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I've never did any kind of screen writing. I did, however, write an Final Fantasy VII breakdown and how I would fit the story into three films(Should I adapt a live action FF7 in the future).
As far as X-Men 3 is concerned? I have ideas to enhance certain scenes that could've made the film better. Please understand that this is my first try. I know it's not the best I have right now, but it's all I could think of at this moment.
I know the movie already has been written, filmed, and released. This is my vision on how I would've improved the movie as a whole.
I hope you all enjoy it.
Improvements written by Isaiah Ridley
Beast/Leech scene.
Hank- Hello son. I'm Dr. Hank McCoy. ::Goes to extend his hand and watches as his human hand returns::
Leech- I'm sorry Mr. McCoy.
Hank- ::Staring at his hand in amazement and enjoying seeing his normal form for once, tears welling in his eyes:: It's okay.
Dr. Rao- ::Seeing his obvious joy and peace:: Extrodinary isn't he?
Hank- ::looks to Dr. Rao; then proceeds to get closer and slowly we begin to see his actual face appear, where the camera could've panned over and have him looking in the mirror, the tears are still streaming down his cheek:: You have an amazing gift son.
::Begins to back away from Leech and slowly we see his Beast form return::
Hank- Yes he is.....
(The reason I put this in was because I wanted to give the audience and the fans a chance to see Kelsey without the make-up, and also to add a sense of happy emotion as well.)
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Storm- This isn't a game.
Wolverine- You sure could've fooled me. Hey I'm just a sub, you got a problem talk to Scott?
::The scenes goes to Scott grieving in the bedroom, crying, and he whispers Jeans name as he hears her call his name::
Scott- Jean
Storm- Scott?
Scott- Storm.
Storm- How are you feeling?
Scott- How do you think?
Storm- Scott, I know you're hurting and need some time alone. We need you there for us and you're no good to us this way.
Scott- ::Sitting there as if he's not paying any attention to her::
Storm- She's gone Scott, she's not coming back. I only wish there was something I could say or do to help you feel better. ::Looks down sadly:: You had her since the beginning of this school, that's more than anyone else will ever have in life.
Scott- Yes, I know. But it's never enough.::Grabs his bags and walks by her in a rageful sad storm::
::Cyclops get on his motorcyle, then proceeds to head to Alkalai Lake where Jean died::
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Xavier- Scott's a changed man, he took Jeans death so hard. But I know someday he'll take care of things should I no longer be here.
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::Rogue leaving to take the cure::
Logan- Need a lift kid?
Rogue- No.
Logan- Where are you going?
Rogue- You don't know what its like, to be afraid of your powers. Afraid to get close to someone.
Logan- Yes, I do.
Rogue- I want to be able to touch someone Logan. A hug, a handshake, a kiss.
Logan- I hope you're not doing this for some stupid boy.
Logan- Look if you want to go, then go. Just be sure its what you want to do kid.
Rogue- Shouldn't you be telling me to go back to my room, unpack, and tell me that I'm insane for even considering taking this cure.
Logan- I'm not your father kid, I'm your friend. Just think about what I said Rogue.
Rogue- Marie.
Logan- You'll always be Rogue to me. ::gives a slight smile and slowly begins to walk off::
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::The Scott and Jean scene would play out exactly as it does, although I would show them being knocked out by each others powers, where it'll lead to Logan and Storm finding them both at the Lake::
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Bobby- What now? What do we do?
Hank- Professor Xavier started this school, perhaps its best that it ends with him. We'll have to tell the other students that they're going home.
Bobby- Most of us have nowhere to go. I mean, I can't believe this, I can't believe we're not going to fight for this school.
::Enter Angel::
Angel- I apologize, I understand that this is a bad time. I was told that this was a safe place for mutants.
Hank- It was son.
::Cyclops after awakening from his coma happens to hear the conversation and the promise he made to Xavier is shown in a flashback::
Cyclops-::Walks in surprising everyone, looking stern, powerful, and like the true leader that he is:: And it still is, we're not closing the school down. Storm, Hank, and Bobby, tell all the students that the school stays open and that there's nothing to worry about.
