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Rob, judging by the characters you've created so far, I must say that you have one sick mind! :heart: 
The two chapters are looking good. Don't get lazy and keep us waiting for the next one!
Please hurry? *angelic smile*
The two chapters are looking good. Don't get lazy and keep us waiting for the next one!
Please hurry? *angelic smile*
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Chapter 3
Sarge waited anxiously in the visitors area for his sister to arrive....of course it wasn't his real sister but Bella,an agent who was to be his liaison between prison and the agency.
Finally after what seemed like an eternity in walked Bella,long black hair,red jumper and jeans,it was a sight for sore eyes after the last 2 days.
Bella:"Hey bro"
Sarge:"h..hey sis"
Bella came towards him to give him a hug but the guards shot her an off limits glance.
they sat down at opposite sides of the table and made small talk keeping up the pretence of being brother and sister until the guard moved away
Sarge:"You up to speed ?"
Bella:"Yep......there's only one way to do this"
Sarge:"What ?"
Bella:"Your orders are to kill Cine"
Sarge:"****!....how am i supposed to do that ? isn't there another way ? get him transferred"
Bella:"He's just been transferred here plus there isn't the time,he is gonna see you sooner rather than later and then you're done......take him out"
Sarge:"Listen lady.i'm not ****ing Jack Bauer,ive never killed anyone in cold blood before"
Bella:"You agreed to this assignment,that little girl is depending on you,do your ****ing job and then get the info from that sick bastard"
Sarge watched as Bella grew visibly more agitated
Sarge:"Whats your personal investment in this ?"
Bella:"I just want this si....."
Sarge:"Don't bull**** me,ive got enough lies circling around me right now"
Bella paused for a moment
Bella:"One of his victims was a friend of mine"
Sarge's faced mellowed,reflecting his sympathy
Bella:"Have you ever seen the wrecked and mutilated body of someone you loved and know it's within your power to avenge that someone ?"
Sarge:"No.......and i hope i never will"
Bella:"So do i.....now do what you have to do"
Bella got up from the table before Sarge could speak and made her way to the exit.
Bella made her way to her car and drove off,once out of sight of the prison she pulled over and changed clothes.
30 minutes later she was standing on a mountain road next to her car,now dressed in a gray suit with a white blouse,her badge and gun holstered to her right side,she was overlooking LA,her appointment in the valley wasn't for another 20 minutes and she needed some air.
Bella took a deep breath as she surveyed the supposed city of angels,the place where dreams come true,she knew better,in truth it was the land of lost souls.
Ganbangers now so entrenched in a way of life that even the few that wanted out had little chance,their hopes suffocated by the anger and their voices drowned out by gunfire,on the other side there were bored rich kids who raised themselves and looked for an outlet of affection anywhere they could find it,most of them were ****ing,drinking and shooting/snorting before they were even old enough to drive,seeking for a way to feel,then there were the dreamers,the endless string of guys thinking they could be the next Bruce Willis littering up the restaurants waiting tables hoping an agent would notice them....for the wannabe starlets it was worse,arriving hoping to be the next Meryl Streep and realising their destiny lay as the 3rd tier Jenna Jameson....yup the land of dreams indeed
She got into her car and drove down to a salubrious mansion just passed the elite casting agency,there she saw pretty young things hoping for movie roles."They'll be smoking crack and dick by the end of the month" thought Bella as she drove into her destination,the home of porn baron JAL
She entered and was ushered into his office through a waiting room full of silicone enhanced women.
JAL stood up from his chair and held out his ring covered hand,he was a well built guy with a perma tan and expensive looking silk shirt.......Bella blanked the hand shake offer and sat down.
JAL:"So what can i do for you ? looking for a movie deal ? hehehehehe"
Bella:"Hardly,you don't do movies about women with brains and class do you ?"
she fired back.......JAL sank slightly into his chair
Bella:"I'm here about this man"
she shoved a pic of NDX across the table to him,he recognized it instantly
JAL:"Errrrr......why would you think we have anything to do with a serial killer ?"
He looked nervous now,sweat visible on his forehead
Bella:"Is it true that aside from your more glamorous movie ventures in the porn world you also run a grubby site called slampoles that specialises in degrading women ?"
JAL:"I can assure you all of that is an act...the women are in on it,playing a role....."
Bella:"You're still selling the image of women as nothing but pieces of meat to abused by men as worthless bar their *****es......but that's not the point,you make a lot of money off that site and this man was buying in bulk,i want to know why and where it was going"
JAL:"Just a big fan i guess"
Bella:"I don't have time for bull****,when someone buys that much it has a bigger use than his own personal spank bank,he is obviously distributing within some sort of community,i want to know where"
JAL:"Look all i know is he pays on time and...."
