X3: Rewrite-A-Scene

kinberg and penn might take this thread as offensive...so shove it in their faces! :up:
 
Slim_X said:
Wolverine: "Hey, if you wanna go be sure it's what you want"

Rogue: "You're right! I shouldn't take the cure... in fact, I'll be part of the final battle and kick some Brotherhood ass"

In all seriousness...

Logan: You just have to ask yourself...are you Rogue or are you Marie?

That would have left things a bit more ambiguous instead of Rogue wanting Logan to call her Marie.
 
Scene Xavier's Death

Storm and Logan both race to the attic. The house suddenly takes of from its foundation. It spins, knocking Logan from his feet to a far corner of the living room. Storm hovers to keep herself off the floors. Logan simply glares at her.

Logan: A little help here, please?

Storm: I'm sorry, WHAT! Because I could have sworn you just asked for help, and said please.

Logan: You know what, NEVERMIND!

Storm simply shrugs turns around and easily floats her self up to the second floor hallway. She sits down underneath the railing to have herself a good look as Logan attempted to upright him self. The house spins aburtly. Storm simply leaned into the direction of the spin. Logan is helpless as he topples where ever gravity and centripacal force take him.
 
Goddessreicho said:
Scene Xavier's Death

Storm and Logan both race to the attic. The house suddenly takes of from its foundation. It spins, knocking Logan from his feet to a far corner of the living room. Storm simply hovers to keep herself off the floors. Logan simply glares at her.

Logan: A little help here, please?

Storm: I'm sorry, WHAT! Because I could have sworn you just asked for help, and said please.

Logan: You know what, NEVERMIND!

Storm simply shrugs turns around and easily floats her self up to the second floor hallway. She sits down underneath the railing to have herself a good look as Logan attempted to upright him self. The house spins aburtly. Storm simply leaned into the direction of the spin. Logan is helpless as he topples whereever gravity and centripacal force take him.

Cont'd

Storm bites down on her lip and sits on her hands to hold back from pointing and laughing.

Logan: Glad your enjoyin' this Darlin. Cause instead of that you could get that nice a$$ of yers down her to help me.

Before he can even start to glare at her a glass table crashes into him. Storm flinches at the unexpected blow and the sound of the broken glass. Logan has seemingly had enough. The house begins another quick ascent. He un-snikts his claws and uses them as leverage against the hardwood floors. The added pressure of gravity makes his crawl to the stairs nearly unbearable.
 
Final Battle Scene:

Soldiers shoot the cure at Phoenix.

Wolverine: No. Don't

Phoenix telekinetically disintegrates the cure and kills the entire army. At the same time, Cyclops arrives after being flown by Angel.

Cyclops: We all love Jean but Phoenix must be stopped. If her powers keep escalating, she could wipe out San Francisco...

Storm: and more. Iceman, Kitty get everyone out of here. The rest us will stop Jean.

Colossus throws Beast armed with the cure at Phoenix, but she easily throws Beast back at Colossus, knocking both of them out. Storm sends a tornado toward the preoccupied Phoenix. The other X-Men see the great strain upon Storm and Phoenix shielding herself with telekinesis. Storm collapses and the tornado ends. Wolverine runs towards the still standing Jean who is telekinetically ripping him apart. Only Logan's healing factor is allowing Wolverine to approach.

Dark Phoenix: You'll die for them.

Wolverine: Not for them. For you.

Wolverine tackles Phoenix to the ground. He raises his right claw preparing to end Jean Grey/ Phoenix's life. Jean persona reasserts herself.

Jean: Logan, please do it, kill me while I'm still in control.

Wolverine: I can't do it Jean. I love you.

Phoenix: How touching.

Phoenix reasserting herself telekinetically throws Wolverine. Cyclops is standing witnessing the further destruction of Dark Phoenix. You can see the inter turmoil in his face. Scott decides he must be an X-Man before a man in love.

Cyclops: I love you Jean so much.

Cyclops reluctantly shoots an optic blast at Phoenix. Phoenix, still alive, falls to the ground. Cyclops runs up to Jean who has reasserted herself.

Jean: Scott, help me. I can feel Dark Phoenix taking control. I've killed hundreds of people; I even killed Professor Xavier...And a part of me liked it. Please, KILL ME NOW!

Cyclops: I can't Jean. I love you.

Jean telekinetically pushes Cyclops down and runs away. Cyclops follows. Jean stops running. She telekinetically stops Cyclops and pulls him towards her.

Cyclops: Jean, it doesn't have to end like this. You can fight your evil side.

Jean: I can't fight it. Not every single second of every single day, never slipping not even for a moment. I have to much power. I can't be allowed to live. I know now what needs to be done. I love you Scott. A part of me will always be with you.

Jean Grey telekinetically removes Cyclop's visor and forces Scott to open his eyes with his telekinesis. With the full force of Cyclops's optic blast, Jean Grey dies. Cyclops holds Jean Grey's lifeless body in his arms. Wolverine stands over the two. Logan can't believe what just happened. He heartbroken that jean is gone.
 
Goddessreicho said:
Cont'd

Storm bites down on her lip and sits on her hands to hold back from pointing and laughing.

Logan: Glad your enjoyin' this Darlin. Cause instead of that you could get that nice a$$ of yers down her to help me.

Before he can even start to glare at her a glass table crashes into him. Storm flinches at the unexpected blow and the sound of the broken glass. Logan has seemingly had enough. The house begins another quick ascent. He un-snikts his claws and uses them as leverage against the hardwood floors. The added pressure of gravity makes his crawl to the stairs nearly unbearable.

Cont'd

The house rises again, as it does it spins cointinually this time. Logan is abruptly taken from the floor to the wall. His back slams into the wall with no mercy. Storm just once again slightly leans to the right. Using his claws again, he climbs against the wall, the whole times he glares at Storm. Its once again obvious that his thoughts are all sorts of nasty. She squints back brushes dirt of her jeans and shrugs.

As he is mere inches from his "partner", a clawed hand reaches out to possible use her as leverage, when she rolls her eyes. He growls and reaches again. She's about to pull him up when a shawdow above her catches her attention. She looks up and drops her hand. Then she casually backs away from him.

Logan: What the hell...

She simple gives him a pout and a soft smile.
Storm: Logan, I would apologize, but ah I'm not sorry.
She then points up.

Logan sees it and gives her the dirtiest look he can muster. He tries to unclaw himself from the floor as quickly as possible, but the added weight by gravity makes it impossible.

Before he can throw insults at her, the grand piano crashes into him.
 
There are two scenes i would rewrite (well actually its more like extending the scene to add things we wanna see). One involves Rogue actually kickin some ass and the other is being able to see colossus and juggs get in a lil tussle.