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::I'm still trying to figure out a way to do Scott seeing Jean in the forest. I'm thinking having Juggernaut come out of nowhere and send him flying, injuring him in the process::
Scott-::Returns to the mansion with bruises, some blood, and scratches on his face:: Let's suit up.
Hank- Hard to believe this once fit me.
Scott- Magneto is heading to Alcatraz with a good sized army.
Hank- Can you estimate how many he has?
Scott- Thousands, including Jean...
Hank- His powers have limits, hers do not.
Bobby- Scott, there's only six of us.
Scott- Yeah, we're outnumbered kid. I'm not going to lie. When we lost Xavier, there was a lot of strife, confusion, and sadness. But if we don't make our stand now everything he stood for will die with him. I'm not going to let that happen. Are you? Magneto has an army out there. You're going into a war where you might not come home, she might not come home, :: points to Colossus:: He might not come home. None of us might not come home. Are you ready for that?
Bobby- We're not kids anymore. We know what's at stake here.
Scott- If you know what's at stake then you need to understand the consequences of this war. Just be sure this is what you want and are willing to take part in.
Bobby- ::looks to Kitty and Colossus:: We're in.
Rogue- ::Comes in as well in her uniform:: Count me in as well.
::Bobby, Kitty, and Colossus are shocked to see Rogue::
Angel-::Walks in as well in the X-Men uniform:: I know this is a potentially dangerous situation. However, I can't let my father stay on the island while others want to kill him.
Cyclops- ::nods in approval and looks to Storm, Logan, Rogue, Hank, Bobby, Colossus, and Angel::
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President: We cannot let Magneto do this.
Trask- Well you know what needs to be done. You've become to soft and it's time you let me take charge Mr. President.
President- Trask, you don't have the authority to be giving me any kind of orders.
Trask- Well, I guess I'll just have to do things my way and actually provide a REAL cure for the mutant problem.(Sentinel nod)
President- What makes you think I'm going to approve of your program Mr. Trask?
Trask- I'm not giving you a choice and frankly, I could careless if you approve of it or not.
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::The entrance at the final battle will play out exactly the scene, with Scott coming out last and running towards the team::
Scott- You men cover the doors, everyone get together. AND HOLD THIS LINE!
::The scene would be very silent, rain could possibly be falling, and that very moment of the X-Men lined up would be the same only with Cyclops, Angel, and Rogue standing in line with Scott/Cyclops at the front adjusting his visor::
Magneto- So you decide to stand in our way?
Cyclops- ::adjusts his visor:: We're making our stand.
Magneto- ::Turns to the brotherhood and nods his approval of attack::
::The Brotherhood of Mutants run towards the X-Men with Cyclops getting in his stance, Beast roaring, Wolverine getting in his low stance with claws pose, Iceman icing up, and Rogue grinning waiting to drain someones power source::
Juggernaut- ::Rushes toward Rogue and punches her in the face with full power, he begins to shudder and become weak in the process::
::Camera pans to Rogue's face who is smiling::
Rogue- That the best you got sugah?
Colossus- Colossus does not approve of men hitting a lady. ::Looks to Rogue with a slight grin before metalling up::
::Both punch Juggernaut in the face sending him crashing through a wall::
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Magneto- ::Watching Charles be demolecularized:: CHARLESSSS!!!!!
::Charles is demolecularized and the house comes crashing down. Magneto slowly begins to rise and tears stream down his face too as he sees the empty wheelchair::
Magneto- Charles....::Places his hand on the wheelchair for a few seconds of grief, then takes Jean with him::
::At this point, Scott is still in his coma and Logan/Storm run in and the same scene occurs, only it would go a bit longer and the impact would settle in as well::
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::Jean going into the full Phoenix effect and begins to demolecularize everything in sight::
Scott- JEAN!!!! ::He begins walk slowly towards her, and at a second, we seen him cringe and watch his uniform burn slightly::
::He continues walking to her through the fire and debri::
Phoenix- You would die for them?!
Scott- For them and for you Jean.
Jean- ::Tears begin falling and she begins to slowly reveal herself::
Scott- for you Jean.....::Tears as well::
Jean- Scott, save me please....
