Inside(Welcome to Hell)

Wow. Fantastically brutal fight there at the beginning.

LMAO @ the whole "green humping the body" thing. Quite bizarre. :D

Short, but was worth the wait. :up:

thanks:yay:

It was longer and had a part with Bella investigating the address she got off JAL but that got to big so i split it in to 2 smaller chapters

This is certainly worth the long wait, Rob. Fantastic job! I love the brutality and the violence!! Hehe! :up:

Oh... green is one weird dude. Remind me not to take him to the morgue or the funeral home.

FA is quite hilarious with his inquiry about how to gay couples have baby. "Do they sh1t them?" Hahaha!!

I can barely remember why Sarge killed Cine. Because NDX asked him to... am I right?

He killed Cine b/c Cine was a hitman for the mob and Sarge had captured him so if he spotted Sarge he'd blow his cover:cwink:
 
He killed Cine b/c Cine was a hitman for the mob and Sarge had captured him so if he spotted Sarge he'd blow his cover:cwink:
Ahh... thanks. Now I feel like a moron for forgetting. :O

Now don't take too long to post the next chapter. ;)
 
Awesome new chapter Hunter, worth the wait. :up:
 
Finally got around to reading this.:O Nice work hunter.:up:
 
Chapter 5

A silver Mercedes coupe pulled up outside a club named domino,a svelte pair of legs swung out of the drivers seat and her stiletto heels connected with the wet pavement floor,Bella stepped out of her car in a figure hugging black dress and made her way into the club

The club was the address JAL had given her,it was a sleazy looking joint with pole dancers who looked passed their sell by date and bar staff that would seem more at home in the pen

She went to the bar to order a drink when a thin man with greased back hair and a brown sweater on came up to her and spoke

Man:"Hey my name is Fran,all the ladies say i'm Franlicous hehehhe"

Bella:"Not interested,take a hike"

Fran:"Hey don't be like that,i think i saw you once on TV....are you a model ?"

Bella:"Jesus does that ever work ? seriously drop dead you greasy loser"

Fran:
"Huh ive seen hotter trannies anyway,i was just being nice"

Bella:
"I bet you f**ked those trannies as well since you've got about as much chance of seeing a ***** up close as Michael Jackson has of convincing anyone he's sane,now go *********e with some tweezers you little ****"

Fran:"....uh...uh...Tranny ****e!"

"And whats wrong with Trannies ?" a voice came from behind him

It was Tzarinna,she was the famous trannie cabaret singer from the Blue veil night club

Fran stared at her

Tza:" you want me to whip it out so we can measure ?"

Fran's face went red and he stormed out of the bar

Bella:"Thanks"

Tza:
"No problem sister,seems like you had it under control"

Bella:
"My names Bella"

Tza:"I'm Tzarinna,call me Tza"

Bella:"Well nice to meet ya Tza,so what is the deal here,i expected a bit more action"

Tza:"Well it's a bit of a dive and from what i hear you have to be special to get to the good stuff"

Bella:"The good stuff ?"

Tza:
"best not to ask sweetie"

Bella:"Fair enough"

Bella and Tza had another couple of drinks and chatted for a while

Tza:" so you're here,does that mean you're the adventurous type ?"

She slid her hand along Bella's leg

Bella:"I'm adventurous but not That adventurous"

Tza:
"That's cool,at least you didn't freak as most do,i may have a bigger cock than a lot of men but i'm still all woman!"

Tza said goodbye and left the club,while they had been chatting Bella had noticed a man taking crates through into an area behind the stage,the place didn't have a kitchen and the beer was stored in the cellar under the bar.

she made her way over behind the stage where the pole dancers were,she got backstage and saw the dressing rooms but no sign of another door she cracked open and looked into one of the dressing rooms.

Just then a hand grabbed her on the shoulder and spun her around,it was the man who had been carrying the crates,where he'd came from Bella was unsure but she was in trouble

Man:"Who the hell are you and what you doing back here ?"

Bella thought quickly

Bella:
"Hey hands off the goods buddy,can't a girl look for work"

The man's face turned to a smile

Man:"'Bout time we got some hot broads in here instead of those pigface ho's...i'll take you to the boss"

He lead her out of the dressing room area and across the dance floor to some stairs that led up to the managers office,the guy sitting there was a medium sized guy who looked like the regular joe schmo sit com hubby,he introduced himself as Retroman

Retro:
"So you want a job huh ?"