When storm, wolvie, and xavier go to get jean at her house they shoulda had rogue go with them (at first they tell her she cant go but she convinces them to let her). Then when the fighting breaks out logan and storm tell her to stay back. but when she sees that wolvie is gettin his ass kicked by juggs she sneaks up behind juggs and grabs him. while he's hunched over from being drained she starts kickin the crap outta him with him eventually winding up down the street.

The other scene i would add to is at the end when juggs starts running into the building to get the boy. at first it shoulda been colossus going after him. colossus woulda tackled his ass to the ground then they start to go at it. but eventually juggs is able to get away from colossus long enough to start running into the building again. then when kitty sees he got past colossus thats when she goes after juggs herself.
 
THANKS FOR SAYING MINE SUCKS *******!!!

*cries in the corner because nobody loves him*

:(
 
Okay, here's my shot at Scott in the final battle with Jean. Y'all have already done such a wonderful job I don't think I'm adding anything new. Here it is nevertheless.



Scott and Logan have fought their way to near where Jean is poised – unleashing her powers to back up the fighting Brotherhood members.

Logan
You have to do it. I’ll cover you.

Scott
Now!​

They run towards Jean. Wolverine fights off a few Brotherhood goons as Scott hurries to Jean.

Scott
Jean!​

Jean turns to face Scott. He steps towards her.

Jean
Stay away from me!​

Her powers flare up – she begins to wreak havoc on Scott’s surroundings. He continues to approach her.

Jean[now painfully]
I’ll kill you Scott.​

He’s close to her now.

Scott
No you won’t Jean. Because I know you. You gave your life for us. You love us. You love me.​

Jean is torn. Tears stream down her face. Her powers continue to flare.

Scott
Jean I love you. Now fight it!​

Jean suddenly cuts off her powers. She slouches in grief and pain.

Jean[in tears]
Scott!​

He rushes to her. They embrace. Her eyes suddenly burn with flames – Scott does not see as he holds her. The fire immediately dies out.

Jean
Scott, I –​

Scott
It’s all right Jean.

Jean
No it’s not.​

She pulls away.

Jean
I can’t control it Scott. She’ll be back. [beat] You have to stop me.​

She gently reaches for his visor.

Scott
Jean, no! You don’t have to do this.

Jean
Yes I do. Because I can’t let myself harm anyone again. [beat] I don’t have much time.​

Scott allows her to remove the visor. But his eyes are closed.

Jean
Please Scott!

Scott[tearfully]
I can’t!

Jean
You must! Show me your eyes – one last time.​

His tension eases. She knows he’s about to do it.

Jean
I love you Scott Summers.​

Scott opens his eyes, holding Jean. Briefly, we see his eyes as she does. Then a scream. A flash. Scott holds the lifeless body of Jean Grey.
 
Nell2ThaIzzay said:
THANKS FOR SAYING MINE SUCKS *******!!!

*cries in the corner because nobody loves him*

:(

Yours does not suck! You have the best descriptions:

The Alcatraz complex continues to fall into ruin from Jean's powers. The waters of San Francisco Bay begin to rise hundreds of feet into the air around the island. Cyclops looks around, taking in all the destruction, and then turns to look back at Jean, surrounded by fire and destruction, as if Hell itself were being unleashed upon Earth, and Jean was the messenger of destruction

:up:
 
I think you all know where these fit so I won't set the scenes up.
Juggernaut: You gonna let me outa here? I have to poo.

Magneto to Jon after freeing Juggs..."Now thats a dorky looking helmet"

Mystique: My parents tried to kill me ya herpe.

Xavier: Get to Alkali lake...and take Colossus, Rogue and Bobby.

Xavier: She's gone to her house...we better take Colossus just in case we have unexpected company...we could use the extra muscle.

Scott to Jean..."You'll never take me alive! Oh crap"

Xavier to Jean :Where are you parents? Who was making tea?!

Wolverine: Way ta go, Hank
or McCoy...

Magneto playing chess...does not wave hand over metal chess piece...it moves on its own and he says..."Hello, Charles"

person in bed after credits..."Moira...help...me"....Moira: Scott?

Xavier to Colossus: You know...one day I'll be gone...Someones got to have my TV and its not going to be Storm thats for sure.

Xavier to Storm: No you won't be getting my TV, isn't leading the team and taking over the school enough? Geez and I thought Logan was the selfish one...always wanting to know about his past and wanting me to use cerebero and interfering with Jean and Scott's relationship...he was going to propose to her you know.

Xavier: Storm...they're announcing it now...oh and stop interrupting me and don't pretend you can have an intelectual debate with Hank, its embarrassing.

On the way to Alcatraz
Angel: Do you have room for one more?
Wolverine: No, but you can follow us if you like.
Storm:Logan
Angel:Its okay...I'll race ya...I can fly faster than that old black bird anyday.
 
ThE_PhOeNiX said:
Ok i came up withsome funny ones.

Storm: Its time we make our choice if your with us then be with us, and if not then go wax the x-jet and use cold water keeps it nice and bright.

Logan: Im not your father but its still ok if you call me daddy.

Jean: Please kill me...again.

Logan: Look at me jean we can help you, we can make it like it was, losing weight isnt that hard.

Funny...I know this is serious thread and all, but, hey, funny!
 
My idea for Professor X's death scene:

Professor X en Magneto enter Jean's bedroom.
They look around the faintly lit room. On the walls are posters and pictures of birds. On her desk sits a picture of her and another young girl. Her parents left the room the way it was when she left with Xavier.

They hear sniffeling, and find Jean sitting in a corner next to her bed. She has her arms wrapped around her legs, and her head resting on her knees. Her red hair is frizzled, and her shoulders jerk uncontrollably.

XAVIER: Jean...

Jean looks up. There are trails of tears on her cheeks.

JEAN (sobbing): Please, don't come near me.

XAVIER: It's alright Jean, I'm here to help you.

Xavier closes his eyes, and probes Jean's mind, trying to restore the mental blocks.
Slowly, objects in the room start to move. Pictures fall of the wall, and closets tremble, spilling their contents over the floor.

MAGNETO: Charles...

The professor doesn't respond.

Jean clenches her teeth, her eyes roll behind the closed lids.

MAGNETO: Charles! Stop it!

The room starts to shake more violently. Windows shatter, closets topple over, and the bed snaps in half.
Then the entire room goes silent.

Alarmed the professor opens his eyes.

Jean's eyes fly open, they are fiery yellow. Her gaze pierces the professor's.

JEAN (hissing): Are you trying to cage me again?

Before the professer can react, Jean pushes his wheelchair away from her. Magneto is flung backwards against the bedroom door.

XAVIER: Jean! I'm trying to help you!

In one swift move, Jean gets up from the ground, and spreads her arms.