Scott- I love you...::Puts his fingers on the visor knob::
Jean-::the Phoenix begins to try and take over the essence of Jean Grey once again.:: I love you, Scott..
Scott- ::Struggling with the decision on whether or not to kill Jean, he lets out an optic blast that kills her in the process. She falls into his arms:: No.......Jean...... no. JEANNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNN!!!! ::snatches off his visor and lets lose an massive optic blast into the sky::
The emotional scene would end with this classic pose, only without his visors and him shooting at the sky while screaming.
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::Scott begins fighting the guy with the regenerating arms. He leans back firing an optic blast, then fires another one only to see the mutant has both arms again::
Scott- ::Shocked and appauled::
Mutant- Come on!!
Scott-::Shakes his head and fires an optic blast into his crotch area. Grow those back moron. (A slight nod to his "Missing a face, moron?!")
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Epilogue 1
::Show Archlight, Quills, and possibly Leech(Maybe his mutation beginning to kick in) going into the sewers and forming The Morlocks::
::All is back to normal at the school with Beast being a teacher, Wolverine just being there, Storm teaching and training as well, and Psylocke there helping students master martial arts and teaching others about teleportations::
Scott- ::Standing at Jeans and Xaviers grave, Scott places his hand on Xavier's grave after putting a white rose on the ground:: Rest.... ::He then kisses Jean's tomb putting a white rose and a red rose in front of it:: I love you.
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Epilogue 2
::Magneto sitting in the park in front of a chess set, looking worn and defeated by the cure::
Voice- Mr. Erick Lehnsherr
Magneto- ::Slightly looks up at the person::
::We see the outline of the person sitting down and the camera pans over to the face of the visitor::
Person- I'm Dr. Nathaniel Essex.
::Screen slowly fades to black and goes into the credits.
Dr. Nathaniel Essex also known as Mr. Sinister
As far as X-Men 3 is concerned? I have ideas to enhance certain scenes that could've made the film better. Please understand that this is my first try. I know it's not the best I have right now, but it's all I could think of at this moment.
I know the movie already has been written, filmed, and released. This is my vision on how I would've improved the movie as a whole.
I hope you all enjoy it.
Improvements written by Isaiah Ridley
Beast/Leech scene.
Hank- Hello son. I'm Dr. Hank McCoy. ::Goes to extend his hand and watches as his human hand returns::
Leech- I'm sorry Mr. McCoy.
Hank- ::Staring at his hand in amazement and enjoying seeing his normal form for once, tears welling in his eyes:: It's okay.
Dr. Rao- ::Seeing his obvious joy and peace:: Extrodinary isn't he?
Hank- ::looks to Dr. Rao; then proceeds to get closer and slowly we begin to see his actual face appear, where the camera could've panned over and have him looking in the mirror, the tears are still streaming down his cheek:: You have an amazing gift son.
::Begins to back away from Leech and slowly we see his Beast form return::
Hank- Yes he is.....
(The reason I put this in was because I wanted to give the audience and the fans a chance to see Kelsey without the make-up, and also to add a sense of happy emotion as well.)
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Storm- This isn't a game.
Wolverine- You sure could've fooled me. Hey I'm just a sub, you got a problem talk to Scott?
::The scenes goes to Scott grieving in the bedroom, crying, and he whispers Jeans name as he hears her call his name::
Scott- Jean
Storm- Scott?
Scott- Storm.
Storm- How are you feeling?
Scott- How do you think?
Storm- Scott, I know you're hurting and need some time alone. We need you there for us and you're no good to us this way.
Scott- ::Sitting there as if he's not paying any attention to her::
Storm- She's gone Scott, she's not coming back. I only wish there was something I could say or do to help you feel better. ::Looks down sadly:: You had her since the beginning of this school, that's more than anyone else will ever have in life.
Scott- Yes, I know. But it's never enough.::Grabs his bags and walks by her in a rageful sad storm::
::Cyclops get on his motorcyle, then proceeds to head to Alkalai Lake where Jean died::
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Xavier- Scott's a changed man, he took Jeans death so hard. But I know someday he'll take care of things should I no longer be here.