Bella:
"Yeah,i know how to work my ass"

Retro:
"Fiery...i like that"

Retro:
"Ok you got a try out,go down there and do your thing"

Bella:
".......Thanks,you won't be disappointed"

her heart was racing but she knew the alternative was worse,the man led her down to one of the podiums with the poll on it,there was a stocky woman with droopy boobs kind of flailing around on it as all of two punters stared on

Man:
"Ok shift it Trudie,the new girl is trying out"

Trudie:
"Hey im gonna lose money this is my shift"

Bella:
"Judging by the 2 zombies watching your blobby ass bounce around i don't think you're losing anything,now hit the bricks you saggy titted slapper"

Trudie stormed off in a huff and Bella started to dance around the poll,she felt stiff and nervous but kept telling herself she had to loosen up,she was a good athlete so use that and just copy what they did in movies
After a few moments she was treating the poll like a long lost lover and for the first time ever the guys in the bar were actually throwing money on stage

When it was over Bella was told she had the job and could start the next night,she played along and thanked Retro and then made her way out to her car,there was something going on in that place and she intended to find out what but for tonight she just wanted a hot shower and her warm bed.

To Be continued....
 
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Oh that was sooo worth the wait.:woot: :up:
 
I get to make out with a pole. Whoo-hoo! Sweeeet! It's a fantasy come true. O wait... it's just a story. :csad: Better than nothing, though. :up: :D
 
I haven't been on this site in over two months and wouldn't you know that an 'invitation' to hell would bring me back.

As always the characters are more colorful than a box of 64 crayola crayons.

Loves your work.
 
Very good Hunter, now all you have to do is bring D-Bella to my offices at the prison and we are golden...
 
Nice one hunter! I really like Bella's manager.:D ;) :up:
 
28/5/07..........returns from mid season break......just when ya thought it was safe:oldrazz::woot:
 
Watch what you say about that Bella chick, Mister J or she'll leave her footprints on your face and on your behind. :ninja:
Promises. Promises. :oldrazz:

Not in the face. That's how I makes my livin'. :o

Chapter 5

Fran:"Hey don't be like that,i think i saw you once on TV....are you a model ?"

Bella:"Jesus does that ever work ? seriously drop dead you greasy loser"

Fran:
"Huh ive seen hotter trannies anyway,i was just being nice"

Bella:
"I bet you f**ked those trannies as well since you've got about as much chance of seeing a ***** up close as Michael Jackson has of convincing anyone he's sane,now go *********e with some tweezers you little ****"

Fran:"....uh...uh...Tranny ****e!"

"And whats wrong with Trannies ?" a voice came from behind him

It was Tzarinna,she was the famous trannie cabaret singer from the Blue veil night club

Fran stared at her

Tza:" you want me to whip it out so we can measure ?"

Fran's face went red and he stormed out of the bar

28/5/07..........returns from mid season break......just when ya thought it was safe:oldrazz::woot:
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Chapter 6

Sarge spent the next week until Bella's next visit just getting by,he witnessed two shivings and a shower rape,his mind was starting to become cluttered with paranoia and he knew time was working against him.

Sarge woke up,Bella was visiting today,Sarge prayed she had some news,his hands were shaking as he made his way into the shower block where Badgerphil was standing with ETM who had become his new bodyguard since the last was shived 3 days ago by Farmer.

Badgerphil:"Yo Sarge,you lookin' a bit shakey there homes"

Sarge:"You got anything that could help ?"

Badgerphil:"Sure but nothin' is free in here"

Badgerphil winked and nodded towards his groin

Sarge:"**** you, i suck rod for no man"

ETM grunted

Badgerphil:"Woah easy,i was just messin' with ya playa,i'm strictly about the poon.....at least when they aren't interfering with ma money........No what i suggest is an exchange of favours of the non sexual variety"

Sarge:"Ok,what do you want me to do ?"

Badgerphil:"You see Farmer in their getting showered ?"

Sarge:"Yeah"

Badgerphil:"Well that racist fool did ma boy T-rag which means I'm down an enforcer,take him out and i can fix you up some happy times"

Sarge stared blankly

Sarge:"Ok,i'm gonna need a weapon"

Badgerphil motioned to ETM who took a shiv out of his pocket and handed it to Sarge

Sarge turned without saying a word and headed into the shower,he looked around,there were no guards,he came up behind Farmer and drove the shiv into his back and pushed up through his ribcage.......he knew how to kill a man quickly and silently......until now he'd never had to use that skill......