XAVIER: Jean!

JEAN: I...AM...PHOENIX!

Fire springs from Jean's skin.
The whole room gets caught in a whirlwind of telekenesis. The desk and closet shatter to bits, and along with broken toys and pictures, whirl around the room.

Slowly, Xavier is lifted from his chair.

XAVIER: Jean! I know you're still there! Stop this!

PHOENIX: You won't control me again!

Xavier now hangs completely in the air. Little bits of his skin and clothes start to tear themselves loose.

XAVIER: You already killed the man you loved because you couldn't control yourself!

For a moment, the fire in Jean's eyes fades. She blinks with her eyes, not fully realizing where she is.

JEAN (whispering) Scott...

The next moment, the fire in Jean's eyes intsifies again. Debris whirls around the room even harder.

PHOENIX: No!

MAGNETO: Charles!

The next moment, the professor explodes in a cloud of molecules.

Phoenix's fire fades, the room goes dark again, and Jean falls unconscious to the ground.

Slowly, Magneto gets up, and looks down at Jean.
Outside, the sound of sirens and cars pulling up can be heard.
Magneto looks down on Jean again. Then Juggernaut and Callisto walk in, they look around the room, stunned at the destruction.

MAGNETO: We're leaving.

Magneto motions for Juggernaut to take Jean.
 
Im trying to rewrite Rogue's story arc, i know it got too long :(


SCENE 1​

Rogue: Is it true, they can cure us???
Professor: It appears to be so, Rogue...
(everybody looks at her, just like in the real scene)
Storm: I know the idea is tempting for you, dear, but think about it before you give up your uniqueness. You are an X-men now, a part of us.
(silence)
Rogue: Im sorry, Storm...im an X-men who can only hurt people, my own friends. My uniqueness is an illness, i dont know if i can live with that... Im not a hero.
Storm: You can be one. If you accept yourself.




SCENE 2​

Wolverine: You're leaving us, kid?
Rogue: No...Logan, you dont know what is like to afraid of your powers, afraid to get close to anybody.
Wolverine: Yes, i do.
Rogue: i wanna be able to touch people, Logan. A hug, a handshake, a kiss.
Wolverine: I just hope you're not doing this for some boy.
(silence)
Rogue: Its for myself. I've tried to deal this. I tried to become an X-men, a part of this team, but i cant help others and myself, Logan. Im not able to simply ignore this which might be my only chance of a normal life. And i know this chance wont last too long.
Wolverine: Look im not your father, im your friend. You wanna go? Go, just be sure it what you really want.
Rogue: Good bye, Logan.
(they hug)
Wolverine: i think a "see you later" would fit more.
(she smiles and leaves)


SCENE 3​

(Rogue goes to the line, Iceman arrives some moments later, there's the scene with Pyro, but before he burns the clinic, Iceman sees Rogue and goes to talk to her)
Bobby: Rogue!!!!!!!
Rogue: What are you doing in here, Bobby?
Bobby: i Didnt want you to do this, we can find another way.
Rogue: This is my way Bobby. And its not for you, its for my own life.
Bobby: Do you really think you'll have a normal life after you get cured? The prejudice might be the same, or even higher.
Rogue: I know all this debate. And you know that unlike many in this line, im not doing this to avoid the prejudice of being a mutant.
Bobby: But Rogue...
Rogue: Dont try to stop me. Nobody knows how it has been in these last years. I want my life back.
(the clinic gets exploded)
Bobby: John!
(Rogue is in awe, she gets desperate)
Rogue: NO!!!!I have to get in there!
Bobby: its over, Rogue, come on!!!!
(she touches Bobby and he falls on the ground)
Rogue: Im sorry.
(she runs inside, she has no more gloves)
Soldier: You're not entering, girl. This place is on fire!
Rogue: Your forehead...its hurt.
(she touches his forehead, and breaks in, avoiding fires and freezing some of it. She gets to a room full of cure needles. She takes one and points it to her arm. She closes her eyes strongly and tears come down.)


SCENE 4​

(While the X-men are on the Jet to the final battle, Rogue arrives at the mansion)
Rogue: Where is everyone?
Angel: A war is going on.
Rogue: I noticed, but where are them?
Angel: They went to San Francisco, a terrorist is trying to destroy the cure.
(Rogue runs)
Jubilee: Where are you going, Rogue?
Rogue (whispers to herself): im trained.
Angel: Wait!


SCENE 5​

(Rogue finds a second little Jet at the hangar.)
Angel: Can you fly this?
Rogue: Yeah...but im afraid we wont get in time.
(the jet lifts)



SCENE 6​

-FINAL BATTLE GOING ON-

(Angel flies down with Rogue in his arms. He drops her on the floor and takes two thugs, flying up with them.)
Bobby: So You...
Rogue: I still can fight.
Storm: Rogue!
(three guys run to her, she defeats them fighting)
(Wolverine stops beating guys and runs to her)
Wolverine: Rogue, no! back to jet!
(she defeats more two mutants fighting)
Rogue: I thought i was an X-men!


SCENE 7​

(after more final battle scenes, Juggernaut comes running)
Juggs: Come on, *****, i aint finished you yet!
Kitty: Not again...
Colossus: He's mine.
(Colossus run and punches him. They fight, but Colossus lose. Juggs runs to Kitty again, he passes through her)
Rogue: Kitty, help me!
(Rogue takes off her gloves)
Kitty: You're still a...
(Kitty grabs Rogue by her tummy and they run against Juggernaut. They pass through him and Rogue climbs him reaching his head with her hands while Kitty stops touching her. Juggernaut goes on his knees and shakes so Rogue falls on the ground.)


(Juggernaut stands up, loOks at Rogue and walk to her)
Juggernaut: So the stopple wants to stop me!
Bobby: Noooooooooooooooo!
(Juggs punches her face. In slow motion, you see Rogue's face getting punched, but she stops and look back at him.)
Juggernaut: What the...?
(Bobby is confused)
Rogue: Your time, *****.
(she dashes through under his legs, gets behind him, jumps and kicks his head. The helmet goes off. He turns to her, they fight, punching and defensing. He backs away and build momentum, running against her. She falls on the ground, is hurt, but stands up. she does a backflip and then jumps ahead on his direction with both arms extended hitting his chest. He falls on the ground. She runs and touches his head)
Rogue: Grrrrrrrr (well, she's absorbed the Juggernaut :p)
(she throws him up while he's still recovering, and when he's coming down, she "roundhouse kicks" him, HA, she's TEH Chuck Norris. He falls unconscious. She is on her knees, with both hands on her head, and starts to yell. She shakes her head and falls on the ground. Storm looks at her, comes running, takes her and fly her to a safe place)


SCENE 8​

Well, we then see Rogue running with Iceman and Kitty after the Phoenix starts going crazy.