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::Rogue leaving to take the cure::
Logan- Need a lift kid?
Rogue- No.
Logan- Where are you going?
Rogue- You don't know what its like, to be afraid of your powers. Afraid to get close to someone.
Logan- Yes, I do.
Rogue- I want to be able to touch someone Logan. A hug, a handshake, a kiss.
Logan- I hope you're not doing this for some stupid boy.
Logan- Look if you want to go, then go. Just be sure its what you want to do kid.
Rogue- Shouldn't you be telling me to go back to my room, unpack, and tell me that I'm insane for even considering taking this cure.
Logan- I'm not your father kid, I'm your friend. Just think about what I said Rogue.
Rogue- Marie.
Logan- You'll always be Rogue to me. ::gives a slight smile and slowly begins to walk off::
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::The Scott and Jean scene would play out exactly as it does, although I would show them being knocked out by each others powers, where it'll lead to Logan and Storm finding them both at the Lake::
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Bobby- What now? What do we do?
Hank- Professor Xavier started this school, perhaps its best that it ends with him. We'll have to tell the other students that they're going home.
Bobby- Most of us have nowhere to go. I mean, I can't believe this, I can't believe we're not going to fight for this school.
::Enter Angel::
Angel- I apologize, I understand that this is a bad time. I was told that this was a safe place for mutants.
Hank- It was son.
::Cyclops after awakening from his coma happens to hear the conversation and the promise he made to Xavier is shown in a flashback::
Cyclops-::Walks in surprising everyone, looking stern, powerful, and like the true leader that he is:: And it still is, we're not closing the school down. Storm, Hank, and Bobby, tell all the students that the school stays open and that there's nothing to worry about.
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::I'm still trying to figure out a way to do Scott seeing Jean in the forest. I'm thinking having Juggernaut come out of nowhere and send him flying, injuring him in the process::
Scott-::Returns to the mansion with bruises, some blood, and scratches on his face:: Let's suit up.
Hank- Hard to believe this once fit me.
Scott- Magneto is heading to Alcatraz with a good sized army.
Hank- Can you estimate how many he has?
Scott- Thousands, including Jean...
Hank- His powers have limits, hers do not.
Bobby- Scott, there's only six of us.
Scott- Yeah, we're outnumbered kid. I'm not going to lie. When we lost Xavier, there was a lot of strife, confusion, and sadness. But if we don't make our stand now everything he stood for will die with him. I'm not going to let that happen. Are you? Magneto has an army out there. You're going into a war where you might not come home, she might not come home, :: points to Colossus:: He might not come home. None of us might not come home. Are you ready for that?
Bobby- We're not kids anymore. We know what's at stake here.
Scott- If you know what's at stake then you need to understand the consequences of this war. Just be sure this is what you want and are willing to take part in.
Bobby- ::looks to Kitty and Colossus:: We're in.
Rogue- ::Comes in as well in her uniform:: Count me in as well.
::Bobby, Kitty, and Colossus are shocked to see Rogue::
Angel-::Walks in as well in the X-Men uniform:: I know this is a potentially dangerous situation. However, I can't let my father stay on the island while others want to kill him.
Cyclops- ::nods in approval and looks to Storm, Logan, Rogue, Hank, Bobby, Colossus, and Angel::
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President: We cannot let Magneto do this.
Trask- Well you know what needs to be done. You've become to soft and it's time you let me take charge Mr. President.
President- Trask, you don't have the authority to be giving me any kind of orders.
Trask- Well, I guess I'll just have to do things my way and actually provide a REAL cure for the mutant problem.(Sentinel nod)
President- What makes you think I'm going to approve of your program Mr. Trask?
Trask- I'm not giving you a choice and frankly, I could careless if you approve of it or not.
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::The entrance at the final battle will play out exactly the scene, with Scott coming out last and running towards the team::
Scott- You men cover the doors, everyone get together. AND HOLD THIS LINE!
::The scene would be very silent, rain could possibly be falling, and that very moment of the X-Men lined up would be the same only with Cyclops, Angel, and Rogue standing in line with Scott/Cyclops at the front adjusting his visor::
Magneto- So you decide to stand in our way?