Bella:"I said no bull****,i don't think someone like you wants me investigating him do you ? i'm not the gentle type,i leave footprints,now give up some info or i start making you my own personal interest case"
JAL:"Ok ok ok"
he wrote down an address on a piece of paper,Bella looked at it and then put it in her pocket,she shot another glance at JAL and then left,feeling like she needed a shower........at least she had a lead that may help Sarge.......
To Be Continued
Sarge waited anxiously in the visitors area for his sister to arrive....of course it wasn't his real sister but Bella,an agent who was to be his liaison between prison and the agency.
Finally after what seemed like an eternity in walked Bella,long black hair,red jumper and jeans,it was a sight for sore eyes after the last 2 days.
Bella:"Hey bro"
Sarge:"h..hey sis"
Bella came towards him to give him a hug but the guards shot her an off limits glance.
they sat down at opposite sides of the table and made small talk keeping up the pretence of being brother and sister until the guard moved away
Sarge:"You up to speed ?"
Bella:"Yep......there's only one way to do this"
Sarge:"What ?"
Bella:"Your orders are to kill Cine"
Sarge:"****!....how am i supposed to do that ? isn't there another way ? get him transferred"
Bella:"He's just been transferred here plus there isn't the time,he is gonna see you sooner rather than later and then you're done......take him out"
Sarge:"Listen lady.i'm not ****ing Jack Bauer,ive never killed anyone in cold blood before"
Bella:"You agreed to this assignment,that little girl is depending on you,do your ****ing job and then get the info from that sick bastard"
Sarge watched as Bella grew visibly more agitated
Sarge:"Whats your personal investment in this ?"
Bella:"I just want this si....."
Sarge:"Don't bull**** me,ive got enough lies circling around me right now"
Bella paused for a moment
Bella:"One of his victims was a friend of mine"
Sarge's faced mellowed,reflecting his sympathy
Bella:"Have you ever seen the wrecked and mutilated body of someone you loved and know it's within your power to avenge that someone ?"
Sarge:"No.......and i hope i never will"
Bella:"So do i.....now do what you have to do"
Bella got up from the table before Sarge could speak and made her way to the exit.
Bella made her way to her car and drove off,once out of sight of the prison she pulled over and changed clothes.
30 minutes later she was standing on a mountain road next to her car,now dressed in a gray suit with a white blouse,her badge and gun holstered to her right side,she was overlooking LA,her appointment in the valley wasn't for another 20 minutes and she needed some air.
Bella took a deep breath as she surveyed the supposed city of angels,the place where dreams come true,she knew better,in truth it was the land of lost souls.
Ganbangers now so entrenched in a way of life that even the few that wanted out had little chance,their hopes suffocated by the anger and their voices drowned out by gunfire,on the other side there were bored rich kids who raised themselves and looked for an outlet of affection anywhere they could find it,most of them were ****ing,drinking and shooting/snorting before they were even old enough to drive,seeking for a way to feel,then there were the dreamers,the endless string of guys thinking they could be the next Bruce Willis littering up the restaurants waiting tables hoping an agent would notice them....for the wannabe starlets it was worse,arriving hoping to be the next Meryl Streep and realising their destiny lay as the 3rd tier Jenna Jameson....yup the land of dreams indeed
She got into her car and drove down to a salubrious mansion just passed the elite casting agency,there she saw pretty young things hoping for movie roles."They'll be smoking crack and dick by the end of the month" thought Bella as she drove into her destination,the home of porn baron JAL
She entered and was ushered into his office through a waiting room full of silicone enhanced women.
JAL stood up from his chair and held out his ring covered hand,he was a well built guy with a perma tan and expensive looking silk shirt.......Bella blanked the hand shake offer and sat down.
JAL:"So what can i do for you ? looking for a movie deal ? hehehehehe"
Bella:"Hardly,you don't do movies about women with brains and class do you ?"
she fired back.......JAL sank slightly into his chair
Bella:"I'm here about this man"
she shoved a pic of NDX across the table to him,he recognized it instantly
JAL:"Errrrr......why would you think we have anything to do with a serial killer ?"
He looked nervous now,sweat visible on his forehead
Bella:"Is it true that aside from your more glamorous movie ventures in the porn world you also run a grubby site called slampoles that specialises in degrading women ?"
JAL:"I can assure you all of that is an act...the women are in on it,playing a role....."
Bella:"You're still selling the image of women as nothing but pieces of meat to abused by men as worthless bar their *****es......but that's not the point,you make a lot of money off that site and this man was buying in bulk,i want to know why and where it was going"
JAL:"Just a big fan i guess"
Bella:"I don't have time for bull****,when someone buys that much it has a bigger use than his own personal spank bank,he is obviously distributing within some sort of community,i want to know where"
JAL:"Look all i know is he pays on time and...."