SCENE 9​

-MANSION-
Bobby: Its good to know you didnt take it. We will find a way...
Rogue: I...i'm still not sure, Bobby...
Bobby: You were amazing there, Rogue.
(They hug, he leaves her room. She goes to her desk, and takes a cure syringe from inside a drawer.)
Rogue: The X-men life makes you proud for seconds Bobby, but it doesnt make me who i am...the biggest moments of my life will still be the lonely ones...
(she stares at the syringe)
 
Really great ideas, Flavio. Wish some of them were in the film, Rogue/Anna role would have been so much better, more interesting...

Poor use of her in the film. Sad.
 
Bobby is walking to Rogues room & he sees Colossus

Bobby - "Hey have you seen Rogue"

Colossus - "She left"

Bobby - "What are you doing with that TV"

Colossus - "Since Scott is dead I figured he would not be needing it now my room has Two TVs"

Bobby - "Nice"

Logan (walking up to Colossus from behind) says

Logan "Hey Tin Man"

Colossus - "I have a name you know"

Logan - "Okay how about Muscle Boy"

Colossus (sighs) what do you want Logan"

Logan - "Thats my TV"

Colossus - "I called dibs for it in the meeting you already tried stealing Scotts girl this is mine"

Logan - "You will hand over that TV now mister" (says this doing his best Tackleberry from Police Academy impression & then Logan gets out his claws"

Colossus puts down TV & metals up

Logan - "Do you really want to take me on"

Colossus "You bet I do bub"

Logan charges towards Colossus but Colossus blocks Logans attack & throws him to the other side of the mansion. Logan gets up & says

Logan - "Now I'm mad"

Colossus - "Bring it on"

Both charge at each other

The End
 
FINAL BATTLE SCENE


The X Jet flies into action. They see what Magneto and his merry band of brotherhood members has done to the Golden Gate bridge.

Beast - Oh my stars and garters.

Cyclops - Storm, we're going to need some cover.

Storm - I'm on it.

Storm's eyes change colors as fog suddenly covers the entire playing field.


Meanwhile on the base Magneto looks at Jean Grey.

Jean Grey - They're here.

Pyro lunges forward ready to attack without even knowing who he is attacking.

Magneto pulls him back.

Magneto - Steady.

Mystique gazes at Jean Grey and then back at Erik. She puts her hand on Eriks shoulder.


Meanwhile the X-Men land the X-Jet.

Prof. X on an interactive machine that projects his voice and body.

"Erik what have you done? X-Men I need you to split up into three teams. Cyclops you and your team need to find Magneto. Stop him. Scott...do it at any means necessary. Storm you and your team need to protect the base at all costs. Stop the mutants coming in. Protect the people. Don't let them get inside and hurt anyone else. Hank..I want you to take a team of three into the base and find the boy. Protect him, get him to safety. X-Men..I just want to say..."

Cyclops - Professor we know. Alright people you heard him we have to move now.

Storm - Kurt, do you think you can teleport me into the outlaying area of the base. I have a feeling someone’s going to get wet today.

Beast - If my calculations were correct I think we can move into the outlaying sides of the building and then move into a small hole that Magneto seems to have smashed when dropping that bridge. The repairs alone are going to cost in my calculations at least 103...

Wolverine - Less talking, more action bub.

Beast - Wolverine really, I know you are ready to fight but please don't harm any innocents in your rage.

Wolverine with a wink - Don't worry about it. I'm the best at what I do.

Kitty Pride - Hank I'm coming inside with you.

Iceman - Kitty, no its too dangerous. I don't want anything to happen to you.

Beast sarcastically- Bobby, she can walk through walls you’ know. She might be helpful.

Iceman - Well I'm coming with you inside then.

Rogue watches from a distance as a tear looks to begin producing, suddenly behind her she notices someone.

Gambit - Shar' I know I may be new to this X-Men thing and all but isn't that suppose to be your boyfriend?

Rogue's sadness turns to anger as she slams Gambit hard against the wall and runs off.

Rogue - SHUT UP!

Gambit regaining himself from the hard slam against the wall.

"What did I do!?"

The team knows their orders. The Professor told them as much. They also know that this is a big battle. They don't all know who might be coming back. Magneto is out of control. This cure could be the end of mutants as they know it. And only one team can stop them. That's the X-Men. They also have to protect the innocents. The humans. Storm, Kurt, Colossus and Logan will see to that. Leading the dangerous mission full of unexpected risks to rescue the boy, the boy named Leech, is Hank McCoy followed by Iceman, Kitty Pride and Warren. Finally the team taking on Magento and his brotherhood themselves is Cyclops, Rogue, Gambit and Jubilation Lee.

But one thing isn't being discussed. One thing that is on everyone’s mind. One fallen comrade who is in this battle, but might be on the wrong side. Jean Grey. Or is it even Jean? How could she have survived Alkali Lake. And what is she doing with Magneto. The Prof. tried to reach her at her house and she destroyed it. That's when Magneto took her. But why would she go with him? Scott has heard her voice in his head, screaming for help. He tried to reach out to her when they brought her back to the mansion. But she wouldn't let him in. Logan took the more director approach and she threw him against the wall. Whatever is wrong with Jean, for whatever reason she is here now. The X-men don't want to talk about it. But they all are thinking it.

Nightcrawler - As I walk through the valley of the shadow of death I shall fear no evil...

As the teams separate Logan and Scott are left, to go one way and face Magneto straight on, and another way to sneak in the back and try and protect the base.

Logan - Scott...

Scott - Logan no. I don't want to hear this. Go with Storm, we've wasted too much time already.

Logan begins to walk away but has one last thing to say.
Scott knows this.

Silence.

"Just bring her back."



Pyro, Magneto, Jean Grey, Mystique, Psylocke, Wanda, Quicksilver, and Juggernaut along with 2000 morlocks and a half dozen other mutants such as Toad are gathered on the remains of the golden gate bridge. Victory was almost imminent. The humans didn't see it coming. Not something this drastic. Not something this soon.

Bodies of brotherhood members and humans lost in the battle before the X-men arrived lie scattered. Also victims, innocents of Magnetos rage tearing the bridge in half, some mothers, some children, lay scattered as well.

Juggernaut - I can't see a damn thing in this fog. I want to go smash some more people. Kill that kid. Thinking' he can cure mutants. YOU CANT CURE ME KID!

Wanda - Excuse me but are you even a mutant. I don't think so.

Magento - Real apple of your eye their huh Magneto.

Quicksilver - Wanda don't antagonize the guy, I'll have to stand up for you and he will kick my ass.

Scarlet Witch - You could outrun hi..

"THATS ENOUGH MAGNETO. THIS ENDS NOW."