Blood gurgled out of Farmer's mouth as Sarge lowered his body to the floor

Sarge turned and walked out of the shower block throwing the shiv to ETM on the way

Sarge:"Bring what you owe me to my cell"

Badgerphil looked on with wide eyes

Badgerphil:"S...sure thing man......"

He turned to ETM as Sarge disappeared into the distance

Badgerphil:"Did you see that **** ? stone cold killer,didn't know he had it in him"

Around the corner in the broom cupboard Sarge sat with his head in his hands sobbing but his hands were shaking so violently that he couldn't get any comfort......He knew it was time for something
desperate.........................................



BUZZ!!!

The door opened to the visitors room and Sarge saw Bella sitting there waiting for him....he took his seat

Sarge:"What you got for me"

Bella:"I went to a club that NDX was taking bulk porn to"

Sarge:"What does that have to do with anything ?"

Bella:"Well i was looking to make a contact with the people he shared his love of female degradation with,maybe one of them knew where he kept the girls,perhaps they even got videos of the stuff off him"

Sarge:"I suppose it's worth a shot,did you get anywhere ?"

Bella:"No just a job"

Sarge looked puzzled

Bella:"Long story.....I'm gonna have to go back and break into the back area,i'll never get a legit search warrant"

Sarge:"Be Careful.......look i know how to find the girl but it's gonna take a drastic move"

Bella:"Such as ?"

Sarge:"I need to break me and him out"

Bella:"WHAT ?.."

The guards looked around and Bella laughed like it was some rude joke Sarge had told her

Bella:"Are you insane ? you can't break one of the most deadly serial killers of recent times out of prison,it's way to risky...No way!"

Sarge:"Then the girl is dead"

Sarge got up to leave but Bella grabbed his hand

Bella:"You can't be serious with this Sarge"

Sarge sat back down

Sarge:"Ive spent enough time with this **** to know that he isn't gonna give the locale up but if we were on the outside he will show her to me......he is driven by his ego and need for control,if he gives me the location in here then he can't see my reaction and show off his prize to me........he needs to take me there or we are not finding this girl ever"

Bella thought for a moment

Bella:"I'll have to talk to Dew......I can't promise anything"

Sarge:"Have you seen my wife Kmack ?"

Bella:"Not personally but the guys are checking up all the time,she is doing fine but misses you and is naturally worried since she has no idea where you are"

Sarge sighed

Sarge:"Get the OK for me Bella or I'm out"

He got up from the table and the guard escorted him back to the cells

Bella went to Showtime's office and laid out what Sarge had told her

Showtime:"Seems like a big call is due.....what about this club,when are you gong back ?"

Bella:"After what Sarge asked i'm going tonight,just in case i can find something that avoids this craziness"

Showtime:"Well i'm free"

Bella looked surprised

Bella:
"It's off the books Showy,we'd be civilians:"

Showtime:"I know but i don't like the idea of you going alone and Ive seen some action before i took this job so i want to go along"

Bella:"It's a date then"

Back in his cell Sarge played with the package Badgerphil had brought him,a syringe and a little bottle of fluid balanced in his hands...he stared long and hard at them and then closed his eyes.......all he could see was the faces of Cine and Farmer,the life drained from their eyes.....Sarge opened his eyes and took a kerchief out of his pocket,he tied it around his upper arm and tapped for a vein........he took the needle and drew in the liquid from the bottle and pushed the needle into his vein wincing as he did.......he felt his arm go warm,he sat for a few minutes and then lay back and closed his eyes,all he saw was blurry shapes and colours........no more pain for a few hours at least


To Be Continued
 
Sweet I'm a drug dealing thug and I have a body guard, always wanted to be a drug dealing thug w/ a body guard. :woot:

Awesome as always, Hunter. :up:

Next time not so freaking long :cmad:

I kid.
 
Great attention to detail. :up:
That shootin up almost sounds appealing. :csad:
Hope to see another installment soon. :mad: :oldrazz:
 
That's great, hunter! I think the best character here is Showy, also dialogues sound very cool :up:

Great job, man ;)
 
I like that fact that I am going out on the town with Bella, not a bad way to spend Chapter 7.
 
I had to go back and real them all over cause it's been so darn long I forgot what was going on:cmad: Hunter you are one twisted puppy, I love it.:woot: :up:
 

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