Bella:"I said no bull****,i don't think someone like you wants me investigating him do you ? i'm not the gentle type,i leave footprints,now give up some info or i start making you my own personal interest case"
JAL:"Ok ok ok"
he wrote down an address on a piece of paper,Bella looked at it and then put it in her pocket,she shot another glance at JAL and then left,feeling like she needed a shower........at least she had a lead that may help Sarge.......
To Be Continued
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Awesome hunter.
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I guess that B in Bella stands for Badass! Amazing.
Pretty good chapter. I like Sarge's conflicted character.
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I like how you develop your characters. Can't wait for the next chapter.
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Somebody needs to cut this Bella chick down to size. Who the hell does she think she is anyway? "I leave footprints." WTF? 
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We should see more of that Mister J guy. He seems rather dashing.
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That was great.
We should see more of that Mister J guy. He seems rather dashing.
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Chapter 4
Sarge spent the rest of the day avoiding Cine,waiting for the right moment,he fained feeling sick to miss evening meal and watched the rec room to look for an opportunity.
Around 8'oclock Cine left the rec room to go to the toilet,Sarge followed him keeping enough distance to not be spotted
Cine took a piss and went to wash his hands,this was Sarges chance he grabbed Cine by the throat and tried to lock in a choke but Cine got his arm in between one of Sarges and pushed backward knocking both to the floor
Cine broke free and mounted Sarge,he started raining down punches but Sarge got his arms up to block and then reversed Cine over so Sarge was on top,he grabbed Cine's shirt and pulled himto his feet,Cine shoved Sarge backwards into the wall and charged at him,with a quick sidestep Cine hit the wall,Sarge immediately kicked cine in the back of the head smashing him face first into the wall busting Cine's face wide open,as he stumbled back Sarge locked in a choke and snapped Cine's neck before letting go.......his lifeless bloody body slumped to the floor.
Sarge looked down at Cine and then at his hands,he suddenly felt his stomach rising up into his throat,he ran to the toilet stall and threw up violently,the vomiting was so intense he felt it was gonna come through his face.
when it finally stopped he gathered himself and made his way back to his cell and waited nervously for the body to be discovered,about 15 minutes later he heard a commotion and looked out of his cell,green was being dragged by guards towards solitary
FA came into Sarge's cell hyped to the gills
FA:"Hey man i see green killed that Russian hitman....got any chewy huh ? huh ?"
Sarge looked startled
Sarge:"green killed him ?"
FA:"Yeah they caught him humping the dead body"
Sarge grimaced and then his face hardened
Sarge:"Ok,now F**k of you hick sack of sh1te"
FA:".........Heh....nice one,hey can i ask you a question ?"
Sarge:"What ?"
FA:"I saw a bit on the news about a gay couple having a baby,how do dudes have babies ? do they sh1t them ?"
Sarge:"...........yes.........now go away"
FA:" i knew it...ok see ya around man"
A few minutes later and Sava entered Sarge's cell
Sava:"The Governor wants to talk to you"
He took Sarge to Showtime's office.
Sarge:"I thought we only met if i made up a reason to come see you ?"
Showtime:"Relax...all the prisoners are being interviewed after the death of Cine"
Sarge:I thought green did it"
Showtime studied Sarge's face
Showyime:"Well he was caught screwing the corpse so he is the number 1 suspect but he isn't a very physical man and Cine was a trained killer,makes me wonder how he overpowered him as there was signs of a fight"
Sarge:"who knows,when needs must ppl can develop strength they didn't know they had"
Showtime:"hmmmmmmm,i guess....ok you can go.....and be careful"
Sarge left the office and Sava took him back to his cell where NDX was sitting reading
NDX:"So that doc iced the Russian for some post living ass"
Sarge:"Yeah weird freak.." Sarge paused for a moment and saw a chance"i prefer mine putting up a fight y'know ? heheheh"
NDX:"Exactly,it's no fun if there's no sport"
Sarge:"Well you would know,you were the big game hunter.......say didn't you have one left over ?"
NDX:"Yeah...never really got to have much fun with her,the cops got me first,i had a nice little number lined up to pair her with as well"
Sarge:"So where did you stash her ?"
The room went silent,Sarge felt his nerves seize....had he pushed to far...NDX was staring at him......then his face turned to a smirk
NDX:"Trade secret,if you get out of here before me you might go and take my b1tch,now i don't plan to go to the chair and if i work a way out of here first i want her for me."