Through the fog Cyclops emerges. Jubilation Lee, Gambit and Rogue follow with Rogue stepping over a fallen brotherhood member and crushing him into a hole in the ground from the impact. Gambit looks at her and smiles.

At the same time Storm, Nightcrawler, Collosus and Logan appear at the front of the base. A shaken guard, one of the only left at the moment looks at Nightcrawler. He smiles. The guard faints.


Jubilation Lee - THAT'S MAGNETO?!!? This is the guy who could end the world as we know it?! Eww.. are you 60 years old already or what old man.


Magneto is amused.

Magneto speaks to everyone he sees.

All of you. Do you not see what I am trying to do here. That cure is meant for everyone.

Cyclops - Killing innocents. My god Magneto look at what you have done.

Rogue - This isn't the way sugah.

Mystique rolls her eyes.

Magneto can now see visibly as the fog begins to lift. He sees Storm and the others farther away by the base.

Magneto is now visibly upset.

"TRAITORS TO YOUR OWN CAUSE"

Cyclops can now see Jean.

Cyclops - Jean?!

Jean - Scott!

Jean suddenly shakes back and forth. Psylocke grabs her and takes her back beyond where she can be seen.

Cyclops - JEAN!

Magneto - Kill them now.

Morlocks charge forward along with other brotherhood members including Pyro. They are fierce. Rogue, Gambit, and Jubilation Lee prepare for battle.

Gambit to Cyclops

Gambit - Shake out of it monime' its frighten time and these fools are hungry for it.

There are so many that immediately many run past the first group of four and are coming quickly at Storm, Kurt, Colossus and Logan. Logan draws his claws out.


Meanwhile

Beast - Wwwhat. My calculations. There is suppose to be a door right here.

Angel - Hank its ok. I know this building. This is where my dad...where... Find another way in, I'll meet you guys inside.

Angel takes flight to the sky and away.

Iceman - If I had a freak son like that I would want him cured too.
Bobby laughs. Kitty slugs him.
Iceman - hey!


About 300 feet away and out of sight but not out of hearing range Jubilation Lee unleashed her lightning bolts at a humongous rate which sends shockwaves and many morlocks immediately to their deaths as you still hear the crisp sound on the ground and smoke coming out of them.

Jubilation Lee - haha!

Gambit as he is being punch with a morlock on top of him.

Gambit - Shar-

-I'm

-impressed.

Suddenly a huge thud as twelve morlocks are all thrown at Gambit knocking the guy off him and making a barrel of thirteen morlocks knocked out nearby.

Rogue - FOCUS CAJIN!


Cyclops blasts morlocks right and left. All he wants is Jean.

Scott - Jean!

He sends out and optic rage that knocks 20 or so of them into the air. He continues moving forward.


Logan slices and dices morlocks left and right as they continue to try and attack him.

Wolverine - NOW I'M HAVING FUN!

He jumps in the air leaving his line and becoming more into the middle of the two lines.

Storm sees this and lightning produces out of no where striking the ground.

I HATE IT WHEN HE LEAVES FORMATION!

Colossus - Da.

And Colossus *slowly* tip toes away from the still angry and fiery Storm.

Storm raises herself into the air.

WILL OF THE GODESS OF WIND. HEAR ME! WIPE THESE MISGUIDED
MUTANTS AWAY FROM THIS BASE OF OPPERATION NOW!!

Suddenly a huge tornado appears whipping up at least 200 morlocks and sending them into the waters of the bay far from the battle.

Nightcrawler is hunched over praying and a few incoming morlocks don’t see him as much of a threat. They giggle and laugh. At that same moment he BAMFS in front of them and strike them down with his blade. He hails marry full of grace and BAMFS forward.


Back on the other side of the building Beast is still formulating a way in.
Beast - And if I calculate the distance in ratio to the for mentioned….
Iceman - Boring…
Beast - Bobby really if you would apply half that gusto of yours to your studies at the school, well you could become my top student in physics.
Kitty - Speaking of physics Hank, why don’t you left me handle this..
As she talks she grabs both the guys and they morf through the wall.
Iceman - Cool.
Hank - I guess…I guess that works as well.
Kitty - Ok lets find Warren and then find the boy.

The building suddenly goes bom!
Iceman - Ok what was that?!

The bom was Colossus throwing people into the base made of steel with his sheer force as we rejoin the action in the front.

As more Morlocks attack the front Storm raises herself into the air once more.
HEAR ME AGAIN! MAKE IT RAIN! RAIN DOWN AND WASH AWAY THESE POOR MISGUIDED MORLOCKS!
A huge tidal wave is produced.

Logan - What the hell.
The wave blasts him backwards along with the 700 or so other mutants who he was planning on taking on alone.

Back in the front lines avoiding the tidal wave Rogue continues smashing morlocks and picking them up as Gambit fights hand to hand combat right next to her.
Mystique notices the attraction these two share and smiles.
Mystique - Erik send more of them in.
Juggernaut - Its playtime.
Pyro and Juggernaut take off.
Scarlet Witch - Dad this needs to end. You cant do this.
Magneto - Quicksilver do you agree with Scarlet Witch. My own children. DO YOU not see what we are trying to accomplish here.
Scarlet Witch - Its just…this all is too much. And that girl. What is wrong with her?
FURTHER BACK JEAN GREY IS STRUGGLING TO CONTAIN THE BEAST INSIDE HER.

Inside the base Hank McCoy, a real Beast so to speak, is wandering around.
Iceman - This place gives me the creeps. Curing mutants, against their will.
Iceman shivers.
Kitty - Cute Bobby.
Kitty holds both of them as they walk from wall to wall almost nonchalantly.
Kitty - Where is Warren?
Beast - You know I don’t think this is going to be half bad. This whole place appears to be empty.
FREEZE RIGHT THERE YOU MUTANT SCUM.
Beast - Or not.

Back in the front Juggernaut and Pyro on his back charge through knocking down even people on their side. They don’t care who they harm.
Rogue - Oh come on..
They run right past her knocking her down.
Gambit rushes over after taking aim swiftly with a stick he produced to knock out another morlock.
Gambit - SHAR! You alright!!
Rogue - I’m fine...I can’t believe he knocked me down.

Scarlet Witch wants to leave this battle.
Magneto - You go now. you’re no longer one of us.
Scarlet Witch - I don’t want to be your daughter.
Quicksilver -WANDA WAIT! Its not safe.

Rogue - Ok you two. Your not getting by like the last two did.
Scarlet Witch - Little girl. I advise you to move aside.
Gambit looking towards Quicksilver.
YOU MAY BE QUICK….(a deck of cards is produced..) BUT I’ll TAKE MY CHANCES.