Cyclops- ::adjusts his visor:: We're making our stand.
Magneto- ::Turns to the brotherhood and nods his approval of attack::
::The Brotherhood of Mutants run towards the X-Men with Cyclops getting in his stance, Beast roaring, Wolverine getting in his low stance with claws pose, Iceman icing up, and Rogue grinning waiting to drain someones power source::
Juggernaut- ::Rushes toward Rogue and punches her in the face with full power, he begins to shudder and become weak in the process::
::Camera pans to Rogue's face who is smiling::
Rogue- That the best you got sugah?
Colossus- Colossus does not approve of men hitting a lady. ::Looks to Rogue with a slight grin before metalling up::
::Both punch Juggernaut in the face sending him crashing through a wall::
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Magneto- ::Watching Charles be demolecularized:: CHARLESSSS!!!!!
::Charles is demolecularized and the house comes crashing down. Magneto slowly begins to rise and tears stream down his face too as he sees the empty wheelchair::
Magneto- Charles....::Places his hand on the wheelchair for a few seconds of grief, then takes Jean with him::
::At this point, Scott is still in his coma and Logan/Storm run in and the same scene occurs, only it would go a bit longer and the impact would settle in as well::
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::Jean going into the full Phoenix effect and begins to demolecularize everything in sight::
Scott- JEAN!!!! ::He begins walk slowly towards her, and at a second, we seen him cringe and watch his uniform burn slightly::
::He continues walking to her through the fire and debri::
Phoenix- You would die for them?!
Scott- For them and for you Jean.
Jean- ::Tears begin falling and she begins to slowly reveal herself::
Scott- for you Jean.....::Tears as well::
Jean- Scott, save me please....
Scott- I love you...::Puts his fingers on the visor knob::
Jean-::the Phoenix begins to try and take over the essence of Jean Grey once again.:: I love you, Scott..
Scott- ::Struggling with the decision on whether or not to kill Jean, he lets out an optic blast that kills her in the process. She falls into his arms:: No.......Jean...... no. JEANNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNN!!!! ::snatches off his visor and lets lose an massive optic blast into the sky::
The emotional scene would end with this classic pose, only without his visors and him shooting at the sky while screaming.
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::Scott begins fighting the guy with the regenerating arms. He leans back firing an optic blast, then fires another one only to see the mutant has both arms again::
Scott- ::Shocked and appauled::
Mutant- Come on!!
Scott-::Shakes his head and fires an optic blast into his crotch area. Grow those back moron. (A slight nod to his "Missing a face, moron?!")
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Epilogue 1
::Show Archlight, Quills, and possibly Leech(Maybe his mutation beginning to kick in) going into the sewers and forming The Morlocks::
::All is back to normal at the school with Beast being a teacher, Wolverine just being there, Storm teaching and training as well, and Psylocke there helping students master martial arts and teaching others about teleportations::
Scott- ::Standing at Jeans and Xaviers grave, Scott places his hand on Xavier's grave after putting a white rose on the ground:: Rest.... ::He then kisses Jean's tomb putting a white rose and a red rose in front of it:: I love you.
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Epilogue 2
::Magneto sitting in the park in front of a chess set, looking worn and defeated by the cure::
Voice- Mr. Erick Lehnsherr
Magneto- ::Slightly looks up at the person::
::We see the outline of the person sitting down and the camera pans over to the face of the visitor::
Person- I'm Dr. Nathaniel Essex.
::Screen slowly fades to black and goes into the credits.
Dr. Nathaniel Essex also known as Mr. Sinister
actually i wouldnt like Scott coming back (i planned to say in the dialogue that Jean blocked Professor's mind, thats why he couldnt sense Scott or anyone else, this way Scott could come back. But i really like if he dies for real, and i think its cheap to bring him back, just like i found cheap to bring Mags and Xavier. Dont get me wrong, i luv Cyke, but i kinda liked his arc, just thought it needed more development before he dies)
effect from Xavier's death. Also, i used an originally idea from "The Original bamfer", that was the "shooting at the sky for long time", hope he doesnt get angry 
