scene of all the x-men in a room, discussing about the future of the school after Charles death?

I¿m going to do it, but if is already done, I'll think it more...
 
Okay, so this is an alt final scene, instead of Wolverine watching the TV and going to the balcony...


Angel walks slowly alone through one of the school’s corridors, with his head down, thoughtful. Suddenly, he sees that a dog, with something similar to a book in its mouth, is running towards him. Angel watches as the dog passes next to him.
Angel: Hey! You! (shouts) Hey!
The dog stops and looks at him- comes back trotting.
Angel kneels as the dog gets nearer. He takes the book from its mouth.
Angel (scratching the dog’s ear): What are you doing here, boy… and this book?
Rahne (laughs): I’m a girl.
Angel raises his head.
Angel: Why, sorry… I mean, I’m new here, and… (doubts and laughs a bit) can’t manage to get used at it…
Rahne (interrupts, laughing) : Nevermind. May I have my book back, please? I’m late for geometry.
Angel reluctantly puts the book in her mouth. Rahne turns and keeps running. Angel notices that she stops in front of one of the corridor’s door and quite naturally, turning into a beautiful red-haired girl. Rahne gives one last look at Angel and knocks the door, opening it.
Rahne: Sorry, Mr. McCoy.
Beast (voice in OFF): Please come in, Rahne.
Angel smiles a bit to himself.
We change room- now in the Professor’s office or, Storm’s office since there’s a sign with the word “Headmistress” on it. Storm puts some papers on the table, writing.
Somebody knocks the door.
Storm: Come in.
Angel enters the room.
Angel: Miss Munroe?
Storm (smiling): Why, hello, Warren. Come in, come in.
Angel: I have something… I need to talk to you.
Storm: Sure. Please have a seat.
Angel: Well, actually, I only want to say that I’m leaving.
Storm slightly frowns.
Angel: But… just for a short period of time. I… I didn’t have the chance to speak clearly with my father, so… well. I need him to understand me. The truth is, I never, since I was young, managed to express what I felt for him…
Storm: I totally understand you.
Storm gets up.
Storm: I believe it’s the most suitable for your situation. (nodding) No doubt, I think it’s the right decision.
Angel: Thank you, Miss Munroe.
Storm (putting a hand on his shoulder): Good luck.
Angel nods. He goes towards the door.
Angel: By the way…
Angel: I’m very sorry for Professor Xavier.
Storm smiles politely but with signs of sadness.
Angel exits the room. Storm stays put, thoughtful. She sits and gets a pen. She’s about to write… but sighs. She can’t. Staring through the window, she sees how Angel flies away from the mansion’s door.
 
LastSunrise1981 said:
Logan- Scott, you can't go against her.

Scott- Logan, this isn't your call to make. Go with Storm and get everyone to safety now!
Not in a million years would Logan run away like a scared little girl just because Scott told him so.
Totally unrealistic for the character.
 
Loganbabe said:
Not in a million years would Logan run away like a scared little girl just because Scott told him so.
Totally unrealistic for the character.

Shows how much you know. Who said Logan is running away like a scared little girl? You are. This scene is further proving that Scott is doing what he needs to do and is providing leadership. He is ordering Logan and Storm to get everyone to safety, which includes them getting to safety as well.

Scott is the leader of the X-Men and I wrote it to where he's marching up to Jean. This is very much faithful to the source material. Scott is doing the one thing he doesn't want to do, but he knows in his heart and soul that he has to do it.

Sure, I could've extended the dialogue and I might do that. But right now this is where it stands and Logan is respecting Scott as a leader.
 
Epilogue


::The scene that replaces Cyclops tombstone with Jeans and Xavier takes place::

Cyclops- ::Standing looking at the tombstones. He gives a smile and kisses the top of Jean's grave and rests his hands on both of the tombs:: Rest..

::Logan is standing behind him::

Logan- You know Scott. I know we always don't see eye to eye. I just want you to know that the events of last night have once again reminded me of why you're in charge.

Scott- ::doesn't say anything but still looking at Logan face to face and eye to eye. He nods and extends his hand to Logans offering a truce between them::

Logan- ::Gives a slight grin and shakes his hand in return::

Cyclops- ::walks away from the area and meets with Storm, Beast, Bobby, at the front of the school beginning a whole new school year::

Iceman- :Watching the hordes of students walk in:: Looks like we're going to need extra uniforms.

Cyclops- Looks like you might be right Bobby. ::Looks to Hank:: It's great to have you back Hank.

Hank- ::places his hand on Scotts shoulder:: Scott, we're family and you always said we'll always be a family united.

::Leech runs up to Storm and gives her a hug:

Storm- ::Hugs him in return:: Good to see you buddy.
--------------------------------------------------------------------------

::Rogue walking in the halls and accidently bumps into a new mutant arriving::

Rogue- Oh, I am sorry there honey.

Student- ::Speaking with a very thick Cajun accent:: Oh no, I am sorry my love. With one as beautiful as you it would be very impossible to keep my concentration.

Rogue- ::smiles:: Well, thanks sugah. And may I ask this charming gentleman what his name is?

Student- Why most certainly. My name is Remy Lebeau.