The four go at in in an all out battle with their powers on display in awesome ways. Rogue and Gambit fight almost as a team now. Still bickering but something else is there between them.

Wolverine charges at Pyro and Juggernaut with the Jug knocking him flat on his back unconscious.
Cyclops sees this.
Cyclops - Logan.
He is unable to help though as more morlocks continue to gain up on him as he fights the remaining few in the front in hand to hand combat with blasts every now and then.
Jubilation Lee, also still in the front struggles with one morlock.
Jubilee- AHH!!
Morlock - Little miss independence day you are. So pretty…so so pretty. I want to look just like you.
Jubilee - Help!
She looks to an unconscious Logan.
Jubilee - Wolverine! Get up! Wolverine!

He lies there.

Storm swoops back down to the ground and tries to face the Juggernaut head on. He knocks her back with ease.
JUGGERNAUT - IM THE JUGGERNAUT *****!!
Nightcrawler sees this.
Kurt - Ororro!
A few morlocks try to gain the upper hand knowing that Storm is out. Nightcrawler BAMFS in from far away and saves her, kicking their asses down in slow motion much like the president battle.
This leaves only one X-Men left in the Juggernaut and Pyro’s path.
Colossus.



Beast looks around as over 500 armed guards are pointing red laser guns as himself, Iceman and Kitty Pride.
Guard - HANDS up you MUTANT!
Beast - We mean you no harm….
Iceman - Kitty when I say three.
Kitty - THREE!
Kitty and Bobby run right through the wall at rapid speed.
Beast- …But if we must.
HANK LUNGES INTO THE AIR in a fur ball frenzy he attacks the guards with martial arts like agility and speed knocking them out.
Iceman and Kitty run back in and out of the f\walls as Iceman freezes guards right and left.
Guard - She can run through the walls just like he said! Be careful!
Iceman ices him up.
Unbelievably and in a display of awesome power, the three X-Men have taken out the 500 guards.
Kitty - Who said?

I DID.

Kitty - Warren?!?!



Juggernaut - You ready to go pretty.
Colossus - Da.
Pyro - Watch out, Peter is one of the best.
Colossus - You remember.
Juggernaut - No one can beat the Juggernaut.
They run towards each other and Colossus gets the upper hand running Juggernaut through the wall with his amazing strength.
Juggernaut - How can this be?!
Colossus unmorphs for a second and cracks his neck.
He slowly morphs up again as he walks into the giant hole he created and Juggernaut screams like a little girl. Pyro runs off.

Up in the front Magneto and Mystique are no longer there.
Cyclops now free from any threat.
Cyclops - Where are they?

Rogue walks up to Gambit after taking Scarlet Witch and Quicksilver out.
Rogue - Why don’t you and I get a little more friendly.
Gambit - Ah Shar’ your making Gambit blush. But here and now? And what about your boyfriend.
Rogue - I need a real man sugah.
They kiss!
Gambit - But I’a thought…
ROGUE KNOCKS ROGUE OUT.
Rouge - I can’t.
Mystique transforms back into herself on the ground laughing.
Rogue - Come on *****…you and me. For old times sake.
Mystique - You fool. Phoenix will destroy everyone. This all has just been in preparation for her to unleash her furry. Destiny foresaw and Erik and I have been planning this ever since.
Gambit and Rogue - Phoenix?
Mystique - Now where is Erik? She can’t control it much longer.

Jubilee has taken out the morlock herself, she is more capable then she gives herself credit for. Suddenly Magneto is next to her.
Jubilee - Uhh Hi.
Magneto - Little girl..I came to personally do this myself.
Magneto unleashes down a large poll of magnetism that is on the base crashing it right into Jubilee…BUT LOGAN AWAKES and rushes over to stop it.
Wolverine - AHHHH!!!!
He knocks Magneto back.
Jubilee - You saved me…again.
Wolverine - Always kid.
They hug.


Kitty, Iceman and Beast are now tide up to chairs. The cure right next to them. Kitty looks at the syringe and a tear sheds.
Kitty - Warren why? I befriended you.
Warren - I…I can’t explain.
OH YES YOU CAN SON.
DAD?

Warren Senior - If Warren doesn’t want to be cured the least he can do for the time being is help me find other mutants that we can. Like the X-Men. Son..I’m so proud of you.
Warren - Ya..I guess…dad..
Beast - This is not the way to win your fathers love son.
Warren Senior - But it is the way to cure you freaks of your disease.
Iceman - Disease?! I swear when I get out of here.
His hands turn to ice and so does the rope tying him.
Kitty - Bobby run!
Iceman produces a giant ice slid and knocks out everyone in the room except Angel.
Angel -I’m so sorry. Please.
Iceman - Your toast.
Kitty - BOBBY!
Beast - The cure is being administered to use right now!
A machine has started sending needles inches away from Hank and Kitty. Iceman freezes the machine and breaks it quickly. He releases them. He turns.
Iceman - Where is he?
Kitty - He’s gone.

Beast - This can’t just be Warren. Other people than his dad too are behind this. Something isn’t right.
HANK MCCOY Right? You don’t know how right you are.
TRASK EMERGES
Kitty - Your that guy on the news..you say mutants are a disease. You think this cure is too small…something bigger you said..
Iceman - …Something more permanent.
Trask - Want to find out?
Beast - Where is Jimmy! Where is Leech!
Trask - Leech is dead. It’s time for the next phase. The next phase in evolution. The REAL evolution. The one MAN creates. And it’s about to begin.
Kitty - We’ve got to warn the others.
She grabs the guys and quickly morphs everyone through the wall.
Trask laughs and pushes a button.
SENTINELS AWAKEN.
 
Outside the X-Men all regroup as all threats have been neutralized minus Mystique and Magneto, Psylocke and Jean Grey. Jean lets out a huge scream in pain that Scott hears.
Scott - JEAN!
Suddenly he is struck down from behind.
Magneto - You. Charles raised you up right didn’t he boy. You and your pathetic band of X-Men.
Cyclops - He’s like a father to me. You can’t even be one to your OWN children.
Magneto - Ahh yes…the X-Men..fighting those who hate and fear them. The homo sapiens and their guns. And their cures. Cures to mutation. A world that wants you dead, wants you gone, wants to take away who you are so they can feel safe. So they can feel secure. Is this a world you want to live in.
Magneto lifts Cyclops into the air by the neck.
Cyclops - It …doesn’t ..have ..to ..be …like… that…
Kitty, Beast and Iceman all morph out the front as Storm, Kurt, Peter, Gambit, Rogue, Logan, and Jubilee regain group order.
Kitty - EVERYONE! WATCH OUT!!!