Sarge feigned a laugh
Sarge:"I understand man...night"
Sarge settled into his bunk and closed his eyes
to be continued........
Sarge spent the rest of the day avoiding Cine,waiting for the right moment,he fained feeling sick to miss evening meal and watched the rec room to look for an opportunity.
Around 8'oclock Cine left the rec room to go to the toilet,Sarge followed him keeping enough distance to not be spotted
Cine took a piss and went to wash his hands,this was Sarges chance he grabbed Cine by the throat and tried to lock in a choke but Cine got his arm in between one of Sarges and pushed backward knocking both to the floor
Cine broke free and mounted Sarge,he started raining down punches but Sarge got his arms up to block and then reversed Cine over so Sarge was on top,he grabbed Cine's shirt and pulled himto his feet,Cine shoved Sarge backwards into the wall and charged at him,with a quick sidestep Cine hit the wall,Sarge immediately kicked cine in the back of the head smashing him face first into the wall busting Cine's face wide open,as he stumbled back Sarge locked in a choke and snapped Cine's neck before letting go.......his lifeless bloody body slumped to the floor.
Sarge looked down at Cine and then at his hands,he suddenly felt his stomach rising up into his throat,he ran to the toilet stall and threw up violently,the vomiting was so intense he felt it was gonna come through his face.
when it finally stopped he gathered himself and made his way back to his cell and waited nervously for the body to be discovered,about 15 minutes later he heard a commotion and looked out of his cell,green was being dragged by guards towards solitary
FA came into Sarge's cell hyped to the gills
FA:"Hey man i see green killed that Russian hitman....got any chewy huh ? huh ?"
Sarge looked startled
Sarge:"green killed him ?"
FA:"Yeah they caught him humping the dead body"
Sarge grimaced and then his face hardened
Sarge:"Ok,now F**k of you hick sack of sh1te"
FA:".........Heh....nice one,hey can i ask you a question ?"
Sarge:"What ?"
FA:"I saw a bit on the news about a gay couple having a baby,how do dudes have babies ? do they sh1t them ?"
Sarge:"...........yes.........now go away"
FA:" i knew it...ok see ya around man"
A few minutes later and Sava entered Sarge's cell
Sava:"The Governor wants to talk to you"
He took Sarge to Showtime's office.
Sarge:"I thought we only met if i made up a reason to come see you ?"
Showtime:"Relax...all the prisoners are being interviewed after the death of Cine"
Sarge:I thought green did it"
Showtime studied Sarge's face
Showyime:"Well he was caught screwing the corpse so he is the number 1 suspect but he isn't a very physical man and Cine was a trained killer,makes me wonder how he overpowered him as there was signs of a fight"
Sarge:"who knows,when needs must ppl can develop strength they didn't know they had"
Showtime:"hmmmmmmm,i guess....ok you can go.....and be careful"
Sarge left the office and Sava took him back to his cell where NDX was sitting reading
NDX:"So that doc iced the Russian for some post living ass"
Sarge:"Yeah weird freak.." Sarge paused for a moment and saw a chance"i prefer mine putting up a fight y'know ? heheheh"
NDX:"Exactly,it's no fun if there's no sport"
Sarge:"Well you would know,you were the big game hunter.......say didn't you have one left over ?"
NDX:"Yeah...never really got to have much fun with her,the cops got me first,i had a nice little number lined up to pair her with as well"
Sarge:"So where did you stash her ?"
The room went silent,Sarge felt his nerves seize....had he pushed to far...NDX was staring at him......then his face turned to a smirk
NDX:"Trade secret,if you get out of here before me you might go and take my b1tch,now i don't plan to go to the chair and if i work a way out of here first i want her for me."
Sarge feigned a laugh
Sarge:"I understand man...night"
Sarge settled into his bunk and closed his eyes
to be continued........
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This is certainly worth the long wait, Rob. Fantastic job! I love the brutality and the violence!! Hehe!
Oh... green is one weird dude. Remind me not to take him to the morgue or the funeral home.
FA is quite hilarious with his inquiry about how to gay couples have baby. "Do they sh1t them?" Hahaha!!
I can barely remember why Sarge killed Cine. Because NDX asked him to... am I right?
Oh... green is one weird dude. Remind me not to take him to the morgue or the funeral home.
FA is quite hilarious with his inquiry about how to gay couples have baby. "Do they sh1t them?" Hahaha!!
I can barely remember why Sarge killed Cine. Because NDX asked him to... am I right?
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Watch what you say about that Bella chick, Mister J or she'll leave her footprints on your face and on your behind.Somebody needs to cut this Bella chick down to size. Who the hell does she think she is anyway? "I leave footprints." WTF?
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