::Extends her glove covered hand::

Rogue- I'm Rogue. Pleased to meet you.

::Remy takes her hand and kisses the top of it::

Remy- No, the pleasure was all mine Rogue. ::He looks up at her with his signature red eyes and gives a charming smile::
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Loganbabe said:
Not in a million years would Logan run away like a scared little girl just because Scott told him so.
Totally unrealistic for the character.

I diagree. :o
 
LastSunrise1981 said:
::Rogue walking in the halls and accidently bumps into a new mutant arriving::

Rogue- Oh, I am sorry there honey.

Student- ::Speaking with a very thick Cajun accent:: Oh no, I am sorry my love. With one as beautiful as you it would be very impossible to keep my concentration.

Rogue- ::smiles:: Well, thanks sugah. And may I ask this charming gentleman what his name is?

Student- Why most certainly. My name is Remy Lebeau.

::Extends her glove covered hand::

Rogue- I'm Rogue. Pleased to meet you.

::Remy takes her hand and kisses the top of it::

Remy- No, the pleasure was all mine Rogue. ::He looks up at her with his signature red eyes and gives a charming smile::
-------------------------------------------------------------------------

Heheh, I like this touch. Also her coversation with Beast
 
La_She-Beast said:
Enjoy!

Cyclops arrives at Alkali Lake. He parks his motorbike, gets down and walks towards a lake’s shore. He stops. And starts listening…
Jean (voice in OFF): Scott…Scott…
Cyclops looks around.
Jean (voice in OFF): Scott…Scott… Scott…Scott…
He looks around again, desperately. The voices continue, and Scott brings his hands onto his head.
Cyclops: Stop it.
Jean (voice in OFF): HELP ME Scott, Scott, where are you? Scott… Scott…
Cyclops: ¡¡¡STOP!!!
He violently takes off his visor and stabs the lake with his ocular laser. He closes his eyes. Falling down on his knees, he shudders. A tear runs over his cheek.
Suddenly, something catches his attention. The lake creates a whirlwind and explodes. Such explosion pushes Cyclops onto a rock, hitting his back. He lets out a cry of pain… and raises his head.
A figure in a woman’s form walks slowly on the water, towards Cyclops. It’s Jean.
She reaches the shore, and stops, staring at him fixedly.
Cyclops (getting up): Jean…
He holds her hands.
Cyclops (smiling): Are you…? Are you an angel?
Jean smiles too.
Cyclops: I… I missed you so much… I didn’t know… without you…
Jean touches his lips, making him quiet. She strokes his cheek.
Jean: I want to see your eyes.
Scott (stops smiling): What?
Jean: Your eyes, Scott… I want to see them.
Cyclops lets go of her hands.
Cyclops (shaking his head a bit): No.
Jean: Don’t worry… I can control it.
Cyclops doubts a bit, and she takes his glasses off. He keeps his eyes closed.
Jean: Come on. Open them.
He slowly opens them, and bit by bit the red lights in his eyes dissipate… revealing Scott’s blue eyes. He smiles again… and they kiss.
They start levitating, away from the floor. Cyclops hardly is surprised, since he’s gazing at Jean.
Cyclops (hugging her): It’s incredible Jean… you survived… it’s as if… as if god gave you a chance…
Jean stares at him with a categorical look.
Jean: God?
She lowers her head, thoughtful. She uppers it… showing flames in her eyes.
Jean (deep voice): God?
Cyclops moves his head away from her shoulder.
Cyclops: Jean, but what is…?
Jean (deep voice): You don’t know anything about god.
Flames begin to rise from her. Cyclops gets away, staring horrified, how she’s burning.
Jean (deep voice): A god… like me… (smiles wickedly) never dies. But… needs…
Cyclops keeps staring at her, and suddenly, his eyes burn too- a laser shoots against Jean… and she absorbs it- while Cyclops falls onto the lake, because of the clash. He’s now on the lake’s bed, with his laser stopping him from moving.
Jean continues smiling devilishly and the flames grow larger and larger, absorbing Cyclops bottomless laser… creating a chain, a bond in which nor one or the other can separate.
Cyclops doesn’t drown, since his own laser moves away and avoids the water passing through. Even so, water begins to filtrate to his ears, to his mouth…
Cyclops: JEAN!!!
Jean’s eyes darken, now serious, and fire around her start to create a shape, a figure… a bird.
Cyclops: JEAN!!!
He attempts on resisting, but his own laser still pushes him in.
Suddenly, Jean clasps her hands on her head and a bird’s screech is heard over the whole lake. Cyclops starts to have difficulty on breathing.
Jean: Too much…
She opens her mouth, trying to scream. The flames abandon Jean, slowly disappearing.
Jean: TOO MUCH.
Cyclops hides the laser with his eyes, breaking the chain. The water covers him. Jean slowly falls to the floor from the air, while we see Cyclops body, drowned.
Jean (closing her eyes): Scott… Scott…
Xavier: Scott…

(that’s when it continues with the scene we all know)

I "modified" this scene because I thought it was short and lacked romance... tomorrow I'll post two more.

Merry Christmas everybody!! :D

WOW!!!! this is so romantic!! :cwink: and sad too. :csad:
 

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