TARGET ALL MUTANTS. ALL MUTANTS. TARGETS IDENTIFIED.
MASSIVE MACHINE DROP DOWN FROM THE SKY, 50 IN ALL circling every square inch of the surrounding area.
Magneto drops Cyclops.
TARGET: MAGNETO..IDENTIFIED…CAPTURE.
Magneto is shot at as he grabs one sentinel and completely destroys it. But there are too many. They grab him and four fly off.
Mystique - NOO!!
TARGET: MAGNETOS CHILDREN…SCARLETT WITCH…QUICKSILVER…CAPTURE…
Four more take the unconscious Wanda and her brother and fly off into the air.

Pyro - Raven lets get out of here!
Juggernaut now conscious grabs Pyro and grabs Mystique and they run off into the distance.


Logan helps Scott up as the rest of the X-Men..Rogue..Gambit..Nightcrawler..Beast..Kitty Pride…Storm….Colossus….and Jubilee are all surrounded. Psylocke and Jean Grey kneeled down on the ground don’t escape the targets either.

TARGETS…UNIDENTIFED MUTANTS…..KILL ALL.

Jean Grey screams out in pain.
Jean Grey - NO..NO..Not again.
Logan - Jean!
A sentinel immediately attacks Logan and he jumps on it knocking it down on the ground slashing it apart.
YOU DON’T WANT TO MESS WITH ME BUB!
Cyclops starts blasting them as Storm gathers all gusto to raise into the air and attack with lightening bolts. Rogue raises herself into the air as well and begins smashing the Sentinels in the face. Nightcrawler morphs back and forth trying to attack with his blades. Beast swiftly attacks in his rage of the beast as Kitty stands by Iceman as he freezes all Sentinels attacking at them. Colossus picks one up and throws it at another as Jubilee attacks as many as possible with her lightening bolts drawn from her hands.
But there are too many they begin to knock X-Men out of the formational circle and off into the distance.
Cyclops is hit backwards hard.
Logan - Scott!
Logan - AHHHH!!!
He flings himself at a few more.
He sees Colossus fighting by him.
Wolverine - Hey Tin Man - How bought a lift.
Colossus smiles as he throws Wolverine fast and hard to the distance where a barely together Cyclops is about to be fried.
He leaps on them striking them out.
Wolverine - One, Two, Three…No I’m having fun.
Cyclops regains himself - Thanks.
Logan - Don’t mention it.
Suddenly 30 more surround them.
Logan - Or maybe do.

Storm yells out.
X-MEN BRACE YOURSELVES.
A strong wind picks up and all but Gambit are ready. As he throws his deck of cards straight at a sentinel he is lifted up and thrown a distance away.
ROGUE - CAJIN!
Rogue flies over and lifts Gambit up as he is about to be crushed by a giant Sentinels foot.
Gambit - Woooahh!
Flying in the air..
Gambit - You saved me Shar.
Rogue - Ya..we’ll don’t get used to it.
Gambit - Maybe Shar’ likes Gambit a little no?
Rogue drops Gambit to the ground, now in safety and flies away.
Gambit smiles.
Kitty - What are these things!
Iceman - I don’t know…but we’ve got to move! Hold on to me!
Iceman ice slides with Kitty away quickly.
Iceman - Whooo!!

Beast as he fights.
Beast - Trask sent them out. He’s trying to kill us all.
Night crawler - These are from Satan himself.
Nightcrawler BAMFS away as 5 missiles were about to strike him.

Jubilee - Colossus watch out!
Colossus is surrounded by 6 Sentinels ready to kill. He braces himself as Jubilee shots lightening bolts out of her hands and fingers to fry them.
Colossus - You saved me.
Jubilee - Don’t mention it.
Gambit throws his deck of cards and yells 52 PICK UP!
It knocks 7 back and they explode.
He blows on the card deck playfully.

Scott - Logan watch out.
Scott blasts a Sentinel that was about to strike an unsuspecting Logan.
Logan - Who would have thought you would be saving my ass ever.
As they continue to fight.
Logan - I mean the other way around, ya.
Scott - Must tear you up to see a good boy like me save your life again.
BOOM, BOOM, BOOM
7 Sentinels around them down.
Logan - Wow. Cyclops.
Cyclops - Wasn’t me.
Psylocke stands in striking pose, ready for more battle as she begins to take more Sentinels out.
Logan - She’s good.

Storm - X-Men, stay together…I’m not sure how much longer we can hold them off.
Storm is right. 100s upon 100s keep coming at them. As the team fights, some in twos, some alone, some in groups, more just keep coming. And situations begin to become precarious,
JEAN GREY - AHHHHHH!!!!!!!
AN AWESOME FORCE FIRES OUT OF JEAN GREY, LIKE A BIRD…LIKE A PHOENIX.
Logan, Scott - JEAN!!
ALL Sentinels turn towards Jean GREY.
TARGET MUTANT…MARVEL GIRL..MOST POWERFUL MUTANT HERE….KILL……

Jean Grey throws them backwards as she flies to the sky.
All the X-Men are stunned and shocked as a bright red bird flame engulfs her. Her hair blowing in the wind, bright red.
JEAN GREY - I AM PHOENIX.
She sends out a wave that spirals all the x-men to the ground and destroys all the sentinels. They ALL EXPLODE and the entire base shakes with smog and debris everywhere.
The X-Men slowly regain themselves. Gambit rushes to Rogue and Iceman watches. Kitty holds herself close to Bobby. They cough and regroup, disoriented.
Logan jumps up…Jean…JEAN!!
The smog begins to clear and Scott is holding Jean in his hands.
She appears lifeless.

All X-Men gather a few feet away and watch breathlessly. Rogue cries on Gambits shoulder and he holds her.
SUDDENLY JEAN COUGHS AND AWAKENS.
Cyclops. Tears having run down his face is shocked.
Scott - Jean? Jean is it you! Are you ok?
Jean - Scott…..Scott?? Where am I?
Suddenly Jean begins to remember. She rises.
Jean - Oh god. Oh no.
Scott -Jean! No ..not again! Jean what’s wrong. Jean let me in.
Jean - Scott kill me. Do it now. I can’t control it….its taking over…please…Scott…
Scott - I CAN’T.
Jean - Plea….
Jean’s eyes flutter and then regroup piercingly. She throws Cyclops backwards as all the X-Men watch in terror.
She rises to the sky.
Phoenix - POWER…SO MUCH POWER……
She flies away.
Cyclops - JEAN!!!!

Scene Change
A wealthy building. Lots of expensive things.
A woman dressed all in white walks in. A man is sitting in a chair.
The woman is Emma Frost.
Emma Frost - Sebastian?
He turns around. Sebastian Shaw is his name.
Emma Frost - We’ve found her.
He smiles.



ROLL CREDITS.
 
Scott arrives at Alkali Lake.

SCOTT​
Jean, please... I need you, so much.

Stumbling, he falls to his knees on a large rock. Something is flooding his mind, a call, a scream, a shriek. Jean extends her arm out for him. He reaches. No Jean, just reality.

SCOTT​
No! Jean, if you left... then why haven't you left me? I can't take this! I can't! Stay out! Please... just...

Filled with anger and frustration, Scott removes his ruby quartz shades. Without hesitation, he releases a raw optic blast at Alkali Lake.

SCOTT​
I'll do it! I will!

He can't hold back any longer. He opens his eyes, into the sky. Second after second, his optic beam is being released. Second after second, Scott Summers is growing weaker.

SCOTT​
Jean! I need to see you again! Feel you!

A drop of water flies from Alkali Lake onto Scott's face. He keeps going, shooting into the sky. More water splashes up. He subsides, putting his shades back on. Puzzled, he notices energy beneath the water, swirling around. Its the very same color of his own optic blasts. Suddenly, the water falls in itself, and violently crashes into ongoing waves. A whirlpool is the result, spinning fastly. The energy turns into a bright light, slowly rising, faster. The water explodes as the light hits the surface. Scott shakes his head, slowly rising. It bursts out, like an exploding star. A ball of pure energy, whisping out in vibrant shades of reds and yellows. Scott shielded his eyes. Something steps out from within it. Slowly falling in front of Scott. It was Jean Grey. the energy continued behind her, as if it was part of her. Scott looked up, amidst the intense brightness. Jean looked at him, and suddenly seemed confused. The flames shot back within her. Scott was only happy, he didn't care how it was.
SCOTT​
Jean...

JEAN​
Scott. I'm not sure how this -

SCOTT​
I don't care... I don't.

Scott walked closer to Jean. He embraced her sight. He softly touched her face.

SCOTT​
Its you.

JEAN​
Yes.

He kisses her, wrapping his arms around her.

SCOTT​
Never again. I won't let it happen again, Jean. I promise. I love you so much.

JEAN​
I love you too.

They pause, Scott sifts her hair through his fingers - Amazed.

JEAN​
Let me see your eyes.

SCOTT​
No, Jean -

JEAN​
Please, I can control it.

Scott reaches for his glasses, but before he can, they are gently taken off, hovering aside. Scott reluctantly opens his eyes. The light, the red, goes away. He looks all around, then back to Jean. He smiles, and they begin to kiss passionately. Jean, in an attempt to control his optic blasts, struggles. She begins searching, mentally, for a way. More and more of her power slips. Her eyes, her face, show the power. Everything about Jean Grey is changing. Its too much for her. The fire escapes her, in violent shades of red. Scott's skin begins to shake.

END SCENE

CUE FLASHBACK FOR SCOTT'S RETURN


Scott's skin begins to shake. He opens his eyes. Jean can't hold any longer; she can't control it. Glimpses of whats to come frightens her, releasing her constrant. A reaction happens. A telekinteic explosion parts the two, and Scott's optic beams return, knocking Jean to the ground, unconcious. Scott, in turn, is thrown into the wooded area from the impact. Only his shades are left, floating, with the rocks and dust created by the accident.
 
*The Batman* said:
FINAL BATTLE SCENE

"Erik what have you done? X-Men I need you to split up into three teams. Cyclops you and your team need to find Magneto. Stop him. Scott...do it at any means necessary. Storm you and your team need to protect the base at all costs. Stop the mutants coming in. Protect the people. Don't let them get inside and hurt anyone else. Hank..I want you to take a team of three into the base and find the boy. Protect him, get him to safety. X-Men..I just want to say..."

I like how there's reason and thinking behind their effort. :up:
I really missed that in the film.
 
Angamb said:
Really great ideas, Flavio. Wish some of them were in the film, Rogue/Anna role would have been so much better, more interesting...

Poor use of her in the film. Sad.
thank you :)
 
I don't want to offend anyone, but I cringe at some of the dialogue on here, but I suppose you're suckers for operatic sentimentality and tinge of fanboy desire, huh...?

No wonder there were already cheesy lines in X3, mostly said by Wolverine curiously enough.

There's only so many 'I love you!'s and 'you guys...' before, well... it was already old to start with so...

I know it's a film, but nearly all of the dialogue come off unrealistic, obvious, common and exaggerated. Out of character too.

The best ones, personally, are the ones that are simple and written with subtletly and profundity, not with embellishment. And furthermore taking into account the distinctive interaction for each character, not the same for everyone else, it can define, enrich and imbue even a single line that is directed at a certain character with double meaning.

And there then's the fanboy coming out in your description of the action, characters and so forth.

I know we all have a love of the Xmen, but we should think more like filmmakers who has in mind of every factor of the process, and less as fans who just wants to see Jubilee, Nightcrawler, etc thrown in just for the fun of it.

Your efforts are appreciated though; you should just consider the whole framework of the film as, well, a film, and the smaller chunks that we feel obligated to write, in keeping with resonance and narrative significance.
 
I thought about the ending ... I was in bed, thinking and I thought of this... Scott shows up just before Logan kills Jean. The moment he shows up, Jean holds Phoenix back long enough to see him...Scott is behind Logan, but Logan doesn't know it since his attention is on Phoenix. Jean hears Scott in her mind "Jean... I love you." and she says "Save me..." she pretends she's looking at Logan but really she says it while looking at Scott.

now... here's the tricky part. Should Logan stab her with his claws? or should Scott fire at the same time as Logan stabs her? the blast can also his Logan too making him lose his balance thus Scott runs up and catches Jean... or

before Logan stabs Jean, Scott shoots at him and he runs up to jean...

"Scott... you understand, don't you?"
"I do...but I wish this wouldn't have to end this way..."
she touches his face gently. He kisses her hand and whispers "I'll miss you..."
tears form in Jean's eyes. "I won't be gone forever..." she holds back phoenix long enough for her to remove scott's visor. "Open your eyes..."
"No...I can't do it..."
"If you really love me, Scott, you would do anything for me and I know you. I know you better than anyone. Do it for me. Now..."
"I love you."

Scott opens his eyes and the optic blast hits Jean and she falls into his arms. Jean gazes at him one last time with a look of redemption on her face and Jean Grey becomes one with the Phoenix... erm lol. They have one mind-link that they share before she dies..."I did make a choice, it was you all along." ... -cries- oooh Jean. -cries- thats so touching. aww Jean. -brawls his eyes out- ... okay. Im alright. just a little emotional.

Also, after Jean dies, scott opens his eyes once more and shoots an optic blast at the night sky and he yells in pain, anguish, loss and love...and guilt
 
well i also found some dialogue in here ultra cheesy and unrealistic. But i cant speak much because many people might think the same about the dialogue i wrote.
 

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